I write stuff about things, that is pretty much it.
Lyra and Bonbon came to visit their friends Vinyl and Octavia. The reason they came there was that Lyra had found a spell she really wanted to try, but Bonbon refused to be the test subject. Vinyl on the other hoof jumped at the chance, she thought it sounded like fun. But, something goes wrong and now, Vinyl is trapped in an alternate dimension where she's a filly adopted by Octavia!
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Well, I can't think of anything to say, so just take a like, a fav, and a filly Vinyl.
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Not bad.
This got a little too fast-paced near the end, you may want to watch out for that in the future. I feel Vinyl got over her new age rather quickly. How did she go about assembling these new speakers? What is Octavia thinking as Vinyl has started acting strangely?
I'd like to see this continued, hence the reason I faved and upvoted it.
This one is fine but i want to see more luna hah
909275 The speaker thing I will explain a bit more next chapter, i think...
For the pacing near the end, yeah I know it was kind of fast but you are lucky to see what's there now and not before because when i first wrote it it was almost three times as fast so yeah...
And also Octavia reactions
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Go on...
I like the idea, but it's rather rushed (by a lot really) and not very much is explained or fleshed out enough. Also, there are quite a few gramatical errors and sentences that just don't make sense. For instance:
"As the three ponies entered the kitchen to the newly arrived ponies left."
Again, the idea is good, but the execution could use some work. I recommend getting yourself a good pre-reader and continuing because I want to see what you do with it.
Hey, I just remembered this existed and decided to see if it had updated since I last read it.
It has not.
I am disappointed, sir. Or madam. Or other...
Do you, in fact, still write?
1646183 Sorry, sorry, I've been unable to reach my pc in like FOREVER! I am sorry for that, this might get updated soon
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Your avatar does not inspire confidence...
1706686 errr... One does not simply question the profile picture!
Ok, just kidding, but why does it not imspire confidence?
Writing is gonig to commence in like an hour or two...
1706962 Dunno. It makes me think of Jack Sparrow, as if the speaker's trying to talk his way out of work. In all seriousness aside, I do look forward to a new chapter.
Well, this finally happened, sorry about delays and such, I had problems with the net and such, but it's here so there's that
Huzzah!! Welcome back! I was thinking about this one just the other day :P Glad to see you are back
Good story great idea too, some spelling mistakes and what not but still a good story.
All of these don't even compare to my excitement and laughter at this.
Nice Job!
Well, I'm not sure what to say with this. I'm liking the idea. It sounds like a good laugh, with a decent plot involved. However I have to agree with 980613.
This needs work. Grammatical errors, tense changes, and sentences that don't make sense. I'm refraining for a vote or a Fav for now. This shall stay in my read later list, and I will come back to it. I do hope to see you work on it, and fix the mistakes that are here.
there is one way to prove she is who she says she is and that is through school!
i hope it updates again soon, cause i am so liking this
(Joke) Alt. Title: Mi madre le gustan la música clásica
I thought I thought of the idea of Octavia raising Vinyl first. Well, I guess I'm the first one to do it comically.
hope this gets continued some time.