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Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie dress up as superheroes and head out to fight crime - or boredom. Same thing, really. When Pinkie Pie reveals that her favorite superhero is even cooler than Daring Do, trying to find an opportunity for heroics won't be the only thing gnawing on Rainbow's mind.
"She could almost understand why AJ wore that lame hat of hers all the time. It was like putting on a pair of sunglasses, every time. Poke hat, receive instant cool points."
That line made me giggle.
I thought I recognized the premise of this from something Kits said. Good on you for making it a reality.
Ok, some further commentary.
First of all, what worked.
Fluttershy understanding what was really going on beneath the surface worked. Worked really well. Worked surprisingly well, in fact, and actually served as one of the most touching parts of the story.
Twilight deliberately misunderstanding the costume also got the biggest laugh from the story from me. The more I thought about it, the more funny it gone. 
The repeated symbolism of heat, and the multiple ways it was used, all worked really well for me.
A lot of other stuff worked very well too, but nothing else that I can pick out from the herd.
What I thought didn't work primarily was the abruptness of the ending. The weather being an issue was rather abrupt, and felt very deus ex machina to interrupt a fight in progress and provide an opportunity for Rainbow Dash to be Rainbow Dash the hero, which is all fine and good... except it was too blatant that it was slapped into there for that purpose. I caught the foreshadowing earlier with the breeze Rainbow felt, but I would have liked to see more of it. A think a few more references to the developing situation would have enabled the reader to get to the crisis before the characters did, and made it feel less ad hoc without changing the scene itself at all.
The final thing to say isn't so much a complaint as a note. I feel this is a story that mostly serves as a dose of happy to those who are already fans of Rainbow Pie. That isn't a bad thing, but I can't help but compare with Rainbow Dash's Best Plan Ever, which helped define the couple for me as an OTP 
and is definitely the thing you've written most comparable to this. Maybe it's my bias from how touched I was by RDBPE, but while I loved this story, I doubt I'll be rereading it as frequently as I have the earlier work. Time will tell.
At this point, I should say that I understand this is something you whipped up because you loved the idea of it from Kit's suggestion and you weren't setting out to right the BEST THING EVAAAAAAAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11111111111111one. It was a light, fun read, and on that account, it definately succeeded brilliantly.
Again, it's worth noting that for all I bitch and moan, I thought the story was excellent and I loved it. Can't wait for the adventure story to follow.
I agree with Arco Iris. This is fairly good, but it would have been so much better without the shipping. It seems forced, like you're trying to include shipping simply for the sake of shipping. It just doesn't work in this particular story.
I would probably have given this a thumbs-up, but the unwarranted shipping brings it down just enough that I cannot honestly do so. It's a good story, just not as good as it could be.
>>852105 Thank you very much!
>>852140 ...Oh my. Dinner first, sir or madam! Maybe I'll come to love you as a commenter? Commentator? I don't even know.
>>852267 You know it's good, shush now, quiet now, it's time to be quiet-and-accept-Cloudy's-thanks!
>>852278 Thank you, I'm glad to hear it! Little chance of me stopping writing anytime soon.
>>852313 >>852328 >>852332 Yay! Thank you for reading!
>>852407 >>852442 Pretty much exactly this! Put on the spot, Dash would of course realize she is the awesomest. She'll nom humble pie if it's all she has to eat, but it's never been her favorite. (Seriously though, Dash might not have the ego to do that outright, but it's Pinkie - she might just have assumed Dash agreed with her that Dash is the best.)
>>852524 Yet at the same time, unlike Twilight, Pinkie is far too polite to correct other ponies. Hummus is, and continues to be, a problem. (Also: thank you!)
>>852526 I.. wasn't, but now I am. And now I have to watch it, because that one's hilarious.
>>852562 Badgering does work, yay! But yeah, I giggled a bit typing that out, too, I was just hoping it wasn't too much.
>>852575 It's tagged right up there, so I'm sorry if it's not to your tastes, but thank you for reading at any rate!
