Bakin' and Eggs

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Pinkie asks Twilight for help in the bakery to prepare for a special occasion. Will Twilight be able to deal with her friend's outlandish claims, or will she mess everything up?

[If anyone knows of a suitable cover image, I'm open to suggestions.]

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DarthMaul22

DarthMaul22 #1 · Jul 19th, 2012 · · ·

So, in a bout of writer's block, I followed some sage advice (don't remember where I read it, sorry) and just wrote god-knows-what until it passed. This was supposed to be a small thing at first, but quickly grew in my head into something that I felt fit the description of 'Episode-Like'.

All critiques are welcome, though my main focus on this was pacing and OoC-ness (as in, I don't want them to be out of character).

Also, aside from grammar and spelling mistakes, I don't think I'll be editing this. I want to be able to look back on this and know what I did wrong and what I could've done better.

EDIT: It would also seem I suck at descriptions.

FormerMLPAuthor

FormerMLPAuthor #2 · Jul 20th, 2012 · · ·

Awesome. Just great! I loved it! It's so nice to FINALLY have a story on here that isn't OoC.

My only complaint is the "This is Sparta" joke. That kinda whipped me out of the story and took me a bit to get back in again.

Other than that, though? GREAT job! :) I'm adding it to my favorites!

RaisingShad0ws

RaisingShad0ws #3 · Jul 21st, 2012 · · ·

I love the fact that, this feels like it could be an episode for season four(Hopefully the season that everypony likes)! You did an excellent job, and As such, you earn a . Great job.