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Masem 721

Joined December 2011
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    Masem's Stories (7)

    • The Fluttershy Effect
      Strange events occur around Ponyville while Pinkie gives Fluttershy lessons in facing her fears.

      16,115 words · 2,817 views · 167 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Stranger Than Dictation
      Pinkie Pie tries to write a story with Spike's help to cheer up Twilight's sour mood. Little did Twilight know this was a bad idea from the start.
      26,677 words · 373 views · 44 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Krastos' Krew
      To rid Ponyville of a trio of drakes, Twilight is forced to turn to an unlikely hero: Fluttershy.
      16,909 words · 1,408 views · 63 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Dearth of a Salespony
      Soil Tiller has had no luck in selling her produce, and is hoping for better fortune at Ponyville’s farmer’s market, despite the odd looks she's gotten and strange stories she’s heard about the town. But they all can't be
      10,951 words · 2,293 views · 105 likes · 5 dislikes
    • The Day Before
      3,410 words · 393 views · 25 likes · 0 dislikes
    • The Gravity of the Situation
      4,437 words · 234 views · 23 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Win Big
      11,928 words · 414 views · 14 likes · 0 dislikes
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    After the ineffective advice from Iron Will, Pinkie takes the timid Fluttershy under her hooves to teach her to face her fears, at the same time that Twilight and her friends notice things have gone very much amiss around Ponyville.

    First Published
    14th Jul 2012
    Last Modified
    14th Jul 2012

    Comments ( 49 )

    #1 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The Butterfly Effect... Hmm, you have got my attention... and it was good, yes indeed~ I salute you, my friend. :twilightsmile:

    #2 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Holy mother of-- are you a writer IRL or something, this is awesome! And well HUGE, how long did this take you? :twilightoops:

    #3 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The inspiration for this story was around the time of Ray Bradbury's death, for reference.

    #4 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Not a big Kevin Kosner fan (Please correct me if I spelled that wrong.), but this seems interesting.

    Props to you for catching my attention. It'll be the first fic I add to my "Read Later" list because I'm just too damn lazy to read anything right now :rainbowlaugh:

    #5 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The title is an obvious priority of "The Butterfly Effect".

    #6 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I'm left with an "interesting" for this.  I liked it, but I had to stop a few times just to let my mind rest.

    #7 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    OH MY BUTTERFLIES INSIDE MY LIVER THIS STORY IS AMAZING! I FAVORITED AND LIKED THREE TIMES! :pinkiehappy:

    #8 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Truly an ingenious escapade.

    Worthy of being included in the show, in my opinion.

    #9 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    oh I forgot.... FIRST POST LOL!! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

    #10 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    #11 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Wow such an original plot. And Fluttershy! Always a good time. Nicely done.:coolphoto:

    #12 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    PMing an extensive list of corrections, as well as general comments on the story itself.

    #13 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>916994 - Got them, thanks MythrilMoth!

    #14 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    After whatever revisions you may need, if this doesn't make it on EqD, then there is something seriously wrong with the world. Great to see a new story thats not troll/meta and is quality for the length it is! :pinkiesmile:

    #15 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>917614 EqD seems to kind of biased in regards to what it excepts, at the very least you've managed to get this on this website so if you don't get on EqD then try not to make such a big deal about it, some fanfics I've read that I think are really good haven't made it onto EqD either. :eeyup:

    #16 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>917789 I guess you're right there... I was saying mostly that this more than deserves to be featured on EqD, but the whole politics and process of it all sounds irritating to say the least.

    #17 · 44w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>917808 If only it was that easy, alas for some reason it's unnessicarly complicated. :facehoof:

    #18 · 44w, 23h ago · · ·
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    This story was... Awesome!

    However while looking for it, I found this " https://docs.google.com/document/d/1G-fDsQXASPy8MFRTKVOl0KrecqQhXSHtam3Fry0FyLk/edit?hl=en&authkey=CP6E2awD&pli=1 " also called The Fluttershy Effect. Havent read it, but to me, this one on fimfiction is the original.

    #19 · 44w, 23h ago · · ·
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    I discovered after writing this that there are least 4-5 works (written and drawn) titled "the Fluttershy Effect" across various pony art-sharing boards.  I wouldn't call this "the original", just *my* take on a story titled this way :twilightsmile:

    #20 · 44w, 12h ago · · ·
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    "Fluttershy only nodded, her muzzle now encased in a soft velvet fabric cage to prevent her from talking."

    BAD mental image, GO AWAY, and come back when I'm not busy reading this.

    #21 · 44w, 12h ago · · ·
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    First I was like :trixieshiftright: when Fluttershy first felt the shiver, then I was all :pinkiegasp: when Spike went missing, then I was :rainbowlaugh: when Discord was revealed, then came :fluttercry: when Fluttershy was :fluttercry:, then everypony came back and I was like :pinkiehappy:, then Discord got caught trolling and I was all :rainbowlaugh:, then Pinkie Pie came back and I was :rainbowhuh:, is this coming full circle? Then the hill and Fluttershy's confidence was like :twilightsmile:, then Pinkie Troll made me :rainbowlaugh:again.