>>852701 Yay! Thank you for the comment, and thanks for reading, too!
>>852705 Hah, I doubt it, but thanks!
>>852756 Oh, thank you for the feedback! Let's see.
Regarding Fluttershy, I'm incredibly glad to hear that. I was poked by one of the ponies who pre-read and gave feedback to change the wording on exactly that bit, so I did. On a whim, ten minutes before submitting, I added a little more to it, so this is incredibly validating. But then, I've always been an incurable softie for Fluttershy friendshipping.
>The repeated symbolism of heat, and the multiple ways it was used, all worked really well for me.
I wondered if that was too heavy or if it was just right, I really did.
Now, regarding the ending, if it's perceived as improperly foreshadowed, that's, well, that's something I know I frequently struggle with. I am almost never too overt, it seems. When I think I am being blatantly obvious, I'm doing it right, and when I think I have something nicely and lightly foreshadowed, I am misunderstood or it passes readers by. I think I simply adjust poorly from being a writer to trying to understand a reader's perspective, since I hold all the cards. I was prodded by Couch Crusader, Kits and Corma to try to foreshadow it better, and I thought I'd made it better.
At the same time, I'm not sure what to say regarding its actual role and position in the time, it was placed there simply because the entire fic was meant to be very go-fast and high energy. Not sure what went wrong there, but I'm a little outside my comfort zone writing shortfics. I see other authors like Donny's Boy write fics that carry a point in half this length. I don't get that.
>The final thing to say isn't so much a complaint as a note. I feel this is a story that mostly serves as a dose of happy to those who are already fans of Rainbow Pie.
I can totally see that, actually. I've written so much PinkieDash, it's getting harder and harder for me to actually start at square one every time.
Again, thank you for reading, and thank you for your thoughts!
>>852857 Your thumbs are of course your own to control, but thank you for reading at any rate! I had some similar comments - the shipping feeling forced - on Best Plan by people who are not fans of shipping in general. In that case, many people were vocal in their disagreement of exactly this, saying they couldn't separate the fic from the ship. I built this as a shipfic from the ground and up, so if anything, I guess I may have been too subtle.
Sorry if that comes across as crass or defensive, not at all my intention, and I'm not trying to change your mind or berate you for your point of view, merely explaining why I disagree - it's very, very hard for an author to "disagree" with critique without coming off as an ass, blech.
Fantastic story. When it comes to PinkieDash, you're in a league of your own. I guessed from the first time it was brought up that Rainbow was Pinkie's hero, but that didn't take away any of the suspense. If anything it made me want to see the conclusion even more. Also, I loved the fact that they were "helping" Applebloom do her homework dressed as superheroes. That type of image makes me laugh in so many ways, the first being their inability to actually help her.
Actually, I don't think Twilight was purposefully faking not recognizing Daring. I think the point was that anyone who reads Daring Do projects themselves onto the character the way Dash did in the original episode, which is why Daring Do was just a palette swap of Dash. Hence, Pinkie didn't recognize her at first because she pictured Daring as pink and Twilight didn't recognize her either because she pictured Daring with a straight-cut mane. Although I may have totally misunderstood something. She might've been faking not knowing it just because.
>>852972 "Too subtle". That's a great way to describe it, actually. The shipping was subtle, and it would have been okay if it had stayed subtle. Making it not-so-subtle at the end is a big shock; such a huge shift in style is very jarring to the reader, and the story isn't long enough for a good gradual buildup from subtle to overt. The sensation is kind of like driving around in the countryside and listening to peaceful music... then hitting a road construction area while the car in front of you starts blasting heavy metal music. Maybe not quite that extreme, but the point is there.
I didn't even notice the romance tag, to be honest. I just saw the color in my peripheral vision and assumed it was a "Random" or "Slice of Life" tag, as their colors are similar, and most of the content of the story supported the "Slice of Life" conclusion.
