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    • Would it Matter?
      Twilight does some thinking

      4,932 words · 10,195 views · 370 likes · 8 dislikes
    • If You Hear Me, Let Me Know
      As Steel grows older, he begins to question the circumstances of his adoption
      57,631 words · 4,515 views · 367 likes · 8 dislikes
    • A Little Piece of Heaven
      Follow the story of Rainbow Dash and Spitfire (Prequel to Family Mares)
      19,283 words · 4,335 views · 310 likes · 7 dislikes
    • The Older I Get
      Will I get over it?
      1,835 words · 2,025 views · 187 likes · 3 dislikes
    • The Fears of Yesterday
      43,149 words · 5,675 views · 436 likes · 12 dislikes
    • Family Mares
      34,875 words · 10,984 views · 648 likes · 30 dislikes
    • Tick Tock
      2,899 words · 983 views · 80 likes · 1 dislikes
    • I Am Stretched On Your Grave
      1,153 words · 1,336 views · 147 likes · 8 dislikes
    • Nightmare
      11,608 words · 484 views · 44 likes · 1 dislikes
    • The Artifact
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    Twilight sat in her library sipping on tea. She wasn't harboring regrets yet. It was the second day, the day the restraints came off. She wasn't planning on killing anypony during her next visit to Canterlot this afternoon, just apply relatively minor injuries. She had planned it down to a tee. She had been able to pull memories from Princess Celestia without her noticing while she was being restrained. Only memories involving Scootaloo's custody case. One of those memories was the address of the Crestfall residence in Canterlot. The only memory Twilight needed to carry out her plan quickly and efficiently. She was going to tell her friends her plan as soon as she could be sure that all their restraints would be removed. She could have removed them herself, but she needed time to plan every detail of her plan, down to how she would do it if she was the only pony willing to take aggressive action. During this train of thought, she heard a knock at the library door. She opened it with her magic. And as soon as she saw the pony on the other side rage welled within her.

    "Princess Celestia."

    "Twilight Sparkle, I received troubling news recently as to your extra curricular study activities. If you're planning to act on these impulses that are fueled by rage alone, I will be forced to place you under arrest. I do not want to do this for any reason. Please Twilight, be rational. Don't let your emotions get in the way of clear judgement."

    "Is that what you did with Scootaloo's case? Use 'clear judgement'?" Twilight did not hide her anger at her former teacher. Although Twilight could never fully hate the Princess, she certainly didn't like her at the moment.

    "I followed the laws I established. But that is another recent turn of events that brought me here. Scootaloo is no longer with Mr. Crestfall. As far as he is concerned, she is to be sent to the Canterlot Youth Home. He brought her birth certificate and other necessary legal documents to hand her over to them, but not Scootaloo." Twilight's anger began to fade and confusion took it's place.

    "What do you mean? Where could she have gone?"

    "The only home she knows. I'm here to personally escort her to the Canterlot Youth Home where she is to be put up for adoption."

    "That means anypony could take her in!" Twilight was no longer angry. Her mission accomplished (though not by her) she had no reason to be angry. Guilt quickly took it's place. "Princess, we have to get Spitfire and Rainbow Dash there first, before-"

    "I'll speak to them regarding the issue of Scootaloo. Now as to your recent studies. What did you think you were going to accomplish with the spells you were researching?" Princess Celestia was concerned for Twilight. Never had she thought her student could allow so much rage in her heart that it would take control over her.

    "I'm...I...I don't know what I was thinking. I just wanted to make her father pay for what he did to her."

    "Everypony does, but violence is not the way to go about it. I want him to pay for his crimes to, but unfortunately all I can give him is a short jail sentence. A year tops. It breaks my heart as much as yours Twilight, but you know what kind of example it would set if I don't follow the laws I require of all of you."

    "But you knew what was going on with her family. I sent you all those letters about it."

    "Where your word is evidence enough for me personally it isn't evidence enough for the courts I've established. I have to hear the case just like any other judge."

    "I...understand." Twilight felt awful for what she had almost done. She knew why the Princess ruled as she did. Although she still disagreed with her ruling, she knew that Celestia was the ruler for a reason. She was able to make the difficult decisions when most ponies couldn't. "How am I to be punished for my research?"

    "You won't be. Twilight, you have learned everything I have to teach you and more. You are more powerful with magic than I likely ever will be. I will not continue to be your teacher." Twilight was shocked. Did she just...graduate? Or something along those lines?

    "I...I don't...thank you Princess. Is it alright if I continue to send you letters anyway?"

    "Twilight I will always be your friend. You may keep in touch as much as you please. Now, as much as I would like to stay, I have a family to officially unite. I look forward to hearing from you soon Twilight." With a powerful flap of her wings the Princess rose in the air. Her guards quickly followed suit. After they left Twilight walked over to the book she had been reading.

