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Flash Notion


The hardest part about writing is that nothing you make is ever as good on the page as it was inside your head... but other people don't know that, so we worry over nothing.

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wow this....this is creepier than the original story

7980822 er... thanks? I never thought I'd out-do the original :rainbowhuh:

Nice, I look forward to seeing how it turns out.

Well written thus far. Just a suggestion: cannibalism probably deserves an M rating.

So thanks for that.

7981886 Perhaps. This fic does go into more detail than the original. I'll keep it for the moment, but if I get another commenter or two who would prefer an M rating I'll change it.

7981976
If it were me, I would leave it at Teen, but put a note in the description that it is borderline M.

I mean, unless you want to play it safe and go with M, but that will limit the number of users who see this a bit.

7982108 good idea. i'll add a 'warning' section

:yay: more blink storys!! :pinkiecrazy: i think i have a problim

:moustache: yes yes very good so far, someponys hungry

:pinkiesick: sick twilight!
it makes me think how much twilights tryed makeing timers she is a smart pony!

if i was there i might go mad burn the whole pile of flesh and myself along with it

yummy flesh :rainbowkiss:

I like lists. They make me feel saner.

this feels like something show canon twilight would say so much its creepy
twilight is good at keeping herself with things to do

Maybe it's all in my head. Maybe this is all in my head. Maybe I'm tied to a bed in a mental hospital. Maybe.

i hate it when that kind of thoughts get into my head twilights going maaaad :pinkiecrazy: but i wove her still :heart::pinkiesad2:

awwwww its done 4 now :fluttercry: i will have to wait good so good! will wait carefully for another chapter!?

I absolutely love this fic, it's well written and has a LOT of detail! it's exactly what I'm looking for. I'm a reader on youtube, and I feel great knowing something like this will open my channel. if you want, I can send you a link once the video is up. right now it's only the first chapter, and I would love to continue.

I am having difficulty finding words for just how grimdark this is, and yet, even to the point of a little sickness, I can't put it down. Congratulations, master author.

7995753 ever since I posted this story, whenever I've started feeling down, along comes a comment like this to make my day. Thank you!

7996245 I'm very familiar with that feeling. Glad I could help :pinkiehappy:

New chapter! All seems well, but how long can it last?

Ooh, update...

Something bad is going to happen soon, I can feel it in my femurs.

7997716 I find that a bit Humerus. ahhhh bad puns. Imma just go sit in the corner now.

Whoa, that escalated.

Huh.
I like the idea of it all, feels a little rushed but it makes sense if you think about it.
I'll be watching this. This looks fun.

... Scrambled eggs...

This is truly escalating quickly. Can't wait to see what's next.

can we ship them :derpytongue2:

twilight x sparkle :rainbowlaugh:

nooooooooooooooooooo

who will kill who

8002167 :derpyderp2: :rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh:

I've actually considered adding a bit of shipping type stuff to the story, but figured i'd leave that sort of thing to the experts.

as for who will die... well, it is a prequel. written in first person. not hard to see the ending. the question is how we get there, and even i'm not sure about that yet. :trollestia:

Have they not thought of attempting to escape, yet?

8010939 well... no. i'm going to write a few more chapters this weekend, so i'll put in an argument about that possibility. it won't amount to anything (prequel), but i'll put it in. just to ease your mind a bit though, this twilight (the one whose perspective we're seeing from) believes escape to be impossible. it was kind of a throw away line at the end of the first chapter, but it will also work to establish her thoughts on the subject.

Oh boy! New friend! :twilightsheepish:

Le gasp, these plot twists!

I love every update. This story captures the visceral horror and fear of the situation better than any other Blink tale, I think.

Two more this week. This is fun. Next time: more dark and creepy stuff!

What? I'm not giving away spoilers for this one.

You and your cliffhangers...

Wait what? Did the new twilight teleporting in have an unstable flask or something?

8036701 There was no twilight. she teleported the flask away when it was about to explode. I knew I forgot I line in sparkle's ramblings... I'll fix that.

8036701 revised section: "It was a potion," I explained. "I was working on it before- volatile. Meant for crowd control. Princess... must've overdid it..." I was overdoing it. I was using energy I didn't have.

Twilight knew it, too. She said something. Probably, 'You should save your strength'.

I ignored her. "Probably added too much hexogen. Brisance off the charts... had to get it out of the lab. Teleports work the same way, no matter what. It's her magic that brought it here..."

Twilight nodded to show she understood, but her eyes watered. "You're dying," she said. I could make out that much.

I think that's clear enough. sparkle was a bit loopy anyway. and twilight (genius) would be able to piece it together. she's becoming crazy, not unintelligent.

8036701 I believe it was just a flask that was teleported. She teleported it out of the lab because it was about to explode

8036766 yep. that's what I was going for :scootangel:

Well, that was awesomely grim and... well, I suppose thought provoking. How to survive in a place where there is literally nothing but other versions of yourself. Fascinating - and terrifying...

-GM, master of baked bagels.

Nice one Twilight! We can have a puppet show now! :pinkiehappy:

These last two chapters have been a really sucker punch. First Sparkle, now Spike... Twilight has been thoroughly fucked up at this point, poor mare. At first I thought it was a bit unrealistic that sharpened bone was effective enough to pierce dragon scales, but then I remembered that time that Rarity stuck sewing needles in Spike's back, so I guess baby dragons' scales are still pretty soft.

8053633 I- wow. Crosses the line twice at its finest. have a rainbow laugh :rainbowlaugh:

Oh my... that's just.. wow.

Damn Flash, back at it again with the depression pony.

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