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    Jet_Black1980's Stories (4)

    • My Little Heartbreak: Creativi-Tea
      It's a week later and Twilight is nagging Twilight about her first letter to Celestia.

      78,760 words · 1,804 views · 257 likes · 6 dislikes
    • My Little Heartbreak: Heartbroken
      Anthony didn't have it easy in love. Now he's a pony named HeartBreak. Find out how she'll cope.
      50,038 words · 3,513 views · 328 likes · 14 dislikes
    • My Little Heartbreak: Meanwhile, Back at the Farm
      Stuck in the library for a month HB goes a little stircrazy, a trip to the farm seems in order!
      120,299 words · 1,900 views · 252 likes · 11 dislikes
    • House that Heartbreak Rebuilt
      This month Heartbreak and Rarity go head to head while trying to get her a house. A surprise visitor or two or three will show up along the way.
      51,532 words · 904 views · 204 likes · 14 dislikes

    For the whole of April, Heartbreak has been confined to the library under Twilight’s orders. By the time May starts, being cooped up is starting to give her a serious case of cabin fever. Heartbreak wants some open space, some fresh air and a bit of grass under her hooves. Twilight wants Heartbreak learn a bit more discipline and honesty about things. The two would butt heads, but Twilight finds a compromise.

    Send her off to help Applejack with the first season’s apple harvest!

    But how will a pony like Applejack, whose motto is, “Honesty is the Best Policy,” deal with a pony like Heartbreak, who has wrapped herself up in webs upon webs of lies just to cope with her situation?

    First Published
    10th Jul 2012
    Last Modified
    13th Feb 2013

    Comments ( 963 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    We're on story three! So awesome! :rainbowkiss:

    I love your pacing, and I can't wait to see where this goes.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 16h ago · · ·
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    OHHHHHHH  YYYYYYEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAH *BREAKS WALL*

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Aw! Damn that poor drawing.... Okay, new plan. We practice you with drinks in your hooves -away- from any pieces of paper.

    Can't wait to see how this turns out. Least we know there won't be any magical tea... right? :twilightoops:

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 13h ago · · ·
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    .....

    Dis gun be good

    .....

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 12h ago · · ·
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    Ho Ra, Ho Ru, Ho Rix

    Sound off now four, five, six

    Set light on the river sticks

    And behold what we fix

    We are now on story three

    What a way to begin the day with glee

    Poor old Anthony, can never win

    Is her life just one big sin

    Let's find out, next chapter please

    Ho Ra, Ho Ru, Ho Ri

    :pinkiehappy::heart::pinkiehappy::heart::pinkiehappy::heart:

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 9h ago · · ·
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    >>887970 shouldn't that second image have Lyra on Bon Bon's hoof? You know, from the whole....... Hand puppet debacle (I know it wasn't a hand puppet, I just feel better calling it that)

    >>888562 Links zwo drei vier... wait... Holy shit, Rammstein sings Heartbreaks theme song....   Seriously especially for the walking part

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 3h ago · · ·
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    It's great to see Story 3 is up, I look forward to more updates. :pinkiesmile:

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Yes!! Read ALL the Heartbreaks!

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES *breath* YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    #11 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 18h ago · · ·
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    Nightmare Sees What You Did Here

    #12 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 18h ago · · ·
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    By Luna! Do you enjoy tormenting this Anthony to the point of madness or something?

    #13 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>924956 What ever do you mean?

    #14 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>925029 NOTHING

    #15 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>924977 I do have to admit, seeing that sometimes I am not very nice to myself, that I do enjoy tormenting myself. Thusly, Yes. Yes I do.

    #16 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Well... by comparison, I guess I had the best damned parents ever. Getting beat for wetting yourself? Not doing the dishes fast enough? Seriously? :facehoof:

    #17 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 15h ago · · ·
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    >>925310 It wasn't a daily thing. But those two events are things that stick out in my mind.

    #18 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 11h ago · · ·
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    I had a book thrown at me once. I believe it was a hymnal.

    #19 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 9h ago · · ·
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    "Lol, you called?" - totally get what you mean when you say that. Things work the best, when you avoid sentences like that...

    #20 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 9h ago · · ·
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    Twilight didn't explode? *gasp*

    #21 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 9h ago · · ·
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    I feel for HB, really I do.

    :fluttercry:

    #22 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 4h ago · · ·
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    >>926367 They are the magic sentences of the universe. "It could be worse." "At least it wasn't me" and "It worked on Voyager!"

