Greetings everyone! I just want to express my thanks for those who are going to read. I will try to reply to every comment I get because I deeply do appreciate your opinions. Positive and negative feedback is highly desired if you don't mind! I hope you enjoy!

Oh look, Roamance and Commedy, my two favorite tags, I shall now read this within the next hour to three hours.

RARIJACK,RARIJACK OH RARI-RARIJACK!

*ahem*

Cute, funny and an all round good read.

I approve of this ship ^^ And your writing skillz ^.^

>>956033956033  Thank you so much for reading, commenting and the wonderful compliment Valorousspectre! I'm really thrilled you enjoyed it!

This was adorable.  And Rarijack is the best ship.  ^^

You know I can't really see why this doesn't have more views. It's a slightly cookie-cuttter story, but that's okay. It's pretty well written, and it's enjoyable, and that's all that matters! I can definitely say that I can't wait to see what happens next.

“Wh-what are you?” - Could I suggest you add an ellipsis to the end of that statement, before the question mark? This isn't the only mistake, but it's the one that I think stuck out the most. The others don't really distract too much from the story.

Wow. I actually find myself believing that this ship could happen. I'm not a fin of Rarijack but... wow!    You are a good writer and must have a great editor or two! I can't wait to get to the next chapter. (Why is it always the ships I never think about seem more plausible than the ones that blatantly stare me in the face )

>>956064956064 ey mon. you got any of da grass to hook a bruddah up? (your avatar looks Jamaican)

liked the story

The final bit seemed a tad... off, in a way. I don't know how to explain it. It seems a little bit rushed, I suppose? I don't know. Still doing good here, though.

The letter bit was a little confusing, but the second time through, I think I got it... Still doing pretty good. Twilight's reaction is pretty believable. I think it's well within her defined character to want to write Princess Celestia right after witnessing something she's not familiar with, or thinks is wrong.

The friendship report was very well done, nice job working the "love and tolerate" bit into the story, it fits nicely.

And that's exactly what she said.

Very nice ending to a very nice story. Well done.

Very sweet. Loved every minute of this, and the characterization was great. I'm not even mad at you for making  me stay up till 2 a.m. reading because it was so good

Break up the paragraph a bit. Separate them.

“Oh look at the time! Rarity suddenly cried. “IdobelieveIhaveaclientcomingintodayandIhaventevenbeguntostartworkingonherorder!” I should get going! Bye Applejack!” Rarity said as she dashed off at breakneck speed leaving Applejack’s hat behind.

I would advise trying to find some way to fix this paragraph. In story, the first few words are separated far too much.

All in all, decent start. I will keep reading it. I love me some good Rarijack, and you made an interesting start for the story.

She... She sniffed her?

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I don't even...

Well, thats..unique. Keep...at it..?

Anyways, nice writing.

EDIT: Oh, she kissed her. That was a bit vague for me, I just thought she sniffed her.

I have actually never felt this connected to a shipping since Family Mares! There may be one or two flaws in here, including what >>956094956094 mentioned... but I honestly don't care. I also like how they were unsure about it for a moment before being all lovey-dovey. I can't wait to move on and read the rest!

>>956534956534

That's to put emphasis on each word. Instead of like when your mom says, ' Oh look at the time! ', imagine Rarity's accent saying LOOK. AT. THE. TIIIIIIIIIMEE!!!

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Probably....

This may just be me, but I capitalize the 'Ah's AJ makes. Also, you should be weary of using commas and capitalization more. For example....

“Ok! I did it! I kissed you! I don’t know why I did it! I was just overcome with…with…well I’m not even sure. Oh dear Applejack, I am baffled as to what possessed me to do such a thing!”

Should be

“Ok! I did it! I kissed you! I don’t know why I did it! I was just overcome with…with…Well I’m not even sure. Oh, dear Applejack, I am baffled as to what possessed me to do such a thing!”

Sorry. I'm a bit of a grammar nazi. Don't take offense at any corrections I make, and don't sell yourself short as a reader. Little errors like these are stuff everyone makes.

Still, good job. I'll read the other chapters soon.

This chapter confused me. How could they sew their tails? Horse tales are only made of hair, I don't see how you can sew them together.

Other than that, I loved this! Great job! Thumb to you!

Very well done. Ya even worked in a friendship report, a really good one.

