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  • E No Recipe For Perfection

    Rarity struggles to overcome an art block. It takes a very special pony to show Rarity who she is.
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  • E Twice as Bright

    Celestia likes her routine. Tax reforms, grants, laws and construction projects are all a princess needs to be content. It's just her luck that for Pinkie Pie, "content" is not nearly enough.
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  • E Ode to Friendship

    Octavia feels trapped in the stage that is her world. Will a certain pink pony be able to help her?
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  • T Within and Without

    Luna takes the Elements of Harmony on a journey in more ways than one.
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  • E Building Bridges

    Action-and-confusion-filled fast-paced shipping, yay!
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  • E Lost and Found

    AJ and FS are lost, trying to get home. Meanwhile Dash struggles to understand what FS means to her.
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  • T Taken for Granite

    Ask Applejack, and she'll tell you Pinkie Pie can be a few apples short of a bushel. They've always been good friends, but what could they possibly have in common? Turns out there is an answer to that question.
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  • E Where Earth Meets Sky

    Rainbow Dash suspects Applejack is stealing her oldest friend from her. Is it really that simple?
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Blog Posts31

  • 63w, 6d

    First, I want to thank everyone who's contributed to, or read, Taken for Granite. The comments and the mails have been far in excess of what I expected from an ApplePie ship-fic not featured on EqD.

    I still wonder if I did the right thing in detailing in the authors' notes how hard writing that particular story was for me. Usually, I strive to minimize my own personality because I feel the stories are more important than the individuals who write them. That's the theory, at least, but I think I'm doing a worse job of it with each fic I write. Either way, talking about the process that led to a story is relevant and perhaps interesting to some individuals. Complaining about it being "hard" isn't. At best, it's begging for sympathy. At worst, it changes how people see the story, and that notion fills me with dread.

    Regardless, the story has been well enough received, and now that it's all over, I can say I'm glad to have written it. We're moving on.

    Those who read these blog posts will know I've had quite a few different stories and ideas I've been toying with. I'm really liking the idea of writing another grand adventure along the lines of Lost and Found and Within and Without. I have a temporarily shelved RariLuna political intrigue/adventure/peril/shipping fic, I have a FlutterDash longer-than-long romance that may become adventure-romance, and I have a number of other less-interesting stories that I want to get around to. Which is it then?

    None of the above. I'm going on hiatus for an undetermined period of time.

    A while back, I promised myself I would never give people estimates, and that I would never set deadlines for myself. They are sure-fire ways to kill my joy for writing, and this promise helped me recapture much of my love for putting pen to paper—or hoof to keyboard, as it were.

    I broke another barrier when I managed to let dead fics lie and kill my need to stick with a story until it was done. Being able to not pick back up the FlutterDashFire story I had, being able to shelve RariLuna for this recent ApplePie, those were all victories.

    It's not enough, though.

    My relationship with writing has been problematic for a very long time, and it's not getting better. Some people use ponyfic as therapy, as a means to cope, and as relaxation. AbsoluteAnonymous was very vocal about exactly this. Unless I misunderstood or misremember this, writing was a temporary hobby to her, a process of healing that led to her coming out on top. Me, I think I've written myself sick.

    Until I can figure this out, I'll be out. I'm sorry for not responding to comments in the foreseeable future, and I'm just as sorry that if I return, my OCD attitude to comments will result in a batch of week, month or year-old comments being replied to.

    Naturally, my promise not to set deadlines or give promises might work both ways. I may be writing again next week. I may be writing tomorrow and start posting chapters of some long adventure-fic, but I find it unlikely.

    I'm not saying goodbye forever, but right now, I need the peace that comes with a break.

    36 comments · 1,567 views
  • 67w, 3d
    Incoming Story: Taken for Granite

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  • 70w, 4d
    The Long Summer

    First, I apologize for the long silence. I don't expect people will really have noticed, because that implies people sit on edge waiting for something to happen, for me to do something. Instead, I am the one who gets stressed by inactivity. It goes without saying and without putting it into system that two months' hiatus is worth a lot of stress by that token.

