This story is pretty darn good! Would be lying if I said I wasn't looking forward to the next chapter, keep up the amazing work! :D

>>5238652386 Why thank you! I appreciate the kind words.  I'll try and get the next chapter done as soon as I can.

God, this is way to freaking long isn't it?

>>5572055720 XD, No, I actually prefer stories that have larger chapters, it allows you to get all these kinds of details in, and all in all just give to story a great feel of being more like a novel. Not sure if my opinion is the same as everyone's, but just know you're doing a fine job so far.

>>5936559365 Thanks Nuka, I'll keep it this way for now but maybe once I get the next part done I'll consider splitting it up a wee bit.

Woo-hoo! Been looking forward to the next chapter for a while now, good work! As for critique, when Cloudchaser gets her wing fixed she screams, "MY WINGS FIXED!" when it should be, My Wing's Fixed! Simple spelling error, can't really catch anything noticeably wrong besides that, although one thing with the story that bothers me a bit is how the town seems to not have any form of local "Police" force. Now, I can understand that maybe they wouldn't have anything like the Royal guards, but if there are really that many ponies in the town I don't see why they can't stand up to the Griffon gang, seeing as Black Brush was able to knock Flappy out with just a frying pan and frighten one of them with a sword. But, besides that, loving the story so far and can't wait for the next chapter! See ya later!

>>115700115700 Thanks, I tried picking up on all the errors before I uploaded it but I'm kind of bad at that.  If my Microsoft Word doesn't pick up on it I certainly won't.  As for the lack of police I just kind of looked at how Ponyville really doesn't I just kind of figured no town really did.  But yeah I'll see if I can explain that away in the next part.  But again thanks I appreciate it!  

Great story so far, i shall be patiently waiting for the next part!

Me too!

>>334451334451 Thank you, I'm currently working on another story right now so it will probably be a while.  Sorry, but I'll update it as soon as I can.

MOAR NOW?

>>437377437377 Hey thanks for the comment !  Sadly updates aren't probably going to happen any time soon, I'm working on another fic at the moment and it has a little more demand.  And it's hard enough working on  that and trying to keep actual updates frequently.  But rest assured I will update, if you'd like you could check it out.