I suggest that, if nothing else, you should at least add the "Slice of Life" tag to this as well. It fits the story, and by seeing two tags, people will be more likely to pay attention to them and not make the same conclusion-jumping mistake I made.
You know...you did a good thing here.
I'm actually surprised not to see this in the featured box. But I know that it will.
Though I will admit that I figured it would be Rainbow Dash in the end, I find it to be a pleasant one time reading. Especially when this world needs heroes. True heroes.
I felt that the idea behind Rainbow Dash being Pinkie's real hero is amazing. It shows how she likes Rainbow Dash for who she is, and Rainbow Dash likes her for who she is. I know it sounds a bit corny for a lesson to get out of it, but it is something I noticed sooo..oh well.
So all in all, props for the writing style and nice, cute ending. Hope to see you on the front of this site soon.
You know, I think I could learn to like this Kits character.
/cough as if I didn't already /cough
Yeah, Author has written one story that wasn't shipping... and it could have been made shipping with about a 500 word revision.
And while you weren't responding to me directly with the comment to AA, you responded to a comment responding to me (say that entire sentence five times fast) so I feel obliged to point out that while I definately think AA's self insert theory of Daring Do's appearance is pretty awesome, it still reads pretty clear to me as a TAKE THAT over her Nightmare Night costume not being appreciated :) 
>>852988 Yeah, it was pretty much impossible to hide Pinkie Pie's hero's identity, so instead I just went full-on obvious, hah. Writing every single damn scene was fun and a huge treat, really, especially the openings to most scenes, the homework included! Also, thank you for reading!
>>853065 Thanks!
>>853207 We'll see, but I sincerely doubt it - thanks anyway!
>>853247 Aw, thank you - Still Waters is excellent pony-dragon-whatever-thing, that's what he is!
>>853261 I don't think the world is ready for that meeting. Alternatively, Deadpool is Pinkie and vice versa. Thank you for reading!
>>853349 I think I speak for the majority of the world when I say /shudder.
>>853350 I'm just glad if it was fun and not lolold, because Obliviousbow Dash is arguably overdone at this point, but I love her so - thanks!
>>853472 >>853498 >>854717 Actually, when I wrote that whole bit, I had those who pre-read it interpret it both ways, and I kind of encouraged/tried to make that valid. My personal interpretation is that it's simply more fun to assume that everypony self-inserts themselves as Daring Do, but if people get hung up on the fact that it does have a cover and don't assume that the canon ep is Dash's PoV, then there's a way out via Starswirl, too!
>>853645 The intent is rather heavily telegraphed though - subtly at first, then with increasing intensity. If you look again, you'll see a half-dozen tells at least. Regarding you missing the romance tag, I really don't know what to say to that since, well, that would've explained/removed the unpleasant surprise for you. I can't really be expected to write [CAUTION: SHIPPING!] for those who miss the only tag that the story has.
Again, I truly do respect your opinion, and I accept that - I just don't feel I'm to blame when the story is correctly tagged. Sorry. :\
>>853679 Oh dear. Um. I'm.. sorry?
>>854276 Thanks! I'm pretty much immune to corn at this point. I never let corniness stop me, I mean, hah. The whole idea, using the word "hero", it's not exactly new, either - Donny made a rather adorable FlutterDash friendship story with the same thematic, and I have a half-finished FlutterDashFire story that I hope to dust off.
That said? Hells to the yes, and thank you for reading!
>>854344 >>854717 I think it's unfair to expect people to know me and my inclinations, and that they'll change their expectances accordingly - if I'd mistagged it, I'd be far more receptive to that critique though!
>>854749 You win a cookie! Did you notice the colors on the cover art's text? I love what Kits did there.
>>854771 Yeah, again, that's definitively what's in the words now, but I figure people who read this a little, hm, lighter? People like me, who think "this would be funny" matters more than "this is correct and supported here and here" every time, may use the same theory as I. Either you read Twi's part as the defining one and go "oh Pinkie, you card", or you roll with Pinkie's comment and then find another way to explain Twi's mutterings.
