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Cheerilee and Screwball expected a quiet Ponyville vacation. But Discord's back, and he's come for the children. Can Screwball and the Ponyville teens overcome the Lord of Misrule in their worst nightmares?
Sequel to the Equestria Daily hit story "School Daze."
Huh, I came on because I got a fic-update notification, and the first thing I see on the main page of the site is this!
So naturally, I read it right away.
Your writing is as good as ever, I must say. Even though its tagged as dark, it had me laughing at quite a few points.
my computer is on the frits so I can't read this right now. I'll just have to do this for now.
School Daze - THE very first story I had ever read on this site.
I swear, that story, I have only once found a story that was equal to it in greatness.
You my friend deserve the feature box. I can already tell. 
>>932293 Good thing I recently changed my avatar. 
4 days ago it was this.
which probably would have creeped you right the hell out.
The Riddle Master - Manilla Road
I do love me some psychological horror. Have you read House Of Leaves by Mark Danielewski?
Oh, the mind can be a strange thing. Screwy doesn't recognize her daddy Discord? Well, give her time. I'm thinking (and hoping, because I love your Discord) that we'll be seeing a lot more of him.
As for tags, the Dark tag seems fitting, based on my expectations and what I've seen so far. If you don't like the message it sends, why not give it a friend? I've found that the Comedy tag works well with the Dark tag. Especially with Discord hanging around.
>>932213 This going to be a black comedy? I'm faving this! I'm thinking of doing an "Ask-Discord" account on Deviantart later, and I'm looking for ways to portray him. I going for something like the Joker from Batman the Animated Series. After all, Mark Hamill was best Joker! BWAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! 
If you think about it, the goofiness of the later Nightmare on Elm Street movies doesn't work with child-killer Freddy but is PERFECT for a dark, BTAS Discord. Heck, I think Discord's pretty dark as it is. For me, his defining character moment is where he breaks Twilight and fistpumps in the air. I see nothing redeemable in him... BUT HE'S SO FUN TO WRITE!
I love the Joker, I love Discord, and there's definitely going to be some similarity.
Never meant that! Just had AJ realize that, in similar to the way kids may date someone similar to their parent, Applebloom chose a boyfriend who was similar to her only father figure: Big Mac. No incest suggested!
Just wait. Freddifying Discord is so much fun. Picking out the nightmares of the CMC was awesome.
I was tempted to write a cover version....
Wow. That's some high praise. Thanks!
I'll try my best.
>>940811
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/34772/Twilight%27s-Movie-Night
Et tu, Paleo Prints? Haha, I guess great minds think alike. And sometimes I think of something at the same time someone much better than me does; Namely this crossover.
I loved the prequel, man, great to see you trying something new with previously established characters.
No Dark tag is going to scare me away! But really, given this story has a strong horror vibe to it at this point, I think the Dark tag is the appropriate one.
I’m interested in seeing where this story goes. Not a whole lot going on right here. Seems the first chapter is mainly setting the scene and characters. Lots of questions being set up in addition to showing us where our main characters are standing. So we will see how this goes. Definently feels like a storm is coming.
People Are Strange - The Doors
My thoughts on this chapter:
Another entertaining chapter once again! As always, I liked the characters and their interactions with one another. Cheerilee has some pretty awful parents. One has to wonder if they have ever approved of anything Cheerilee has done with her life. Plus they seem to be pretty darn oblivious about what they are saying will be perceived by others. I really liked them as characters because they are so detestable.
The horror scenes were pretty chilling in their own ways also. Poor Spike really got slammed by Discord. I wonder what is chasing Surprise…
Absolutely! I was hoping someone would get that. Probably one of my more obscure references.
That's what I'm shooting for!
I was wondered about Spike being too over the top/ to similar to "Secret of My Excess" instead of a continuation.
I'm glad people are reacting to Cheerilee's parents. I've been dropping hints about her Dad for two stories now, and I didn;t want them to be cardboard cutouts. WHew! Well, not that I got this right I have to make sure the "Doctor Meets Ditzy's Parents" scenes I'm writing come out well.
Pinkie would totally sing TMBG while cooking.
I'm enjoying them so much I'm planning on a CMCTeen romance starrring a background filly.
I felt the Spike scene was a good continuation of what we saw in Secrets of My Excess, and that was the episode I was thinking about when reading that scene. It felt like a solid mix of Spike’s sarcastic personality, and what would likely be real fears for him. Considering that worrying about going on another rampage would be a legitimate fear of his in my opinion. Given this is Discord we are talking about, a being that is pretty obviously malicious and prone to theatrics, it would be strike me as difficult to get to the point something is too over the top.
Cheerilee’s parents perhaps do come across as a bit stereotypical, but a lot of times stereotypes exist for a good reason. I think they have solid motivations for their behaviors, and I can see how in their own minds how they think they are doing the right things for their daughter. Even if it results in them coming across as complete jerks to readers. From their desire to have Cheerilee be more financial successful by trying to convince Red to seek a position in education that pays more, to wanting a biological grandchild (considering they got a special needs, at the very least on the cusp of young adulthood, grandchild, and have thus far missed out on a lot of grandparents moments), to Thorn’s own issues with his stallionhood and it resulting in him projecting onto the less then completely masculine Red Glare (at least from Thorn’s perspective). Even if I don’t agree with their methods of what they are doing and how they are going about it, I can understand where they are coming from as characters.