    I'm also sorry for neglecting comments and notes. I'm working on that, and will try to catch up. I've done a terrible job at reading all the things I've said I would, too, for which I am also supremely sorry, but I don't know what more to add to that. I've no real excuse, and will get right back on it as soon as I can.

    On my front of things, I've aborted work on one story, started work on another, and actually sort of almost completed it. It is currently mid-edit and pending cover art, and there is a chance it will be published in a week or two, or a month--thereabouts. Failing that, if I can't beat it into shape, I'll scrap it and start something else.

    I hope you all have had, and continue to have a very pleasant summer. If you're interested in listening to the Muffin Loving Productions guys host me as a guest on a podcast, you can do so here! It was fun, and proves that listening to your own voice later will never be cool.

    Also, I had a birthday somewhere along the line, which led to multiple awesome artpieces being made. Snowtrail and Kits for best pony.

    Back to edits and work.


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  • 84w, 4d
    Next Story, Ideas and Between Fic, W&W/O eBook

    That's one more wrapped up! Thank you, everypony who took time to read Twice as Bright. It's been an absolute blast to write, but I definitively need to re-think and re-consolidate my writing/publishing strategy.

    By which I mean "Cloudy is a dummy who should've never broken his self-made promise not to publish during the writing process after Lost and Found nearly permanently killed his desire to write." The whole re-thinking line is a lot catchier, so we're rolling with that.

    Anyway! Point is, Twice as Bright is done! I am celebrating by staring at excellent, relevant artwork--holy butts that is beautiful and I almost embedded it but I don't know if that's a breach of etiquette--and by planning more stories.

    Breaks are for, um. Well. People who take breaks. I mean, I've had a two day break, I suppose, but you're not here to read about me drinking sugar, eating sugar, and eating things not made of sugar but still covered in or frosted with sugar. You're probably here for:

    More Ponies

    Whenever I finish a story, I like to cleanse my palate. That's a fancy word for scraping your tongue clean. When I first started writing ponyfic, I watched the entire show at least once between each fic. I find this very useful to re-center myself on canon. It probably sounds pretentious or ritualistic, but it's as simple as me valuing starting from scratch very highly.

    Lately, I haven't done this. In part because there are a lot more episodes, and not-writing hurts. In part because, without going into detail, there are elements of season 3 that I did not enjoy as much as I had hoped. Still, this time, I'm going to begin by re-watching the show. The last thing I want is to get mired in my own headcanon.

    It's been surprisingly long since last I watched season 1, and I absolutely cannot wait.

    Second? I plan to read. I plan to read fanfiction I promised I'd read, because I genuinely want to read more fanfic. I plan to read more fanfiction to make a dent in my Read Later list. I plan to read at least one non-pony thing--probably Daetrin's non-pony book, The Demon of Cliffside. I've been wanting to get at that thing for ages now. Before, during and after all this, I'm going to discuss all the ideas I have with my friends.

    And then?

    We write

    If I sound very, um, pompous here, it's probably for a reason. I'm the kind of pony who, in writing, makes faces. If I'm writing Pinkie making a grimace, I'm making the very same grimace. If Rarity looks arch and scoffs at something, I'm staring at my computer screen like its very presence offends me--you get the idea. That I'm writing a long piece on this is because it reflects what I want to write. I'm leaning towards something longer. Something grandiose.

    That's not to say I'm decided yet, and I've said time and again I hate making promises even to myself. I'm just thinking out loud, and all I know is this:

    *The next fic will feature two or more ponies.

    *At least one of these two or more ponies will think that one of the other two ponies is really, really cute/swell/nice.

    What I suspect is this:

    *It probably won't have the majority of its action in Ponyville or Canterlot.

    *It will probably involve perceived or very real peril.

