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  • E Teacher's Pet

    Fair or not, most classes have that one perfect student, that one little flower that the teacher can't help but adore. Cheerilee's class is no different.
    3,259 words · 3,658 views  ·  447  ·  3
  • E The Gift That Keeps On Giving

    The Princesses' birthday celebration is here again, and Mayor Mare needs a scapegoat—er, trusted citizen—to handle Ponyville's gift. Deciding what to get for an ancient ruler who's seen everything will be a piece of cake.
    5,155 words · 2,561 views  ·  403  ·  3
  • E Canon

    Partway through her morning practice routine—and routine it is—Octavia seems to have gained an audience. Well, if that mare wants to listen, she'll get a good show.
    3,489 words · 2,403 views  ·  326  ·  2
  • E A Hiccup in Time

    Twilight Sparkle definitely learned her lesson from her last time-travel experience. This one's not her fault. Really. Sometimes nature can be... annoying.
    4,508 words · 4,642 views  ·  684  ·  9
  • E But You Surpass Them All

    Applejack enjoys her family's Mother's Day tradition
    8,759 words · 4,228 views  ·  289  ·  3
  • T He Kindly Stopped For Me

    An accident leaves Scootaloo fighting for her life. While everypony tries to help, a few in particular discover a few new things about what exactly it means to be a sister.
    16,950 words · 3,927 views  ·  407  ·  6
  • T Ragnarok

    As many such things do, it all started with Discord trying to help. And now Fluttershy can't escape the apocalyptic proclamations. Next time, she'll try the trick of wishing for no wishes.
    4,538 words · 1,407 views  ·  173  ·  1
  • E A Taxing Situation

    When Derpy fills out her tax return, she finds that she owes quite a bit of money. However, she seems to have an alternative way of settling the debt. She might even have fun.
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Blog Posts19

  • 1w, 1h
    Another Reading!

    Goombasa is doing a reading of Duet in the Folk Style!

    He's definitely one of the top-tier readers around, so it's an honor to have him choose one of my stories. Here's Chapter 1. Check out his other stuff while you're there! I'll blog agin when additional chapters go up.

    0 comments · 36 views
  • 4w, 4d

    So, yesterday I rendered my thousandth story verdict for Equestria Daily. When I joined up over two years ago, I never thought I'd see that high a number. We had a lot more people on staff back then, and I didn't need to be more than a minor contributor to help out. I usually did three reviews a week. Later, we went to reduced feedback and this year to straight yes/no (any additional feedback at the reviewer's discretion). Now I do about two or three a day. And the queue length, which drove us to the yes/no system in the first place, has come way down from the 170 we had then. These days, it hovers around forty.

    I don't have anything too deep and philosophical to say about it. I do have one point to make though: the fandom seems to care less and less about quality writing. Whenever a story is rejected, we provide links to recommended reviewing help. But fewer writers are taking advantage of that. A smaller percentage of rejected stories come back than ever before. The two former mainstays of author help see little traffic anymore. The Training Grounds on ponychan barely sees a review request once every week or two. I'm a member of WRITE but not a mod, so I don't keep tabs on the overall traffic, but it is down. I used to get an assignment regularly every three weeks with the occasional request to take on an additional one in between. My last review for them was nearly seven weeks ago, the one prior to that another twelve weeks earlier. That's depressing.

    Why does it happen? I suppose I could poll the authors and see, but not many would even see my question. Plenty of the stories we receive give credit to editing or proofreading help on their front pages, so maybe they're just seeking it from private sources now, but the quality's always going to be hit or miss with those unless you can link up with someone who has a well-established reputation. These groups exist for a reason. They're good at what they do. I wish more writers would take advantage of them.

    Another has to do with where the writers congregate. Long ago, almost all fanfiction went through Equestria Daily. If you wanted publicity, your story had to be good. I'm not ready to call Equestria Daily dead quite yet—in my own experience, a feature there usually generates 1-2k views, while a story I post to FiMFiction only will get maybe 500. But with FiMFiction becoming fairly self-sustaining, more authors seem to submit stories to Equestria Daily as a "why not?" thing, because they've learned that fame and popularity no longer require quality, so why spend time on that? And it's true. I can't necessarily fault writers for doing that, though I'd rather have a small group of readers whom I know to have higher standards than a large anonymous crowd chanting, "Moar!" To paraphrase something one of the other pre-readers said (Alexstrazsa, I think): most fanfiction readers don't care if it's good. Even other groups set up to feature good writing don't get much attention. A feature on The Royal Guard only brings me about fifty readers, for instance.

