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Prickle didn't ask to become so strong, but it just happened. Now, as a growing foal, she's mightier than many grown stallions. What's an earth-filly to do? She tries her best to move forward and not draw attention to her supernatural strength.
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I like this, is more gonna be written?
This was the first thing I thought when I read the description.
Well now. This could be quite interesting. (And I can't say I've ever heard that name for this filly. I like it, though I've always called her Dilemma.) I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
I hope Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon both get put into remedial physical education classes. It would be funny if Dinkie was far stronger then these two combined!
This story is off to an interesting start so far I can't wait to see where it goes from here.
This looks like a job for Zecora and Big Mac. At the very least, it would be nice for Big Mac to have someone he can unleash against under Zecoras guidance.
Pity about the Everfree. I mean, Im sure Fluttershy would complain about Hydra tossing.
Awww
Prickle is adorable, we need more stories with her 
7916799 Yes.
7917265 We're off to a bit of a start, yes?
Disclaimer: I'm the commissioner for this story
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Dilemma is a good name. I just think it's a bit too literal of her issue.
Actually, Mr. Silver and I talked about possible names for her before we settled on Prickle Berry (which was David's suggestion, though the official naming thread on reddit had several names that started with Prickle, such as Prickle Muffin). We of course visited the fan name that won the most votes, Lily Longsocks, but I wasn't very happy with it. Beyond her strength, she shares only a superficial resemblance to Pippi Longstocking, and furthermore, the attitude is completely different, and I'd argue that was far more important. The filly also wears no socks at all (though to be fair, this hasn't stopped a pony named Fancy Pants from wearing no pants). Last issue with it, there is already an earth pony named Lily, so it could cause confusion, and saying the full name Lily Longsocks all the time seems very awkward, as opposed to Twilight Sparkle, Shining Armor, Rainbow Dash, Big Mac, and the other multi-word names that are familiar to us.
Her color scheme is rather close to Berry Pinch and Berry Punch though, so "Berry" isn't too far off. The Prickle part is a multi-layered one, indicating both an actual Prickled Berry, and also a prickly nature of a heghog/porcupine. I think it's rather clever and fits her better than Lily Longsocks.
7916968 I can't wait for more then
7917265 You mean like a pegasus that can go faster than the speed of sound?
Extra space and "two-toned"
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made
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Cheerilee
The conflict in this story doesn't make sense. First of all, there is no reason super strength would make you clumsy. Real-life strong people have no difficulty being gentle. Second, are we supposed to believe that being the best is somehow a bad thing? Smart kids get picked on by strong kids out of jealousy, but what kind of idiot would pick on someone stronger than them? And why would she care if they did?
7919629 Typos fixed, but your concern with the basic plot? I took it from the show itself. I'm just running with it. Have you not seen the episode?
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7919690 I saw the episode. Surely you aren't suggesting that every plot element in the show makes sense?
I so want to introduce my head to a wall with how the CMC thought before they gained their cutie marks. They once again misunderstood the lesson about earning a mark and applied the wrong meaning behind it. At least Sweetie knew that Prickle was uncomfortable and acted accordingly.
wasn't at all
Taking advantage of the stop (Unless this is 5E. :P)
Being strong does not make you heavier.
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told
"him" or "the sound"
He...He
looked
Biceps
Why would Prickle expect the Crusaders to be mean to her? Everyone at that tiny school knows everyone else, and the CMC never bully anyone.
This one's going to be a tough nut to crack, but I have confidence in the Crusaders' ability to help Prickle make peace with her abilities. I'm just not sure how they're going to go about doing it.
What do you get when you combine cider and hedgehogs.
7919746 Typos fixed, thanks for reporting them.
You must have lived a blessed life to have never even seen a child being picked on for excelling. She also has a mother that, while caring, is also encouraging her to keep her strength a secret to not invite such bullying.
Ultimately, it's what the show literally gave me, and it's not like the CMC aren't literally agreeing with you.
So you're strong, so what? That's awesome! They all say in jubilant agreement.
That doesn't make Prickle magically fixed. That takes time, care, and dedication.
I'm not sure what you're asking. It feels like you want me to scold the show and break canon, instead of what I'm doing and addressing it within the context of the canon already given. She's scared of showing her strength. This has been made 100% clear in that wonderfully brief moment she was in the show. That must be assumed to be true and arguing it shouldn't is not constructive to telling a story.
So far, I don't think a single pony has acted poorly, except maybe Prickle for thinking they would act poorly, but we're allowed to be wrong. Friendship is solving this problem that seems tailor made to be solved with friendship.
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I was home-schooled, but if public school is really as bad as you all make it look, only a crazy person would let their kids ever set foot inside.
The show did not depict her breaking anything, nor did it imply any lack of fine control.
There are less than 20 foals in Cheerilee's class. If she doesn't know what's going on after the incident with Sweetie, she is the worst teacher ever.
Scary monster tries to eat you? Kick the spooky in the face!
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7919817 The show neither gave or denied any level of control. So about the parts it did make clear?
7919932 She picked up a building while simultaneously showing the control to scoop out the ball and not damage the building.
I still don't get how her talent relates to her mark.
7919938 She tried. She failed. Diamond Tiara interrupted the event and she let the building come down with a slam.
7919951 Neither does she.
Sounds like a perfect case for some ponies.
What does Sweetie have in mind for our young hero who has to be carful of getting out of the tree house... Is the CMC really friends to her or just another gang of bullies like the Diamond duo?
