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DizzyPaws356's Stories (10)

Adventure with the Main Six.
Cody helps out the main six that somehow jump over to real life and don't know how to get back.
17,522 words · 820 views · 24 likes · 4 dislikes
Unknown Thing In Equestria.
This story is about Light Bolt. He wondered around in the Ever Free Forest and...
9,346 words · 194 views · 5 likes · 0 dislikes
The Story To Bass Cleft (my friends OC)
This is another background story to another friends OC
4,692 words · 323 views · 7 likes · 1 dislikes
The journey of Pondera.
Pondera is not a normal pony. He needs to protect the ponies around him by keeping peace between all
2,798 words · 59 views · 3 likes · 0 dislikes
The Story To Dizzy Paws
12,881 words · 261 views · 6 likes · 2 dislikes
The Story To Evening (friends OC)
2,870 words · 166 views · 3 likes · 1 dislikes
My Little BeyBlade.
4,221 words · 222 views · 4 likes · 2 dislikes
The Short Background Story To Dizzy Paws (my OC)
2,500 words · 193 views · 6 likes · 5 dislikes
Twilight's old doll.
5,622 words · 308 views · 8 likes · 8 dislikes
The War Of Equestira.
4,412 words · 135 views · 1 likes · 0 dislikes

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Unknown Thing In Equestria. by DizzyPaws356

Sad Dark Adventure Slice of Life

This story is about a pony name LightBlolt. One day he went out and wonderd around in the EverFree Forest to see what it is about. Thinking its like every other forest in Equestria, he walks in the EverFree forest. Not thinking anything bad is going to happen that he will just be in and out with no problem. His mind changes when he walks though. After that day his whole live has changed. He finds out something has been following him out of sight for quite some time but when it chooses to to show...

Warning: This story mite be scary for some people. If it gets to scary then stop it. Enjoy!

P.s: If this story gets pretty popular and if some ask for another, i'll make another. But that's if it does.

Chapter1: LightBolt Intro. · 10th Jul 2012

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Chapter2: Something Lurking. · 10th Jul 2012

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Chapter3: Back To The Start. · 14th Jul 2012

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Chapter4: Where It All Started. · 14th Jul 2012

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Chapter5: Looking For Help. · 11th Jul 2012

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Chapter6: Running Out Of Time. · 11th Jul 2012

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Chapter7: Last Thing Before The Fall. · 12th Jul 2012

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In The End · 12th Jul 2012

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9th Jul 2012

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12th Jul 2012

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ReluctantBrohoof

#1 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 1d ago ·

Hmmm... :trixieshiftright:

You're writing in present tense, but it kind of feels odd, and "said" should be "says".

Also, a lot of things seem repetitive and pointless, for example:

'Where did this fog come from...' LightBolt ask himself as he keeps walking. 'Other then the strange fog, and the trees tend to have a strange feeling to them as well.'

'This place isn't that bad. It has a strange feel but its not bad.'

And it needs editing.

JeremyPunk