I like it so far, a thumbs up for you.

Great job. I loved it. One like and follow for you. Very interesting idea. Please continue.

Interest has been added. I'll see what happens.

I'll hold my thumbs for some chapters later...

is looking good for now

Pretty good so far. And first thought when I saw the cover art was "angel bunny?! Where in celestia's mane are you looking?!"

>>961971961971 i did not notice that till you pointed it out.

“I was there. She said, and I quote, ‘Halo is so dreamy. His eyes… OH, they send shivers down my spine. And that voice. *purrs* momma like.’”

Oh, Twilight...

>>10124211012421  yeah... not her proudest moment.

Well, that's not good.

Continue, please

I've been waiting for this moment since i started reading the story!!!

You get 5 moustaches and a happy Pinkie

>>10296311029631 wait till you see the aftermath.

Bahamut breaking the fourth wall. Never thought that would happen.

I did not Ned to hear this naked part it sent shivers down my spine

>>10364551036455 well, what do you expect to happen when your a pony, who's naked 98% of the time, and you get suddenly turned into a human? you expect clothes to magically pop up?

>>10364901036490 nope it's just kinda .weird imagining it

>>10380941038094 then skip if you're so disgusted.

hey dude love the story so far i always love to have a good laugh so i look forward to reading more.

no you my friend have a way with words... ive been following this story for some time now and it hasnt dissapointed me, the base plot keeps the readers wanting more and is an excellent read... thank you for such a fine story and i cannot wait until the next chapter

GILDA IS THE GRYPHON KING' S DAUGHTER!!!!!! but anyways great chapter

>>10449531044953 first good compliment i had in 2 years about my writing.

Love your choice in music. I found myself dancing in my chair!

Man, this has been quite a nostalgic day for me...first Care Bears, now Brother Bear? Can't wait to see what's next.

>>10528621052862 Care Bears?

>>10530051053005

Yep. I finally got to watch the second movie, which I bought today after my original tape broke. I feel it was worth it

>>10535431053543 what?

>>10535881053588 when I was reading the part were trixie started kissing twilight I was like oh yea but it was all a dream then I am like the picture

>>10536161053616 oh. well, sorry, no TwilightXTrixie in this story.

>>10454831045483 now, you don't know that. it could be someone else.

ok this was good only two things about the pictures, 1. the human derpy doesnt sem to have the eyes twisted at all, they look perfectly fine 2. Luna looks like a guy in the picture, not sure why

>>10811921081192 me neither on both. just choose the ones that were good, least in my eye.  also, if you read the main story 'friends from unexpected places', you find out that Derpy had normal eyes until something.... unexpected happened. the spell Trixie cast happened to bring them back... for now.

nice use of songs

>>11156341115634 i always do. think the one i used best was the transformers one.

I must say that was damn fricken good story bro

>>11276881127688 thank you, and this was just the beginning. there's TONS more chapters to go and more then 1 side-story.

My friend this is a great ending with all the music I cant wait for the next story and chapter

>>11316151131615 i try to impress. you know, for the singing song, i was almost tempted to go with 'Celebration'.

Oh sweet celestial that was a good ending, I'm glad I stuck around since the beginning, you've gotten good with the music, can't wait for the rest of the main story

>>11331591133159 i try. and it's only gonna get better and BIGGER!

Bucking Loved the story dude and that was a great way to end a story and i'm looking forward to reading ur other stories.

>>11645751164575 thanks. and it's just going to get more intense.

i second that

>>11683311168331 they are fully human; nothing pony like is left.

oh boy!

i second stoneifcaunt

I say this was the best chapter so far. Beach party scene was amazing.

Bow-Chika-Honk-Honk indeed.

Twilight... I already figured out how to turn everyone back. The spell turns humans into ponies and ponies into humans does it not? Then just use it to turn everypony (one?) back.

Im sorry, but i just cant read this. The use of capatilized letters seems almost random, and having everything indented defeats the purpose of an indent. Rule of thumb is to double space whenever you go to a new line that isn't part of that paragraph. I'll give an example.

Previously on My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic…

The train rolled into Ponyville station and hissed as it stopped.

“I can’t believe you embarrassed me like that.” Twilight said as she and Spike walked off.

“she was gonna find out sooner or later. Why not sooner?”

“that part, I could’ve handled. But you had to go on with it, what with th--” Twi got interrupted by a rainbow blur that smacked into her. “Ow. What is it with this day?” Twilight groaned. She looked to see Dash laying on top of her, dazed by the crash. “Rainbow? What are you doing here?”

Rainbow groaned as she woke up. “man. I need to watch where I‘m flying today.” she looked down and saw the lavender mare. “Here you are! I’ve been looking all over Ponyville for ya.”

“why? And you mind getting off, please?”

“Sorry.” Dash used her wings to get off Twi, who got up on her own.    

“What’s the rush, Dash?”

