Man oh man, the ending reminds me a lot of 50 first dates, a great story, it kind of seemed to move a little fast in the beginning but seem to go a normal pace after that, 5 stars for you

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Because there are no other words.

im just wondering....where is dinky?

this amuses me though loved it.

This is very nice...

One problem about those nasty nasty tumors: They're like some kinds of trees. When one is big enough, not even grass grows near it. If you remove a tumor, it'll stop inhibiting the other metastatic sites. Soon, little tumors will start growing.

The moar you know....

I cannot believe this. How did you write the fic with the symptoms and everything and not have one of the side effects be derp eyes?

>>4673946739 I envision this happening before Dinky comes along.  I may write a follow-up with her in it.

>>4675046750 The eyes are one of the symptoms!  The doctor said there was a loss of motor control, which covers the eyes as well as being a bit of a klutz.

It's sort of a heartbreaker that even despite the wonders of Equestrian medicine, Ditzy can no longer remember that year.

>>4683746837  The possibility of a follow-up?  Yes yes yes!  In all honesty it is your choice however.  I just found the story so touching.  Best wishes!

hmmm, i liked this alot, but i think ditzy was a little out of character with the 'shut up and kiss me' but i think its a great job, though the begnning was a little rushed

I dont like it... I LOVE IT!

>>4690846908 Yeah, she was a bit out of her character there, and the first kiss as well, which is kind of the point.  The character you see in the show is the more introverted one as a result of her ordeal.

>>4667546675 >>4690846908 I know the pacing was a little uneven, but I was writing under a word limit of 7k, and had to get to the conflict quickly.  (FiMFiction doesn't quite count the words right - the actual number for this is 6966.)  I may rewrite and expand later, after the contest is over.

Why is Fucking Tear Jerker not a category!?!?!

I always liked the shipping of Big Mac and Ditzy. This was so well written, sad, sweet and the ending though slightly melancholy was very optimistic. I loved the characterization of the two main characters. I was close to shedding manly tears during this, but...I didn't cause I AM A MAN now excuse me*sniff* I need to punch some shit or build a mountain or something.

Peace out.  

So beautiful but so sad...

I like the ending, though. Love the ending.

I WANT TO SEE A FOLLOW-UP!

love it

Very sweet, nice job expanding Big Mac and Derpy's characters (I know you called her Ditzy, but she'll always be Derpy in my heart xD). 5 stars

Actually crying, like no shit tears from my eyes that emoticon doesn't do my man tears justice, but they exist

Welp. Manly tears.

I am not a normal brony. I did love the story and everything, but I don't actually want a follow up. My favorite stories always have open endings, and if this is predating the show they can't end up together.

Also unlike many others, although I am a man, I didn't cry "manly tears" I cried normal tears. They might have even been a little bit girly. The reason I cried is partially because of my empathetic sense, and partially because my grandmother died of cancer last year during the summer.

The part of the brain that generally controls motor skills is not very close to the part of the brain that controls memory on a human, but I don't know much about the set up of the brains of these homoequestrians. (I like this name for their species)

I did find one very irksome grammar issue, but it is inside of dialogue, so I doubt it matters. Just remember this, just because they have that accent doesn't mean that they talk like idiots. Big Mac states “Oh, Ah’m sorry, Ah’m sorry!  Ah weren’t thinkin’.” when he should have said "Ah wasn't thinkin'." It can be attributed to an authors choice if you leave it though.

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I am many things in many places. Here I am Not.

Very sad and moving story. Do a follow up, please!

I loved it.  (I don't believe cancer is possible in Equestria, but I'll make an exception for this story.)

>>4690846908 You hear something new every day...what character, her only lines are muffins (possibility, and....i got nuthin...

Oh mah gah. Thank you so much.

Umm PLOT TWIST TIMES 2!!!!

I watched my parents go though cancer. I watched them promise and cling. I faded into the dark, like Dinky. I loved this fic. It was sad, but it spoke to life and love. Thank you for writing it.

Wow. Excellent work, you got me very emotional.

>>4849248492 DOUBLE THE PLOT TWIST?