Sorry. My tendency to be imprecise, it's terrible.
Is so cute! 
Is just so cute! 
Oh Cloudy. You make me smile so much, haha. Adorable and lots and lots of fun, which exactly what a PinkieDash should be. Fun.
Just c'mere and give me a hug already!
However...
Lucky Shoes, Vanquisher of a Thousand Sorrows
Who is this?! It's been bugging me for the entire story! Haha. I want to know who this pony is so badly! Now that's a story that would be awesome.
And so Kits' dream has come true at long last! I had seen him mention this idea several times, and I was actually quite intrigued by it. So when this showed up on the list of new stories, I was delighted to see that someone had finally decided to take up the challenge, so to speak. That someone being CloudySkies made the whole thing even better.
I still consider "Where Your Heart Is" to be the second best PinkieDash I have ever read, and loved all of your other fics as well, so I obviously had high expectations of this fic. And while I don't think it's your greatest story ever, I definitely wasn't disappointed. It's well written, it's well characterized, it's humorous, it's cute and it's PinkieDash. There's nothing more I could ask for, really.
Let me just say I absolutely love the way you had Pinkie interact with Dash in this story. Pinkie's first lines in "Griffon the Brush Off" can pretty much be summed up as "And that is why Dash is the most awesome pony EVER!", after all, so I really did enjoy seeing that mentality return in this fic. And of course Rainbow responds to this behavior in her usual clueless manner, which was most amusing.
I also loved how Fluttershy just instantly saw what was really going. I do love Fluttershy-Rainbow friendshipping and believe Fluttershy truly does know Rainbow very well, so her being able to instantly see through the outward appearances and notice what was really going on was a very nice touch in my opinion.
As you stated in your blog post about this story, one of the greatest strengths of the PinkieDash ship is the amount of fun these two ponies are capable of having. The sheer amount of energy and the lack of inhibitions both of these ponies possess truly allows them to do all kinds of ridiculous, wacky and fun things most other ponies wouldn't even conceive of. And I really do feel this fic is a marvellous example of that, what with the two of them deciding to parade around Ponyville wearing superhero costumes, just for the hell of it. It's great!
I must concur with the other people in this thread who said the ending was a bit off, though. To me, it just felt like a very sudden shift in the middle of some nice dialogue. And then they just kiss and the story is over. I don't know, it just felt a bit strange to me..
"She could almost understand why AJ wore that lame hat of hers all the time. It was like putting on a pair of sunglasses, every time. Poke hat, receive instant cool points."
That made me laugh.
I like to try and give as indepth reviews as I can...and usually I fail miserably.
But I'll start off by saying the recurring theme of heat was very well done, as was Fluttershy's scene. But what I really want to talk about is the running gag of who Pinkie's hro was. Because that's what it was. A joke. It's one thing to not make an attempt to hide something, but this was just too much. It was just hammered on so much that I simultaneously wanted to laugh and groan in frustration everytime it came up, because all I could think was "dear god, Dash! Catch a clue will you!?" The main reason I bring this up as problem though, is that it makes Pinkie suddenly catching after all this that she was jealous...not work. I'm surprised Pinkie couldnlt feel it radiating off of her. Toning it down would have helped a lot. For example, not having Dash snap until the very end, where after everything, all of that to still be one upped by Pikie's Hero, was just too much for her to endure silently.
That said, this is still an awsome story which I am going to favorite. And if I understand some of the comments, there's a story by you called Dash's Best Plan Ever(or similar) that is demanding my attention.
Makokam out.
>>855087 Thank you very much for words, comments and fave all! I'm very glad to hear it! But please don't die. Pinkie is scared of zombie ponies.
>>855101 Well, up you go, sir or madam - and thank you!
>>855410 Thanks! Glad you enjoyed!
