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PaulAsaran


Technical Writer from the U.S.A.'s Deep South. Writes horsewords and reviews. New reviews posted every other Thursday! Writing Motto: "Go Big or Go Home!"

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This story is a sequel to No Heroes: Beyond the Everfree


Pinkie and Fine Crime have no idea what they are to each other. Friends? A couple? Strangers united by tragic pasts? Pinkie knows all about Fine's brutal, bloody history, but has yet to reveal her own.

Pinkie wants them to be closer, but that can't happen if they aren't on even terms with one another. So together they will visit the old abandoned Rock Farm. For the first time in over a decade, Pinkie comes home to face her demons. Is she ready to forgive herself for the deeds of long ago? Fine can only hope he has the ability to help her through it.

But the farm might not be entirely abandoned...


As is traditional of my No Heroes stories, this will be updated as I complete chapters. Updates will likely be sporadic for a while, at least until my overall writing load shrinks from finishing other stories.

Rating tag may change depending on how far I choose to take things.

Cover art belongs to saturnspace.
Pre-read by Grand_Moff_Pony.

The No Heroes Series
Chronological from Top to Bottom:
Shadow Pony
Reddux the Tyrant
No Heroes Part I - The Roster
No Heroes Part II - The Journey Home
Lightning's Bolt
No Heroes Part III - For Dreams
No Heroes Part IV - The Crystal Empress
No Heroes: Beyond the Everfree
No Heroes: Life of Pie
No Heroes: Hot Chocolate at the Isekai
To My Uncle

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 68 )

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Well, good to know I can avoid being boring. The question is: will that last?

Here we go again. I, for one, am hyped.

Wow I just finished reading the last story. How convenient

Here we go time to see if Pinkie and Fine work out.

Here go again... Round number... 6? I Lost count and can't be bothered looking it up on my phone...

I hope the story will have another track to play besides "I like him/her but I don't want to mess it up!" Because that'd get boring fast... But this is a PaulAsaran story, things will get real in chapter 3, and finish before 20, or they'll start at chapter 30 and finish at 33...

Either way, it was an abrupt start... I just hope we can keep in contact with the others while Fine and Pinks stab talk it out again for once... I wonder how Lightning & Crustie have been going...

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But this is a PaulAsaran story, things will get real in chapter 3, and finish before 20, or they'll start at chapter 30 and finish at 33...

Aiming for the former this time, since I feel like I did the latter last time. But this will be a strictly PinkiexFine story, so yeah, no interruptions to go look at the lives of others. I have some very specific intentions and have no interest in tangents here.

Although I have considered a collection of shorts just to explore more of the Order's lives as things progress, and I've got another I'm dancing around with the idea of Green's gang vs. the CMC in a sort of foal war with Lightning, Rainbow, Octavia and Crustie acting as reluctant referees.

8026878 well, I certainly hope we don't end up missing Nye and RD's wedding...
That'd be sad...

But yeah, maybe you'll end up doing another little side project thing catching us up with what's happening in the other's lives...

Also, Octavia seems to have some strange omnipresent sense for... Well, (for lack of a better term) having DNM's with other characters... Sure, she's built as that kind of way in this series, but always knows the right time and place to be around at...

Anyway, will stop now... Sleep ahoy!

I honestly half expected Rarity to have have like hundreds of pre-planned dresses for all her friends.

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Oh, no. Design clothing for friends who may never see them or, assuming they do see them, never wear them? Not only would that be disappointing and a lot less fun, it's a tragic waste of time and resources. Rarity didn't get to be a successful businessmare by wasting either. Better to design a dress when its needed and get the most out of it.

And the latest emotional tale of this saga resumes. Even without an ancient evil, the stakes are high in this one.

Yay, loved the chapter and can’t wait for more

Happy to see that the story is continuing.

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Glad to see some people are willing to keep going! Updates will be sporadic, but not more than once every 4 weeks. That should pick up if the higher priority stories get done before it, but since I have no idea how long this one will run...

I honestly love the No Heroes stories. My only issue is they don't update nearly often enough.

Hooray! Update!

Not I'm complaining, but just how many stories are going to be a part of this universe?

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The universe? A lot. I'd have to look it up.

But for the No Heroes timeline only? Three more guaranteed. Anything else would just be extras for the heck of it.

Man, the emotions are really running high now. Also: I was not expecting Sunflower's return at all.

You have a good dynamic with Pinkie and Fine and I am really enjoying it.

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I originally planned for Sunflower to show up much later, but I changed my mind at the last minute.

This story's going to be a bit of a roller coaster, with its high and low points. Not every chapter will have this much emotion.

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Many thanks!

It is so great to see another chapter for this story. Time to give it a nice read.

You'd think Fine would be more familiar with innuendo in his line of work. :rainbowlaugh:

I did not expect events to go in this direction, but I do approve.

A double dose today? You spoil me.

Another great chapter. I keep thinking I want this to get moving but after reading the chapter I go back to being happy that it is what it is.

