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Golden Vision

Joined February 2012
504 followers

I write horsewords and horseword accessories.

Stories (16)

  • Another Day For the Whooves
    Daleks in Muffintopia? The TARDIS in a galactic bubble? The Whooves have been there, done that.

    28,238 words · 11,747 views · 891 likes · 13 dislikes
  • Glitched
    Twilight awakes on the day of her brother's wedding, the day she died. But that was yesterday. Confronted with an impossible situation, she must seek the truth of why she's trapped in time, for both her sake and all of reality's.
    72,842 words · 3,114 views · 217 likes · 4 dislikes
  • What We Leave Behind
    Shining Armor leaves his childhood behind.
    5,863 words · 2,507 views · 149 likes · 2 dislikes
  • Shedding Your Skin
    The Queen of the Changelings has not always held her position. For Chrysalis, her past is not a story of love stolen, but of love given freely. Yet all fairy tales must come to an end, leaving only the darkness behind.
    37,459 words · 661 views · 67 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Equestria: The Time Loop Files
    2,359 words · 2,991 views · 125 likes · 2 dislikes
  • The Riddle
    11,466 words · 2,566 views · 308 likes · 10 dislikes
  • Can I Come With You?
    7,845 words · 3,056 views · 347 likes · 15 dislikes
  • Over the Rainbow
    6,270 words · 1,021 views · 77 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Good Girl
    9,452 words · 2,217 views · 163 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Candles
    1,892 words · 1,064 views · 104 likes · 4 dislikes

Blog Posts (80)


After dreaming for all his life of becoming a Royal Guard, Shining Armor has finally received the letter of acceptance that will mark his way into the ranks. On his last day at home, as he readies himself to say farewell to the only life he's ever known, Shining will realize why he's taken this path for himself, and who he's walking it for.

First Published
15th Aug 2012
Last Modified
15th Aug 2012

Comments ( 30 )

#1 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

This is an awesome story man. I can't believe no one has commented on it yet. Keep it up, you have earned a watch..aaaannnddd...

#2 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

A very touching tale. Wish it had kept goin :twilightsmile:

#3 · 105w, 16h ago · 1 · ·

M. Eagle Eye

M. Loyal Vision

Mme. Golden Petal

Tsk, tsk.

#4 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

You have my respect. Great short story by the way.

#5 · 105w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

You should do a human version of this and market it for kids with a parent or sibling in the military, because from personal experience, these are the sentiments that go through almost every soldier's mind when they leave for basic, or on deployment, etc., and the emotional turmoil their families feel. Great story, very touching, I can really relate to and undrstand SA's concerns for his family. Liked and faved.

#6 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1089683

I was thinking something along those lines. Wish I could thumb up your comment.

#7 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1089767 having expressed a desire to do so is enough. Though you could always have a look at my user page.

#9 · 105w, 13h ago · · ·

This could be great if it was contined. Still great but i eould make for and awesoe long story

#10 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Consarnit all! First I deal with "To The Moon" and then I reread this? My tearducts can't take anymore! DX :raritycry:

A touching piece nonetheless. Shows the kind of tender loving bonds shared between Shining and those around them. If this were his canon backstory, I'd shed manly tears of approval.

Now, in commemoration of your admission into EqD and the neato Youtube video embed feature, I present you and every one else a gift: a song, ideal for bittersweet departures and awaited reunions. Have a nice night :twilightsmile:

#11 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Aww...  I like these little short pieces.  It's a nice little slice-of-life.  

One small change you might want to consider: "Silver Hoof" is referred to by "Mrs." instead of by her rank in the letter.  

#12 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Oh man, this hits home hard... I know my family went through the same ordeal when I joined the military, my mom and sister especially. Great work...

Next: do Shining Armour on basic training!

#13 · 104w, 5d ago · 2 · ·

Not a bad setup, but you rely too heavily on dialogue to convey the story. Show us what's going on, don't just tell us. 2.5/5 stars.

#14 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Dude you have to give him more credit, this story was amazing!

#15 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

I nearly cried at the end. This is one of the saddest stories I have ever read. I wish that it would have continued but it might have gotten old,

but judging by the way you handled it it might not have.

#16 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Shining's friends could have used more characterization. The scene with Cloud Runner felt way too bland, and Chocolate Spoon came off as more of a distraction from Shining and Cadance than a character unto himself.

Twilight was well done, though, and the bit with Smarty Pants... that part made me feel. Well done there.

#17 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

For a shortfic, I'm impressed. There's nothing I can truly criticize without, of course, nitpicking, like I've seen a few of us do above, hmm?:trollestia: This genre is more bittersweet than Normal/SoL, to be honest, but since they don't offer that genre what can you do.

Keep up the good work, I expect great things.

#18 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

This really strikes home for me. I ship out in a few months myself. The butterfly's are already here, and I'm sure will only get stronger. Everyday I wonder how my last day will pan out.:applejackunsure:

#19 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·

My family was the same way when I left. A lot of parallels here. Many of the thought processes were very similar to what observed and felt when I shipped out.

You captured this event really and our emotions and backstories were spot-on. :pinkiehappy:

Silver out!

#20 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

This was a very nice little short fic. The scene with Cloud Runner seemed a little lacking, but filly Twilight was so adorkable (not to mention the scene with Smarty Pants) that it was all okay. Nicely done overall :twilightsmile:

#21 · 101w, 1d ago · · ·

Wow great story and it had good humor in it. Nice Job.

#23 · 33w, 5d ago · · ·

Great story! aaand damn. 139 lines for Shining Armour. That's the most I've done for voice acting so far. Jeebus. Merry Belated Christmas!

#24 · 32w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Hi there. I hope you don't mind, but I liked this fic so much I have put together an audio version on YouTube.

#25 · 32w, 5d ago · · ·

>>3723564

Holy crud! That's awesome! Thank you—and I'm overjoyed to know that you enjoyed it enough to do a reading.

Keep up the good work!

#26 · 32w, 5d ago · · ·

scribbler helps me find yet another great fic :heart:

#27 · 32w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Obab Scribbler helps me usually find these kinds of fanfictions. I have to say, this was the best, The best parts of the story, that made me think about my own life,

Maybe it’s not what we do that determines who we are.

Maybe it’s what—and who—we leave behind.

Twilight looked up. “B-but, you’re going away! Forever! How is that okay?”

Shining shook his head with a chuckle. “Oh, Twilight. I’m not going away forever.” He touched Smarty Pants, still held tightly in Twilight’s hooves. “And remember, so long as you have Smarty Pants with you, I’ll be there.” He smiled and bent down to Twilight’s level. “I’ll always be with you, Twily. In here,” he said, patting Smarty Pants on the head, “and in here.”

He touched Twilight’s heart.

The tears finally ran down his face. Twilight, I love you more than you could ever imagine.

But that’s why I’m doing this. That’s who I am.

I will always be there for you. But maybe, just maybe, today’s helped me realize something.

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#28 · 24w, 6d ago · · ·

I could have sworn this was in a writeoff, but I'm apparently mistaken. Why do I feel like I read this once before? c.c

#29 · 24w, 6d ago · · ·

>>4011402

It was definitely in a writeoff. The Cutting Ties one, I think.

#30 · 16w, 2d ago · · ·

What an excellent one shot, and such a great portrayal of Shining. Definitely gets an upvote.

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