    In short, I'm thinking another adventure along the lines of Within and Without or Lost and Found. When I say "along the lines of," I really only mean "long adventure," and even that's not set in stone, but I will say I'm looking towards W&W/O with fond memories.

    Add to list of things to do before writing: Re-read own adventure fics.

    I have no details, and I have tons of other ideas that may make it into fic. A lot of authors seem to do these compilation posts of ideas for fics and such, and I don't know how interesting it is to most, but if I can mention in no particular order:

    RariLuna slightly-dark/adventure/political/mystery.

    Those who read my earlier blogs will remember this one. It is one of three ideas I had in my mind a while back. Also, when I say "slightly dark," you have to keep in mind how incredibly resistant I am to darkfic and such. What I call "dark" when I write probably doesn't match others' definitions.

    FlutterDash long ship.

    Lost and Found really made me want to explore FlutterDash on a deeper level. This is it. The problem is that I'm not sure I can write another non-adventure ship just yet. It'd be fairly intricate and emotional, but I've done a lot of those lately.

    Other ships/stories I want to do:

    TwiJack - I have an angle that could work. It's Ponyville-centric, so the problem is the same as with FlutterDash, but I really want to do this.

    RariLight - I have some very specific unicorn-centric ideas that could be good. May even be a friendship fic. (Cloudy writing non-ship? Ha!)

    FlutterDash - I have no less than three other ideas for this ship of varying length, though the goal is to use as much as possible for the fic above.

    PinkieShy - Of all the "pure" ships I want to write, this one is very high on the list. Again, same issue as above with it being a pure ship, but if I could make it part of an adventure, I'd be very happy.

    AppleDash - Problematic in that the ship's been done to death. That in and by itself isn't the issue, but that I don't know if I'm stepping on others' hooves is. I have two possible angles, one being rather different from the usual ship formula.

    ApplePie/RariPie - I have semi-similar ideas for these, but I've written so much heavy emotion Pinkie Pie that this will probably go on the back-burner. Also, it's actually the closest to sad that I'll ever want to go. I could write an ApplePie that I'm sure would be a decent read, yet I'd have no desire to read it myself. That is an odd position to be in.

    RariDash - Painful sweetness here, but it needs a framework I haven't worked with yet. One that is neither adventure nor simple long-ship. This will be a challenge, and I'm not convinced yet.

    That's basically what's in my head at the moment. The two ideas I had in the last ficwriting deadspace are still very strong, those being RariLuna and FlutterDash. The PinkieShy idea has basically taken the spot of CellyPie now that that's done. Still, I am almost positive that in reading, watching and talking in the coming weeks, I'll have far more ideas to choose from, and hopefully I'll land on one that convinces me fully from the get-go.

    If you've read this far, well, damn. I thought about cramming some images in here, but I have no idea what those would be. Sprucing it up with images just to make more people read it is silly anyway. I figure people will read if they're interested, and if they are--if you are--I'm flattered.

    In Other News

    There's a reason for that Within and Without tag other than "hey I may write something similar." If you've problems with the downloadable formats available through FiMFiction, there's an awesome guy by name of JeffersonPeters who took it upon himself to provide a superior alternative. Here is a downloadable ePub variant of W&W/O for all your reading pleasure! I don't have a fancy reading thingermabob, but I'm told it's quite good.

    It's worth noting that he used alternative cover art in the .epub file, and the artist hasn't yet responded to the request for permission to use it, but there should be a link with attribution and everything in there. The real problem, though, is that the artist's dA has been taken down since, and redirects. Still working on that.

    That's it! Thank you for your time. If you hate me for abusing your eyes for italics, well, at least I didn't use comic sans. I'm gonna get around to replying to comments on TaB as soon as I can, but know that I've read them all, and that I'm floored (and thankful!) for all the comments!

    53 comments · 762 views
  • 87w, 2d
    March Apologies, Twice as Bright

    I am just leaving a quick note here to say that I'm sorry for not responding to PM's, comments or mails for the moment. I've tried to keep on top of things, but it's just not working out. If you're just tuning in, or if you've recently left a comment or sent me a PM, I am very happy to make your acquaintance, please don't doubt that -- I can only apologize for the delayed response.