>>956091956091 Thank you very much Sour Grapes!

>>956094956094 Whats a cookie cutter story?

aside from that I am really liking this story so far so thanks for writing it sir/ ma'am!

d'awww. man I absolutely love this shipping

Just getting the hang of how replies work on this site...here we go

>>956132956132 MLP Brony 27 LOL Thank you very much!

>>956226956226 Heckler341 I believe I get the feel of "rushed ending" in Chapter 6. Possibly because I was ready for the "D'Awww" moment where they first stated their love for each other using the opposites nickname. (Gets me every time) At the same time, I can honestly say I was stuck on how to play it out a bit longer, maybe make the dialogue scene just a little bit longer and make it a bit sad before the "I love you's". Hmmm. And thank you!

>>956425956425 Justanothermonday- Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

>>956540956540 Jrz Fine Thank you! EDIT: Lol I was wondering what part you were referring to! Yes, but I purposely left the actual word out in order to see how playing with the audiences imagination would work out while creating a small twinge of suspense.

>>956606956606 Master Zero- Thank you for reading and the in depth grammar related critique. Those are the kind of things I try to look for but will sometimes miss and it's good to have someone who can point them out! I am not at all offended by your corrections, I knew my story wasn't perfect but I felt I had taken it as far as it could go, so I thought releasing it to the public would help me get a better understanding of what needs to be worked on for future fics. Excited for the rest of your corrections!

>>956687956687 Frizzy- I battled with this for a bit, it is possible to sew hair together though. Especially if you sew thick strips vs. particular strands. Maybe I should just have their tails sewed to the same piece of fabric?

>>957060957060 Kail- Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

>>956557956557 Insanity Corps- Thank you so much! Enjoy the ride! Can't wait to hear what you think of the rest!

Whew, hope I got everyone and that you get notified, I am beyond grateful that this story has already been read by this many. The first review I saw on this story was that it was rejected by EQD (for some of the dialogue punctuation issues and some Show vs Tell issues, they wouldn't give me details though) so I was feeling kinda down on myself, but you guys picked me right back up. Thanks so much for taking time out to read! Considering working on another (much shorter) fic soon!

this was a really nice story, and I really like how you put in the friendship report and what not. you used episodes for your research, like when rainbow was in the tree near the place where they had the pet play date, just like in the episode. so yeah this story was really nice, keep up the good work!

Hooray. I like that this isn't a slow burn fic. Nice a light just what I need right now. Excellent characterization.

That was a really cute story. It was well written, everyone was in character and it had just the right amount of comedy. I didn't really like how story developed though. I find it really hard to believe that Celestia would banish somepony to the moon for being in love. That right there just felt like forced drama to me.

>>959019959019

It was never flat out stated that Celestia would actually banish somepony to the moon for being in love. Every time that it came up it was the characters thinking that Celestia would banish them. Like how in the show Twilight freaks out about possibly being banished whenever she does something wrong.

This was a very cute story. It wasn't heavy on drama, but I'm not sure if it was funny enough to warrant a Comedy tag. Although; the idea of what is funny and what is not is different for every person, so all the jokes might have just flown over my head.

The only nitpick I have, and It's a VERY small nitpick that probably doesn't even need to be changed; is that Applejack knows the word "persnickety" and uses it quite often. I'm not calling her dumb, but I don't think she would know and use a word like that.

>>959355959355 Equestrian Deadpool

Applejack: Uhm, sugarcube take a looky here at this link below and skip on down to 20:02

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s5rYkDCH0xM

Lol thank you for the comment Equestrian Deadpool. That was one of my concerns until I remembered this particular scene in this episode! ^_^

>>957955957955 "Cookie Cutter" usually means like, a common concept. It doesn't really matter though, as all stories have their own little bit of individuality that makes them good, like this one!

Revision: Well, a better definition of "cookie-cutter" used as an adjective might be "Something that follows the definitions of a common concept", rather than simply being a common concept. I don't know. It makes sense in my head, but who knows what's going on up there?

>>959400959400

Ehehehehehe...

I guess I need to go rewatch season 1 again; I haven't seen that episode in months.

>>956540956540 she kissed her??? Wow, I didn't even know

My shipping senses demand more. Please, do acknowledge a future sequel to this, or at least a story this or a higher level of eye catching.

I.

