Originally a letter written by a retired Celestia talking about her adjustment to living life as her former protege. It has since grown into a regular story exploring the changing roles of everypony in the new lives they lead.
This was my first attempt at fan fiction. Any commentary or suggestions are welcome.
Thanks everypony for reading it!
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A very interesting take on the Princesses' backstory.
I hope that the letter isn't the whole story... it would be interesting to see the events both prior to the changeover and after it - Twilight worrying over her new role, Celestia enjoying the peace & quiet of Ponyville, etc
I have seen quite a few stories that deal with Twilight ascending to the Helianthus Throne, but not one quite like this. Mostly because it is not a angst fest like some. It's a good start and a good foundation to the Alicorns, be interesting to see how this will go
Hmm... interesting... I think I'm going to "like" this...
interesting, im kinda confused as to the whole..luna and Celestia thing...Is "Twilight" the original Celestia or Luna at the moment. or Candance ...or Chrysilis ...im so confused
It's a circular progression.
Celestia takes a protege. Once ready the protege assumes the role (including appearance) of Luna;
Luna steps up to become Celestia; and the retiring Celestia takes the place of the protege. That way she can live out the remainder of her life as normal. Then a new protege must be found to start the cycle anew.
So in my story the pony we came to know as Twilight is currently Luna and the Celestia we were introduced to has become Twilight. The "original" Luna is now acting as Celestia, but eager to resign.
Make sense?
An interesting premise, that the title/power/stature can be traded off, handed down...
K so sorry i didnt read it when it first came out, but i was preoccupied..Cannot for the life of me remeber with what, but thats besides the point,
still have to get used to the name changing but with the clear description and addressing them as they are, i find it much easier and less confusing.
and i really love the concept of it, it is very interesting and a very easy read.
Thank you keep up the good work =D
iv already said its a great story and reiterating that point might get irritating
so from now on im just gonna comment to let you know im still following this wonderful piece of art :
JKaneH: Thank you! It's nice knowing that there is someone following this. Just like it's more fun to cook if you have someone to share the food with, it's more fun to write for an audience!
I do plan to keep going at something close to the pace I have been so far (hopefully). Though I am going to go camping for a week in a few days, so I'll be gone for a bit there.
Thanks everyone!
... is all that needs to be said. That, and I'm really liking this story and wish to read much much more of it.
Oh Pinkie, don't ever change
Great chapter and great story too, if a bit confusing at times
And speedy updates too!
I've gone back and read the whole thing from the start againl; changing from letters to a regular story format was a very positive move and really worked! I'm a little curious to know what this is leading to, though it wouldn't be fair to expect anything really epic from this. The exploration of the characters is just a really cool idea in general.
that does seem like something RD would do....
Ooh! Now THIS is a unique idea! That 'Celestia' and 'Luna' aren't really immortal at all but are 'Dread Pirate Roberds' characters - a series of unicorns through history who have been empowered and played the roles until they grew tired and trained replacements. More interesting that the old Princess takes their replacement's place in ordinary society!
This turns the normal 'Twilight becomes a Princess' cliché in an unexpected new direction. It should be interesting to see if the transfer goes smoothly and how well Celestia is able to play Twilight's role. After all, she admits that the transition was rushed; it is possible that either Fluttershy (who is highly empathic) or Pinkie Pie (who does not seem bound by the normal laws of magic and reality) may suspect or even discover the truth due to some mis-step on "Twilight's" part.
I'm assuming that this was a bodily transfiguration rather than a mind-swap. However, it does show the degree to which we are our environments. Living as Twilight is making Celestia start to think like Twilight.
(Just a quick note, I'm going to use every character's original name for clarity's sake)
I do wonder if Luna is up to this or whether she may flee again. I find it hard to believe that every transition has gone smoothly in the past so why should they automatically expect it to do so now?
Ah... Of course, Twilight, the real Twilight, is The Element of Magic, not Celestia. There may be some way to transfer control back but there also may be none. They need, urgently, to come up with an explanation as to why 'Luna' is suddenly The Element of Magic and pray to the god of their choice that there isn't a mind-link between the Elements when they are used or the whole thing is going to be blown wide open (Can you imagine Rainbow or Pinkie being able to keep this secret? No, me neither).
Well, that's a pretty fast promotion. However, I also suspect it is necessary. Luna has demonstrated that she doesn't have the strength or personality to be the Sun Princess. Twilight on the other hand? For her, it's the role towards which she has been working all her life. It's her destiny.
Wtih regrads to the Element of Magic, I think I know what must be done. The Elements respond to friendship and love. Celestia doesn't have that relationship with the others of the Mane 6 yet. She must create that relationship to unlock the Element that she has... er... "inherited".
Yeah, of course Pnkie would know. Of all the Mane 6, only Twilight is more intelligent, intuitative and powerful. And, of course, she would keep the secret. Isn't that what friends do?
That said, the geas is probably a good idea. Pinkie is incapable of malice but she can be thoughtless due to over-excitement on occasion. The failsafe of the spell will prevent stuff from.. er... "slipping out" at inopportune moments.