    I'm having a bad time of it, and I need to readjust. There's no drama, and everything that's failing is related to my lacking ability to deal with things that are beyond my control.

    Fic updates will go along as planned because quite frankly, I don't know how to stop. Twice as Bright will likely continue at one chapter per week unless something changes.

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  • ...

Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie dress up as superheroes and head out to fight crime - or boredom. Same thing, really. When Pinkie Pie reveals that her favorite superhero is even cooler than Daring Do, trying to find an opportunity for heroics won't be the only thing gnawing on Rainbow's mind.

First Published
3rd Jul 2012
Last Modified
3rd Jul 2012
#1 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

Looks interesting enough.

Edit: That was amazing. Well done. Bravo.

#2 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·


#3 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

I love you as an author.

#4 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

Loved it.  More in depth crit coming after I eat.

Side note.  Kits, on a scale of 1-10, how happy are you right now?

#5 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

Silver: New Cloudy Skies fic detected...

Arm the Sidewinders! :pinkiegasp:


Silver out!

#6 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·


Probably a 9.

I've got two month old babies to vomit and poop on me, so 9 is about as best as can be expected.

I just hope the cover is as good as Cloudy says it is. D:

#7 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

This is really good! Funny and sweet, good buildup and execution, just well done all around! Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

#8 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

THIS SHOWS PROMISE. :trixieshiftleft:


I was correct! Great work! :pinkiehappy:

#9 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·


#10 · 124w, 5d ago · · ·

Cute! :twilightsmile:

#11 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

So Pinkie Pie thought Rainbow Dash would dress up as... Rainbow Dash? :ajbemused:

#12 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

>>852407 Can't you see Dash being cocky enough to consider herself a super hero? Hell, she spent half of the related episodes trying out heroic catchphrases! Of course, none of them even came close to "You just got Sarged!"

#13 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

Hummus problem being meant literally of course, because the whilst the invasion of otherworldly sentient Hummus is unlikely, it would be an interesting problem to help out with if someone had it.

In another note, YAY! that was fun to read.

#14 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

When Rainbow Dash said "Let's go bother Twilight or something." I immediatly thought of the Potter Puppet Pals skit "Bothering Snape." :rainbowlaugh:

#15 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

"She could almost understand why AJ wore that lame hat of hers all the time. It was like putting on a pair of sunglasses, every time. Poke hat, receive instant cool points."

That line made me giggle.

I thought I recognized the premise of this from something Kits said.  Good on you for making it a reality.

#16 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

that was pretty cute...until the shipping scene that is seriously i hate those :ajbemused: its a decent fic though, not like i can do better...

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#18 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


Dashception. :rainbowlaugh:

#19 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

From what I can gather, you set out to write this as something that was light and fun to read.

I can now say you definitely succeeded on both accounts. :yay:


#20 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

Feature fuckin imminent

#21 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

Ok, some further commentary.

First of all, what worked.

Fluttershy understanding what was really going on beneath the surface worked.  Worked really well.  Worked surprisingly well, in fact, and actually served as one of the most touching parts of the story.

Twilight deliberately misunderstanding the costume also got the biggest laugh from the story from me.  The more I thought about it, the more funny it gone. :twilightsmile:

The repeated symbolism of heat, and the multiple ways it was used, all worked really well for me.

A lot of other stuff worked very well too, but nothing else that I can pick out from the herd.

What I thought didn't work primarily was the abruptness of the ending.  The weather being an issue was rather abrupt, and felt very deus ex machina to interrupt a fight in progress and provide an opportunity for Rainbow Dash to be Rainbow Dash the hero, which is all fine and good... except it was too blatant that it was slapped into there for that purpose.  I caught the foreshadowing earlier with the breeze Rainbow felt, but I would have liked to see more of it.  A think a few more references to the developing situation would have enabled the reader to get to the crisis before the characters did, and made it feel less ad hoc without changing the scene itself at all.