Want.

More.

RARIJACK.

“Oh yeah, since we’re on that subject, I’m really sorry I wasn’t able to help you a few days ago Applejack.” Twilight said apologetically.

Should be

“Oh yeah, since we’re on that subject, I’m really sorry I wasn’t able to help you a few days ago, Applejack.” Twilight said, apologetically.

“Nice one Pinkie Pie.” Rainbow laughed.

“Oh, I do believe I’m beginning to sweat…how dreadful!” the pink pony continued before joining in the laughter as her mane and tail poofed back to its original style.

Should be

“Nice one, Pinkie Pie.” Rainbow laughed.

“Oh, I do believe I’m beginning to sweat…How dreadful!” the pink pony continued before joining in the laughter as her mane and tail poofed back to its original style.

“Well ya’ll know Rarity, after an hour of applebuckin’ she only had half a bucket full! She was tryna sort the good apples from the bad apples before she had even knocked em all out the tree!”

Should be

“Well, ya’ll know Rarity, after an hour of applebuckin’ she only had half a bucket full! She was tryna sort the good apples from the bad apples before she had even knocked em all out the tree!”

Mostly just issues with pauses and commas. Nothing too bad. Again, sorry, I just wanted to tell you what I noticed. Still, I enjoy your story, and will keep reading it, bit by bit.

I don't know why rarijack fics are so rare, so are pinkieshy fics. Oh well, this was a very good, cute story and thank you writing this

i like the 3rd last paragraph when rarity(sp) was talked about the client with all the words put together I just thought that she was talking super fast

mmm its otay

>>960291960291  Rarijack fics aren't that rare; it's the second most common pairing for Applejack (next to Appledash, because Rainbow Dash must be shipped with everypony. ), and I think it's the most common pairing for Rarity.  Perhaps Rarijack has cooled a bit in popularity lately, but it's still one of the biggest ships in the fandom that don't involve any rainbow-maned pegasi.

Pinkieshy is a rare one, though, I'll grant you that.  My guess for the reason is that Pinkie and Fluttershy don't have a lot of scenes of the two of them interacting together in the show.  Both characters are voiced by the same person, so from a practical standpoint, it could become a bit complicated if they did a whole lot of back-and-forth.

Ahem, but I stray off-topic.

This is a pretty good story.  There are grammatical mistakes here or there, and one or two words that spellcheck mistook for other words, but it was far from unreadable.  You had some good ideas in building your scenes, and your references to events in the show didn't seem forced, which is a good sign.

One thing that did bug me while reading this was Applejack's accent.  You really don't need to lay it on so thick; we all know what Applejack sounds like.  She doesn't say "y'all" every time she means "you," just some of the time.  And replacing every "I" with "Ah" is one of my personal pet peeves.

I find it interesting to see the variation in different authors' headcannons in regard to how homosexuality is treated in Equestria.  I've seen some stories where it seems to be treated as the norm, and hetero pairs are regarded with unease (One questions where little foals are supposed to come from in such versions).  This story seems to land on the other end of that spectrum.  That in itself is fine, but it seems like if Rarity and Applejack really believed that what they were doing was so unnatural and unheard of, they would have spent a bit more time fighting a bit harder against it.

Those are my thoughts.  Keep writing, and good luck to you!

Again, break up your paragraphs. Also, I think I mentioned this before, capitalize the Ah that AJ uses. They're meant to replace I, so I think it is only fair. Also, use comma when you say a name or nickname at the end of a line. Like, "What's wrong(comma) sugarcube?" or "Hi(comma) Rarity!"

Still, good job. I think this was my favorite chapter so far. Very nice. Advanced the plot, and I'm glad it didn't end with AJ walking out when Rarity said so.

“”Ponyville’s Persnickety Princess Heads South for a Bit of Apple Affection ”!” She plopped on the cloud and clutched her stomach in laughter. “Oh Gabby Gums needs to make a comeback!”

Should be

“'Ponyville’s Persnickety Princess Heads South for a Bit of Apple Affection!'” She plopped on the cloud and clutched her stomach in laughter. “Oh, Gabby Gums needs to make a comeback!”

Quotation marks go after the exclamation mark. Not before.

You use ... a lot. Try to cut back. Hyphens(-) work well when you want characters to stutter. Also, you have a few cut off'ed sentences. Change...

