Interesting enough to follow. Hope to see more. ANd I sense that OSAI will take control at some point... because GLaDOS.

Ah, a new memeber of FoE sidefic herd!  Welcome

I'm liking your story so far - there's a lot of potential for mystery.  Come to think of it, I'm pretty sure this is the only FoE fic I've seen where the protagonist isn't named in the first chapter

Welcome to the FoE fic community, dude. Liking it.

>>894710894710

GLaDOS was a huge inspiri...

I mean, no what makes you think that!

>>894712894712

It might very well be like that. But what is the fun with names?

Fun fact: I told myself never to write a FoE story. Now, here I am!

Myth BUSTED

good chapter when are you doing the next?

>>894980894980

The next chapter is actually already finished, but I save to post it until I have... fixed a few things with the third chapter. It will, most likely, be posted before Sunday.

:3  As the official Noakwolf of the FoE group I welcome you!

>>895262895262

Thank you. I hope you don't mind that I posted it in the group, have no idea how that system work ^^'

More please

I'm glad people are liking your story, Andreas. Don't mind those two thumbs down; there's always someone trolling through FIMFiction looking for a Fallout: Equestria story to downvote (simply because it is Fallout: Equestria).

Obviously, I have to agree with everyone here. This story has a lot of potential, and it's fairly well-written. I have no fear that the second chapter will live up to, and quite possibly, exceed, the expectations people have from reading Chapter 1.

>>901600901600

I don't give a flying feather about thumb downs as long as they don't have a critic comment with them as what they didn't like, so no problems there.

And I hope that you are right, you should know what you are talking about

Okay, this story seems interesting at least. Voice in the main character's head has been done a lot, but a medical AI is one that is new to me. I'm wondering just how much control it could have, whether it just be the mechanical limbs or the whole body.

Something tells me it was more than just a coincidence that the AI saved the one pony who it would be able to link with...

Chapter two, as promised. Now, chapter 3 might take some time, like... next Sunday or something like that.

Comments and Critic is highly appreciated!

how the buck did it just update when I open my favorites

Plus, what are these big blank spae in the midle for?

Also, Spitfire... you really must have searched for this one.

Good job!

Sinrar

>>917144917144

Oh gawd, didn't see that! Thanks for pointing it out!

good chapter friend

>>917220917220

Glad you liked it!

>>917232917232 no problem

>>917161917161

You're welcome

Sinrar

The AI has too much personality to be a simple AI tasked to watch ponies in stasis. I'm guessing it is something more.

My lovely editor had time to help me today, something I highly appreciate! A shorter chapter today, but I felt that all that was needed to happen did happen, and I didn't want to stretch it all out.

As always, comments and critic is HIGHLY (Look, its in bold, italics and underlined, it have to be important!) appreciated.

Loving this story, feels really good if a bit slow at the moment, but the pacing feels about right overall and I imagine things are going to get interesting in the GREENEST CITY EVER! Can't wait.

>>944697944697

I'm happy you liked it!

>>945484945484 I liked it so much, I wrote up two wiki pages. They're here on my profile page, feel free to edit them and make them better Fallout: Equestria wiki - My user page.

>>949152949152

<3 That is all I can say really.

Epic so far, cant wait for the next chapter!

Chapter 4.

I know that I have already thanked him, but I will do it again.

Masquerade, thank you a hundred and one times, if not more, for helping me this much with my story. You truly are the best editor I could get!

>>10113331011333

That kind of praise is going to start getting to my head any day now.

>>10121091012109

That's a risk I'm willing to take after all the time you have devoted to help me!

Me personally I would die trying to keep my weapons fight till the very end, resist in any way I can or could . anyways good chapter looking towards the next

Chapter 5. As usually, the biggest thanks I can possibly give goes to Masquerade. Without him, this story would be absolutely nothing!

As always, comments and critics are HIGHLY appreciated!

