The city of Dock has long been a quiet shadow of its former self, and nopony knows that better than Belle, Captain of the town guard. A steady decline in the fortunes of the once prosperous port town has led to a certain amount of boredom, and to be honest, she wouldn't have it any other way.
When disaster strikes the otherwise sleepy town, Belle finds herself hock deep in the middle of a mystery unlike any the city has ever experienced. Now she must rely on her wits, and the help of friends both old and new to stop the pandemonium that threatens to destroy her world.
(Takes place between "It's About Time" and "A Canterlot Wedding.")
Chapters (13)
I thought it would say if she forgot to close the door
I'll give it a shot as soon as I get done with the objectives at hand
Screw it I'll just read now
Hmmmm good I'm definitely keeping mah eye on this one
*Le reading
"Even if feeding all of its heads was something of a hassle."
*poker face*
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From the synopsis I synopsis that you need moar tags
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Thanks for the comments!
I'll be adding more character tags as said characters appear.
The majority of the story, as I have it planned out currently, doesn't take place in Ponyville but in a neighboring town, so while some familiar faces will most likely show up, the vast majority of characters will be OCs (I'm hoping I'm a capable enough writer to not make them suck).
As for the category tags, I'm still undecided on them, the only one I know fits is the 'adventure' tag. While it will certainly have both comedic and dark elements, I'm not sure if either are substantial enough to warrant a tag.
I'm still new at this, so please bear with with me while I get the hang of things. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.
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I know EXACTLY how you feel.
It's a little weird wen starting out.
Anyway while I can't help with the tags dilemma I can say I did the as-they-come characters tags
Anywho I'll help with what I can but I just found this story too perfect to edit anything quite yet so keep at it
Stop playing Guild Wars 2 and finish this. I want to read the rest of it.
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But Guild Wars 2...
Seriously though, chapter 3 is almost finished. Shouldn't be too long now.
Glad you're enjoying it.
I know GW2, but this is an adventure/mystery with OC's that don't make me want to punch kittens in the throat, and I wanna know what happens NAOW!!!
Because ponies. ;)
I'm taking a bit of a gamble on this, here's hoping it pays off.
Good luck ;)
Caught something though.
With a straight face but a knowing look in his eyes, Sergeant Oak clarified, “About getting a decent rest tonight and being ready for tomorrow.”
The captain sighed. There was still so much to do. She had hoped to check in on the hospital and find out the status of the injured Diamond Dog; to check the ship manifests for all the incoming traffic of the last two days, perhaps get an idea about who had brought in the smuggled goods; and, eventually, write up her report.
Noting her hesitancy, Brine added firmly, “I would also strongly recommend that, Ma’am. We shall watch over the city.”
I give this story 6 Ascalonian Tears so far.
E.B.
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Fixed.
Only 6!
Patch Notes:
The reward for writing a story has been fixed. Authors will now receive the intended award of 60 ascalonian tears per chapter.
Bonus tears will be awarded upon story completion.
Regards,
The Dev Team.
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Thank you very much
I was really worried about bringing Twilight into the story because I didn't think I'd be able to write her well. It's one thing to write an OC where you know all of the character traits and mannerisms since, well, you made them, but using a pre-established character with existing traits is rather daunting. But it was integral to the story and in the end I think it turned out pretty good
Very cool. I think, as I mentioned before, that the only way Twilight could possibly ruin anything is if she is allowed to take over the story. As long as that doesn't happen and you don't introduce a red/black aiicorn all will be well.
Also, I was going to drag you kicking and screaming into minecraft with us, but then you'd never finish this.
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Oh don't worry, the red/black alicorn is coming, it's my ace in the hole
Minecraft scares me slightly, I have this thing with addictive games...
Dat's not good....
Anyway, nice hook, and I'm glad you didn't introduce Belle just for her to be the first victim.
Also,
Discrete is to be distinct, discreet is to be prudent or unobtrusive.
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Hmm, so it is. Fixed. Thanks!
Did you just say ... wolpertinger?
"begins to sing"
My Brewfest Pony, My Brewfest Pony, AAAAAHAAAAAHAAH *hic* My Brewfest Pony, I used to wonder what getting drunk could be ...
Yay! I've been looking forward to this for a while now. Keep up the good work!
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Thank you very much!
I'm already working on the next chapter. With any luck there won't be nearly as long of a wait.