    But if I can convince just a few writers to care, then it's worth it. There was a push a month or so ago where some pretty prominent reviewers made public offers to help authors. Kind of an open invitation—authors have to realize we're very busy people and can't necessarily take on any project at any time. I was hoping my other reviewing work wouldn't continue drying up, so I didn't join those folks at the time, but now I should.

    Yes, I'm busy too. I give private reviews to 4 or 5 people whenever they ask, though I only get regular requests from one or two of those. I also do a ton of reviewing work for Equestria Daily, and in the middle of all that, I try to work on my own stories. But if you need help, it never hurts to ask. I'll tell you if and when I'm available and whether I think I can give your story the attention it needs.

    I prefer comedy, slice of life, and sad. I'm neutral toward romance and dark. I tend not to like crossovers, human, sci-fi, grimdark, and adventure. I don't review mature-rated stories. And I tend not to like taking on stories more than 10k words or so. I'll take most any story under consideration, but if you stick with what I like or can tolerate, you'll get a more effective review, since I can focus on it more than just trying to endure it.

    With that, I'll go back to the titled topic and end on some statistics.

    I've heard estimates of EqD's acceptance rate anywhere from 7-17%, but it goes back well before the spreadsheet, and I really don't know what the correct number is. It's probably in there somewhere.

    My own record:

    Stories rejected permanently (to the sun): 27. These are almost always for content against our policy that would substantially alter the story to remove or for things that aren't actually stories.

    Stories given a standard rejection (to the moon): 887.

    Stories rejected for minor revisions (to Mars): 43. These are given encouragement that they're not far from being accepted, and it's particularly frustrating when these stories don't get resubmitted.

    Stories accepted for posting: 50.

    43 comments · 375 views
  • 6w, 5d
    Another fic reading! And it's a good 'un!

    My compadre Present Perfect has been involved in a reading of one of my favorites of my own stories and kept it secret for months. And it's a Scribbler performance, so you know it'll be good. Really, she's the top for dramatic readings, and she's doing dark fics all month, so head on over, enjoy her talents over all the recordings she's made, and give her some love in the comments!

    0 comments · 90 views
  • 7w, 6d
    Duet in the Folk Style

    I don't normally blog when I release a story, but Duet in the Folk Style had a big effect on me. It started out as a completely different type of project a long time ago, one which I had to abandon for lack of direction. Then it got a thorough overhaul of the original four chapters with an actual ending in mind. After writing the last two chapters, it made it very difficult to do my final editing sweep. It's just one of those stories that has a very different feel to it after the first read-through.

    It's also my first chaptered story I've published since my first fanfic three years ago. I haven't been in this position in so long that I don't really know what to expect anymore. I won't ramble—I'll save the reflective thoughts for the author's notes at the end of the last installment, and even then, I'll keep them relatively short. I just wanted to say here that I've developed an extreme emotional investment in this story, I loved developing and writing the characters of the three listed as main characters, and it's been a rough last couple of weeks while I put the finishing touches on it. I think it does some things not often found in the romance stories in this fandom.

    As I said in the synopsis, the story is complete. I decided long ago to finish a story before posting any of it, if I ever wrote another chaptered story, because so many things can pop up to sap my motivation to work on it. But if I complete it first, there's that drive to the finish line without anything negative holding me back. So here it is. And as a little bonus for those who read the blog, here's the full schedule:

    Sept. 28> Chapter 1: Overture

    Oct. 5> Chapter 2: Crescendo

    Oct. 12> Chapter 3: Divertimento

    Oct. 19> Chapter 4: Elegy

    Oct. 26> Chapter 5: alla Rustica

    Nov. 2> Chapter 6: Toccata

                  Epilogue: Encore

    4 comments · 93 views
  • 10w, 2d
    My Domestic Equestria

    So I posted this story earlier today, and it's an odd bird. More a peek at my home life with a budding MLP fan. As such, it's nonfiction, which surprised me a little that it passed moderation. I figured it'd be called too meta or something, and that I'd have to do it as a blog post instead. So here's a blog post to signal-boost what might have been a blog post.

    By the way, my wife just baked some cookies for real tonight. My son always helps with that, and this time he asked if Pinkie could help, too. Everypony got to share a cookie with him! I hope everyone finds this a cute window into a child's perspective on the show, along with a few of my own thoughts sprinkled throughout.

    2 comments · 124 views
  • ...

Big Macintosh has fallen hard for the pretty blond mare.  When she is forced into a fight for her life, he sticks by her faithfully, but keeping the promises he's made will be an even tougher battle.

Updated for Equestria Daily!  Yay, made 6-star!

Please vote and leave lots of comments!  I love reading what you have to say!