“well, I didn’t wanna believe it at first but… SHE’s back in town!”

Twilight was, within a doubt, confused by what she meant by that. “she? Who, exactly, are you talking about?”

“just come to the library and see.” Dash took off without saying another word.

“what was that all about?” Spike asked.

How you wrote it.

Previously on My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic…

The train rolled into Ponyville station and hissed as it stopped. “I can’t believe you embarrassed me like that.” Twilight said as she and Spike walked off.

“She was gonna find out sooner or later. Why not sooner?”

“That part, I could’ve handled. But you had to go on with it, what with th--”, Twi got interrupted by a rainbow blur that smacked into her.

“Ow. What is it with this day?” Twilight groaned. She looked to see Dash laying on top of her, dazed by the crash. “Rainbow? What are you doing here?”

Rainbow groaned as she woke up, “Man. I need to watch where I‘m flying today.” She looked down and saw the lavender mare.

“Here you are! I’ve been looking all over Ponyville for ya.”

“Why? And you mind getting off, please?”

“Sorry.” Dash used her wings to get off Twi, who got up on her own.    

“What’s the rush, Dash?”

“Well, I didn’t wanna believe it at first but… SHE’s back in town!”

Twilight was, within a doubt, confused by what she meant by that, “She? Who, exactly, are you talking about?”

“Just come to the library and see.” Dash took off without saying another word.

“What was that all about?” Spike asked.

Here it is with more spacing and capital letters where they should be. I also fixed a few grammar mistakes, but I'm not very good at catching those. This makes it easier to read and wont force the reader to squint.

>>14731391473139 i got better as i went along. but... thanks... 3 months too late for something like this, though.

>>14731481473148

Egh, i judge em as i find em. Honestly got here by googling Trixie is Twilights sister, so it was pretty random lol

>>14731561473156 hehe. that would make a funny episode.

That last picture at the end with Trixie talking to AJ and FS, What was that about? I can't see how that's Trixie and Twi's future.

>>16545041654504 did you happen to notice everything else in that picture?

>>16551491655149 yeah what about it? I still don't understand that last one.

>>16552241655224 ugh. that's was Trixie's hopeful future; being with Twilight, making friends. you ever thought of that?

>>16561801656180 OH sorry it was about 2 in the morning and my brain was just fail it still is.

Quick song

>>16699131669913 quick song?

Holy f@&k

This is soooooooo EPIC

Image: http://cdn.motinetwork.net/motifake.com/image/demotivational-poster/0809/epic-duel-demotivational-poster-1220408739.jpg

>>14665061466506 Honk, Blargh Honk. Honk Honk Blarg Blarg Honk!

Blast, Luna, Celestia, and Derpy pics are gone.

Hey is it ash from pokemon or someone else

>>24071172407117 no. Ash is a character from my series, the Requiem Trinity.

well, this story incorporates with the other story? marvelous idea if I do say so myself.

>>24071172407117 I think someone else, otherwise the pets he would have definitely would be some Pokemon references but with no Pikachu in site, going to keep up with my theory, but good guess though

huh... well now my reading boner officially decided to go down... now I feel depressed, next chapter I better see some gawd damn smiles from  Trixie before a certain someone gets punch line below the belt.

Wouldn't like me when my hairs down...

*gulp* thanks Pinkie....

having wet dreams there Great and Powerful trixie

face it you liked it

>>11682641168264 a little bit out of the blue on that one don't ya think

dayum... sex change for Trixie?

>>11683311168331 ya... I think Pinkie Pie's reaction is probably the best summary on behalf of everyone around.

poor Celestia

I smell gilda for some odd reason. taking bets now b4 I read next chapter before I get mind fucked.

well played sir, well played, though ur video seems busted

well, this shadow figure is certainly persistent, I feel like it's King Sombra but who knows

huh... this guy is bound to show his self sooner or later... right?

what picture?

only picture I got was the scene at the beach where everyone is- *nosebleed* well having fun

man, who the hell could the prick possibly be?! I keep thinking Sombra but damn.

well, Trixie x Twilight = possible if not absolutely failed

now, Gilda x Dash = oh someone is going to be pissed

well, liked making a personal playlist of all the shit I just listened to, guess who's got something for the raid next week, this guy

on that Author's note: My bet says Rarity and Spike are Scooby and Shaggey

quick everyone the bitch lives once more!?!

holy shit... pickle...

if this was animated in any way shape or form, I would buy it make copies of it so i could buy it again, share them with my friends and then make a play list of every song that played while reading this as my personal raiding music and songs list for my phone, vita, and i pod so I could still imagine all the shit that's happened so far, warp them all in a basket filled with food and stuff, go to a picnic with it, eat said food while listening to said music and maybe a personal copy of this for me to read or maybe the animated stuff so I could watch, take it on a date and say to the world no regrets. but hey that's just me, I don't know about the rest of the folks who read this but this is so good that I'm surprised it doesn't have more likes or something.