Will the monster come back for round 2?
Tun in next time to find out in...
Hedgehog Pick!
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Sounds like a mystery for the CMC!
had seem him - had seen him
One left!
I have to wonder if and hope that we will find out who has told Prickle that she's a monster, where this sense fo guilt comes from.
7920602 Fixed! I also dropped you a message on Discord.
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I'd put it to you that it's not so much that every plot element make sense as that every plot element has a story behind it that, with a little imagination, is worth telling.
She could be 'Garnet'.
Because she's Stronger Than You.
Edit: Oh come on, who downvoted?
Pickle is definitely needs freinds to help her into any form of a life that she can beleive in.
As for Big Macintosh?
Red Mercury?
Vulcan Hammer?
Grand Slam?
7922114 Any vote/thought on her super name?
Wild Boar?
Dire Hedgehog?
Lilly Longstocks.
One could aways go with the classic Super Filly or Filly Hulk
Name ideas have to do mostly with character, costume and origin. So her name is Prickle Berry with powers of Hulk and is scared most of the time... Her costume is brown with reddish-orange lines the mask I have no clue since I don't see it.
She saved a hedgehog from being Smash by a log and almost being eaten by a monster.
Here are some Ideas I'll just keep going with:
Earth Bender: Since her ability is strength is might fit.
That would be funny and makes sense with her costume and cutie mark.
Berry Punch or Kick: She well mostly kick and punch.
Berdge: (Berry + Hedgehog) A odd creative name
Smash Berry!: Yea I'm running out on ideas
The freak: Becuase she keeps thinking she is a monster
LogHog: Since it first started in a forest
Mighty F. She is a mighty filly that no one should mess with
Brave Berry: She is brave and is going to save the world! (She isn't brave yet...)
The Brown Hedgehog:
Oh yea I forgot about the cutie mark...
Punch Mark: She punch her mark on you!
The Hedgehog: Wait what?
Mrs. Strength: Nah boring...
Earth Pony: Yep... Losing ideas
Power Pony... Oh yea that was taken
Berry Hulk: No Berry is a girl
I have to think on more names. But maybe just a One word name might work to?
Anywho... Back to the narrator!
Now that our hero has gotten her costume that looks almost like a small animal... Well she trust what Sweeite Bell of not being afraid or even come up with a super Pony name for herself?
Tune back in the adventures of... Oh yea she hasn't got a name yet
Quake
Shockwave
Titan
Tiny Titan
The Mighty Mini
Wreckingball
Avalanche
Impact
Lifesaver
Rescue
Haymaker
Fillydozer
Anvil
"n".... Literally no name, just leaves a mark of some type...probably a hoofprint stomped into something hard nearby.
Hmm... i have a few suggestions.
Takedown - self explanatory
Geo Mare - because Galaxy would be too much, Earth doesn't have enough oomph and Equestria Mare is just a mouthful
Power Pack - again, fairly self explanatory
Looking up ideas online, i -long story short- stumbled upon Ragna Rock. And look at this!
Very interesting tale so far. I noticed there's not much narrative in your fic, mostly dialogues. Surprisingly, it still reads interesting, though it could benefit from drawing out certain descriptions a bit more.
This is also the first fic for Lily where she does not only hide her super strength, but is also really sensitive about it and actually scared that somepony finds out and where she really suffers from that imagination. That's a new take on her strength and I'm excited to see where this goes!
I hope you continue it!
7919716
Every plot element in the show makes perfectly sense, provided you put enough thoughts into it.
It doesn't matter if she's strong or not. She fears to get picked on for being different, which is a very common thing, especially among children. Though, with you having been a home-schooler, it's not to expect you'll understand this, I guess.
She is not clumsy, she has problems controlling her strength. Big difference.
She is not just strong, she has supernatural strength that goes beyond the strength of every known pony. Everyone would have problems to control such an enormous strength. Again, big difference.
Also, this is Equestria, not Earth, we're talking about here. You can't compare humans that are physiologically completely different to ponies from another, entirely alien world that has its own laws of nature and physics in regards to abilities they have.
I don't think you should give him advice, except for grammar and spelling maybe, you don't understand a whole lot about the show.
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Just like an hedgehog must be careful at not accidentally hurt other ponies with his spikes, Prickles must do the same with her strength.
Those three are completely crazy. The CMC need near constant adult supervision at time I believe.
Tiny Titan Is a perfect name! (I wish I came up with that)
Anyways, each chapter is getting better and I can't wait to see more! Also having Scootaloo as a narrator is great, you should do that for each beginning and ending for each chapter like a comic book or the Pokémon show did.
I do have a question... We'll there be villains for Tiny Titan to fight against and other little heroes to meet? Might be spoiler but just wonder
7927194 Maaaaayyybe?
Derpibooru has her tagged as Lily Longsocks. And I'm partial to that because as a kid Pippi Longstocking was my "tape". You know, the movie a kid watches over and over?
More like a narrator.
Tiny Titan is going to need an upgrade to her costume. An upgrade that Rarity would have to call in from a fasion freind Pinkie knows.
Edna Mode.
and Freind.
It might be a story, but force analysis from experts the last year has shown that if you want to run real fast, you push the ground away harder.
Strange, I have a mechanical force analysis paper somewhere I did back in the days of Sonic The Hedgehog to show how leaning forward gave you greater force and torque to overcome airdrag to move vastly faster. Its what I was hoping to use for my robot design.