Those who live the hard but honest life of the farmer really don't have use for pretense or even grudges; by necessity they are pragmatists. As the Element of Honesty, I can see Applejack being unhappy with the deception but that same honesty and pragmatic mindset will tell her why it's necesary. Celestia has tried to be a good friend this past year, so why not accept her as she has tried to be? That is really all that matters here.
Yeah, I think that Rainbow is going to be so let down when she finds out that the Wonderbolts don't use the same recruitment methods as the princesses.
It's a damn shame I can't upvote this more than once.
It's the quiet ones you have to worry about... because they can sneak up to you whilst you're revealing the Big Secret without you knowing it!
FLUTTERTROLL is better then trollestia.
she knows everything
and will tell angel
who will tell the woodland creatures
who will tell the cows
who will tell the applejack
who will kill the new twilight for lieing.....or did they already tell applejack. i forgot. if they did then the cows tell winona. who tells philomena. who tells a care giver for her who tells donut joe who starts a riot. that kills the new twilight.
either way. twilights gonna have a bad time
I like. Unique take on the concept.
Yes, that is the thought that would bother Fluttershy the most isn't it? That maybe, on some level, she had done something "wrong" and that Twilight was mad at her.
It's Rarity who I'm most unsure about; I'm not sure if she really understands properly or whether she just thinks that her friend has been 'promoted'. Still, now the truth is known, it may make things easier for everyone to adjust.
Like Celestia, I wonder if there is some aspect of the switching spells that subtly alters the target's mind and personality. With time, she may find herself more and more Twilight Sparkle and less and less Celestia - She'll retain the memories but they'll lose their personal context. I hope not because it would be a shame for Twilight to lose the immediacy of her memories of her first friends and, in some ways, it would be mind-control. However, if it does work out that way, I can understand why the original creator of the spell arranged things thus.
No, I don't think he'll come around but, in some ways, that doesn't matter. He'll remain loyal to his new Princess: his loyalty to Equestria and love for Twilight will keep the secret safe until his dying breath. He will also, in the name of Equestria, co-operate with the illusion that Celestia is Twilight Sparkle. He might even prove to be a good actor. However, he will never see Celestia as his sister, even if he tries.
Not bad.
Completely insane, mind you. But not bad.
Duty huh?
"I don't care! I'm going to do something wild and spontaneous!" I can see Spike looking at the schedule and finding that under "Optional Goals For Today".
It's beginning to sound like, when she was a filly, Celestia was more Twilight than Twilight. I'm wondering if that's what's making the others stay away: the distinct feeling that she's too good at this for it to be entirely natural.
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Point. I can see that possibility.
i honestly forgot about shinings potential reaction....thats interesting.
"I dont care"
welp i give this 2 more chapters before the world implodes. twilight aught not do somthin random.
it aint right
Fin? Fin indeed...
*Pick up Gorgon with TK*
*Smack it's head against ground multiple times*
*Step 3*
*Profit*
btw, how you described it, it's a Gorgon, metalic scaled bull that breathes green smoke with petrification properties.
A catoblepas is much harder to describe, but was supposed to have a more Giraffe look about it, with a gaze that causes death.
And Twilight (in both current and former forms, no less) continues her less-than-stellar record against petrifiers.
Woo! Cliffie! (should be a trollestia smiley)
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My mouth dropped open when you posted this.....
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The D&D Gorgon was what I originally had in mind, but gorgon has a different description in classical mythology. The catoblepas from mythology is different from the TSR depiction too, so I merged them.
And the TK angle occurred to me, but the ponies do seem to have a track record of forgetting abilities in a pinch.
Well, personally I'd love to see more adventures of the new Twilight, but I have a sneaking suspicion that it would be hard to make anything more of it than this. Best to end on a high note.
Interesting and it does show the degree that Twilight is learning the same lessons that Celestia learnt - that it is necessary to let one's subjects prove to themselves that they can fix a problem rather than always rely on you.
I wonder if, in Season 3, we'll see the Elements getting bound closer to their bearers so that they can summon them without going to the vault in Canterlot.
This was a great story that kept me engaged. I liked how your portrayed Celstia's mindset and I thought that your handling of Luna was very realistic. I also think that you correctly predicted the reactions of the other five. Finally, you found a great action sequence to end the story. All in all a great job. Well done!
darn my estimation was a bit off....the world didnt implode. only a minor malfunction of space time bringing back a once exstint animal thingy....
But if Twilight is Luna, Luna is Celestia and Celestia, does that mean that Twilight, who is Celestia, is the real Element of Harmony, while Lunestia was the real Nightmare and oh my eyes just went crossed...
This holds promise.
ONWARD!
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Now this letter alone is perfect. Very good take on the immortality business.
Great concept, beautifully done.
Yes, the end was as cheesy as many of the show's endings... I'd have liked it differently and more in the tone of the rest of the story; but it's fitting nonetheless.
Good job :)