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Wow, this is really a good Tennent-esque episode. I really enjoy this.

I'm wondering if this is a planet, or different universe that the Doctor and Twilight are in.

Doing a Doctorfic? I am intrigued....

You posted this too fast.  I still haven't talked to my Doctor Who obsessed friend.

Here comes the tidal wave.................

Interested as fuck, and slightly bothered by the proportions in that picture. Will read.

>>887318887318 First posting now results in a 24 hour ban http://www.facebook.com/Fimfiction/posts/319861441442036

Proportions seem correct, in a way. Ponies are supposed to be 4ft, so it does seem very legit.

>>887318887318

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you've just been blue shelled.

thus starts the beginning of another great adventure by none other than austin himself

Congrats, you've made it to spot #93 on my read later list. Expect feedback in a few months.

This is relative to my interests.

A Doctor Who fic with a.... Human? No, Timelord? But Doctor Whooves is still a Timelord! Whatever. This is an interesting concept.

Two good Doctor Who(oves) fics in an hour? Damn, it must be my lucky day!

Now if only this was an episode or better yet a movie.

First  

comment page :/

The Doctor had set the Tardis to arrive in London, 2028, but instead, it seems that he had arrived in a "Unknown location".     The period should be inside the quotation marks

the creature then shrugged, “No matter... but wait.”    

“Hmmm?” the creature said as it looked down at her again.    

it asked as it bent down again to face her.    

“Me?” it asked as a smile spread across its face.

“Doctor who?” she asked as she cocked her head.

“Equestria?” he mumbled as he rubbed his chin,

“Eh, yes, where else would you be?” she said.

How did I miss this one?” he said as he began to pace in front of Twilight.

“Ah, what was your question?” he asked.

“No need to yell,” he said with a chuckle.

“A Time Lord? What’s that?” she asked as she cocked an eyebrow at him.

“Ponies, of course!” he said, slapping himself in the head.

“Wait, this planet isn’t called Equestria?” the Doctor said as he looked around again.

“A library?” he said a loud. (aloud)

“Interesting. Do you live alone?” he asked, curious.

“So, where did you last see this quill of yours?” he asked as he stopped his walking and looked at her.

“Dragons?” the doctor said with a sly smile,

What is it?” he said in a calm, normal voice.

“This world is simply amazing!” the Doctor exclaimed.

“Do you want to see the inside of the Tardis?” he asked in an excited voice.

“But... how?!” she asked,

“Tell you what?” he asked in a smug tone.

Did you steal it from somewhere?” she asked as she cocked her head

“Have you ever wanted to visit those stars?” he asked,

“Well, would you like to see them?” he asked,

I can’t just come up with a place all of a sudden!” she said,

     If you end dialogue in hard punctuation (period, question mark, exclamation point, etc.) you have to capitalize the following word.

“It’s the ships chameleon circuit,     ship's

Now that I've finished pointing out errors; this looks really promising, how soon til the next chapter?

I'm not going to lie when I say I would have prefered Derpy. But fuck it because I'm enjoying this story!

>>887382887382 well he did give some input. it's kinda a thin line that hasn't been addressed

>>887318887318 there is a rule though. be careful with the "first" posts. if you think it can get you banned, don't post. but I'd say this post is fine, barely.

now time to talk about the story haha.

I haven't watched much Dr. Who so I'm not sure how the Doctor would act, I'll netflix it later. but I'm sure you got his personality kickass :D

i this already

I wuv you so much for this XD

As much as I love DR.Whooves being Doctor Who...

This is even awesomer because in the series I'm sick and tired of his compagnies always being girls (or humans) at best. FINALLY INTERSPECIES HAVE ARRIVED!

I hope one day Doctor 12 or 13 will have a non-human compagnion

>>888020888020 Agree Completely! XD

Le continue...

This is brill i love it one of the best ive seen

You messed up slightly... When he says "Oh you know it." after she says that he's mad, he should respond "Oh yes!" instead.

I have read several MLP/Dr Who fics, but this is the first one i've read where he comes to Equestria as a human, and that is a rather pleasent change.

What about Doctor Whooves?

"Brillant! I have my own pony self!"

this fic isn't just awesome...it's fantastic!

... Proceed

Why is it that everyone in the Whoniverse has say, "Doctor who?" It's funny, but overused.

Also: 'It was around 3/4 her size.' That means Twilight would be a giant pony, and wouldn't be able to fit inside the TARDIS.

This one is a bit more... "intriguing" than other doctor fics.

I shall continue to read this if it's updated any more.

>>887318887318 I, for one, celebrate your first-ness! Here, have something adorable to counter the haters.

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>>887382887382 Guess who won't care?

>>889014889014 Why thank you, kind sir!

>>887387887387 I don't even play mario!~ So this means nothing to me!

I was expecting more facehooves from Twilight. Allow me to demonstrate:

Twi: What's that?

Doc: It's my screwdriver!

Twi: Don't lie to me. I think I know what a screwdriver looks like, and that's not-

Doc: It's sonic.

Twi: Say what?

Doc: It's a sonic screwdriver. I use it to open things.