The pegasus said while making the necessary gestures to initiate the Pinkie Promise. Rarity and Applejack smiled.

To something more like

The pegasus said while making the necessary gestures to initiate the Pinkie Promise, causing the couple to smile.

And some paragraphs should be connected together.

“Look at us. Look how carried away we’ve gotten, we were almost caught by our sisters, and now we’re out in public. I mean, what were we thinking? Who knows what other Pegasi could’ve seen us?”

Applejack nodded.

Should be

“Look at us. Look how carried away we’ve gotten, we were almost caught by our sisters, and now we’re out in public. I mean, what were we thinking? Who knows what other Pegasi could’ve seen us?” Rarity asked, and Applejack nodded in agreement.

Also, I think Pegasi should be lower cased.

Truth be told, I'm not big on the whole 'There's a complication so we can't be together,' but that's all just personal opinion. Still, good work.

“Um girls, the party is in here ya know?”

Should be

“Um girls, the party is in here, ya know?”

Also, this is just me, but try rephrasing it. Hearing 'ya know' just doesn't sound very Twilight Sparkle-esque. She's an intelligent, mature mare. She wouldn't be using words like ya. That's AJ, or maybe Rainbow Dash.

“Oh right! Excuse me.” Rarity said as she darted back in the house.

You've done this a few times. When making a sentence like this, it should be...

“Oh right! Excuse me(comma)” Rarity said(comma) as she darted back in the house.

“Technically, if we were to dissect your original question it would be: “Have you kissed any special somepony in the past two days?”. Now you’re asking if she’s kissed any special somepony in the past three weeks, and you can’t ask more than one question per turn.”

Should be

“Technically, if we were to dissect your original question it would be: 'Have you kissed any special somepony in the past two days?' Now you’re asking if she’s kissed any special somepony in the past three weeks, and you can’t ask more than one question per turn.”

You don't need a period after the question mark or the " " marks.

“Ugh fine! Rarity! Truth or dare!”

“Dare” Rarity said.

Should be

“Ugh(comma) fine! Rarity! Truth or dare!”

“Dare(Comma)” Rarity said.

Also, you don't need to say Rarity said. In fact, the sentence would probably be best as...

“Ugh(Comma) fine! Rarity! Truth or dare!”

“Dare."

Keep a close eye on your tenses. I understand it is very hard to do, but if most of the story is in past tense, stick with past.

Twilight spit on the ground then wiped her mouth.

Should be

Twilight spat on the ground(comma) then wiped her mouth.

The letter part WAS confusing. You should try to do something to make it flow better. Show more of Twilight's side, maybe. Speaking of Twilight, I wasn't a big fan of Twilight's behavior in the middle. I would imagine a mare who put so much focus on friendship would be more accepting of the others right off the bat.

I thought Rainbow Dash was acting like a bit of a jerk in the beginning of the story. Even after her and Fluttershy's reveal. Maybe add in some detail to help it flow? Maybe have Rainbow Dash say if Rarity and Applejack's relationship was revealed, it'd be easier for her and Fluttershy's to be? I don't know, I just thought her behavior was a little traitorous for being the Element of Loyalty.

And the final chapter. Nothing really important, but I like seeing stuff after the main plot. I like seeing just what their dating life is like.

Decent story. I liked it. Some errors here and there, but nothing that made is horrid or unreadable. I'm just a grammar nazi, is all. Shame on me.

I enjoyed the story

I'm happy to give a more thorough proofread later, but first, I would advise you to try and find your own mistakes. Its one thing for me to help you write better, its much better if you helps yourself. Just take a look at the stuff I've said in my comments.

Please don't take any of my comments as insulting or patronizing. I am simply trying to help. Again, good story. Rarijack is always good in my book, and you did a well job of writing it.

>>960224960224

You are perhaps the greatest Correction Soviet I've come across.

>>962266962266

I'm sorry? What does "Correction Soviet" mean? Is it just a nice way of saying Grammar Nazi?

Lmao, what is it about Applejack's scent that makes ponies lose their god damn minds? I remember reading a story just a few days ago where RD took to AJ's hat like it was made of coke.

I'll have to read more.

awwwwwwww I realy liked this one. its so sweet

Well, that was overly cute.