I loved this! Goodness, I'd have never guessed that any derpy x mac shipfic would pass up a fluttermac one, but it seems this one has beaten them all, at least in my opinion!

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More tearjerkers! That was great. Feel bad for Mac, though :c

You, sir, owe me a new chest cavity. It seems everything in that general region has, quite frankly, exploded. A new set of tear ducts would be good, too, as mine seem to be leaking uncontrollably...

Wow... I have no words. Except to say...

FOLLOW UP OR I WILL FRICKING KILL YOU!!!!

Nah, but thanks! Loved it!

I've only have a few seconds to write this due to my heart's explosion...

Ughh... Not enough time so...

In memory of my heart after reading this wonderful story.

This one hit me so hard, mainly because my dad had cancer a few years back. Excellent work, 5/5

This was really beautiful. The emotions were very real, and I like how you made sure to show how Big Mac was suffering as well.

I honestly think the ending was perfect, even without a follow-up, but I'm sure whatever you'd like to do with it will be great.

That was...Great. I think this is the best fic I've read in months. Jeez, I didn't know it was this hard to type when you're crying.

That was simply beautiful, something that absolutely deserves the five stars I'm giving right now.

Equestria Daily. Now!

that was amazing. no doubt one of the better fan fictions out there. and im not just saying that, i mean it. 5 stars

>>5013450134 I will.  As I said, this was for a contest with a 7k word limit.  Once the contest is decided (probably next couple of days), I will rewrite a bit without the word count constraint, and submit to EqD.

oh god...im at the verge of tears...it was a beutifull story.. and i actually could see myself doing something like big mac...awesome story, very touching, i loved it all the way, thank you for writing this it really touched me

>>4829748297 This comment right here needs to win an award or something.

Ow....my freakin' heart....ow.

This story is the definition of bittersweet.

I was worried you were going to have her lose her fight. In fact I was certain of that fact for almost the entire story. And then I realized you had made it worse. Her dying I was prepared for. I was not prepared for what you did. It was elegant, realistic, heart-wrenching, and perfectly delivered. The real worst case scenario, knowing that somepony loved you and you loved them only to have that part of them stripped out. Far worse then loving somepony and not having them love you back. The stuff of nightmares, nightmares fueled by a particularly conniving subconscious.  

My heart is demanding you be lynched for giving her the tumor in the first place. And then on top of such a monstrous crime you put her through a tortuous treatment and then you compound it by have the Pyrrhic "victory." Her body surviving at the cost of her. Fortunately my heart cannot tie a noose, it can only scream at me from the box on my desk.  

My head is giving you a dignified ovation. Masterfully done. The result of the surgery is what really brought the piece together in its entirety and is the reason I have favorited this. I am pleased beyond words that you made the ending hopeful. The perfect mix of bittersweet and happiness. Although my heart demands you write a continuation my head knows better. There can be no sequel.

"And the last thing out of Pandora's box was the most terrible of all; a small bird, Hope."

Nikola of Tesla

Head of Applied Magic, Canterlot Institute of Technology

>>5536755367  Wow.  Thanks for your kind review, as it means a lot coming from a successful writer whose stories I've enjoyed.  Even more humbling is the response this story has gotten, even though the contest for which I wrote this is somewhat dragging its feet on judging, so I'm sitting on a revision about 1k words longer that I can't publish until it's decided.  Then, straight to EqD (or try, at least)!

Why isn't Tearjerker a tag? Such a good story, bittersweet and adorable yet sad and realistic.

>>4838348383 well, i dont noe, i mean maybe its a little condescending of her, cuz by the mlp episodes, it seems like she would be a bit shyer or softspoken? nah, its prolly just me :)

>>5853858538 possible i dunno, maybe its just me that shes not...

Great, emotional story. <brohoof>

congratulations on winning the contest! i didn't read any of the other entry's (not that i know of) but i can say that you definitely deserved it for writing such an amazing story, it must have blew those other fics out of the water! hope this gets post up on EqD, if your still gonna send it in that is, you better!