The final thing to say isn't so much a complaint as a note.  I feel this is a story that mostly serves as a dose of happy to those who are already fans of Rainbow Pie.  That isn't a bad thing, but I can't help but compare with Rainbow Dash's Best Plan Ever, which helped define the couple for me as an OTP :rainbowdetermined2::pinkiesmile: and is definitely the thing you've written most comparable to this.  Maybe it's my bias from how touched I was by RDBPE, but while I loved this story, I doubt I'll be rereading it as frequently as I have the earlier work.  Time will tell.

At this point, I should say that I understand this is something you whipped up because you loved the idea of it from Kit's suggestion and you weren't setting out to right the BEST THING EVAAAAAAAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11111111111111one.  It was a light, fun read, and on that account, it definately succeeded brilliantly.

Again, it's worth noting that for all I bitch and moan, I thought the story was excellent and I loved it.  Can't wait for the adventure story to follow.

#22 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

I agree with Arco Iris. This is fairly good, but it would have been so much better without the shipping. It seems forced, like you're trying to include shipping simply for the sake of shipping. It just doesn't work in this particular story.

I would probably have given this a thumbs-up, but the unwarranted shipping brings it down just enough that I cannot honestly do so. It's a good story, just not as good as it could be.

#23 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

ahhhh!! cute! my favorite ship ;u; very good story, keep it up!:pinkiehappy:

#24 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

I`m just glad Rainbow remembered that Pinkie was in costume,she would`ve TOTALLY jumped at the chance to attack her rival hero. :rainbowlaugh:

#25 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

>>852105 Thank you very much!

>>852140 ...Oh my. Dinner first, sir or madam! Maybe I'll come to love you as a commenter? Commentator? I don't even know.

>>852267 You know it's good, shush now, quiet now, it's time to be quiet-and-accept-Cloudy's-thanks!

>>852278 Thank you, I'm glad to hear it! Little chance of me stopping writing anytime soon.

>>852313 >>852328 >>852332 Yay! Thank you for reading!

>>852407 >>852442 Pretty much exactly this! Put on the spot, Dash would of course realize she is the awesomest. She'll nom humble pie if it's all she has to eat, but it's never been her favorite. (Seriously though, Dash might not have the ego to do that outright, but it's Pinkie - she might just have assumed Dash agreed with her that Dash is the best.)

>>852524 Yet at the same time, unlike Twilight, Pinkie is far too polite to correct other ponies. Hummus is, and continues to be, a problem. (Also: thank you!)

>>852526 I.. wasn't, but now I am. And now I have to watch it, because that one's hilarious.

>>852562 Badgering does work, yay! But yeah, I giggled a bit typing that out, too, I was just hoping it wasn't too much.

>>852575 It's tagged right up there, so I'm sorry if it's not to your tastes, but thank you for reading at any rate!

>>852701 Yay! Thank you for the comment, and thanks for reading, too!

>>852705 Hah, I doubt it, but thanks!

>>852756 Oh, thank you for the feedback! Let's see.

Regarding Fluttershy, I'm incredibly glad to hear that. I was poked by one of the ponies who pre-read and gave feedback to change the wording on exactly that bit, so I did. On a whim, ten minutes before submitting, I added a little more to it, so this is incredibly validating. But then, I've always been an incurable softie for Fluttershy friendshipping.

>The repeated symbolism of heat, and the multiple ways it was used, all worked really well for me.

I wondered if that was too heavy or if it was just right, I really did.

Now, regarding the ending, if it's perceived as improperly foreshadowed, that's, well, that's something I know I frequently struggle with. I am almost never too overt, it seems. When I think I am being blatantly obvious, I'm doing it right, and when I think I have something nicely and lightly foreshadowed, I am misunderstood or it passes readers by. I think I simply adjust poorly from being a writer to trying to understand a reader's perspective, since I hold all the cards. I was prodded by Couch Crusader, Kits and Corma to try to foreshadow it better, and I thought I'd made it better.