    I loved this. I would only add in Fluttershy 'testing' her theory when Twilight comes back. (but it's definitely ooc for her)

    "I don't like Twilight not being here."

    "Woah, Fluttershy you figured it out!"

    "Hmmmm, I don't like Twilight being here."

    "What are you do-"

    "I don't like Twilight not being here."

    "What the hay was that?"

    "I had to test it."

    #22 · 43w, 2d ago · · ·
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    All I could think when I realized what was going on:

    Fluttershy can make things she's afraid of disappear?

    But she's afraid of...

    Oh.

    Oh :fluttercry::fluttershyouch::flutterrage::fluttershysad:.

    We're doomed.

    This story is full of pure Cloudsdale Grade-A liquid genius.

    #23 · 42w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well, that was certainly an interesting story all right. Of course only Discord could be behind something so chaotic. :P

    #24 · 42w, 22h ago · · ·
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    Making a note here to thank Dublio & cheezesauce at ponychan and JohnPerry at FIMFict for copyedits and input advice.

    #25 · 37w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Just got word today that this has been confirmed for being posted to EQD in the next few days. :twilightsmile:

    Thanks to all that helped out with comments and feedback!

    #26 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    A story worthy of being a 2-part episode.

    5 stars. Gold Medal. Two thumbs up. All the other top-level cliches to save the trouble.

    Excellently written. :twilightsmile:

    #27 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    That was clever. I like clever. You receive one cookie.

    #28 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Oh, an adventure One-Shot? That's a rarity. I'll be sure to check this!

    #29 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Wait, was that last scene a Calvin and Hobbes reference?

    #30 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1202465

    Wasn't intentionally one, though I think a few of the "Twlight & Smartypants" fancomics might have leaked through.

    #31 · 37w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>915865 Fus-ro-yay!

    #32 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Maybe now you'll get the attention you deserve. It makes me sad that your fic Win Big has only six likes and three comments, and it's one of the funnier fics on this site.

    #33 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    :fluttershyouch: I don't like the effects of this spell.  No, too easy, darn.

    Seriously though this was an enjoyable story.:yay:

    #34 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1194809

    Well Done for getting onto EQD, I shall give it a read when i have the time

    #35 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    EQD. Good job.

    #36 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Very good short story. :heart:

    Also.. too much TV for me.. i read every word of discord in john delancie's voice..

    course all those episodes of Q in every rendition of star trek are probably to blame..

    Seriously.

    Q == discord , Discord == Q in ponyverse

    I could totally see him putting on silly outfits to make fun of them. Like the red uniform and captain's marks he did with picard.

    #37 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Best Fluttershy-being-manipulated-by-an-evil-and-ancient-power story yet! Sorry for sarcasm, but i love this story. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    #38 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Nice work getting the story at EqD, you deserve it.:pinkiehappy:

    I have to admit this could be a good premise for an episode of the show.:ajsmug: Copyrights be damned.

    #39 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    That was awesome. So bloody awesome.

    #40 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Not a bad story at all. Definitely an original idea, and it was very interesting and well presented.

    One thing though, it seems that right after AJ appeared and Twi mentioned that Spike was missing, AJ seemed to know that Spike was a dragon, despite not knowing who Spike is, or what a dragon was.

    #41 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1208449

    Ooops, yea, I just did a quick edit - thanks!:derpytongue2:

    #42 · 37w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Totally awesome story.

    #43 · 37w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>924466

    7 weeks and now this fic is at Equestria Daily.

    That fic you were referencing were posted at EqD May 9th 2011.

    Then, technically, that fic is "more" "original" than this. ( I still haven't read this fic)

    That fic is about Twilight gets sent back in time (to the time when she got her cutie mark) after a magic duel with Trixie.

    She meets the scientist Quantom Leap who sends her back to the future. He, however, does something he wouldn't have done otherwise, he leaves his house and scares away some colts bullying Fluttershy, effectively preventing the Sonic Raiboom from happening.

    Twilight returns to a world totally different than the the one she left, she then goes on a epic quest to see what became of her friends.

    PS. You double-posted.

    #44 · 37w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Needs comedy tag. Several really good moments in there!

    #45 · 37w, 20h ago · · ·
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    This is a truly great fic. It truly FEELS like an episode, it's wonderfully imaginative, and skillfully written.

    Also, why aren't any of the Fluttershy emotes happy? 4 are sad and one israge.:fluttershyouch::fluttershysad::fluttershbad::fluttercry::flutterrage:

    #46 · 37w, 16h ago · · ·
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    >>1217423

    There is a flutteryay: :yay:

    #47 · 37w, 9h ago · · ·
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    #48 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Finally read it. Very interesting concept. I'm tempted to still it and use as Game master. I don't know if it fits better Call of Cthulhu or D&D but I'm ready to experiment. Very good fic - most adventure ones are really losing MLP spirit in my eyes but this one passes with the flying colors. Good job.

    #49 · 27w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Nice.

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