You have my attention.    Though I hope this doesn't mean 'Gilda Versus Knitting' is going on hiatus, as long as you're regularly updating this I won't mind too much if that's the case.

CELESTIA DAMN YOU why do you have to keep writing such good stories and please please could you write some chapters for wax fruit plleeaseee

And could we please get more of this

well that seams reasonable.

P.S. silly pinkie.

You've got my attention, keep it up :D

>>5375053750 Gilda vs. Knitting is my main focus, I just couldn't write anything for it today. Got a half done chapter, expect it Wed or Thur.

>>5375253752 Wax Fruit was a pretty hard one to write, but I'm chipping away at it. Next week at earliers, unfortunatly.

>>5375853758 Yes, that is her charecter.

This... is a fantastic concept! I can't wait for the next part :P How long are you intending/hoping this will be?

>>5376453764

Dude don't stress just glad that you haven't forgotten it am eagerly awaiting your latest installment to any of your fantastic stories

I like the concept.   Hyper-organized, order-loving Twilight with Chaos magic?

Why do I have this sudden image of Pinkie Pie dressed up like Yoda and lecturing on the proper way to have fun with it?

>>5379253792 I honestly have no clue. This idea stuck during writers block on a project and I had to type it out to get moving, but I really can't complain about results! It will have three chapters minium if I make it a short story, and I think I will, but if the ball gets rolling, maybe five or six.

>>5395253952 uuuuuuussssseeeeiiiiinnnngggg that scene.

Certainly interesting. I hope Discord's chaotic nature will mess with Twi, making her more like Pinkie Pie and less nerdy, orderly, organized unicorn we knew. Also, moar fear - Twilight looks like a monster, and if villagers feared Zecora, simple zebra, they'll be terrified

>>5406154061

Happy to inspire.

"But I'm _trying_ to have fun!"

"No Try!" Bonk to the head with rubber chicken.  "Mope! or Party!  There is no _TRY_"

This is a fun concept! Although the description of Twilight's new look sounds pretty creepy . Hopefully she can at the very least get rid of the tooth and the horns, she might look more normal then.

Looking forward to some chaos-magic shenanigans.

This chapter, I like it

ANOTHER!

Lotsa laughing going on there.  Cracked up at the 'we must not visit the same web sites', though should probably be something lower tech for the milieu.  'Read the same books' or 'You musta skipped Aloe's special massage' might work as a replacement?

The vision of clapping hooves while flying, in order to do magic, is very cool.  Keep up the good work.

Excellent

>>5435554355  Thanks. Gonna do a picture of it soonish.

>>5436754367 Yeah, prolly shoulda, but the fourth wall is a great excuse for not doing so. May go back and change it.

So is Twilight the size of Discord or the size of a regular pony? And will Discord ever come back?

REALLY REALLY LIKE by the way. Sooo AWEsome :D

>>5436754367

See, there are these giant spiders that live just inside the Everfree Forest, okay? And for some reason, they love to make these crazy structures with their spider-silk; in a few places, it's woven so thick it's almost solid, and the strands connect with the trees and each other to form a vast number of nooks and crannies. There's a thrill of danger that comes from trespassing in the Forest, but the silk is dense enough that a pony can hide in it and be safe from any actual peril, plus it's a place that's private and secluded; all of these factors combine to make these 'web sites' the perfect place for teenage couples to visit when they want to make out.

“ Dang, I was hoping for a mature rating.”

Does it make me a bad person that I was slightly hoping this to?

>>5454854548 No. But i've found myself completely unable to write sexy scenes, so I don't even try.

PotatoJoe

I was wondering is Discord going to be a character in the story or will his appearance mark the end of the story?

Is this a Disqord fic? because I just have to think of Q when I think of magic via snapping fingers.

>>5412154121

Have you seen the Rule 63 Discord Art? Trust me, Twi can still be adorkable.

>>5455554555

Those are usually the best scenes though it doesn't need to be sexy if you can make it extremely awkward you can usually create great comedic value  

I read a few thing and watched a few things were it gets so awkward I am unable to keep going because of the sheer embarrassment. However when I look back those are the moments I can remember as the funniest.

>>5485254852

Ofc, but not many ponies into whole different-body-parts-sharp-fangs-evil-red-eye-and-two-horns thing.

>>5507255072 “ Apparently you and I don’t visit the same websites.” muttered Potato Joe with a giggle and a blush.

