Diary Of A Demon

by Pastel Candy Candies

Day One - Day Eight

January First, Day One: Hi there! My name is Starry Sky and I'm an eight-year-old filly. Today I woke up in this weird little boat thinggie. I don't really know where I am, or where I'm going. There's a lot of food and water in here, same with you! You were here with a pen in your first page. I think I'm going somewhere. I don't know where though, and my boat keeps going up but sometimes it gets dragged down really fast but it quickly goes back up again. I don't know why it keeps doing that though. The sky is really really bright up here, but I don't mind it. There's a bunch of clouds here too, their all super duper fluffy! Well I guess I should go now, my tummy hurts a lot. I think I'm hungry, or thirsty I dunno. Bye!~ Love, Starry Sky
P.S. You can call me Starry!

January Second, Day Two: Hello again! Remember yesterday, when I told you about my tummy? Well it still hurts! And I ate some food and drank some water but it didn't help. Oh well... anyway I remember my sissy, I miss her. She has pink puffy hair and she's got a balloon cutie mark! She loves parties and she's always super happy. She's really random and showed me how to do a trick. It's super fun but I Pinkie Promised not to tell anyone how to do it, so I can't tell you much about it. I'm feeling a bit tired and the sky has turned to a sunset look. There aren't a lot of clouds anymore. Night Night!~ Love, Starry

January Third, Day Three: I'm bored, other than talking to you I have nothing to do. There's no games in my little boat. Nothing to color with or on. No where to go. Nothing to do. All the clouds are gone now, the moon and stars are out too. Their really pretty, the stars. I remember one time when me and my big sissy were looking up at the stars one night. My sissy told me that I'm prettier than all the stars combined. I asked her what was the prettiest thing about me and she said that it was my dark starry blue mane that flows with some invisible wind. She says I'm different. I think it's because of my red tail and my one red eye. Other than being bored I'm scared. I hear noises now. They started about an hour ago? It's hard to keep track of time in my boat. I need to sleep now, it's not cause I'm tired it's cause my tummy hurts so much now. The food and water don't help anything at all.~ Love, Starry
P.S. Sorry for my quick changes in subject, my mind is a bit scattered.

January Fourth, Day Four: I'm running out of food and water, today the moon and stars went away. It's pitch black so forgive me if my writing is a bit bad, I'm making my horn light up so I can see a little bit. My little boat keeps going up, and the surprise jerks downward have stopped too. My tummy hurts so much now, I feel like it's going to drive me crazy or kill me. It's horrible. Sometimes I think about jumping off the boat, and that might make the pain go away. But I quickly banish the thought, after all who would be here to talk to you? No one that's who. I wonder if my boat will just keep floating up, never going anywhere but up. If I jump, I'll take you too ok? That way you won't be lonely without me. And then I could be with you forever right? I hope you'd agree with me. Do you remember the noises I told you about? The really scary ones? Their still there, but I hear something else now too. A soft gentle singing. It's nice and sweet. Sometimes I just sit here a listen to the singing, sometimes I even sing with it too. Bye for now,~ Love, Starry Sky

January Fifth, Day Five: It's still dark here, but now I can see this light. It looks far away but my little boat thinggie is going faster now. All my food is gone but I still have my water and you. I still have this tummy pain, it gets worse everyday. I don't know how much longer I can take it, it feels like it wants to eat me alive and drive me crazy. Your the only thing keeping me from going there now. It used to be you and memories of my big sissy but I've forgotten her. I can't remember her face and I forgot her name two days ago. Both have something to do with pink. I can't remember. I love you. Bye.~ Love, Starry
P.S. I'm thinking about naming myself Starry Night now. Starry Sky doesn't seem to fit me anymore.

January Sixth, Day Six: I almost jumped today. I was hugging you to my chest and I was about to jump off the boat we share. Almost. But I didn't, I must stay strong. My tummy feels like a monster now, hungry for... something. It hurts a lot, I'm glad I feel it instead of you though. I would never want you to feel what I feel now. Your too special for that, for pain. I love you a lot you know? Your the only thing I have left right now. I love you. It's time to sleep now so good night.~ Love, Starry Night
P.S. I changed my name! I hope you like it. I'm thinking of a name for you too!

January Seventh, Day Seven: The light is closer, and the singing is louder. I hear interments now too and all the scary noises stopped. I wish the same could be said for my tummy but it still hurts. Somehow still getting worse and worse everyday. I can't move much or else it hurts a ton. I can use my magic without pain though. So I can still talk with you, even if I'm unable to move much. My water is all gone now. I think we're almost to the light place. I hope it's not to sad there. At least it isn't pitch black like it is here. Our boat is really fast now. It gets closer and closer to the light every minute. I think we'll be there soon. Very soon. I came up with a name for you too! It's Night Dream. It's a name that can be for a filly or colt. I made sure it was cause I don't know your a filly or colt. Love you!~ Love, Starry Night

January Eighth, Day Eight: I really like your name, Night Dream. If it wasn't yours I'd make it mine. It's got a nice ring to it. And it sounds lovely. A perfect name for a perfect pony! I really hope you like it too Night Dream. I think by tomorrow we'll be to the light place. We're so close Night. So very close. And our boat it super fast now, it's speeding towards the light place now. And guess what! I remember my sissy's name, and a little bit of what she looks like. Her name is Pinkie. Isn't that a nice name for an all pink party pony Night Dream? Pinkie. Such a lovely name. If I ever find out your filly or colt, I might name you Pinkie Star. You'll be named after me and my big sissy! I love you.~ Love, Starry Night
P.S. No my tummy hasn't stopped hurting but I'm too excited to care.

Comments

[BellChime]

I don't understand.

[Pastel Candy Candies]

7963450 She's died and she's going to heaven but she's not an angel Note: Read that only if your ok with minor spoilers.

[RB_]

Huh. Well, this is a neat lil' thing.

One thing I would like to bring up is your character voice.
The story's being written by an eight year old, right? (Unless you're being clever, in which case you can ignore me.) So you've gotta make it sound like it's being written by an eight year old.
Something like this:

I don't know how much longer I can take it, it feels like it wants to rip me apart and drive me to the brink of insanity.

doesn't really sound like it's written by an eight year old, does it? Same goes for things like 'I don't know your gender'. Consider swapping it out for something more juvenile sounding, like 'I don't know if you're a boy or a girl'.

[NicLove]

Before I read this, what is the Dark and Horror tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?

[Pastel Candy Candies]

7963748 Thanks

[Pastel Candy Candies]

7965069 Pretty bad