I look forward to the Doctor and Ditzy’s parents scene. I’m willing to bet that will lead to all sorts of awkwardness. So very many things that could go wrong. “Mom, Dad, this is the stallion I obsessed over since I was a child, who I got my engineering career destroyed over, whose accidental abandonment resulted in my falling into a spiral of depression and an abusive marriage, and was responsible for the death of said husband and father of my child. What? Why is everypony looking at me?” Yea, fun times ahead.
I hope to be able to help preread for that in addition to this story.
I know what you mean! Within a few days of the finale I was working on a fic with a identical concept idea to Mendacity... but I read the first chapter of that, and realize he was doing it soooo much better.
I added that at the last edit. I grew up on Megalon era Godzilla. On a lark, I realized I had to have Maser tanks.
Don;t worry; you're still on the list.
Damnit, Paleo. You know you need to send it in to me before posting.
Sweetie ducked to the side as the party mare reached out a forelimb that bent in too many ways.
Party mare? Pinkie ain't in 'dere.
“You must remember to be a proper lady, respectful of all your connection!”
Connections.
grandparent’s
Grandparents'
Also, Lordi reference? KICKASS.
Dammit, you continue to make me like Snips and Snails too much. Also, great to see Rarity! This is the first time I've seen her in your stories, and I was looking forward to your presentation of her. (Being the most complex character on the show, there's always a lot of subtle differences in how she's portrayed in 'fics.)
Also, that first line. SweetieBot is best organic lifeform. 
Glad you got the Sweetie Bot reference. I really like Rarity as a character. That MAY be the reason I've steered away from her; I want a story to do her justice. She plays a big part in the second chapter of Killing Princess Cadence that's sitting on my PC waiting for that last 15% completion.
Snips and Snails was a challenge to flesh out. That was a big worry for me.
And so the plot thickens… Oh, poor Sweetie Belle. She’s getting all torn to pieces by her sister. 
Looks like we are now at the point where things take a nose dive. And still so many victims for Discord to hit. Seems he plans on dragging things out with poor Screwball and Surprise. The reunion was a nice touch, and it was nice to see those three back together again. Someday I would like to see them all get dragged into an adventure in the TARDIS. I think it would be interesting.
And time for typos:
“Yeah? Well, how do you know want she needs?”
-what she needs?
You the one who can get all of us out.
-You are the one who can get all of us out.
Discord isn’t coming for the child of Ponyville.
-Discord isn’t coming for the children of Ponyville.
ONE MILLION YEEEEEEAAAAAARS DUNGEON! First thing I thought of at the Adventure Time refs. I really like how your showing the older ponyville kids, its adorable. The bits where Snails figures out how to talk to Screwball, and Apple Bloom fixes the counter where the best parts of the story so far IMO. Also, Screwball is my waifu.
DO WANT
Once again, another marvelous chapter! You really know how to blend my favorite horror movie series and my favorite cartoon seamlessly! I hope Sweetie isn't dead for keeps, but I won't hold my breath. On an unrelated note, can I bow down and worship the fingertips that write this masterpiece, or would you settle for a steady stream of compliments that essentially say: "you fucking rock"?
It's like a weird combination of Nightmare on Elm Street, Scooby Doo, and Lovecraft. You're good.
The Ballad Of Lanky Rae - Witch Mountain
Enter Sandman - Metallica
Sweetie Belle 
I'm a little sad, because you seem to have written out Scootaloo of this story ("not coming by a lot"), I would've liked to see your teen version of her. I really like your versions of Snips and Snails, though. One could argue they are OOC, but then again puberty doesn't just change your voice and sex drive, so there's that. I definitely prefer this version over the two goof bags in the show. Snails instantly grasping how to talk to Screwy and his almost wordless communication with Pinkie were my highlights of this chapter.
Great job, once again
NTL
Scootaloo will be coming. That was just foreshadowing of how their relationship has changed over the years. There's a definate 80's horror character trope I'm trying to hit with Scootaloo. Viewers of movies like Monster Squad and Return of the Living Dead may recognize it.
Wow. This is dark but NOT grim-dark! Thank goodness I re-read School Daze and the reminder about a sequel! I can't wait to see what happens next!
never did watch nightmare in elm street. Still wont, because horror ain't my thing, but this is cool.
Also... Screwy and Surprise went to the Land of Ooo?!? and adventured with Jake, Finn, and Marceline?!?
I wanna read THAT! it makes SOOOOOOO much sense!
(also.... I hope Celestia doesn't give Discord a second chance. I know it's only going to get worse, and at the end I WANT HIM DEAD.)
As I've said before, I just don't see anything redeemable in Discord. Fun, yes. But he celebrated emotionally breaking Twilight, and that's the pony equivalent of a moral event horizon for me.
We'll see if this even reaches Celestia. In Elements of Harmony, he underestimated the Mane 6. In School Daze, he wanted to be captured. Now, he's ready.
What, you didn't have a necromancer at your prom? Must have been boring as shit then.
Why is grown-up Scoots always a biker chick? I never quite got that.
Hellraiser - Motörhead
Shit, Lemmy looks young in that video, and that seems just so very wrong.
NOOOOO, the library! 
Oh, and, uh, everyone Discord has trapped. That sucks too. 
It's nice to see a story where Discord is the evil SOB he really is.
And DAMN, but he is a nasty piece of work in the Dazeverse. Course, he was a nasty piece of work in canon too.
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