The sixth chapter have been started, at least the planning. Stay tuned, and it should be finished within two weeks!

good good

So! Review time!

I like what I have seen so far, havn't encountered any spelling mistakes or things like that. And that is always nice...

But! I can buy the AI. I can buy a advanced AI that is so clever that he/she/it can run some of the jobs in a hospital... But a cybernetic eye with triple the processing power than that AI? That is a little far out... or a lie from the AI that got itself downloaded into the "brain" of a pony.

I am looking forward to see where this is going.

Doomande away!

Another chaptor, another review.

To say it in as few words as i can: I love it.

Your characters is evolving as a good rate, fast enough so you just need that next sentence and can´t wait to see where this is going. But still not so fast that you get lost.

The lost memory pony and stasis pod have been done quite a few times, but this is actualy on of the first times that i buy it. There is just something about the way that you write Cogwheel, out of this world, but not stupid, that is just... wow.

I was a little in doubt what Cogwheels powerlevel would be, since he looks like he is more metal than meat, but you put that dout to shame. It´s so nice to see a cyperpony that isn´t a warmachine from the first second that you see him.

I am normaly not the bronie that gives a  rating, but you did just earn yourself a big big 5 out of 5 with this one.

Shame on the community for not showing this to me, but that the writer had to do it

>>11219601121960

You have no idea how happy I'm to hear what you say. If it something I have lacked during the writing, it is comments.

Normally, I wouldn't say this unless it actually was a negative critic, since I often hate when people just say that it's good, but as you say it... Thank you.

But, I can't take all praise for myself. Without Masquerade313, none of the characters would have been as good as they are.

>>11219801121980

You did just win yourself some more points for thanking your pre-reader for some of the work. Good style, very good style my good gentlecolt.

I have that opinion that if you don´t say what is good, but just say "good work" and noy what part of t was good is just headless praise. When you are saying what parts you like, and especially what in them that you liked, then you are showing what whent right. And after 10K words, the least you can do as a reader is sending some back.

Just my 2 bits.

PS: And to if you sees this Masquerade313

Keep Faindragon to the fire, use a whip is it that you need to get him to work, because there is readers that is just waiting for your work, both of yours work.

From one pre-reader to another

Doomande, that isn't done yet with this story

>>11221181122118

I don't believe in whips. No, I see it as that it's he who does this for me when he feel like it, I can't force him to demote his time to me, instead I'm grateful when he does.

>>11221461122146

Sory the last part was ment for him, not about him. My mistake, that have been fixed

>>11221511122151

Might have been me not reading through it completely either ;)

Another day another... another REVIEW TIME!

You know you are hooked when you have a inner debate about if you want to read the rest of the chaptors in one go or savor it over more days. And the worst part, that was a hard debate... Ohh review time, not praise time stupid brain.

You did it again. You took one of the things i hate with pod stories and made it to a logical part of the plot. For how is it that you can remember some things but not others? To quote you it´s "Bloody weird". But you handled it to bravour. That and how you have made a cyperpony with almost more metal than meat in the same power level as others is the reason why I stick here.

And after that you trow in some strong characters with a lot personality. I can feal from here how much work there have gone into them. And know that there is bronies out there that appreciate it. For who do not like a gal with bals of steal, a friendly cyperpony and a humorous AI that have jumped into your head for a ride

Marvel, stable 31 and  Green Valley, why ohh merciful Celestia do you need to tease me by giving me places that i don´t know where are! That is just cruel

I will be back tomorrow to see on the next chaptor, and can´t wait for it.

Doomande away!

>>11279521127952

And once again I'm really happy that you take your time to comment. The characters are mostly thanks to Masq, at least how they are portraited to you. Marvel, Stable 31 and Green Valley. Good times.

Good Times.

