This is an awesome story man. I can't believe no one has commented on it yet. Keep it up, you have earned a watch..aaaannnddd...

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A very touching tale. Wish it had kept goin

M. Eagle Eye

M. Loyal Vision

Mme. Golden Petal

Tsk, tsk.

You have my respect. Great short story by the way.

You should do a human version of this and market it for kids with a parent or sibling in the military, because from personal experience, these are the sentiments that go through almost every soldier's mind when they leave for basic, or on deployment, etc., and the emotional turmoil their families feel. Great story, very touching, I can really relate to and undrstand SA's concerns for his family. Liked and faved.

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I was thinking something along those lines. Wish I could thumb up your comment.

>>10897671089767 having expressed a desire to do so is enough. Though you could always have a look at my user page.

This could be great if it was contined. Still great but i eould make for and awesoe long story

Consarnit all! First I deal with "To The Moon" and then I reread this? My tearducts can't take anymore! DX

A touching piece nonetheless. Shows the kind of tender loving bonds shared between Shining and those around them. If this were his canon backstory, I'd shed manly tears of approval.

Now, in commemoration of your admission into EqD and the neato Youtube video embed feature, I present you and every one else a gift: a song, ideal for bittersweet departures and awaited reunions. Have a nice night

Aww...  I like these little short pieces.  It's a nice little slice-of-life.  

One small change you might want to consider: "Silver Hoof" is referred to by "Mrs." instead of by her rank in the letter.  

Oh man, this hits home hard... I know my family went through the same ordeal when I joined the military, my mom and sister especially. Great work...

Next: do Shining Armour on basic training!

Not a bad setup, but you rely too heavily on dialogue to convey the story. Show us what's going on, don't just tell us. 2.5/5 stars.

Dude you have to give him more credit, this story was amazing!

I nearly cried at the end. This is one of the saddest stories I have ever read. I wish that it would have continued but it might have gotten old,

but judging by the way you handled it it might not have.

Shining's friends could have used more characterization. The scene with Cloud Runner felt way too bland, and Chocolate Spoon came off as more of a distraction from Shining and Cadance than a character unto himself.

Twilight was well done, though, and the bit with Smarty Pants... that part made me feel. Well done there.

For a shortfic, I'm impressed. There's nothing I can truly criticize without, of course, nitpicking, like I've seen a few of us do above, hmm? This genre is more bittersweet than Normal/SoL, to be honest, but since they don't offer that genre what can you do.

Keep up the good work, I expect great things.

This really strikes home for me. I ship out in a few months myself. The butterfly's are already here, and I'm sure will only get stronger. Everyday I wonder how my last day will pan out.

My family was the same way when I left. A lot of parallels here. Many of the thought processes were very similar to what observed and felt when I shipped out.

You captured this event really and our emotions and backstories were spot-on.

Silver out!

This was a very nice little short fic. The scene with Cloud Runner seemed a little lacking, but filly Twilight was so adorkable (not to mention the scene with Smarty Pants) that it was all okay. Nicely done overall

Wow great story and it had good humor in it. Nice Job.