The only odd part (well, the most jarring one) is perhaps Twilight's quick change of mind in chapter 7. Perhaps you could add a bit more of description in there, make it so that Spike takes a few seconds to arrive and she looks around her friends, possibly with each couple standing closer to each other for support (because apparently, this is the most homophobic Equestria I've seen in any shipping XD), blah blah.

But my point stands, cute. And very much so.

I hate it when that happens I'm making out with my gf and my lil bro comes in

Aaaaaaawwwwwwwww so sweet and heart breaking

This is easily one of my favourite shipping stories :D

I loved every part of it, except maybe how negative Twilight was about it, but I think you played it out fairly well. In my opinion though, you probably could've added a few lines to show Twilight's change of mind a bit better, like: " '...Wait, Spike!' Twilight said as she magically threw the scroll into the fireplace. 'I think I may have made a lapse in judgement; you see, even though this is strange to me, I think I may have been wrong to act so quickly.' " - then to continue on to what she said after she changed her mind.

Though this is just me rambling, but let me know if this seems fair, or if I'm just crazy

Great lil story, there were a few grammar things in it though,  In one of the earlier chapters you said affect when you meant effect or something, I can't remember where it was. (I tried looking for it and couldn't find it so I might have imagined it.)  Also I kinda wished that Twilight did send that letter just to have Celestia send one back saying that love is love or something.  I seriously doubt Celestia would have any kind of a problem with it, at least you didn't use fillyfoolers like allot of stories do, that always bugged me since I can't see a stigma against it in that universe.  But it might be the sort of thing that they don't realize can happen, such as what happened in your story.

>>950128950128

You like negative feedback?

Color me confused... Awesome story by the way!

so... much... win...

and rarijack is best ship

A well-written Rarijack ALWAYS makes the featured box. Such is life on FiMfic.

I've read this a month ago and why did it just get featured?! What the fahhhhh?!

>>950128950128 All my thumbs up are belong to this.

Well... that was a pretty good start. The way the first kiss occurred was really enticing, you see she's leaning in but then that description comes along... makes you wonder why AJ's mouth was stuck open lol

>>967909967909 pfft LOL I must see what that story was, if only because of the image your description put in my head xD

Yes, AJ has that musky fresh earth and apples scent. She'd drive any mare crazy with her wild and rough tomboyish good looks about her. Shame not enough people realize her charms the way the author did in this chapter, she was so in character it was just so darn cute.

Rarity and her have just got this thing that goes well together. The chemistry those two have lol even that cute moment with the not supposed to be wearing a hat during a wedding bit at the finale of s2 as she snucked it on whilst Rarity was distracted teeheehee~

It all started with the best episode "Look Before You Sleep" <3

>>11796881179688 Unfortunately I made that comment five weeks ago, now I have no idea what it was called.

So wait, did Twilight just write that fake letter to rile them up?

What a prick.

Unless it was meant by Twilight to be symbolic or something like that.

Three. Three is the number of times my eyes watered through out this fic, and one chuckle as I read the next few words after "she put them on the table" and read that Rarity got misty eyed too

This is a pretty sweet and genuinely touching chapter. I was starting to think it was going to be a complete make-out scene with the impressive tongue and cheek scene, but was pleasantly surprised your Rarity picked up on the word 'fun'; Rarity is too afraid to fall for someone who will just end up breaking her overly emotional heart. AJ was forceful in just the right amount of way, this chapter was really good.

Yes, people, it has an extra word in a few sentences that shouldn't be there and some typo's, but it is indeed a worthy read. Sticklers or not this needs more views. Like seriously. AJ and Rarity actually feel like AJ and Rarity, they are so well spoken in their accents, the descriptions are fun and captivating. And best of all fun surprises and really genuine feel good moments like AJ's jealousy of Rarity for example which I won't spoil, among many.

[EDIT: Goodness... This is just the second chapter?? I thought I was on the third... I guess it's safe enough to toss that thumb up I suppose! I guess I'll probably end up having to fav this when I'm done o.o]

[EDIT#2: Guess it waas~ chapter 4... silly cat stepped on my keyboard as I wasn't looking and must of knocked me back a couple pages lol Now on to finishing this up.]

cute

Pic relavent to this chapter too big to show, plus Mysticalpha is one of my favorites in pony art world <3

I laughed so hard during chapter 7. The scene of Twi busting Rarijack and the first words/sounds they produced had my in hysteria

I loved it. I only feel bad that it doesn't have much views. If only it was a bit more polished. Speaking of, you mentioned a sequel? I look forward to another episode from you xD /faved and a watch!