>>11221181122118 Regarding your 'keeping him to the fire'... He'd probably have to do that to me. It's been, what, three months? Maybe less? He's already written six chapters. His chapters are only delayed because I slack off a lot. But I think our dynamic is just fine at the moment. He feeds me with enough praise to keep a starving nation alive, and, in turn, I fix his typos.   It's a win-win.

>>11281031128103

The problem for me right now is that I have noting else but time. But that just meens a lot of ponies so that is not so bad again. And as i said before, the least I can do is write a comment after all what you have written.

>>11281311128131

Nice you read it

And nice to know that there is a supply of Fo:E that is just waiting for the last details.

And things take time. Especially good things like this story.

>>11281311128131

You slack? BARROWMAN!

But no, I couldn't have asked about a more lovely editor~

You know what?

A new chapter!

Thanks, as usually, to Masquerade313 for editing, as well as Tonto for all his wonderful inputs!

The seventh chapter is started, and is in writing moment at 5 000 words.

As always, comment and critics are HIGHLY appreciated!

Well you already know I enjoy it, so not much to say except nice work, glad I could help. I'm looking forward to chapter 7

>>11295241129524

"What's this, what's this on my dashborad?" Asked the brony to him self

"A new chaptor you say? But from whom?" His eyes grew in his head.

"Is it real? By Celestia, Luna, Littlepip and Blackjack it is!" He said after a squeal escaped his lips, and if there was somebronie to hear it they would swear that it was from a little girl on Christmas Eve.

Tl;Dr I can hardly hardly wait to read it. Just wonderfull to know that it will be updated from time to time

really looking towards the next chapter this one was really good

Interesting story, keep it up!

well today this is the 4th chapter of any story ive read today, an they all seam to be getting better and better event though there from diffrent authors... the brony community has gone far! congrats on another great chapter!

I know, I'm saying this a lot. But it's because it's true.

I can't thank Masquerade313 enough for all his work with SAT, especially not thinking that he's rewriting his own story and still take the time. You are awesome dude!

Then, some sad news. I'm moving this Saturday, and on Monday schools starts again. (Bronies on BTH, Karlskrona, watch out!) This means that I won't have any internet access, or at least not regular, during evenings/nights, and during the days I will have to focus on school.

From the 17th of September and forward my internet should be back completely.

As always, comments and critics are HIGHLY appreciated.

Until next time!

good again

yay! another chapter to the epic tale!

Atlast do I find the time for this. What time do you ask yourself. Well REVIEW TIME of cource

You surprice me agian, this time with the strong Winry... sory ment Bolt! I don´t know how you (and all of your helpers) do it, but all of the named characters have so much life to them. I am rather serious when i say this, but I would read a story with this kind of character building than PH's we are going to save the world action plot, at any time.

There is just something that surprises me in a joyful way wherever I look.

And are looking forward to see who this Exo is, and what that is that is making him tick. For if he lives up to the other characters... Nuff said.

Looking forward, like always, to read more from you

What time is it? REVIEW TIME!

It is good as always, with a good pace and just the right amount of stuff happening so you don´t drown in it, but still feel that there is stuff happening. Also nice to see even more life in the characters. And the first glimpse of a bigger mystery, for is the dream a foreshadowing about what would happen, or is Spitfire right when she says that it was just a dream. I can´t wait to find out about it.

Nice to see that another nice detail from you, this time the ponies chess. It is the first time that I see it, and I love it as much as some of you other details. Also a nice little touch with the 11 month pregnancy, something that even I didn´t know

AHA! I have now spotted the first mistakes in your story.   But they are not big ones, and I have been pre-reading most of yesterday, so I think that my brain are still looking after them.

You have forgotten the capital letter after the questionmarks some places

""Did he say he’d do better?” the unicorn"

"“You’re goin’ into the ruins?” he asked"

"Or done something else against you?” he asked with an eyebrow raised."

"A beautiful day, isn’t it?” he said"

"“Leaving for the ruins?” he asked with a thick voice."

