Hope this will be better than the other turned out. I wish good luck

>>20376552037655 Thank you. I feel that starting anew will help me get a better sense of what writing style I want here. While I want the reader to be involved, I do not want the character to become too... outgoing. In the other story, it was a bit of 'here, give me some pity', but I do not want it to be so with this story unless I bring up a really sad OC backstory.

Look at updates: HELL YEAH!

Didn't know you would restart it all: FUCK!

Sorry, I didn't know you would restart this before reading the last update you posted.

Wow.  I didn't know you were going to restart the whole story either.  That's okay, just took me by surprise.  I know other writers go back and change each chapter out as the story is rewritten so I think that that is what my mind expected.  Thanks for sharing your talent with us!

Writes huge story, "Hmm, needs change. Fuck it, I'll start over"

I was wondering why my 203 new chapters droped to 190

I would imagine if 'THE UNITED MEXICAN STATES'(México's formal name)  was on the list.

Hmm.

The rewrite doesn't look any different.

It's a huge infodump but you made it palatable by structuring it as if it were actually be accessed via a computer on the U.T.C  Panther.

I miss the pictures.

>>20388582038858>>20386732038673>>20383952038395>>20383242038324>>20381032038103>>20380692038069

I stated in the last update that I wanted to rewrite it, as I felt is was coming out of a comic book. I then was stuck with writers block for a month. Anyway, sorry if I took you guys by surprise. There will be Pictures, Focus, but I haven't put them in yet.

>>20399892039989

There will be pictures?

I was joking.

You should repost this story, cause the favourite function is extremely bugged... (I got over 20 fave-messages for this story )

>>20480612048061

To fix it, unfavourite it, then re-favourite it. You should only see one chapter that needs to be read.

>>20514492051449 Doesn't work, I still got the messages...

>>20533852053385

Hmm... I dunno. I am not going to repost though, it will have to go through moderation again...

Wow.  That certainly is an exciting way to get to the surface!  Definitely different than the first draft of the story and very enjoyable.

Yeahhh I can see this, MOAR

I'll give it a shot.

jacob: Captain why did you not deploy the fucking CHUTES?

Captain: That wouldnt have been fun at all.

Very different from the first draft. I like the orbital drop sequence

Also, italicize ship names. That's something that you seem to forget a lot.

Are the hawk and vulture like the ones from halo wars or are they different? Just wondering so I have a type of ship to think of.

I'm surprised you didn't add The Dominion Of Canada to the list of Ark project nations.

Well they are dead Nah Jacob always as a plan to take down big mean robots who have laser cannons and gatling guns and he have like 5 % chance to get out alive... Anyway love the chapter keep up the good work

MOAR

Awesome story

MOAR! NOW!

So, when are the humans going to interact with the ponies?

Only thing I can complain about is that the trip to Europa feels sort of unnecessary if the point is the conflict between returning humans and ponies.  Stopping off so a bunch of soldiers can be killed by cannibal plants, I guess I don't see how it will be relevant later. But who knows maybe you'll surprise me and it somehow WILL effect the overall story.

>>20620482062048 The Vulture is a drop-ship that specializes in moving infantry and vehicles, and are usually not armed. The Hawk is a fighter-jet in this story, so sorry if I disappointed, but I needed names of birds and... they were the best for the role that they play.

>>20625112062511 Trust me, the events that will occur on Europa will influence the story in ways you cannot yet foresee. *mysterious*

>>20624172062417 After they are extracted from Europa, the next chapter will be 4: Extraction, so don't you worry about it.

>>20622152062215 Just because Canada is a major country doesn't mean that the government will want to participate/ be involved with what could be a catastrophic failure. Canadians are present in the ship though, as they can volunteer on their own behalf. Diversity is treasured. :)

>>20622422062242 It might be someone else...

>>20623982062398 Danke.

>>20622882062288 Gracias.

>>20566142056614 "They called me mad! I am not mad, I am fun!"

>>20603612060361 Yerp. I went over this chapter JUST to italicize every name. Well... most of them anyway.

>>20549082054908 Thank you, sir/madam.

>>20545582054558 You forgot the ''. :) Thanks.

>>20544002054400 Thanks. Just a reminder, that is not the surface of Earth though, sorry if you knew this, but your comment didn't tell me what you meant, so... sorry...

Good so far

Thank you for the audio file you linked to the story.  I listened to it before reading the text as you indicated and it really conveyed the feel of the doomed doctor and his shipmates.  I felt pale after hearing it.  Great job.

I'd provide a link to his (Alex Drummond's) page or wherever just on the off chance.  It's always nice to see traffic increase.

Also, I agree with Xander here.  The Europa thing seems unneeded.  The voice-over was interesting but the guy doing it (you I presume?) didn't have enough emotion in his voice for the role.  Was a very nice touch though!

damn technology... works when you don't want it to. don't work when you need it to.

does anyone else besides me have a little problem where you favourite this story and your new chapter count jumps up by 20 ish.i fav'd this story and my new chapter count thingy jump from 56 to 78. its happened with some other stories aswell.

good work with the audio recording, sounded weary real.

>>20663202066320 Yeah, I'll put a link to his artwork in the description. I did do the voice-over, but only because I have no voice-actors for these little bits. Anyway, as I stated before, this little excursion to see whats left of the U.T.C Gladius will have a major impact later on in the story.

>>20671972067197 Thanks.

>>20671262067126 Mostly stories that are rewritten. Sorry, I dunno why its doing that, but it is because there was a bunch of chapters previously.

>>20669622066962 *Military Hardware* If you've watched Private Ryan, I believe there is a scene that describes what you've stated.

>>20659542065954 Thanks!

>>20641472064147 And I intend to keep it that way.

>>20672452067245

aaah. that explains it. well imma go and see if i can create a plugin in for my browser that gets rid of them. if not then ill just complain to the admins.

Son of a Bitch should have deployed the chute.

I don't suppose you'll explain how the hell ponies emerged?

>>20682852068285 Well, originally, the appearance of the ponies was unexplained. I also have to take into account the time it took for primates to come into existence, which was roughly 60 million years. I am left with a couple options here, and radiation seems a bit overdone, doesn't it? I might propose advanced genetics research, and mix that in with 20 million years of mating. A method of distributing the 'sentience' could be via microbe, or air-pollutant. The thing is, I don't want the idea to be that far fetched. So I'm walking in circles here.

>>20683622068362

If they are building interstellar colony ships that survive 20 million years in space they sure as hell would be able to play around with genetics to the degree of creating the ponies ancestors and after humans died out because of something those ancestors could have simply evolved into the ponies we know today.

>>20684322068432 Yeah, but its how I structure it. I can't just be like:

I need to lay it out in an organized manner, and not all at once. Baby steps.

>>20683622068362 You said there was a bunch of fighting going on right?  Maybe someone either convinced all the humans to ponify, or some TCB lunatic unleashed nanobots.

Your story is really cool so far, defiantly MOAR , lol anyway are the parachutes like the halo ones that are mettle or like some space age fabric that won't burn. Because apparentley they are supost to be deployed in the sub atmosefear  ( spelled that wrong)

>>21052642105264 Atmosphere* It happens to the best of us. Anyway, the parachutes are interwoven strands of nano-tube. Long story short, the parachute is a lightweight carbon mesh.

Cool stuff, need moar.

>>21414692141469

Same.

WHAT THE FUCK IS THAT THING?

>>21985492198549

same here