    "I guess now is as good a time as any to test what I've learned." She chuckled to herself. She knew that despite her anger she never would have been able to hurt anypony. She levitated the book and attempted to destroy it with the magic she had learned. Yet as powerful as Twilight's magic was, she no longer possessed the needed anger to perform any of the spells that the book had taught her. Luckily Spike still had a fire going from the night before. It pained Twilight to burn a book, but the knowledge contained within this particular book was not something that should exist in Equestria. She tossed it in and watched as it was engulfed in flames.

    Scootaloo flexed her wings. The adrenaline rush that resulted from the fight with her father had allowed her to ignore the pain she felt in them after he threw her against the wall of his Canterlot home. Her wings had been opened when she hit, and given that the wall was made of wood and not clouds meant that there would be damage done to them. Rainbow and Spitfire were going to take her to Nurse Redheart after the restraints were released from their own wings. The fact that their wings were restrained was the only reason Scootaloo wasn't irritated when she found her adoptive parents making out on the floor when she walked in instead of finding them at least planning how to bring her home. She couldn't imagine being in their position right now. Not being able to fly or even flex their wings. They were essentially under house arrest. Scootaloo looked around her room. She spotted the guitar Rainbow had given her. 'Might as well give it a shot.' She thought to herself as she fitted the talons around her hooves. She picked it up and began to play. And it was as if she had been playing her whole life.

    Spitfire was making lunch when she heard Scootaloo's first guitar solo. At first she didn't know what was going on. When she recognized the sound as a guitar her jaw dropped. She ran to Scootaloo's room to confirm her suspicions and was speechless when she saw Scootaloo playing as if she had been doing so her entire life.

    "The doctor said you'd have all of Rainbow's knowledge regarding that instrument. He never said you'd be shredding as soon as you picked it up."

    "It just feels...right. I think I'm in love." Scootaloo became lost in the music she was creating. Spitfire was expecting flames to begin shooting off the fretboard at any second. Scootaloo was amazing. Rainbow poked her head in.

    "Buck kid, I never expected you to pick up that quickly." Scootaloo didn't hear her. She was lost. All that mattered to her was her music. She closed her eyes and let her ears decide how her talons would manipulate the fretboard. Rainbow and Spitfire stepped out of the room. Spitfire rested her head against her wife as they watched Scootaloo.

    "You never told me you were that good when you played Rainbow."

    "I don't remember being that good. I mean, I had ability, but what she's doing isn't just from what I learned. She's a natural that got 5 year's worth of lessons and practice crammed into her head. I never could think of awesome solos that easy." Spitfire kissed Rainbow.

    "I have to go finish lunch. I'll let you know when it's ready."

    "I'm sure I'll smell it before you tell me." Spitfire laughed and went off to finish cooking. Scootaloo played a bit slower, while still maintaining an upbeat and bright mood with her solo. A joyful tear came from Rainbow's eye. A bright flash appeared on Scootaloo's flank and a picture of a guitar with a burning fretboard appeared. Scootaloo didn't notice. All that mattered to her was the music flowing from her amplifier. As she finished the solo, she opened her eyes.

    "Mom, I think I found out my special talent."

    "So do I. Take a look." Rainbow pointed to Scootaloo's flank. Scootaloo looked down. Her eyes widened. Her scream was heard throughout the house. Spitfire ran to her room to see what was wrong and found Rainbow on the floor laughing and Scootaloo bouncing up and down like a filly who just got asked to prom. Tank slowly retreated back inside his shell.

    "What's going-" Spitfire noticed the image on Scootaloo's flank and smiled. "I think some celebration is in order." This time Scootaloo heard her. "Lunch is almost ready. Come on, let's grab some food and we'll go to Sugarcube Corner to celebrate when Rainbow and I can fly again." Scootaloo's ears perked up. Sugarcube Corner was her favorite treat. She used to save whatever bits she could scrape together so she could enjoy a delicious pastry from the tiny bakery. As the young family sat around the table and enjoyed their lunch, the conversation drifted to how Scootaloo had gotten away from her dad. During the course of the last two days they were so happy that they were back together that it didn't matter to them just how it got that way. Scootaloo explained the night. Tears came to all three of them as she told them about her near-suicide. What came next ended up being a nice long storytelling session...

    Two days ago...

    Scootaloo untied the extension cord from the fan. It would come in handy for her coming encounter with her father. She knew she was going to take a beating in the coming altercation, but it was time she stood up to him. She walked to the door where she heard her father's loud snoring. She kicked open the door. Her parents jumped up in bed.

    "SCOOTALOO! WHAT THE HAY ARE YOU DOING?!" Jade was pissed.

    "I'm not living with you anymore Jade. I'm sick of the way you treat mom and me. Living with Rainbow and Spitfire taught me that I'm more than your ragdoll. I'm not going to put up with it anymore." It felt right to Scootaloo to call her father by his name. She never did view him as a father figure anyway.