And should it not be a "in" insted of "it" in "Maybe she has enough sense it her t’stay away from ‘em,"

"’ve been there in the sky since I was a little boy" Should it not be colt?

>>12589471258947

Thank you for your comment!

First, to shot down your small bubble:

To quote the Ezn's Guide: "Dialogue which precedes a said tag (some variation of “said Character”) can end in a comma, or an exclamation point, or a question mark, or an ellipsis, but never a full stop (period)."

That's to say, each and everyone one of the "You have forgotten the capital letter after the question marks at some places" is technically correct.

Score, 1-0 to me!

Now, I will however correct, or at least look over, the other two notifications, giving it a 1-1.

A tie. To next chapter, my good man!

>>12589891258989

Damm you teacher who taught me punctuation rules! I have just always been told to do that, but that would not be the first time that I learned something that was wrong in school

And it was not to make a competition out of it, for I know that I would quickly loose to the quality that this is.

It surprises me each time I write a comment that I am one of the readers that writes most comment in here. For this is in my book at the same level as Fo:E, and a lot better than PH. But there is just a lot out there that want violence it seems

>>12594031259403

Better than PH? Now I have heard it all!

The thing is that, after a question mark, you should capitalize the letter. BUT, as I have understood it, the power is not in the question mark, but in the whatever this symbol is called. " <- That one, right there. Citation mark, or something like that.

Or, something. Might be the said tag that got the power, whatever.

Didn't meant it as a competition, more like fun!

Also, Ao:E?

>>12594741259474

There is a time for everything, that it is true what I say is just helping it on the way. Your characters is without a doubt better than those in PH. Nuff said.

And ment Fo:E and not Ao:E, how I could write it wrong is beyond my comprehension.

And if all is going after my plan is there a new review tomorrow

What is this you ask yourself? Could it be? By Celestia it is! REVIEW TIME!

Yet another mysterious dream. And again does the question pop up, is this a real sight, or is it just fantasy? And why is it that I think that there is a little of both? Only the future can tell and I wait with anticipation.

And you did it again! Free is on hell of a pony... tree... okay thingy then. It is always nice to see a new "monster" born of the Wasteland. And I get the fealing about "him" that there is something more than meets the eye, but that would also be something new if it wasn´t like that this time.

Without sounding bragging, I read a lot of Fo:E fan fics, and are pre-reading more or less on 3 of that are out thre, and there is always small things that you can guess in advance. You know almost always if they make it, or have a idea about what they are doing next, but here?

The characters are so living and amazing that I have taken myself in having my mouth open in surprise. Like in this chapter where Spitfire the always answering and logical AI gets a tantrum over the ghouls. It is so her, but it came as a earth shattering surprise to me.

Or a few ago when Cogwheel tried the autoaxe and failed. How many other authors out there do something so lovely as that? Making the main pony fail in something so "mundane" as using a hoof weapon, and later on shoting himself in the leg first time he tries a gun. Not that I say that he fails all the time, nothing like that. But that you write him as a pony with so much life and credibility as you do. That is just wow.

And I have to steal your "cryborg" comment, if that is okay with you of course

PS.

And some of the praise is of course also to you  Masquerade313, and the others that are helping making this amazing story.

Bravo I say, bravo.

>>12701491270149

Free is, by far, the character I'm most proud with. (If nothing else but for the solo fact that he's fun to write!) (Not that I can write him, I believe Masq found a couple of things to attack during this chapter circling around Free.)

Hey, Cryborg is totally my copyright!

Or not... Use it to your heart's content!

Or something like that.

>>12730591273059

A copyright in the Wasteland? What are you going to do with it? Trow it at the first lawyer you see out there

>>12741931274193

The day I care about someone using a word that I'm obviously not the first to use, that's the day you can remove me from the earth.

What do you call a review that are on time? REVIEW TIME!

First of all M.A.C. What a lovely batch techno/magicbabble we got there. And for once did I get a explanation on the energi in a Stable that I liked rather well. But a little question, is this the only place where a M.A.C would be? Or would it be possible to find others out in the Wasteland?