Twi: Who carries around a sonic screwdriver? Scratch that, who invents a sonic screwdriver? Seriously, of all the technology who have at your disposal, you carry around a something similar to a mini-flashlight! What kind of doctor ARE you anyway? I doubt you even have a bachelor's degree! I doubt you even went to college! Did you even pass-

Doc: Everything.

Twi: Pardon?

Doc: I'm a doctor of everything. Name it, and I know everything about it.

Twi: (Glares)

Doc: Is there something wrong?

You got Tennant's Doctor really well here, though I missed his british-ness a little. Far too few "blimey"s and such.

Still, fundamentally good job. Keep it up, you got yourself a fan ;)

I've always like the 9th and 10th Doctors best.  11th was always a bit too weird for me (fish custard and all.)  Tennant is always going to be best Doctor in my book.  So a new DWA sans Doctor Whooves... should be interesting.

Before I read, I need to watch Doctor Who, shameful, I know.

And I don't want to pirate it, just watch it for free online, where I don't have to sit through tons of adds and possible malware.

Any help you can provide would be appreciated.

>>889088889088

Do you mind if I use this? Not the same wording, but something like it?

>>887385887385 The Proportions do seem legit, it just creeps me out that Twilight's eyes are about the size of Tennant's head...

>>890433890433

Well, that's "My little pony" for you. The show where the ponies have huge eyes.

Also, I couldn't make it look any better. The first image was... creepier and had a fat Twilight.

>>889996889996 I frequently write my own scenes in the comments bar in hopes they get used in the next chapter. It... would be an honor. Especially since it looks like this story's gonna get featured.

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>>890625890625

Well, you're lucky. I used it in the beginning of the chapter

Also, the next chapter will be up later tonight, or tomorrow.

Florana?

>>887474887474 lol thats how i am... except that it isnt that many fics...

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You forgot to capitalize illusion in the title I think.

>>891729891729

I was going to, but it looks like this: Illusion. I didn't want to confuse some people

>>891744891744

Well, only illusion looks like that.  And Ill.

I don't know about anyone else, but I liked this chapter.  It wasn't great or anything, but it reminded me of a filler, or short episodes of doctor who.

"You have no idea....."

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I have no idea what's going on.

Seriously, someone explain what the hell just happened.

"Ill" usion's. XD

Continue the mad but enjoyable idea!

>>891744891744 DON'T BLINK. Let's see, which insane, supernatural creature existed before the 11th Doctor? Hmmmmmmmmn.......

ANGELS MOTHER FUCKERS YEA

Let's see... I would say Vashta Nerada, but they're Tennant. Three most dangerous creatures of Smith would probably be the Weeping Angels, the Daleks, and the Silence. Daleks and Angels are a cliche in DW/MLP crossovers, so I'm going to guess it's the Silence.

What's awesome was that in playlist of brony music, Stuck in Time happened to come up as I was reading this :D

Awesome chapter, btw. I love it!

okay first off   my litle pony and Doctor who ingenious!!!

second bravo

okay this is good and if you are doing it like seasons the season finally is going to blow us away if this is any indication of whats to come, also i realy would like to see what would happen if the Tardis showed up some where in Cantorlot oh the high jinxs you could do with that idea are endless.

any way keep it going

>>890838890838

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Somebody needs more exposition. Seriously! The most enjoyable part of Doctor Who for me is learning about the planets the Doctor visited, and what monsters he faced on them.

Maybe I should have an example for the non-whovians (Yes, that's the Doctor Who equivalent to bronies. Shuttup.): Remember when not-Cadence was acting totally evil and you had no idea what kind of evil she was? (hypnotized, possessed, classic unslurper, etc.) Remember how good it felt to see her in true form after ALL that buildup?

Doctor Who did that with every new villain. The bad guy remained in shadows, and near the third act, the Doctor remembers/figures out what he's dealing with and explains it to companion, and therefore the audience.

It's a beautiful formula. Use it.

>>892018892018

I want to use the Silence, but I see no way to use them at this point. But I'll use them later. So for now, I'll just use something everyone likes.

>>892861892861

Then it's gotta be either the Daleks or the Angels. This story is very new, and since a massive invasion (kind of the Daleks thing, you know?) has so many ways to ruin a story for the readers, you're likely going to keep it rather small, which means Angels.

P.S. Don't tell me if I'm right, I want it to be a surprise.

>>892018892018

Can't be the Silence directly, since there's a feminine voice. Maybe if it were one of those who follow the "religion" of the Silence, then that could work...

In any way could you include the master in this? I'm not sure about what timeline he shows up in because I haven't watched DW much.

I love this :D

A filler chapter that is somewhat decent? 'TIS A LIE!

I hope to read more of your apparent Demi-Godhoodness for writing, for you can make filler enjoyable to read!

Mh, pretty well written and interesting chapter.

Though, for my tastes, Twilight was far too much of a buzzkill. She was so held back, fearful and overly passive-aggressive that I am pretty certain she was bit ooc. The Twilight I know would jump around like a schoolfilly at the chance of seeing new, cool stuff, not just stand there an grumble.

