Ugh, sorry, I'll work out the formatting issue in due time.  All of a sudden, BAM, half my story is centered.

...

Fucking brutal.

More.

>>10173391017339

I hope I can live up to your blood lust, however you may have to wait.

>>10189531018953

I noticed an uncomfortable amount of grammar errors. Would you like a proofreader?

>>10196651019665

I may have accidentally uploaded the wrong version, but that would be nice.  Message me?

>>10197921019792

I`ll send you a version tommorow. Can`t send via phone.

Aaand formatting issues are gone!  How glorious!  

More?

Sorry I couldn't help out, this slipped my mind...

~G

>>11468841146884

I'm gonna level with you.  There is more, but everyone I'm asking to review it is busy.  Chapter 2 is written, 3 has been started, and a fair number have been planned.

>>11468951146895

I can review it, if you want. But, with summer school and all that...

Meh, school can go screw itself there are ponies to be had. PM me or email me.

~G

Read. When are you going to send me chapter 3?

*Munches on popcorn* This is getting good!

I'm under the horrible suspicion that my style choice in the opening chapter is turning people off.  That's rather unfortunate, as it was intentional.

I don't understand how the writing style would turn people off. It's written very well. The idea is very interesting as well.

>>12053721205372  Thank you.  I decided to remove the disclaimer because of you.

You have contradicting genre tags. An adventure story can not be slice-of-life, those two are pretty much opposites. Now I just have to actually read the story...

>>20413712041371 If I only had the first two chapters up, you'd be right.  However, with chapters 3 and forward, I've elected to choose those tags.  I'll probably remove one of them as time goes on, but it was indeed my explicit intent to have those tags as they fit the story I'm telling.  Thanks for reading

Ok, first chapter done, so lets get on with the the review shall we?

Name of story: Modulation by probrony

Grammar score 9 out of 10

Pros: The story premise is interesting as it seems like Twilight wants to do more to protect the world she lives in

Twily, Dash, and AJ feel in great character

Love the decription of the Rainboom.

Cons: I felt like Fluttershy felt a little too bitter about being rejected for the test.

Twilight felt a little too eager to go for, "Magic overload, make armor"

I find it odd, that they have a book of weapons that no pony decided to look into until now.

Notes:

On the subject of your story, see I like to give a fic at least one to two chapters before reeling me in and you succeeded. I like that Twilight is trying an active role in trying to defend Equestria by training herself.

That being said, sometimes I feel like she jumped to "using Rainboom" A bit too suddently, maybe you could have added, "I have tried every other way to increase my own strength on it, but I failed."