>>855423 O hi there! Well, it's "down to a science" for better or for worse, I guess. Not everypony enjoys the way I write her - I get critique for it now and then, but I've given up trying to change. There seems to be far more people enjoying the way I write her than those who dislike it, and I haven't been able to eke out proper feedback from those who felt Dash didn't sit right with them. Usually, I think it's the result of me being too vague with foreshadowing, particularly in the case of Best Plan and WEMS.
Thank you, though!
>>855601 *Grab-neckhugs* Thank you! Very glad to hear it - and as far as good old Lucky Shoes goes, well, that's a story for another time...
Or is it.
Seriously though, I just cranked out silliness. If I'm writing an OC story, it's gonna be Winter Sun's chronicles - and fact is, I've made some (minor) progress in taking that from the "maybe" stage to the "idea!" stage!
>>855701 Well, see, that's awesome to hear! I don't think you should have to actively fight against content you dislike, but if you enjoyed a story despite parts you usually avoid, then that's a compliment. Thanks!
>>856434 Haha, I think it's a bit of a long shot to use the word "dream" here - some ponies wanted this to take a far saucier direction, you know, but I kind of resisted that.
Anyway, every time people poke at the Fluttershy part here, I get tingly. I am so ridiculously weak to that sort of stuff, hearin' one more person say it worked for them? Feather in my cap and a hug 'round the neck. Thank you!
I wonder about the end thing though. When I wrote this, I really felt resolved, I didn't see the problem, but I guess I can understand where it's coming from, at least. I'm not sure how I would change it, were I to do so - expanding upon the fic is right out, since it's all about speed and excitement. Likely, I'd look for ways to increase the heat before the tornado - have them talk more before she flies off, less after, maybe?
I generally don't edit my fics after publishing unless there are glaring holes, but I do carry feedback with me on to the next story, always, so thank you for that! Shortfics have never been my forté, but that's no excuse - I'm thankful for every perspective. That, and for every read, so thank you for that, too!
>>856729 Thank you very much for reading, and for your thoughts, too! I am not sure if I'm reading it entirely correct, or how much you disliked the whole gag that was at the center of the story, but I've had it pointed out to me, aye. The "problem" is that the story could never really have hidden the fact identity of Pinkie Pie's hero from the reader.
Okay, that's a lie. I could have, but in the format of a short fic with high speed, I simply found that there was a lot more humor to be had if I made it obvious, and made that an element of the (attempted) humor and used it to fuel Dash's jealousy and play it up. If you experienced this as downright frustrating, though, I'm really sorry, I just don't know what I could have changed without radically altering the story and making it something that it's not.
If you do read Best Plan, I'd love your thoughts on it! It doesn't rely on reader information level at all, and while the aims are similar, the mood is more varied, and it's probably a more emotional read. Thanks again!
All I meant is that there's a difference between not being able to hide something and beating us over the head with it.
And I by no means had a problem with Dash's jealousy, it just felt weird that Pinkie took so long to get it despite the fact that Dash was practically turning green with jealousy. If you'd dialed it back so that Dash wasn't snaping two or three scenes back I think it would have worked beter.
And now because I'm on a phone and can't copy reply data...
Now how hard is it to believe that Dash doesn't always pick up on what's going on, even when the perfectly obvious cues are perfectly obvious?
Exactly. And if Pinkie played her like a trumpet, well, that's what Pinkie does.
A success from the first paragraph, if you ask me.
This is a great story. I thought Rainbow would've been angry since Pinkie was dressing as Mare Do Well. It would be bringing up bad memories for Rainbow from the the time she was humiliated and made a foal of. All in all though, a great fic and wonderful RainbowPie story.
[Romance] tagged fic = Shipping, if you don't like shipping why are you reading romance fics? <_< An echo down the hall of common sense, deserted by the living and the norm.
That said... this is absolutely fantastic, Cloudy. The interactions were completely adorable, and the reveal at the end was all for Dash, we could tell pretty easily who it was going to be, and I liked that part... felt like we were sharing a secret with Pinkie even though she wasn't the in-focus of the story. Dashfire might be my OTP for Dash, but all these great Pinkiedash stories coming up are giving it some serious competition, not the least of all Pinkie Pie's Hero.
