This is so generic I can't even begin to describe it. This is literally every human in Equestria I've ever read, copy/pasted into one story. I gave it a chance because you said it would be different, and you let me down. It's not poorly written, but the plot is so predictable that I could probably take a rather accurate stab at the entirety of the story, if you've even planned that far ahead. Come up with a new, original concept and we'll talk.

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The door is that way. Have a fantastic day.

so this came from your dream?

hhmm i DO like things that come from dreams

>>908845908845 And this only makes my HiE superior.

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Kainoa? How do you pronounce that? Anyways, in the first chapter, that shows how stupid humans have gotten over the years. I mean, I would love to walk into a gaping whirlpool of possible death as much as the next guy, but seriously? It's funny, because we both have glasses. Anyways, you'll get my like and a favorite, because I'm realistic, in which people are that stupid in real life. Good story.

Not bad I approve

I still approve

Kainoa is pronounced

Kai (rhymes with my)

No (the word no)

a (as in claw)

Great chapter I'm afraid who he's going to meet next if it's Lyra he's fucked.

Lyra isn't coming until later. She wasn't in my dream, but I'm editing it as they're usually REALLY fucked up.