Just had a thought about making Twilight appear normal.   A trickster like Discord could obviously appear as any kind of creature or thing he liked. (As evidenced by his stain-glass-window dance routines)  For storytelling though, that is just too easy a solution.

Likely she can be made to appear normal, with the sole exception of the eyes.   Eyes are traditionally unaffected by shape-changing or illusion magic I notice.  I suspect mirrors will still reveal the 'real' appearance that is being hidden.  This provides lots of opportunities for failure on the disguise check.

>>5561755617 AAAWWW HELL NAW! See, I was going to do the mirror and eye thing once she started using Discords shapeshifting powers! Dangit, why did you have to guess?

.....still using them, thou. Thanks for reading!

Oopsy!   Well, maybe nobody will read the comments and get the spoilers?

Just tell me you weren't going to have her able to infect brain-washed minions with Chaos too after accidental bites!

We enjoy this.

OK, Dirty Pinkie is officially even funnier and more awesome than the common Fourth-Wall Breaking Pinkie

>>5582555825 Holy balls, it's the Kaiser. How's that big unsinkable ship of yours doing?

>>5590255902 And yet, they are so close together you can switch between with ease.

you can give us the link to the pictures, thank you ?

5 stars, definitely.

Only thing I felt off about was her...getting, for a lack of a better word, Discords power.

I thought she would change from the conflict and utter disharmony within the streams from the elements, and then still have to face DIscord.

My mind is oddly good at coming up with stuff like that.

I'm not disappointed at all (At least, with the story. Discords Chaos popcorn habit was too similar to what he did with the chocolate milk to be really funny, and Fluttershy cursing just doesn't seem right. Remember: for chaos, use your imagination, taking advantage of what you know, but always, always being unpredictable. For example, the popcorn box being upside down, and that's all I got. I'm not writing this story, I just like it, and want to see it be awesome)

-I also don't review every chapter.

>>5599855998 Huh. Never seen a comment say "five stars" and then tell me I'd written everything wrong. Well, live a little every day!

you can give us the link to the pictures, thank you ?

Huh, I was half-expecting Twilight to make an actual off switch; I'm sure that would probably be within the scope of her powers as the new lord of chaos. Then again, I may only be thinking that because screwball did it in Equestria: Total War (although I wouldn't really want Twi' to go batshit insane and randomly killing people by turning them into flipflops either). Anyway, great story; can't wait to see what the crap the cook is about to start.

Yay! Great chapter!  Poor Twi.

>>5603256032 Didn't know the off swtich thing had been done before - yeah, and there will be No Grimdark in this story.

>>5603856038 Yeah. Luck just ain't her thing.

Carry On, story looks good and interesting :D

Hoo boy, the proverbial horse manure is about to hit the fan.

>>5600956009

Well, I want my reviews to be worth more then just "This is great, yo", so I give suggestions.

I mean, I like this story. I want to see it succeed, so I do what I can...which is offer suggestions that might spark an idea in your brain and suddenly you have an idea that is just perfect. Admittedly, I said that your plot felt off, but that was just me stumbling over my own thoughts and not going over it properly.

I like how the story is going as it is...I just expected a different direction then you wrote. However, I remain behind the little details that could, but don't have to change(forgive this one's use of the word disappointment before that whole section. I'm not disappointed with anything. My...critique's(?) that follow still stand)

So, as I said, Five stars.

Good job. Keep it up.

For some reason I have this nagging feeling of Deja Vù... I can't place it, and I love the story.

But I can't shake the feeling that... I dunno... that this has been done before? Then again it feels like the "memory" it's being drawn upon is a lot older than my bronydom...

It might just have been something I dreamt. Good job nonetheless, I do love the story.

Dust this bitch!

Tracking this because Twilight Sparkle with alicorn-tier powers is always relevant to my interests. (Contingent, of course, upon the story also being well-written. Which this is. So, hooray!)

“ Well, by all means, friend me.”

Best. Line. Ever.

You've been watching too much hentai anime, Pinkie.

Damnit, this is getting really close to a certain story that I'm working on at the moment. Oh well, I still have some surprises to reveal!

Pretty good start! Will check out the rest!

I guess Twilight is sort of an uncanny valley for everypony.

>>5615456154 I would kill to hear her VA say that.

>>5616656166 Awww, thanks! Hope I can keep it up!

>>5618056180 Yeah. It's weirder when you know them.

Me: NOOO PINKIE! THE FOURTH WALL! THE FOURTH WALL, DAMNIT!!!!!!       