I figured the same thing. But at the same time, maybe the memories weren't so bad because it helped her realize what she was doing wrong and her friends went through all that trouble to help her out.
Honesty!
Kindness!
Generosity!
Laughter!
Magic!
By our powers combined, we are...MARE DO WELL!
>____________>
There are a lot of episodes like that, really. A good example is the one where Twilight flips out because she was about to be late writing a lesson to Celestia. It seemed very off for her friends to brush her off like that when she was so very obviously distressed.
A bit of a downfall is we look at the episodes from our perspective, but they're geared towards the much younger audience. ^.^
>>859657 I think another issue is the fact that it was disappointing to see MDW was too easy to find out who it was. Not to mention, it seemed that Twilight and the others acted mean towards Rainbow about this whole lesson. I understand what they're trying to do, but this really came out badly.
Another job well done, Cloudy. Nothing in particular jumped out at me as incorrect while I read, and I don't think there are any bones to be picked with the plot progression. I really thought that you cap tured Rainbow Dash nearly perfectly with this story. Considering that she's the primary character, that puts you pretty firmly on the fast track to success. Another thing that you did really well was your pacing. The story was short enough that nothing ever dragged, and it was long enough to build anticipation. Obviously, readers know that the shipping is coming, but you built up to it in a way such that it mattered. I found most everything that Pinkie said to be exceedingly cute, and Dash's jealousy was pretty adorable as well most of the time. You also managed to inject a fair bit of humor into this, despite w&t you may say about your ability to write comedy. Overall, I found this to be cute, lighthearted, and fun to read. I'm excited to see this longer adventure fic you're planning (I sure hope that it has some shipping) and I'm eagerly awaiting the day that you get around to writing some Twinkie.
Indeed. It's something else you kinda see crop up. The parasprite episode, the incident with the cymbals for example. Winter Wrap-Up, one of my favorite episodes, Twilight is pretty much completely ignored til the very end.
Again, it's basically because we see this from our perspective. You actually see it a LOT in kids' cartoons, from now and from way back. Like Jem and the Holograms...Jem's adversaries should have been arrested and sued SO MANY TIMES....lol.
As long as they don't pull anything to make me despise the series, I'm good!
>>856977 More stories? Definitively! More short stories? Not before I finish my longfic and WEMS3. Thank you, though!
>>857280 The reason I'm a bit reluctant to agree is because that entire process of obliviousness and reaction/non-reaction is basically the story, the title, and the point. But yeah, not too much else to say about that!
>>857357 Well, thank you for reading, that's all I will say!
>>857442 >>857485 Bah. Well. Thank you. So there! (Didn't see that coming, honest.)
>>857489 Glad to hear it, and thank you, truly!
>>857517 >>858169 Thank you for your comment, and thank you for reading!
>>858200 Ship wars! To your guns men! No, really, thanks, and thanks for reading! Me, I'm pretty much a fan of every ship, I just end up writing a lot of PinkieDash for some reason.
>>858313 Well, and me? I'm happy you took the time to leave a comment, thank you!
>>858612 I still feel it's a "point" one can critique because it's arguably overdone, but in this fic, that obliviousness is kinda the point, so yeah, hah. Besides, that sorta stuff is comic/animation show bread and butter. Regardless, thank you!
>>858732 Thanks for the comment, glad to hear it! As for the MDW thing, I still say fans overdramaticize the result of the episode. Dash was smiling at the end, and even if a part of the pony fan base dislikes the episode and feels Dash got the short end of the stick, she didn't seem to think so, and I kind of have to respect that. (Personally, yes, I feel the other 5 were kinda being dicks.)
>>858866 Let's be honest, even Batman would struggle with Pinkie Do Well.
>>858901 Thank you very much for your kind words! I like the secret-sharing perspective, I really do.