    It's like telling the universe off and then it saying "Oh...really now? Let's screw with This one":trixieshiftleft:

    #23 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 4h ago · · ·
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    >>926390 She got close...

    #24 · Chapter 2 · 48w, 2h ago · · ·
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    That last line... I love it when anecdotes go full-circle! I'm going to meditate now and prepare myself for the pasta scene.

    #25 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 1h ago · 3 · ·
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    Whatever you do, H.B., do not let her know that you used to be a human. She'll go nuts about it.

    #26 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    Oh dear Celestia, no...

    This

    This won't end well for H.B. :fluttershysad:

    #27 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    #28 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    For all those who want to know what lies through that door way... First mention of the Tumbler Room

    #29 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    http://jetblack1980.tumblr.com/

    #30 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    WOOT!!! LYRA IS BEST PONY!!!

    This is going to be fun!

    #31 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 38m ago · · ·
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    Oh boy, where to begin.

    1, the tumbler room Easter Egg was brilliantly done, but it sucks to know that she remembers noting from it. It would be funny to see her relate those questions to other ponies. But your story your rules.

    2, Lyra's introduction to the plot was handled smoothly. Having her a member of this club that loves humans is an interesting idea, and I can't wait for her to find out about Anthony's little secret. Though I still don't see why she has to be so secretive with everypony about her past life....or why she's scared of the Fae.

    In short, this story is beginning to pick up some more and I can't wait to see where it leads.:pinkiehappy:

    And where the heck is Oberon?

    #32 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 24m ago · · ·
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    >>928699 IF she finds out. Which is doubtful. And Oberon is on earth in Seattle. Now, you might not get why, but later it is sure to be explained. ^.^

    #33 · Chapter 3 · 48w, 8m ago · · ·
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    #35 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    oh look humans exist in the equestria... ahaha and heartbreak still can not say it! :rainbowlaugh:

    #36 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>934320 -Did- exist, then again, they're mythological. Now they only exists as concepts.

    #37 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    heh I bet it's gonna be obvious what she is trying to say now that there is context to put it in.

    :heartbreak:- Lyra is member of the 'p-pony lovers club' and I am a p-pony!

    :trollestia:- Hear that she wants to be a pony! *powers up lobotomizer magic*

    :twilightoops:- That's not what she is telling us at all... I think.

    :moustache:- I find it strange she never wore a dress, and feel like she is hiding things from us!

    :ajsmug:- Ah'm just glad she is gonna end up at mah farm soon to do ouh work... er ah mean learn about honesty! ...and do ouh work

    :eeyup:- eeeyup... *breaks out the fold out chairs*

    #38 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>935643 I love this.

    #39 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>935658 :pinkiehappy: thankies

    #40 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :facehoof:

    #41 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>938151 Here. Have this Lyra Shark.

    #42 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    #43 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>954302 You aren't going to stop reading cause of Crazy Lyra are you?

    #44 · Chapter 3 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>954326

    Nah, I'll just read even harder :pinkiecrazy:

    #45 · Chapter 4 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    “Right...Sorry, Heartbreak,” Lyra says, looking at me. “But, a Human is a mythological race of beings that are said to have lived in Equestria at one time. They walked bipedally all the time, were mostly hairless, had creepy eyes, wore clothes all the time and best of all...” she pulls out a drawing from her saddle bag, “They had hands!”

    .....

    I thought she was going to say pants...

    #46 · Chapter 4 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>954828 IN MY PANTS!

    #47 · Chapter 4 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Right, let the analysis begin.

    The awkward levels sure were through the roof with this one. I really like Lyra in this, she's really turning out to be a good character and I look forward to her future antics. The humor was also really good, and as strange as it may sound, I liked Anthony's little rant. I thought.it was well done and totally in character. Also bonus points for the memory with out faerie friends.:raritywink:

    If I have any problems is the same ones I've mentioned before, I wish Anthony wasn't to secretive. I understand why she is, but it does get annoying at times. But by now I probably sound like a broken record.:twilightsheepish:

    Want more, please deliver.:pinkiehappy:

    Samaru163 out.

    #48 · Chapter 4 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>954924 It's story three. There are ten to 11 more stories to be written. If H.B. comes out of her shell, it will be on her own terms.

    #49 · Chapter 4 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>954941 Stop replying and get to writing. Or do you want to play a game?

    #50 · Chapter 4 · 47w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Oh H.B, you poor poor mare. Nopony should have to go through an encounter with 'fannon' Lyra.

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