At the same time, I'm not sure what to say regarding its actual role and position in the time, it was placed there simply because the entire fic was meant to be very go-fast and high energy. Not sure what went wrong there, but I'm a little outside my comfort zone writing shortfics. I see other authors like Donny's Boy write fics that carry a point in half this length. I don't get that.

>The final thing to say isn't so much a complaint as a note.  I feel this is a story that mostly serves as a dose of happy to those who are already fans of Rainbow Pie.

I can totally see that, actually. I've written so much PinkieDash, it's getting harder and harder for me to actually start at square one every time.

Again, thank you for reading, and thank you for your thoughts!

>>852857 Your thumbs are of course your own to control, but thank you for reading at any rate! I had some similar comments - the shipping feeling forced - on Best Plan by people who are not fans of shipping in general. In that case, many people were vocal in their disagreement of exactly this, saying they couldn't separate the fic from the ship. I built this as a shipfic from the ground and up, so if anything, I guess I may have been too subtle.

Sorry if that comes across as crass or defensive, not at all my intention, and I'm not trying to change your mind or berate you for your point of view, merely explaining why I disagree - it's very, very hard for an author to "disagree" with critique without coming off as an ass, blech.

#26 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

>>852905 Looking at that profile pic, I can see that, hah! But thank you very much - and thank you for reading!

>>852937 Haha, well, I think Dash's feelings towards the whole MDW mess are vastly played up by fanon, but there was a moment of surprise, it's true!

#27 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


Bro, this story is plastered up as first on the new stories list with over 40 likes, I'll have to kick my own ass if it dont get featured

#28 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

Fantastic story. When it comes to PinkieDash, you're in a league of your own. I guessed from the first time it was brought up that Rainbow was Pinkie's hero, but that didn't take away any of the suspense. If anything it made me want to see the conclusion even more. Also, I loved the fact that they were "helping" Applebloom do her homework dressed as superheroes. That type of image makes me laugh in so many ways, the first being their inability to actually help her.

#29 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

It was cute, except for the shipping at the end. But that's what I get for reading it, and knowing the tag said "Romance", so shame on me. :ajbemused:

#30 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

Once again, as stated before, my feature box senses are tingling and I have yet to read it. Why this happens when I look at a fic on the front page, I'll never know, All I'm gonna say is that I call it and I'm right most of the time.

Reading. :pinkiehappy:

#31 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

The hmummus problem line made me laugh. Very cute stuff. The mask was a good idea. Well written stuff. Still Waters knows good writers:eeyup:

#32 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

ok now i wanna see all the super heros as ponies. i wondeer what would hapen if deadpool met pinky..... uhh never mind.  they would cause 2 mutch 4 th wall breaks. good story

#33 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


Thank you for the response :pinkiehappy:

And I'm still waiting for that beyblade/mlp crossover :trollestia:

#34 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

Very adorable story! Adorkable, even. I think I started face-hoofing halfway through the story at the hilarity of RD COMPLETELY missing all the hints that she was said hero. Rofl. And Twilight purposefully faking not recognizing Daring Do? Epic. :D

#35 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·



Actually, I don't think Twilight was purposefully faking not recognizing Daring. I think the point was that anyone who reads Daring Do projects themselves onto the character the way Dash did in the original episode, which is why Daring Do was just a palette swap of Dash. Hence, Pinkie didn't recognize her at first because she pictured Daring as pink and Twilight didn't recognize her either because she pictured Daring with a straight-cut mane. Although I may have totally misunderstood something. She might've been faking not knowing it just because.

#36 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


Except it's implied she did it on purpose: "barely catching the flash of a grin from Twilight as she left, the unicorn muttering something about “teach you not to get my Starswirl costume-”."

#37 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


Well, yeah, that too. I must've missed that line. Whoops. MY BAD.