And I am in love with Bolt as of this chapter... Okay that is not totaly true. But by Celestia she is awesome! Making fun of a life and death situation, by making it to a game. She is steadily rising on my top 10 favorite OCs.

I hope that you are happy now. I have read what you have written in here, and you sould of course end it here with a clifhanger of epic proportions! That was just mean! And now that I have read it all I would say that you can keep the M.A.C for I have some bad feelings about it now

Another nitpick

"allowing the fragrance of the forest fill me up" Isn´t there missing a word in this sentence?

>>12799871279987

Hey, cliffhangers are cool!

M.A.C. may or may not be found at other places, that's the futures to tell.

About the nitpick: I have no idea!

>>12800821280082

Yes they are cool as story elements. But being whipped forceful to one. That is just cruel!

... and I like it as all the other things that you and your little helpers have done. Can´t wait to see what happens next, now more than ever

>>12801271280127

I can't say that it's close to finished, but hopefully it will soon be.

Dang its 12 am...i didnt need sleep...Keep up the great work im really connecting with the characters

You have my stamp of approval

My only catching point is that no pony seems surprised to see a cyber pony just walking around.

and she pointed you to the workshop--”

I think you mean 'and I pointed'

>>13602511360251

Actually, I meant it as it stands.

I assume you got it from this part:

Radio chuckled lightly as he took a sip from the bottle. “I guess she’s gotten restless this last week. She wanted t’check out that workshop as soon as she found that old recordin’, but she knew she wouldn’t be able t’go there alone. Then you showed up and asked about SAT, and she pointed you to the workshop--”

Cogwheel asked about SAT, and Bolt pointed him to the workshop she wanted to visit.

>>13604381360438

Ah, I see what I did there. Ma bad.

>>13604531360453

To be honest, I had to reread it myself.

>>12594031259403

It's not that hard to find stories better than Project Horizons (Fallout: Equestria related or not). That being said, Fain's is a good one. Don't tell him I said that, though. He's got the writer mentality, and it'd be a shame to flatter him to the point that he loses it.

>>13432871343287

That confused me, too. There's another Fallout: Equestria story that I work with called Warring Factions that has a pegasus character in the cast, and no one seems to be surprised to see her either. I don't believe either author came back with a concrete reason for their oddities. Oh well.

Hey, this was actually quite nice! You've improved a lot since Chimes^^

Mainly just one thing I got caught up on.

At first, the OSAI seems very computer-ish, just stating basic commands and such, but after a while she does a 180 on that and starts talking with a personality. You might want to make that transit a bit smoother ;)

My suggestion: because the need of social interaction suddenly arose, the computer needs to start up its social interface AI. (Further guidance required. Booting up OSAI system. Or something of the like)

>>13611721361172

Urgh, don't mention Chimes.

And on the subject of the OSAI: The first thing it did was just ordinary, basic, routines. When all them were gone, the real personality started up more.

I blame it on that, and I stick to it!

>>13612121361212

Yeah, I get that, but I think it would have been much clearer if there was an actual definitive distinction between the two. Makes for less confusion.

Firstly:

So, so sorry that it took so long to get this up! The chapter have been "finished" for... two or three weeks, but school have gotten in between editing and rewriting.

But here it is. Finally!

Secondly, to all you readers:

Image: http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m585tktcZl1rp7mti.gif

Seriously, I don't care if you don't comment or give me feedback, you are all lovely anyway.

I hope you enjoyed this chapter, and know that the next one is in the writing!

>>14331401433140

Yay Faindragon want to give me a hug

But buuh! He stole my first comment! Bad awesome author!

Would just say that I have not given up on you, and my review are coming tomorrow when I actually have time to read it, until then

Wonder who Free really is, he sounds like bad guy material to me.

And hugs? Sure why not.