I found this story yesterday and it was an excellent read. Definitely deserves more love than it has gotten. Looking forward to the rest of it.
I do have to wonder if you plan to use Eris as the main villain behind all of this though.
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Thank you very much, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
While I don't want to do want to give anything away, I will say that I started this story a long time before I had ever seen the fanon character, Eris, so originally the name wasn't a dead give-away as it seems to be now. That being said... we'll have to wait and see.
And I actually made the feature box... I'm stunned. Thank you all.
And a big thanks to Sidewinder for screencapping it, because I didn't actually notice myself and probably never would have. You might not talk much, but you're still awesome
I see what you did there.
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Thanks!
I love that there's so much open-ended history in MLP, it really allows for some creative interpretations. Although I have to admit, that particular theory is a new one for me...
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This story was already good. Now it is fantastic.
Write more, quickly. No sacrificing quality though. Just do it, dammit.
Please?
That was amazing! Claw against Hoof Deathmatch! Makes you wonder about Cerebus's ability to deal with creatures that can keep up with Celestia... Must be one hell of a job.
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Thank you very much
I really wanted to have a scene where Celestia gets into a fight and can show off her powers (I'm tired of her suffering from the "Worf Effect" in both canon and non-canon), and I figured this kind of monster was an ideal adversary for her. It was lots of fun to write.
Cerebus has his ways
I like the punchline at the end.
Woah. Just... Woah.
I started this earlier, like way earlier, in the day, but stayed up until 4AM, forsaking unimportant things like sleep and cleaning, just to finish it... And woah.
This is definitely one heck of a story. I'm definitely sitting on the edge of my seat waiting to see what happens next. You've written it so brilliantly, Twilight is 120% in character, and your OC's have a ton of character in and of themselves. I particularly like how you'll repeat information about certain characters, like the aversion to brightness that Belle has or Em's large size/discreet personality thing. It really helps keep the characters straight when I'm reading it!
That being said, I certainly didn't expect something so well thought out or fun to read when I started reading, and I almost actually stopped at chapter one because of a real life distraction, but boy am I glad that I kept at it! I can't wait for you to update!!! :)
So.. what's the joke with the Hole in the Dock? Cause I just don't get it.
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Horse Dock
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Thank you very much, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far
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Ohhhhhhh.
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Eww.
(Cannot resist trolling Equestria Girls...)
>>>Moonbeam looked troubled however, and looked up at her friend and ruler. “But what if they get out?” >>>
Celestia looked shifty, "I could always dump them through that mirror into the world with all those weird, naked skinny ape things... Nopony will miss them..."
>>>For there, now bathed in the light of two unicorn horns, burnt almost beyond recognition, were the horribly charred and twisted bodies of two unicorn fillies.>>>
Dude, starting out with foal killings... that's a low blow. Really low.
Even psycho serial killer cannibal Hannibal Lecter would be like, "Dude, SRSLY!!"
Oh yeah, this NEEDS A DARK TAG.
I was not expecting to go into this with two mutilated, burned foals!
>>>Belle gave him a skeptical look. “Alrighty then… moving on.” She cleared her throat. “So what you’re telling me is that these poor fillies were dead before the fire?”
“It does seem likely, although there’s no way to know with absolute certainty.”>>>
Yes there is. Given that the bodies are relatively intact, he could check the lungs for smoke inhalation and searing from the inhalation of super-heated gasses. If they were both dead before the fire, the ectodermal tissue will be unscathed in the larynx and bronchii.
Mistress... powers... Eris legend... old mystery mare who happens to be named Eris...
Yeah.
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You can check the comments for internet doctor syndrome...
I don't believe this one has the 'procedural crime drama' tag, so yanno...
Besides, one should make sure to dust one's own house before taking a white silk glove to someone else's shelves. ;)
That certainly was interesting.
I really love the story thus far.
Looking forward to more.
(it is not cancelled is it?)
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Thanks
No, it's not canceled. Life's been keeping me pretty busy recently, and on top of that, one scene's been giving me significant grief. But I'm making progress. I'm hoping to get the next chapter out before New Years, although that's definitely not a set date. Only two chapters left, and probably an epilogue. The end is in sight.
Wolpertinger double checked?
Would that imply she got drunk twice?
More important!? Tell me mayor, what precisely is this thing that's more important than the child murderer rampaging through your town?