I forgot what I wanted to say about ch 6 but lol CMC Wrestlers lol Poor AJ XD

I became a fan. Please write more stories!

“Applejack, I’ve never felt such strong feelings for anypony before…not Spike when he gave me that Fire Ruby, not any colt I’ve met in Equestria, even my hopeless crush on Blueblood didn’t feel like this..."

Okay, really? He gave up something precious to him that he'd been anticipating for months just to make her happy (literally and metaphorically giving his heart to her) and she treats it like next to nothing by categorizing him with Blueblood and every random colt who's come and gone? Then when the other ponies agree her romance with AJ is okay, he gets left out of everything and laughed at (probably right before he gets sent back down to the basement so his friends can bask in the warmth of their friendship). He also probably should've been at that pet playdate since he, y'know, has a pet. I'll admit, sometimes I read stories like this mostly to see how the Spike angle is handled, and in this one it's pretty careless. His love and devotion to Rarity is taken as a minor crush, he never gets a resolution, and the narrative uses him as nothing more than a prop that can talk. Kinda like a Bayformer.

But there's good stuff, of course, and plenty of it: I certainly like the applebucking story arc, and, “Well how do you like THESE APPLES?!” was a great one-liner from Rarity. The bathtub scene was very enjoyable to read as well. And, oh yes, Cutie Mark Crusaders Wrestlers. They run off to get their cutie marks, and right off the bat they can be heard doing everything wrong. That sure had me laughing.

It was an enjoyable read, but I still don't get how so many readers can easily enjoy a Rarity shipfic when Spike's involvement is completely unaddressed, even cheapened. For me there's too much tension getting in the way of the tender romantic bonding, even in a lighthearted story such as this.

>>11823451182345

Thank you so much for your kind words! I really liked what you said about Spike. I actually did give Spike more credit than you think, just not in this installment. In the second installment "Relationship Problems" you'll see much of the same, towards the end but that's because in the Trilogy of this series that I'm still considering, Spike is going to play a HUGE role. So the whole "Spike's crush" thing won't be so carelessly discarded if the story pans out the way I want it.

Thanks so much again for your feedback!

>>11802871180287

I'm flabbergasted that I missed when this was featured. I posted it a while ago and was happy with the quaint amount of views I receieved. I would love nothing more than to polish this story up. My writing is vastly changed between this and the sequel (In my opinion) and part of me just enjoys reading the difference between the two stories. One day, if I have enough patience and time, I'll compeltely revamp this first installment.

Thank you so much for the watch and fav and for all the kind words on the individual chapters! Feedback means a lot to me.  I hope that you'll really like the 2nd installment as much as you enjoyed this one!

>>11795201179520

Thank you so much Madman!

>>11668561166856

Hahaha, I guess what I mean is constructive criticism! Thanks!

>>11794101179410

My hopes were high when I posted it, when it didnt make it though, it just made me want to improve. I can't beleive it got featured and I missed it though! I logged in to find myself with a bunch of notifications. But I'm so glad more people are getting to see it and I hope you and others will enjoy the sequel!

>>11106041110604

Thank you! I thought about that, but it seemed too sudden of a 180 if Twilight changed her mind on the spot after her walk. Also, I kind of wanted to string the readers along so instead, I played with the idea of her being a bit trollish. (A bit like her idol)

I'm really glad you liked it and I hope you'll enjoy the sequel just as much!

>>11121491112149

Thank you so much! Yes, I promise that the grammar has vastly improved in the sequel! (I hope you'll read it ) I'm still playing with brining Princess Celestia into this along with Spike finally figuring things out. If all goes well, things will come together in a very nice romanatic action packed, thrilling and interesting trilogy! Thanks again!

>>11948591194859

Yea, that makes more sense. Anyway, I'm looking forward to reading more stories from you! Consider me a new fan of your work.

>>11949851194985

Thank you! You have no idea how happy it makes me to hear that! The sequel to "My Darling Sugarcube" is up and awaiting approval for submission! Feel free to read it when you have the time! Also, "A Desert Tale" I thought was pretty decent but have gotten a lt of mixed feedback on it. It's pretty short (6000 words) but I'd love to hear your input on that too!