    "You will not use those names in my household!" Jade was losing his temper. Not exactly a feat on Scootaloo's part but she needed him to have a clouded mind if she stood any chance of getting out of this intact.

    "Rainbow. Dash."

    "Scootaloo..."

    "Spitfire. Dash." Jade got out of bed and quickly advanced towards his daughter. Scootaloo took flight. Jade stepped back. When had she learned to fly?" His confusion gave Scootaloo the opportunity she needed to fly quickly by him and plant a hoof in his muzzle. He spat a tooth on the ground and took flight. Scootaloo's mother had cowered in the corner of the room. Scootaloo unwrapped the extension cord from it's position around her right hoof and attacked Jade with it. Blood seeped from the wound dampened his deep green coat, giving a spot of black color over his right eye. He bolted towards Scootaloo and slammed her against a wall. Scootaloo wasn't strong enough to push him away, so he was able to land several powerful hits against her before she slipped away and wrapped the cord around his neck. He struggled against her and almost succeeded in wrestling her away before she landed on his back. Her effort had only granted her momentary control. He landed on the ground and bucked her off of his back. Scootaloo recovered in the air, but she lost her weapon.

    "Buck!" She muttered to herself. That was her only advantage against him. Well, save one. Agility. She sped in the air around Jade. She succeeded only in pissing him off something fierce. Until she dove straight for his head. She landed a powerful strike against his lower jaw. A very audible crack was heard before he let out a loud scream. He turned to Scootaloo with fire in his eyes. He flew after her. He caught her and threw her to the floor. He put his hooves around her neck and lifted her off the floor.

    "If I ever see you again...I WILL kill you. He threw her through the bedroom window. He had suspected her wings were broken from the hits against the wall and floor, but to his dismay she spread her wings and landed gracefully on the ground outside. She began picking pieces of glass out of her skin. Blood seeped from the many wounds on her body, but she didn't care. Her face bore an ear to ear grin. She stood up to her father. She got kicked out. She could go back with Rainbow and Spitfire without any trouble. She took flight and headed toward her home. Toward Ponyville.

    "And that's how I got here." Scootaloo finished. Rainbow and Spitfire were speechless. How does one react to finding out their daughter is a hard flank? Before either of the mares could speak, the doorbell rang. Rainbow opened it. When she saw Princess Celestia outside, she took a defensive position.

    "You're not taking her back." She said flatly. Celestia's horn glowed bright and enveloped Scootaloo. The bandages that had covered her body fell away, and her wounds sealed. Rainbow and Spitfire were stunned. Then the Princess' magic enveloped them and the restraints on their wings released.

    "I believe a couple of mares have adoption papers to sign." The Princess said, a smile appearing on her face.

    Comments ( 45 )

    #1 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    YAY NEW CHAPTAH!!!

    #2 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    YAY! RESOLUTION!!! And I think playing guitar being Scoot's special talent is adorable :twilightsmile:

    #3 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Wooo!!!!!!

    #4 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    The fight: :rainbowderp: :applejackconfused: :derpyderp1: :twilightoops: :scootangel:

    This chapter: :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss: :raritystarry: :twilightsmile: :yay:

    That is all.

    #5 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I have a feeling we're still not finished with Jade. :ajsleepy:

    #6 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74416

    That stems from my love of music and all things rock related

    Sadly, I don't play guitar yet but I'm getting to be a pretty good bass player

    #7 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Scoot can kick some serious flank! I guess if there was one good thing that came out of Jade Crestfall's treatment of Scootaloo is that it made her tough as nails. I'm surprised that Celestia actually went and said that in terms of magic Twilight is for a fact stronger than she'll ever be. Imagine Trixie's face if she heard Celestia admit that.

    Interesting to have Scoot get a music related Cutie Mark. Guess she was just using the wrong instrument before.

    #8 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    So, was that the end?

    #9 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74438

    Oh, hay no, there's more to come. I promise you that :pinkiehappy:

    #10 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    YUS!!!!

    #11 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You should submit this to EQD :pinkiehappy:

    #12 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I wish Twilight would have saved that book.  Hooves down Scoots won that fight and whipped his flack.  I hope the other CMC's wont be made about Scoots getting her Cutie Mark with out them .

    Great work!

    #13 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Now THAT...THAT there is a happy ending to a chapter. The question is, will you continue (which I hope you find a way to) or will you stop here?

    If you do continue the next challenge is what will happen next?

    Also, Celestia just INSTA-HEALED Scootaloo...epicness.

    Well, I just sat and read all 20 chapters now considering you posted this one directly after I finished the 19th...all in one sitting. That's how interesting it was to me. I applaud you. This is currently my #1 fave. :ajsmug:

    #14 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Sorry for double post but just now saw that you are in fact continuing, and that. is. just. AWESOME.