Fact of the matter is, I've been wanting to do DashFire for a long while, but the story I had kind of crashed after 10-15k words, and is now pending revival - but then, as a different ship, hrmph. :|
>>858915 Thank you! I don't think you'll ever see me writing anything sad, certainly nothing tragic.
>>859243 Heya! Thank-you, and you certainly shall be having more, haha. Writey writey, always!
>>859426 I, uh, what?
>>859691 Yeah, pretty much this. I know a lot of people are very, very upset with how Rarity got away with being a douche in Sweet and Elite, and there, too, I "agree" - and as an added bonus, the "moral" comes off as very questionable. I just choose to wear my rose colored glasses there and emphasize that she did choose, and she chose the right side, rather than get stuck on what she did wrong.
Hell, if I write something Rari-centric, I'll probably poke at how she's frustrated that she's learned her lesson so many times, yet she keeps making the same mistakes. Nothing deeply psychological and terrible, just a light-hearted poke.
>>859690 Thank-you for the comment, and thanks for reading, too! What I mean about comedy is that there's a distinction between comedy and humor; I tend to suffuse any fic I write with humor, certainly. Sometimes, such as in Within and Without, you can even argue that it is detrimental if you're looking for a darker read (something I don't do), but I'm helpless to stop poking fun at stuff.
Yet for all this, I can't write actual comedy. Comedy is a fic where the entire story's purpose is making you laugh, it's a genre just like romance, right? And I don't have what it takes for that. I can't write clever funny fics like Cupcakes' Pinkie Pie's Incredible Interplanetary Super Prank or any of the other great comedy writers because I lack the ability to come up with that stuff. I do romance, apparently, and I have no problem with that, hah.
Thanks, though! The upcoming adventure is most certainly a shipping adventure, though with a twist, and I do eventually want to try every ship, Twinkie included!
>>860065 From the sounds of it, you're not the only one who wants the next few hours, hum, haha.
>>860256 Thank you very much! I'm glad!
>>860359 The question is of course how much Twilight expected/understood, hm!
>>860552 Hey, that smells like a compliment to me. Thank you, and thanks for reading!
Adoooorbs. So adorbs. I loved the characterizations for everyone here. I thought Twi's "annoyed mother" vibe and Fluttershy's quiet little smile were nice touches, and they were both amusing, as well. Especially enjoyed Twilight's crack about Dash not getting her Starswirl costume. Heh.
The ending was perhaps a touch too quickly paced, but I did think the running gag about Pinkie's "favorite hero" worked. Pinkie's been shown to have Selective Obliviousness in the show, and her ability to perceive when she's annoying a pony to the point of outburst is hit or miss, at best. It made sense to me that it wasn't until the end that she really got just how upset Rainbow Dash was getting. I also continue to really like your characterization of Rainbow Dash, who's such a lovable mixture of egotistical brashness and heartbreaking insecurity, with a dollop of hilarious insensitivity and selfishness on top.
Fave part, though, was definitely this:
“You’re my hero, you silly filly. It’s you. It’s always been you.”
This is just a really lovely line. And y'know? Pinkie Pie speaks truth. The very beginning of "Griffon the Brush-Off" is just a pure shot of Pinkie Pie hero-worshiping and mooning over Rainbow Dash.
Cloudy, I hope you realize that you are the sole reason why I am slowly jumping on board with this RainbowPie thing. Your writing and portrayals just are too well done and fun to not enjoy. Honestly, I blame you for the influx of bubbly and sugary sweet joy in my day
Also, to get the negative out of the way first:
“Seriously, girls, I’m busy! I appreciate the very insistent offer, but I’m sure there’s some ‘evil’ to be vanquished at Applejack’s farm or Fluttershy’s cottage, both conveniently enough far away from here.”
Yeah, I believe you can see what is wrong
Well, crap, I have to go now... Don't worry, I'll be back with the rest of my thoughts. Prepare yourself, in the meantime 
(Sorry to end on that sour note D= )
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