Pinkie: Teehee!

Also. . . sorry, I'm not really much of a critic, and I know this story wasn't your first priority, but the grammar and typos really killed it for me. . . Kinda like Mayor Mare's wig on Nightmare Night. . .

But awesome idea anyway! This is fun!

Twilight plus chaos magic...

I really like this. Both concept and execution are very well done, and I always love a blantantly metafictional Pinkie Pie. Watching you as of now, and I look forward to more.

>>5598455984

Just search 'Eris Discord'  on Google Images.

first chapter is a david bowie song

reading this

Technicly one of her 'horns' is an antler, not a horn.

I'm hoping for a joke where Twilight mentions something about Rainbow Dash '...going at a ludicrous speed." and accidentally stomping her hooves.

>>5631456314

And of course Rainbow's streaky afterimage being plaid :D

I just read the first chapter, and I'm liking it so far and I'm going to track it.  It actually reminds me of an idea that I have for a fan-fic of my own or two.  (Although they will probably just remain as outlines and ideas due to my laziness and lack of interest in actually writing, I blame Elementary School.)  But mine would be a self-insert/human-in-Equestria/Xanth-crossover, with some Discord origen mixed in.

But yeah, anyway, keep up the good work, and of course, MOAR (please).

Twilight won't be getting away with just the shoes, Rarity's muse has come out to play.

You're dangling some kind of carrot in front of us with that whole two hearts bit arn't you? Fine be that way you're just lucky I love carrots.

I like. I very much like! look forward to more!

Hey, not bad so far!  I'd like to see this featured on EQD (if not already done so)!

You got yourself a reader, imma check this everyday for updates.

So let me see what this chapter revealed about Pinkie:

"Oops, did I turn you on?" = She has strange sexual fantasies about Twilight. Teehee!

"Nah, let her talk about hooves some more" = She has a foot fetish . . . or you're alluding to her comment from an earlier chapter.

"Hey, time for another scene change!" = She apparently is reading this story with me. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . (looks around the room). . . . . . (closet creaks open). . . . . . . (turns and looks at the closet). . . . . . . . . .

Me =

o.O well i always knew magic was, in some ways, inherently strange but this is just weird even for me. its like adding 1 more creature onto a chimera which is just plain strange to begin with, not to mention they're magic getting swapped or possibly mixed :/ tracking and reading

When I read this line, "“ Nah, let her talk about hooves some more.” Pinkie said with a giggle.", what immediately came to my mind was, Giggidy.

So apparently Pinkie Pie has Quagmire's foot/hoof fetish, huh?

Pinkie. Stop it. You're a pony from a little girl's cartoon. You shouldn't be reading rule 34. That's forbidden territory.

well, they're right about one thing, if discord's magic was the power of chaos then there may indeed be no way to truly control it as chaos can't be controlled/predicted/etc.

wonder how weird this'll get later on

>>5618856188 Man, this site is serious about grammar and typos. My editors for my REAL jobs have cared less about typos - then again, I write dialog, so thats less of an issue.

>>5620656206 Yeah, metafic Pinkie is so much fun. It gives the author a chance to MST themselves.

>>5637756377 Yeah, I've submitted to EQD before. They've told me I have to do so many edits  - to fix the basic grammer of almost every sentence, for example - that it wasn't worth the effort.

>>5646156461 I hid a Pinkie doll in my fiancee's room, in the heating grate that looks down at her bed. I had painted the eyes with glow in the dark paint. She was not amused (she got me back, but I still won that one). Pinkie is creepy.

>>5653756537 Well, maybe not Quagmires, but she'd definitely into them in this fic.

Warning forth wall has been breached

*Going on 11:30*

Brain "Nathan go to bed its late"

Me "No I have to check for updates"

Brain "You need sleep to not be bitchy"

Me "Look PotatoJoe posted another update :D"

Brain "NO! YOU HAVE TO GO TO SLEEP"

Me "No you're just stupid and never have good plans"

Brain "I have a lot of good plans"

Me "Name one"

Brain "There was that one time when we skipped 3 period and had a great lunch"

Me "And how did that end?"

