Aww it's turned out to be a lovely little story. I'm glad you gave it a happy ending, I was actually thinking of giving the original a more "evil" ending, haha. May still do that for an alt end. Thank you so much for writing it for me

>>938286938286 It was my pleasure, thank you for letting me do this

Desperatly needs a editor,but other then that i really enjoyed this story.Have a like

nice story, but you might want to re-write the synopsis, per example into something among the lines of:

"After the wedding of her niece, Princess Celestia thinks about the burden of eternal life, and the pain it brings..."

why you do this??

you play with our feelings..you make us , you make us , but in the end..you reward us with ...

a little rushed sometimes, but other than that..this story is a masterpiece

This was great. It desperately calls for a sequel though if you ask me.

its star swirl... lol other than that good

>>943176943176 Indeed my friend, Im very good at understanding, reading and speaking english but when it comes to writting well, I really suck.

>>943188943188 MMM, it would be nice, mind to give me a few ideas?

>>943282943282 I might add a sequel, it would be short if I do, dont promise anything though!

>>943498943498 Hahahaha, and that just made my day

>>944897944897

Ok.

A good synopsis gives the reader an idea of what to expect from the story, so try to tell the first portion of the story (say, the meeting with Cadence) in about three sentences, and end with a bit of foreshadowing on how Celestia reflects on her past.

I loved this story

Good job

;_;

“But, he was right, several years later he died from old age, and the pain she felt was so great and deep it almost killed her, putting her in a great cage of depression and hate to life, but she was saved thanks to her sister Moon Gazer and her best friend Drocsid”

This suddenly comes to mind.

Anyway nice story!

Well just spell check some stuff and your good to go (second language: Not really obvious :D )

oh and

Image: http://static.fjcdn.com/comments/sompony+needs+to+shop+Rainbow+Dash+s+so+awesome+face+on+_0835373aff8230cbee797a3a3b9ae3d5.jpg

This story is great.  

It's truly sad there are so many typos, because all the good elements are there otherwise.  Get yourself an editor and this could really be something special.

Wait, English is your second language? Holy shit other then a few messups here and there this was really good!

Finally went to read and i must say not bad, not bad indeed.

I liked how you reimagined Celestia's past. Made me feel sorry for her

But the story is very nice I liked it.

>>938720938720

Gaaaaahhhh! Why do all the good Twilestia fics end right after the first kiss!? But very interesting take on Celestia's love life. Looking foward to more.

>>938720938720

Do you plan to do a continuation or sequel to this?

>>15193621519362 I do, In fact im posting an epilogue tomorrow Sunday (for me anyways) my job hasnt let me do ANYTHING in the past few months, finally finished it XD, its not long but I think its good

>>15193921519392

I would like to see this as a full story, with what you have as just the first chapter.

>>15196001519600 Its just a One-shot, but an epilogue is required XD

>>15210931521093

Image: data:image/jpeg;base64,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

If you've been keeping track (have you?), you would know that I will now reread the chapter in Morgan Freeman's voice.

>>15249611524961

Image: http://images.starpulse.com/pictures/2011/05/20/previews/Morgan%20Freeman-20110520-39.jpg

>>15249611524961 good idea

>>15249751524975

Indeed. I have a Morgan Freeman voice file inside my brain. I can read anything in Morgan Freeman's voice. Shame I don't actually sound like him though

>>15250301525030

I seem to be just full of them.

I loved the first chapter and didn't feel it needed another one but this was a great addition.

The only thing I have to say is that the ending felt strange, like it was pure head canon. (Head canon I love but head canon none the less)

Overall I would say great job, was good.

-Sturrn

This has been reread and Morgan Freeman approved.

Well, that was unexpectOH GOD MY HEART!!

Discord you met before, she didn't died because I still lived,

I love happy endings

Spike learned to control his dragon powers and was able to stay in a size just a bit smaller than Celestia, thus gaining immortality and be crowned as the new dragon king.

Now Equestria was gone, there was no more Equestria, no, now there was the Empire of Harmony, all creatures of all over the world conformed it, finally living in peace and harmony

The Spike explanation feels kinda awkward and came out of nowhere. Mastering his powers? Really? Consider: a Dragon nap on FIM last a hundred years, if nap usually doesn't last a couple of hours, why don't just consider them immortal unless killed like a Tolkien elf? Also the size problem could be fixed with as long as Spike doesn't go mad with greed he doesn't grow uncomfortably large. Lastly what's the point of making Spike a king if there is a 'Empire of Harmony'? I think you tried too hard to make a happy ending. Not everything needs to be explained and if done properly less can mean more. I wouldn't say it's bad, but the for me the ending feels off.

I can't quite wrap my brain around a Spike / Luna pairing but i do like how everything turned out.

I like it mostly, all the mass shipping felt like you just wanted everyone to be shipped with someone ,even if it means incest, poligamy and all that.

And thats just awkward, i could more easily see Rarity be single all her life then taking even part of someones love for anyone else (Element of Generosity anyone? )

At least if i got it right and you shipped Spike with both Rarity and Luna (him marring both of them)

A few spelling mistakes, but then again, your first language isn't English. I loved this story.

>>15249611524961 I just read it in his voice and it made the story so much better

>>15368681536868

Of course it did.

>>15380841538084>>15368681536868 But of course, ANYTHING read in Morgan Freeman's voice is ALWAYS better, for example, My little Dashie, Eternal, Past sins, etc, Great fics like that are great by themselves, now try reading them in his voice, it turns out as pure awesomeness, will make you cry THAT much I can assure

>>15422421542242

Well, duh. I do that anyway. It makes every fic generally more awesome.

This is good but not great. Honestly you could've easily turned this into atleast 30k words. I still liked it though :)

>>15422421542242 now I want to read My Little Dashie in Morgans voice

>>15249611524961

damn, now i need to re-read it so I can do that

>>15728351572835

Buck yeah you do.

My job is very demanding, I wanted to extend this more but I just cant find the time to do it and my imagination is running low, so if anypony wants to take the epilogue and extend it you can do it, just tell me via PM.

>>15250351525035 that is the best very mild superpower in the history of forever

>Big Mac married Fluttershy and they became great friends

LOL how does that even work? is supposed to be the other way around!

Anyway,I liked it!

>>16026551602655 ohh that, I missed a " , " there, I didnt meant it to be Fluttershy and Big Mac becoming great friends, I meant it to be Twilight and Big mac became great friends  after Fluttershy and Big Mac marriage

English is your SECOND language? Wow, I applaud you.

Spike married Luna and Rarity

...

WHAT!!!

Image: http://pinkie.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw7969-527266_342418675848752_621593333_n.jpg

I am blown away

A very happy story in the end, slightly bittersweet but ultimately happy. Good work, could use quite some editing though.