>>7735977359 Absolutely, the EqD pre-readers have it in their hot little hands right now.

this made me cry, the best romance i ever read. mates until the end

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First story I've reviewed on FiMFiction that I gave a star rating. Congratulations.

I kept it in... I kept it in...

5/5

Please excuse me for a moment.  

Don't cry! Don't cry! Don't.  

Holy shit dude. This is a Grade A Weapons Grade tear jerker right here. If they could make a bomb out of it, Chuck Norris himself would bank of the edge of caution when dealing with it. It's no wonder you won that contest you were talking about.

this story teared my eyes serveral times, and making me feel happy at some points too. thanks you mister for rocking my emotions. 5/5 <3<3<3

Manly tears plus great happy ending.

*sniff* great story

I read this story on FimFiction and I had to come on here just to comment. The story was very strong and I really enjoyed it.

Your prose is very good! I enjoyed how well you described things, and now naturally it flowed! Great work, and I look forward to seeing more from you!

Holy sweet mother of celestia.... that shit was awesome.

Reading this fanfic with minecraft music seems to fit very well... if you want to get some major water leakage from your eyeballs.

Wow............. Definitely one of the best stories of I've ever... probably the first to make me cry. So beautifully written... please please please do a follow up!

Told ya I was going to try reading your stories.  

I'll be honest.  No tears were produced throughout this piece, but I came very close.  

Your ending is something that I've seen before, but from where, I'm not sure.  At one point, I wanted to write a fic that ended in similar fashion.

My only issue is one that I tend to see regarding romance in fan fiction.  The relationship's development is better than what I usually see, but it did feel somewhat rushed.  It was as though I was watching a movie where two characters go from not knowing each other to getting married.  I did notice you had a word count limit in mind, and the overall story's strengths made me ignore that peeve, so I overlooked it.

Well done.  

5/5

This was pretty good story. It was sad but not enough to make me cry. However by any chance will there be a sequel? If not that ok. Love the story.

This story was profound. It hit me close to home, and I appreciate the sensitivity with which it was handled. I cried.

Wow. Just... wow. I have recently been switched off sad-fics, chiefly because they tend to suffer from some pretty common and universal issues. However, I am thrilled I gave this a shot. It was marvellous and managed to avoid pretty much all of the dreaded 'sad clichés'.

The pacing was handled very, very well. Short, sharp scenes kept the plot flowing nicely, encompassing a very large period of time very naturally. This meant that everything was tight and coherent, but yet you were also able to incorporate so much in the way of character development. In fact, it was the character development that truly made this story. The relationship felt real. It felt special, multi-faceted and believable. In my opinion, it was the nature of the relationship that really let this story shine.

I would also like to commend you on your ability to handle dramatic tension. It was never overdone, never forced or contrived. It was just right: painful, depressing, and yet... kind of beautiful in a sense.

Following on from that, I have to thank you for ending the story on a note of hope. I was hurting pretty badly (and still am), but the last few paragraphs put a smile back on my face (a small smile, but a smile nonetheless). A lesser author would have killed her, yet you did not.

This story hurt. It hurt a lot. But it was also beautiful, so thank you. I enjoyed it immensely. Keep up the incredible work.

Very well done. I'm truly impressed with how you handled everything, and this is an excellent story because of that. I've had family members survive cancer, and I'm glad to still have them. And I've lost a grandfather before I could ever know him. This is a touchy subject for a lot of people, but you gave the characters the dignity and respect that they deserve.

This...actually does make sense.

As xkcd says, fuck cancer. It seemed like you had personal experience with it, although I hope not.

Such a beautiful story, and a poignant and hopeful ending. Lovely work, thanks so much for writing this.

This is my all time favourite Derpy origin story and I want to thank you for writing it!

>>349185349185 I think you covered most everything I wanted to say.

I had a little trouble getting into it because I didn't like Derpy's character at the start, and it felt weird because when Mac talks of Derpy being 'bold and outgoing' I couldn't really relate that to the early characterisation. Still, I can't emphasise the strength of the ending enough. Bucketfuls of pain and worry, and just a single grain of hope to start swinging the other way, yet it's exactly enough to really spike the emotion in the last paragraph.

Masterfully done.

-Scott