Brain "We took an arrow to the knee"

Me "No, I took and arrow to the knee you laughed at me. So I'm going to read this and you can't stop me"

Brain "Why did you write all this"

Me "It seemed like a good idea at the time. you know what? I don't need this from you I'm going to bed"

Look at all my spelling errors and despair for I am Tictac lord of pointless grammatical mistakes

I'm gonna say this. i've been trying to avoid tracking new stories. i have too many ones that i'm tracking, though they dont all update very frequently.

nonetheless, i couldn't help but check the box next to "track." this is just so well written, save for a few minor grammatical/spelling errors, which honestly look more like typos that went unnoticed. i may even be wrong. i'm not an english major. but great job. i hope this keeps up the awesome. i dont doubt that it will

oh, and i LOVE how you write Pinkie Pie. just saying.

pinkie: crazy, split-personality, yet still so much fun lol and random (odd comment of twilight as a stallion in previous chapter )

You'd think with the way everyone reacts to everything all over this place, it's all on the same level but it's not! Learn to see that more clearly.

My opinion of this is overall, excellent so far, but I will never agree that ANYPONY is as mighty as Discord, no matter what magical accident they went through. Sounded to me as though there was a half-and-half trade between them at the start there. But keep on writing, old chap!

>>5668256682 Where were the typos? I'd be glad to fix them. I'm a crap proofreader - I focus on dialog more than setting writing, so it's a problem for me.

Would that "oops, did I turn you on again?" line happen to be from MST3K? I love trying to pick out references authors throw into these stories.

>>5678356783 Yep, MST3K. I slip in refrences to it all the time. Best Show Ever.

This chapter. I liked it.

ANOTHER!! *smashes glass on the ground*

potato joe writes more awesome things? i must look into this.

Liking this alot more than I thought I would but I do hope we get a scene with Twilight and her parents together before Celestia's cover story comes out. They reaction and Twilighter reaction to that could be gold of so many flavours (I blame Discords magic for the metaphor)

Dear Celestia, Pinkie breaking the fourth wall. Bravo.

This seems to me to be your standard Twilight-becomes-an-alicorn story with discord thrown in there.

Which also seems to be what actually happened.

Also, some of the stray chaos magic must have hit Pinkie and given her 4th-wall powers.

Only way I can explain it in-universe.

5 stars.

I have to admit, this a a great new twist on the original story and an interesting what-if story.

Very nice story! I'm eagerly awaiting to see where it goes next ^^

Getting Twilight familiar with her new powers could easily mean her turning... closer to their chaotic nature, and in all honesty, personally I would love to see where it would develop from there.

But I guess you have your ideas already, so I'll leave you to them! Keep up the good work!

Fun concept! My only complaint is that you're prone to malapropisms; you use 'to' and 'your' in place of 'too' and 'you're' respectively, among other grammatical problems. That kind of kills the experience for me, though I'm not sure why.

Yes! This is awesome!

As I said on the first chapter just a few minutes ago, I suggest going over everything and working out the various issues with grammar. Other than that, I'm loving this. Also, what in the world possessed you to make Pinkie into an online perv? It fits perfectly

Hilarious, yet I confess I'm not sure I like how you write Pinkie Pie.

"If I have not returned in fifteen minutes, or I return and my head is a radish, you are to flee at your own discretion."

That is so something i would say in his situation

*sips glass before throwing chocolate milk over shoulder*

Wow this has got to be the most evil thing discord has done

Now this is getting interesting indeed.

She flinched as his eyes traced the two unfamiliar horns atop her head at her batwing, held tight against her body my her mother, sent pinches of pain through her body.

You might want to reword this sentence. Otherwise, I'm enjoying what's there so far. Looking forward to more.

>>5785157851 Fixed! Missed a period and a word. Thanks for the edit!

Oh Discord, you so random... yet... logical... and evil.

Oh, this again... I feel like I'm a bad person for enjoying a story with this many basic spelling and punctuation errors. This is lovely, but please, please find yourself a competent proofreader.

(When it's the very first line.. you gotta correct it)  Ruling a land for a thousand years gave one a particular ability...

That is pretty evil all right!   Good characterization of Discord though.  I think there needs to be a real re-think on the budget for the palace guard.  Con-sarnit.

I actually sort of want Twilight to stay this way and adjust to her new powers and appearance? She should lighten up a bit and learn to enjoy chaos, when expressed responsibly.

"She swore in the most regal way possible."

Le fuck?

o_o ..... *takes the mace from Rainbow Dash* Give me that, I want first swing at the bastard. >:C

Well, discord is pretty desperate.

Awesome chapter.

>>5793557935 ....uh....what? I don't see the typo. I know I have a ton, but I don't see it.

>>5792557925 Wanna step up to the plate? I could use one with all the complaints.