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This has been sitting in my queue waiting for me to publish it for over a week, so if anything I feel guilty about making everyone wait.

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I recently sat down and created an outline to finalize where things are going. We're only halfway through, but I expect things to start picking up in two or three chapters. Granted, 'picking up' is a relative term, as this story's never going to be anything more than a slice of life.

Fairly intense. I like it. Can't wait to see where it goes next.

I am liking Pinkie and Fine so much in this as a couple. Cant wait to see even more from them.

God, that first half was so totally cute. My hnnng-o-meter was off the charts. You're really nailing that 'awkward romance' angle. Plus, you know, the drama.

Go get her tiger.

Well, I'm on the edge of my seat.

Wow this was a really good chapter. They are a good romantic duo.

Perfectly Insane
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Just got done reading through your no heroes series, (very good by the way, up there with Fallout Equestria in terms of a good oc story and world building), and I have to say I’m glad I took the time.

Though, I can’t help noticing the similarities Fine has to Dexter, the main character for a show by the same name about a serial killer who kills serial killers, one of my favorite shows ever. I’m not sure whether he was an inspiration for Fine or anything, but it’s made me like him and the story even more. ( If you haven’t seen Dexter, I highly recommend it).

I can’t wait to see how this story ends!

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Many thanks for the praise! I’d have never compared NH to FO:E, but I won’t complain. I have not seen Dexter, although you’re not the first person to make that suggestion. I’ll have to add it to my ‘to watch’ list, if only to see what you’re all talking about.

I’m in the midst of some editing work on some stories I’m trying to put in book form, but as soon as that’s done my top priority will be finishing Life of Pie. So hopefuly updates will kick in within a week or two.

/I agree she would jump right in.

And so, the heartwarming journey of self-discovery and acceptance comes to an impactful close.

If you're looking to move into original fiction, I won't stop you. In fact, I'll encourage you. I'm like 30K words into the first draft of my own novel, and you'll probably still finish before I do, ha.

Well, it’s been an awesome story, I’ve been following it since 2013.

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Actually I'm somewhere along the lines of 80k into that original fiction, although it's come to a grinding halt in the last couple months as I re-establish my priorities.

Anyway, glad you enjoyed the story! Here's hoping I can continue things sometimes soon.

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And I am glad to hear it! Thanks for sticking around.

Happy to see the ending. IF you do more of this I will be sure to read it especially if it involves lots of Fine and Pinkie.

My favorite chapter so far.

It seemed even Pinkie Pie didn't understand all the ways of the Pinkie Pie.

Heh.

I see Fine has a bit of a prankster side as well. I wonder what Sunflower's will be?

It's also pretty good to see Pinkie trying hard to share her past even though she doesn't like it.

I was waiting for the crash but I didn't expect it to happen like it did. It was handled extremely well.

I'm really glad pinkie asked that last question of her's. I had a feeling I knew why fine didn't dodge. I'm just glad pinkie know why now as well.

I like how fine realized what was happening because of his literary background as an author. It really stuck out to me, ya know?

It's nice seeing pinkie become free from some of her more emotional baggage. That and the final bit with the chase brought a smile to my face.

Howie's collide song fit this perfectly. Especially the line "I'm found I'm scared to know I'm always on your mind". Great song choice.

This story was really refreshing to read. The characters had depth, the story didn't drag along, and every scene was crafted with the intent of expanding on whatever the subject at that time was without becoming a heavy exposition dump or wild tangent.

The easiest way I could describe this story would be to call it satisfying. It checked every box; great writing, good pacing, excellent character interactions, great description of the setting, and perfect detailing of the character's emotions and the body language that shows it.

Bravo 👏. I sincerely hope that your muse drives you back toward this series in the future, even if it is selfish of me to wish it.

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Considering it took two-and-a-half years to write and the vast majority of the non-major events were made up on the spot, I consider this high praise. :rainbowdetermined2:

Perfectly Insane
Moderator

Just got done re-reading your no heroes series, it is one of my favorite long term fanfiction series, and I noticed something I hadn't noticed before. For most of the story, you spell it as Pinkamina. But in this one, you start spelling as Pinkamena, I'm curious as to why. I'm not complaining, I actually much prefer that spelling, something about Pinkamina has always just urked me.

I also do hope you intend to continue this sometime, Pinkie and Fine as a couple might be my favorite OC and Pinkie couple I've read. I also really really like this version of Pinkie you've made, It's very...unique and feels like a very good character. I feel as if there is still a lot of room for both them as a couple, and them as characters.

There is also one other thing I realized while re-reading this, something I'm sure you've noticed. If Pinkie and Fine do decide to have a child, and it is genetic like Fine believed, then it almost guarantees that their child would be a Bloodmane. This possibility may even prevent them from having children, which wouldn't be difficult since horses can self-abort, and they wouldn't want to curse someone else with something like that. At the very least, it sounds like it could be grounds to dig more into the truth behind Bloodmane's, as they may decide to see if there is a cure for it.

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