Anyway, that was my only gripe with this story.

Hopy you will post more soon.

ooooooooh misteeeeeriooooooouuuuuus

>>892896892896 What about the Cybermen?  They're no Dalaks, true, but they are about as dangerous, and can even hold their own against Dalaks, as seen in DW: Doomsday.

The real question, however, is who this mysterious female sounding thing was, and how it's related to the Doctor.  Which of the Doctor's old enemies could be described as an illusion-creating spirit?

How about another Nestene Consciousness or a visit to the Judoon Platoon upon the moon?  Invasion of the Cybermen?

This is brilliant!

I read he enire thing with Tennant's voice ha ha ^^

>>895336895336 Could be Cybermen, although I still don't really like the idea of it being them, simply because it's so played out. And they most certainly can not hold their own against the Daleks. How many hundred or thousand Cybermen do you think were slaughtered at Canary Wharf? I have no doubt that the Daleks would have killed them all.

Hmm... don't know.

"“Oh my...” Twilight said quietly, hanging her hand".  Ponies with hands?

((Yes, I am aware that that's probably meant to be head. :P))

Also, you have some apostrophe confusion.  For example, "No, the princesses are alicorn’s".  There shouldn't be an apostrophe there, since it's the plural of "alicorn".

the spirl probly made luna nightmare moon

I thought the 11th Doctor was most afraid of a pissed off Scottish female ginger.

>>892861892861 WHO IS IT???

>>890838890838

As a Whovian, this rustles my jimmies very much :3

We got 3 possibilities for next chapter:

1. Daleks

2.Cybermen

3.Weeping Angels

100 bits on the angels!

I love my people for creating Doctor Who XD

>>899782899782

You forgot the Sontarins, rabid Ood and River Song... but my bits are on the angels as well

They should go to that big library-planet the doctor went to with Donna.

Hmmm... What about a run-in with the Shadow Proclimation, who are still a little more than pissed abou him ditching them to take on the Daleks by himself? Or, how about this, bring back Captain Jack Harkness!!! He's everyone's favorite immortal, and, personally, I think it would be fucking hilarious to see him "saying hello" to Twilight...

you must have Daleks!

>>887318887318 Well buck you took it!

Unless these scenes are out of order, there are two angels. Just saying.

Non-pony Doctor? I will explore this strange and wondrous world you have painted in my imagination, sir. Allons-y! (Dammit we need a Whooves emoticon)

>>903756903756 AGREED DO THIS

>>903853903853

I was worried that would be confusing. Alright:

It took Twilight about six minutes to get back to the Tardis. The Doctor ran into the director about a minute after leaving Twilight. Then the director died another minute later. This gave the angel a minute or two to catch up to Twilight.

Weeping Angels is best monster. They are people with ADDs' worst nightmare.

Must. Not. Look. Away. Must Not. Look. Awa- OOH, SHINY! dead

Refreshing, a time when Weeping Angels are dealt with relatively easily. That's a nice twist.

Will there be some kind off romance?

>>903756903756

I second this. Jack might try to rape Twilight though...

this is getting good

Best Doctor and Best Pony in one place. The bad guys stand no chance!

Will read later.

Funnily enough, I just finished Beating the Heat, where Twi goes with Doctor Hooves on an adventure. Let's see where this goes.

>>903756903756 Considering that the doctor is still in his tenth regeneration, and that whenever he brings up rose he talks as if he didn't leave her in another dimension with 10.5, i don't think we've gotten to the stolen earth yet. Also, rainbow dash is already the jack harkness of the fanfiction world, so...

Anyway, i want to see twilight in Gridlock because FACE OF BOE!!! that guy's the greatest.

or if you're feeling cruel we could always stick twilight in "silence in the library."

But more than anything. I want to see twilight and discord(?) in "the sound of the drums." I believe that the simmaster and discord would either be the best of friends, or the greatest of enemies.

Discord: I can create cotton candy thunderstorms and dick around with nature! beat that.

Master: Challenge accepted *conquers the earth with voodoo child*

but even better...

Celestia: Who are you

Time war!Rassilon: All your time are belong to us.

Travel back into Equestria's past. Be creative in that aspect I suggest. Be it Hearths Warming Eve, Luna's fall, Discord rise or a time period of your choosing.

the Rani?

well, i liked it. got the doctor's characterization about right, so that's great. two things, though:

1. i do believe that psychic paper works by implanting an idea into the other person's mind and letting them draw a conclusion.

2. although the doctor does say allons-y in his 10nth incarnation, he does not say it as much as you use it. not saying you have to cut it down or anything, but i like keeping things in parallel with the character of the actual doctor.

well, hope to see some more. really nothing much else to say.

"What ever you do, don't blink, blink, and your dead, don't blink, or your dead"

Tsk tsk, when I saw the warning, I was all like, "Angel?"

Angel.

Anyway, have them visit the Foundation. I'm sure they'll be interested in SCP-173.

>>903719903719 WHAT DOES PONY FLESH TASTE LIKE?

The doctor says you can't contain it, but then he says that the plan is to contain it in two small glasses.

dafuq is he trying to say.