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appletini 804

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    appletini's Stories (8)


    The Apple family get together to try out Granny Smith's new recipe. The trouble is, Applejack isn't exactly pleased with what she tastes.

    First Published
    10th Jul 2012
    Last Modified
    10th Jul 2012

    Comments ( 17 )

    #1 · 49w, 14h ago · · ·
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    :twilightsmile: Cute!

    #2 · 49w, 14h ago · · ·
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    oh, applejackisthebestpony, you never dissapoint :scootangel:

    #3 · 49w, 14h ago · · ·
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    Cute and simple, good job!

    #4 · 49w, 14h ago · · ·
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    Aww. :twilightsmile:

    #5 · 49w, 11h ago · · ·
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    hehe Apple Family trolling at their best :eeyup: lookit at that poker face. Awesome fic!

    #6 · 49w, 11h ago · · ·
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    Slice ... of life XD

    #7 · 49w, 10h ago · · ·
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    Thank you to everyone for the kind comments so far, I'm glad to hear you guys like it. :twilightsmile:

    >>887751  :yay:

    >>888232 I cracked up when I read your comment. :rainbowlaugh:

    #8 · 49w, 7h ago · · ·
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    i lol'd

    #9 · 49w, 7h ago · · ·
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    Magnificent story! Loved every word of it.

    #10 · 49w, 1h ago · · ·
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    This would be cooler to read in April

    #11 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>890182 Twenty percent cooler amirite? :twilightsmile: Seriously though now I wish it was three months ago lol

    >>888159 Big Mac, king of poker face imo. :raritywink:

    Thanks to everyone else who's taken a look at this piece since I was last on and overall, I currently feel like spike with a moustache because of it. :moustache:

    #12 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Here's to the youngsters that think older people can't pull their legs... :rainbowlaugh:

    #13 · 48w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #14 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Great story!  It was short and sweet and I loved it :twilightsmile:!  Only thing is I'm not sure if ponies, specifically earth ponies, could use forks to eat.  They would have to hold the fork in their mouth and therefore couldn't put the food they put on the fork into their mouth.  It isn't a big deal... I was just imagining earth ponies using forks and realized how improbable it is.  Unicorns could probably use them but that's besides the point.  I also noticed one tiny error... :twilightoops:

    Applejack swatted her little sister’s hoof away. “Not know Apple Bloom this is important.”

    that "know" should be now.

    Keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

    #15 · 47w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>919741 Yeah the forks thing made me stop for a little before caving and adding them in, mostly cause I'm lazy. :rainbowlaugh: I've seen utensils used in the show but now that you mention it I don't think ever by an earth pony as stated here. I always assumed it was one of those animation things, like when snakes in tv shows hold of a cup of coffee in the air and drink from it lol.

    Thanks for taking the time to comment and also for the edit, always glad to have those weeded away. :twilightsmile:

    #16 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Not bad. Good imagery.

    #17 · 26w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Thick gooey strings of mint colored jelly

    How can something be mint colored? Light green, maybe?

    Aside from that, this was very nice. I nearly spit out some of my soda when Applebloom stole Big Mac's line. :rainbowlaugh:

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