Written for a sadfic contest (I won!); the plot is in honor of my mother-in-law, who wasn't so lucky, and I suspect wouldn't actually appreciate inspiring a story about ponies.

First Published
1st Dec 2011
Last Modified
8th Feb 2012
#1 · 155w, 3d ago · · ·

Man oh man, the ending reminds me a lot of 50 first dates, a great story, it kind of seemed to move a little fast in the beginning but seem to go a normal pace after that, 5 stars for you

#3 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

im just wondering....where is dinky? :duck:

this amuses me though :moustache: loved it.

#4 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

This is very nice...

One problem about those nasty nasty tumors: They're like some kinds of trees. When one is big enough, not even grass grows near it. If you remove a tumor, it'll stop inhibiting the other metastatic sites. Soon, little tumors will start growing.

The moar you know....

#5 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

I cannot believe this. How did you write the fic with the symptoms and everything and not have one of the side effects be derp eyes?:derpyderp1:

#6 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

>>46739 I envision this happening before Dinky comes along.  I may write a follow-up with her in it.

>>46750 The eyes are one of the symptoms!  The doctor said there was a loss of motor control, which covers the eyes as well as being a bit of a klutz.

#7 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

It's sort of a heartbreaker that even despite the wonders of Equestrian medicine, Ditzy can no longer remember that year.

#8 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

>>46837  The possibility of a follow-up?  Yes yes yes!  In all honesty it is your choice however.  I just found the story so touching.  Best wishes!

#9 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

hmmm, i liked this alot, but i think ditzy was a little out of character with the 'shut up and kiss me' :rainbowlaugh: but i think its a great job, though the begnning was a little rushed :twilightsmile:

#10 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

I dont like it... I LOVE IT! :raritystarry:

#11 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

>>46908 Yeah, she was a bit out of her character there, and the first kiss as well, which is kind of the point.  The character you see in the show is the more introverted one as a result of her ordeal.

#12 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

>>46675 >>46908 I know the pacing was a little uneven, but I was writing under a word limit of 7k, and had to get to the conflict quickly.  (FiMFiction doesn't quite count the words right - the actual number for this is 6966.)  I may rewrite and expand later, after the contest is over.

#13 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

Why is Fucking Tear Jerker not a category!?!?!

I always liked the shipping of Big Mac and Ditzy. This was so well written, sad, sweet and the ending though slightly melancholy was very optimistic. I loved the characterization of the two main characters. I was close to shedding manly tears during this, but...I didn't cause I AM A MAN now excuse me*sniff* I need to punch some shit or build a mountain or something.

Peace out.  

#14 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

So beautiful but so sad...

I like the ending, though. Love the ending.


#15 · 155w, 2d ago · · ·

love it

#16 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Very sweet, nice job expanding Big Mac and Derpy's characters (I know you called her Ditzy, but she'll always be Derpy in my heart xD). 5 stars :eeyup:

#17 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Actually crying, like no shit tears from my eyes:fluttercry: that emoticon doesn't do my man tears justice, but they exist

#18 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Welp. Manly tears. :applecry:

#19 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

I am not a normal brony. I did love the story and everything, but I don't actually want a follow up. My favorite stories always have open endings, and if this is predating the show they can't end up together.

Also unlike many others, although I am a man, I didn't cry "manly tears" I cried normal tears. They might have even been a little bit girly. The reason I cried is partially because of my empathetic sense, and partially because my grandmother died of cancer last year during the summer.

The part of the brain that generally controls motor skills is not very close to the part of the brain that controls memory on a human, but I don't know much about the set up of the brains of these homoequestrians. (I like this name for their species)

I did find one very irksome grammar issue, but it is inside of dialogue, so I doubt it matters. Just remember this, just because they have that accent doesn't mean that they talk like idiots. Big Mac states “Oh, Ah’m sorry, Ah’m sorry!  Ah weren’t thinkin’.” when he should have said "Ah wasn't thinkin'." It can be attributed to an authors choice if you leave it though.


I am many things in many places. Here I am Not.

#20 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

:fluttercry: :raritycry::applecry:

Very sad and moving story. Do a follow up, please!


#21 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

I loved it.  (I don't believe cancer is possible in Equestria, but I'll make an exception for this story.)

#23 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

>>46908 You hear something new every day...what character, her only lines are muffins (possibility, and....i got nuthin...

#24 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh mah gah. Thank you so much. :fluttercry:

#25 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Umm PLOT TWIST TIMES 2!!!!:pinkiegasp:

#26 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

I watched my parents go though cancer. I watched them promise and cling. I faded into the dark, like Dinky. I loved this fic. It was sad, but it spoke to life and love. Thank you for writing it.