>>14334221433422

Oh, Free... You will see more from him, I promise you that.

Yay! Good chapter comrad

>>14444861444486

Why thank you~

Soda, check. Concentration, check. REVIEW TIME, commenced

Oh Bolt, my amazing little Bolt, how you remind me of a puppy. Yapping up one moment until it hears someone mention it´s favourite toy. Ah yes, that is why we love you so much.

"the start of the end" god how I love that line! It is so simple, yet says so much... Or it is just me that are weird

And why is it that I think that it was a bad bad idea to Free free and shut down the M.A.C? Could it have something to do with mysterious fillies that bends magical machines to their will, and plants that die when a machine spews out a cloud of something... Nah, must be my Pinkie sense

All in all another good chapter. And why do you have to torture us with another cliffhanger? Was your last one not enough?

>>14568481456848

No amount of cliffhanger will be enough to torture you~

>>14570171457017

Humbug I say, humbug!

By the way. Forgot to mention how nice it is that Spitfire are getting more personality, or are showing it more. She is a nice character after all. But that are most of your female cast, so nothing new under the cloud cover there

YAY another chapter well done

>>14570171457017 Hmm i noticed this updated in the featured story's are you updating today?

>>16798501679850

That update was a misclick to the edit button, but yes.

As soon as FimFiction allows me to update the entire chapter, and not just the ~4 first k words.

>>16798581679858 Well still when you do post it youve made the featured list congratulations.

>>16798671679867

Thanks ^^

But having voices in your head makes travelling the Equestrian wasteland or any other kind of activity more awesome and fun YUSH!

It seems that bolt is starting to like cogwheel. Guess chicks dig guys with robot arms.  

Apparently, Fimfiction hate me commenting. This was meant to be the first comment on "Imaginary":

You heard right, people!

Or... the ones who for some reason actually reads this...

Anyway, Masquerade313 got me to see the flaws in earlier chapters, where the characters aren't as "defined" as they are today. So we are going to sit down and look through them.

Hopefully, the story won't change, only the characters reactions and comments to things, as well as the interaction between Cogwheel, Spitfire and the world.

This work might, unfortunately, take some time, seeing how little time Masq have to put aside to this, and I myself suck donky arse when it comes to editing and find wrongs in my own texts.

However, we are fairly certain that chapter 9, Imaginary, won't be affected heavily by this, and therefore I present to you... you guessed it, Imaginary!

Enjoy!

REVIEW TIME! And I hope that it are still okay now that it is the second time that I read the chapter.

AHA! I knew it! It was all just a drunken dream in the mind of Cogwheel... HEY! That are not the start that I want! And you do not dare to make a ending were he wakes up from a giant intoxication! I have used way to much time on this to you can end it as a troll fic

And what are Project Aiónios with capital letters both time! That are not sounding to well, I do so hope that the Project ends better than the  M.A.C. did down in the stable!

"...we had our top reporter, Featherweight..." Hot damn Faindragon, nice detail there. He is the perfect pony to the job after all

And damn, are Spitfire a little bit autistic or what? And before the mob comes with their pitchforks and torches, I have autism so I can say stuff like that HA!... What I mean is, it is fist time I sees her like that, are it something that are going to stay or was it just something that was right there?

Nitpick: Finally do I have something on you again Andreas! "my fleshy hoof" As you can see here is a hoof not fleshy, it are made of bones and nails! AHA!... Oh and this picture are always good to have in the back hand

"Bolt took the liberty to clean them up some" Are there not missing something from this sentence? Because it are messing with my brain

Good chapter. I like character's development chapters.

feels man, just feels, there being tossed around like bullets in a war.

>>17303031730303

I've been told that I'm good with writing feels.

>>17303031730303

>>17643681764368

Yes, all props go directly to Masq. Will I might be writing the story, he makes it at least ten times better with his editing skills.

Trust me, SAT would be nothing without this dude!