    #15 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    woohoo, go guitarists! :yay: *Begins playing purple haze*

    #16 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74421

    Well said my friend

    Well said

    #17 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Is Scoot's guitar electric or acoustic?

    #18 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74539

    Electric. I thought I mentioned an amplifier...If I forgot to then oh well

    #19 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    clop clop clop clop

    not in that way i mean, i mean the way ponies clap :3

    good job, i really liked the ending of this chapter

    #20 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74427

    Those are bad instruments, we all know the only real one is the banjo, now i just need to learn how to play one, after i learned drums it is so hard to play non rythemic instruments.....

    CUTIE MARK BANJO TEACHERS IS A-GO!

    :scootangel:

    #21 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #23 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yes happy endings :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:...is their more?

    #24 · 74w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74549

    I second that.

    #25 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Good save there.:pinkiehappy:

    Great Story!

    #26 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    interesting

    #27 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    HAPPY ENDING TIME!!!!!!!!

    Oh wait... its not over yet? Waaaaaa? Theirs more coming? Really? Positive? You sure there buddy? Well then, um... Don't mind me... *Throws congrats   on a happy ending cake*

    #28 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I found an error!!!!! How the buck could spitfire put her wing around rainbow if her wings were restrained????? It's the one when scootaloo says " it just feels right" part!!!!!

    #29 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Near the end of the paragraph after it!!

    #30 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Celestia still hasn't made up for her lack of judgement, but all in all, it was a good chapter.

    #31 · 74w, 3d ago · · ·
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    ADOPTION PAPERS ADOPTION PAPERS ADOPTION PAPERS!!!!!!!!!! YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!!!!!!!!!!!

    I'm ecstatic. Perfect way to end this chapter! :rainbowlaugh:

    Guitar cutie mark :rainbowkiss:. I've never loved Scootaloo as much as I did the moment she got that cutie mark. And she's not even one of the characters I really like. Awesome. :pinkiehappy:

    And wow, I don't check here for 10 hours and when I get back on there's a two-chapter update and then epilogue? Damnit! Now no one will read my comments. :twilightangry2:

    #32 · 73w, 3d ago · · ·
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    but i wanted twilight to kick jade's crotch =(

    #33 · 71w, 6d ago · · ·
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    NO I DIDN'T CRY WHEN SCOOTALOO GOT HER CUTIE MARK, I JUST GOT SOMETHING IN MY EYE.

    AND THINKING ABOUT IT IS PUTTING SOMETHING ELSE IN MY EYE RIGHT NOW

    #34 · 71w, 20h ago · · ·
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    Sigh *grabs shirt of them huggin*

    #35 · 69w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Is their a tears of joy emotion available? There needs so be :D:yay:

    #36 · 65w, 4d ago · · ·
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    :twilightsmile: > :trollestia: ?!

    Da buck? Definitely the first time I've ever seen that! Sure, Twi's powerful, but Trollestia is an ALICORN. And she controls the SUN. That implies a certain indomitable standing in the cosmic order of super-powered heavyweights.

    #37 · 63w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Seriously if celestia told me that and waited for a minute to tell me that i needed to sign adoption papers there wouldnt be a princess left to rule equestria.. well except for luna

    #38 · 56w, 5d ago · · 1 ·
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    That sounds altolike how i got away from my Dad and moved in with my adoptive parents except he bashed me throught the wall and i wanted to cry but i fought he stabbed me  and i kept fighting i didnt give up i was throught the front door and limped all the back to the true home i knew i limped for 7 miles but i left him a suprize in his spice drawer he is allergec to chillie powder so i replaced the itallian seasoning with chillie powder i was ingered man i wish that princess celistia was there wo heal the gash i had in my head and all the other wonds sometimes i wonder if i wold have ended it all but my real family my adoptive family loves me and i love them :heart:

    #39 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    *sees scoots it playing guitar and I grab mine and play rock lobster*

    #40 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well, looks like i won't be needing this for awhile.

    ORBITAL FRIENDSHIP CANNON SYSTEMS SHUTTING DOWN...

    SYSTEMS OFLINE.

    STATUS: FULL BATTERY CAPACITY.

    START TIME: 3 sec.

    #41 · 45w, 18h ago · · ·
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    Oh yes, she can also read her master's mind. Twilight Sparkle is serious business. :twilightangry2:

    >>235589 Perhaps she doesn't mean more powerful, so much, as more adept. Like, there is nothing left about form or style for Celestia to teach her.

    #42 · 39w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Yay.:yay:

    #43 · 36w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Scootaloo u r such a hard flank and awesome to boot:scootangel:

    #44 · 22w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>74416 Here's Resolution.

    ...

    1650x1080

    #45 · 19w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I already said it.. BADASS! SCOOTS' A BADASS!

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