#27 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Wow. Excellent work, you got me very emotional. :fluttercry:

#28 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·


I loved this! Goodness, I'd have never guessed that any derpy x mac shipfic would pass up a fluttermac one, but it seems this one has beaten them all, at least in my opinion!

#29 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

:fluttercry:...:fluttercry::fluttercry:... ...:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

#30 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

More tearjerkers! That was great. Feel bad for Mac, though :c

#31 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

You, sir, owe me a new chest cavity. It seems everything in that general region has, quite frankly, exploded. A new set of tear ducts would be good, too, as mine seem to be leaking uncontrollably...

#32 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

Wow... I have no words. Except to say...


Nah, but thanks! Loved it!

#33 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

I've only have a few seconds to write this due to my heart's explosion...

Ughh... Not enough time so... :raritycry::fluttercry::applecry:

:heart: In memory of my heart after reading this wonderful story.:heart:

#34 · 155w, 1d ago · · ·

This one hit me so hard, mainly because my dad had cancer a few years back. Excellent work, 5/5

#36 · 155w, 18h ago · · ·

This was really beautiful. The emotions were very real, and I like how you made sure to show how Big Mac was suffering as well.

I honestly think the ending was perfect, even without a follow-up, but I'm sure whatever you'd like to do with it will be great.

#37 · 155w, 17h ago · · ·

That was...Great. I think this is the best fic I've read in months. Jeez, I didn't know it was this hard to type when you're crying.

#38 · 155w, 13h ago · · ·

That was simply beautiful, something that absolutely deserves the five stars I'm giving right now.

#39 · 155w, 5h ago · · ·

Equestria Daily. Now!

#40 · 155w, 5h ago · · ·

that was amazing. no doubt one of the better fan fictions out there. and im not just saying that, i mean it. 5 stars:fluttercry:

#41 · 155w, 4h ago · · ·

>>50134 I will.  As I said, this was for a contest with a 7k word limit.  Once the contest is decided (probably next couple of days), I will rewrite a bit without the word count constraint, and submit to EqD.

#42 · 154w, 6d ago · · ·

oh at the verge of was a beutifull story.. and i actually could see myself doing something like big mac...awesome story, very touching, i loved it all the way, thank you for writing this it really touched me :pinkiesad2:

#43 · 154w, 6d ago · · ·

>>48297 This comment right here needs to win an award or something. :eeyup: :duck:

#44 · 154w, 3d ago · · · freakin' heart....ow.

This story is the definition of bittersweet.

#45 · 154w, 3d ago · · ·

I was worried you were going to have her lose her fight. In fact I was certain of that fact for almost the entire story. And then I realized you had made it worse. Her dying I was prepared for. I was not prepared for what you did. It was elegant, realistic, heart-wrenching, and perfectly delivered. The real worst case scenario, knowing that somepony loved you and you loved them only to have that part of them stripped out. Far worse then loving somepony and not having them love you back. The stuff of nightmares, nightmares fueled by a particularly conniving subconscious.  

My heart is demanding you be lynched for giving her the tumor in the first place. And then on top of such a monstrous crime you put her through a tortuous treatment and then you compound it by have the Pyrrhic "victory." Her body surviving at the cost of her. Fortunately my heart cannot tie a noose, it can only scream at me from the box on my desk.  

My head is giving you a dignified ovation. Masterfully done. The result of the surgery is what really brought the piece together in its entirety and is the reason I have favorited this. I am pleased beyond words that you made the ending hopeful. The perfect mix of bittersweet and happiness. Although my heart demands you write a continuation my head knows better. There can be no sequel.

"And the last thing out of Pandora's box was the most terrible of all; a small bird, Hope."

Nikola of Tesla

Head of Applied Magic, Canterlot Institute of Technology

#46 · 154w, 3d ago · · ·

>>55367  Wow.  Thanks for your kind review, as it means a lot coming from a successful writer whose stories I've enjoyed.  Even more humbling is the response this story has gotten, even though the contest for which I wrote this is somewhat dragging its feet on judging, so I'm sitting on a revision about 1k words longer that I can't publish until it's decided.  Then, straight to EqD (or try, at least)!

#47 · 154w, 3d ago · · ·

Why isn't Tearjerker a tag? Such a good story, bittersweet and adorable yet sad and realistic.

#48 · 154w, 1d ago · · ·

>>48383 well, i dont noe, i mean maybe its a little condescending of her, cuz by the mlp episodes, it seems like she would be a bit shyer or softspoken? nah, its prolly just me :)

#49 · 154w, 9h ago · · ·

>>58538 possible i dunno, maybe its just me that shes not...:coolphoto:

#50 · 153w, 2d ago · · ·

Great, emotional story. <brohoof>

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