>>11950241195024

>>11948331194833 That's really good to now, Seanessy! Most authors like to pretend Spike doesn't exist and his feelings are inconsequential so they can focus on ponies. Really upsets me sometimes. But even though you're going to take his involvement into account in future writing, that still doesn't alleviate the problem in this fanfic as it stands. The fact remains that neither Rarity, Applejack, or any of the others gave a lick of thought to Spike's potential heartbreak, they still laughed at him in the end, and it was still cruel of Rarity to compare Spike to her crushes (especially the way she ended that statement with, "even my hopeless crush on Blueblood," making it seem like the stuck-up prick tops the generous, hardworking sweetheart in her mind). Either way, I'll keep my eye out for the next installment. Here's a mustache to get you started:

Chapter 7 seemed a little... I dunno, off. o_O The rest of the story was great though. :3

How come everyone is suddenly gay I don't understand

Lovely story! Simple, but cute and very enjoyable. It doesn't hurt that Rarijack is one of my top favorite pairings. Everything that could possibly have been improved upon has already been pointed out, but besides that this was well written. Great job!

One of the best Rarity x AppleJack fanfics i have ever read <3

i really enjoyed reading this its rarijack with a little flutterdash and twinkie pie mixed in those are all my favourite pairings.

the moment twilight caught rainbow dash and fluttershy i knew twilight would somehow end up geting kissed by pinkie.

Btw, when applejack said shes handled plenty of creatures, im sure she would've said critters. Its a southern thing. I would know, i live in alabama.

Nooooooo! Say it aint so!!!!

Sniff...sniff...that was beautiful! Ur an amzing writer!

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Our true ending, mister.

>>962206962206 Wow.. Kill Joy  

>>12040321204032 Expect that from ClopFic jeez..... besides rarity and applejack are amazing together            

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I killjoy, because I care.

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Rarity and AJ aren't everyone, tho

This....this was so awesome!

All of the complications of the situation were played out so well, and Rarity and Applejack do make such a cute couple!

You played it so perfectly, I was even moved to tears at some points!

Although I must say, I was pretty excited about seeing the Flutterdash, that being my OTP

Such a great fanfic! One of the best I've read! Can't wait to read the sequel!

liking this story so far, but the scene of AJ getting the colts to buy all her apples just for info on rarity seems a little off character and i do mean a little. Perhaps she already had feelings strong enough to break character though i don't see enough evidence for that, or perhaps she was being slightly protective of Rarity as a friend though she put up with Blueblood without saying anything, so also not much validation AJ has showed her resolve to do things honestly and straight forward and not to ever take advantage of another or a shortcut (So long as it is not a competition and only after she feels she has been cheated first), that being said what she also spelled out the truth to the colts but it still seems like a swindle to me. Applejack leads an exemplary life in cannon and this seems off to me.

Even so the story still holds enough sway i do not have to think about whether or not i am going to continue. Onward to the next chapter.

Ahh theres some emotional validation for my previous statement, Good very good.

Pinkie you know exactly how to make any party much more interesting and fun.

1 month later the Twi-Pie ship sets sail.

Ahh... seriously that was great, cant stop smiling at Pinkie making sure Twi was not left out of the "Festivities".

Good story in the end, thanks for the laughs and a good read.

Great story. I love the addition of Flutterdash (OTP!) to the RariJack

This was absolutely amazing. It made my night. It is such an amazing way to send a great message, and it was written so well

haha, thought i would ask out of curiosity, but have you thought of doing a flutterdash side story to this since it was in there near the end? maybe like what happened during and after this story, like a side arc or something. if youve gotten this question before sorry... hehe   X and X YAY! also loved how you had pinkie just glomp twi and kiss her, hilarious!

I really enjoyed this! It's nice to read a good, cute romance story that isn't filled with clop and explosions and all that stuff for once. There were a lot of minor errors but they didn't detract from the story too much, and other commenters have already pointed out most of it.

Awesome work, I'll definitely be reading the sequel.

Best rarijack story I have read so far!

Awesome job!

How come they have feeling in their tales? When Rarity cut off her tale for that dragon in the second episode as a replacement for part of his mustache she didn't seem to be in any physical pain.

This was amazing!!