#38 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


No big :pinkiehappy: I think Pinkie thinks everypony should be pink...rofl. Especially since Daring Do is pictured on the cover of her books :D

#39 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

This is going somewhere :twilightsmile:

#40 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

>>852972 "Too subtle". That's a great way to describe it, actually. The shipping was subtle, and it would have been okay if it had stayed subtle. Making it not-so-subtle at the end is a big shock; such a huge shift in style is very jarring to the reader, and the story isn't long enough for a good gradual buildup from subtle to overt. The sensation is kind of like driving around in the countryside and listening to peaceful music... then hitting a road construction area while the car in front of you starts blasting heavy metal music. Maybe not quite that extreme, but the point is there.

I didn't even notice the romance tag, to be honest. I just saw the color in my peripheral vision and assumed it was a "Random" or "Slice of Life" tag, as their colors are similar, and most of the content of the story supported the "Slice of Life" conclusion.

I suggest that, if nothing else, you should at least add the "Slice of Life" tag to this as well. It fits the story, and by seeing two tags, people will be more likely to pay attention to them and not make the same conclusion-jumping mistake I made.

#41 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


#42 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

*Reads description*

Looks interesting I guess

*Sees Romance tag*


#43 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

You did a good thing here.

I'm actually surprised not to see this in the featured box. But I know that it will.

Though I will admit that I figured it would be Rainbow Dash in the end, I find it to be a pleasant one time reading. Especially when this world needs heroes. True heroes.

I felt that the idea behind Rainbow Dash being Pinkie's real hero is amazing. It shows how she likes Rainbow Dash for who she is, and Rainbow Dash likes her for who she is. I know it sounds a bit corny for a lesson to get out of it, but it is something I noticed sooo..oh well.

So all in all, props for the writing style and nice, cute ending. Hope to see you on the front of this site soon.

#44 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

People being surprised by romance at this point...

This IS cloudy skies.  Do you know him?

#45 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


That's my take too..


I think it's possible that Twi knew she was Daring AND still self inserted; the hat and vest are distinctive


#46 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


#47 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


You know, I think I could learn to like this Kits character.

/cough as if I didn't already /cough

Yeah, Author has written one story that wasn't shipping... and it could have been made shipping with about a 500 word revision.

And while you weren't responding to me directly with the comment to AA, you responded to a comment responding to me (say that entire sentence five times fast) so I feel obliged to point out that while I definately think AA's self insert theory of Daring Do's appearance is pretty awesome, it still reads pretty clear to me as a TAKE THAT over her Nightmare Night costume not being appreciated :) :twilightsheepish:

#48 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

>>852988 Yeah, it was pretty much impossible to hide Pinkie Pie's hero's identity, so instead I just went full-on obvious, hah. Writing every single damn scene was fun and a huge treat, really, especially the openings to most scenes, the homework included! Also, thank you for reading!

>>853065 Thanks!

>>853207 We'll see, but I sincerely doubt it - thanks anyway!

>>853247 Aw, thank you - Still Waters is excellent pony-dragon-whatever-thing, that's what he is!

>>853261 I don't think the world is ready for that meeting. Alternatively, Deadpool is Pinkie and vice versa. Thank you for reading!

>>853349 I think I speak for the majority of the world when I say /shudder.

>>853350 I'm just glad if it was fun and not lolold, because Obliviousbow Dash is arguably overdone at this point, but I love her so - thanks!

>>853472 >>853498 >>854717 Actually, when I wrote that whole bit, I had those who pre-read it interpret it both ways, and I kind of encouraged/tried to make that valid. My personal interpretation is that it's simply more fun to assume that everypony self-inserts themselves as Daring Do, but if people get hung up on the fact that it does have a cover and don't assume that the canon ep is Dash's PoV, then there's a way out via Starswirl, too!

>>853645 The intent is rather heavily telegraphed though - subtly at first, then with increasing intensity. If you look again, you'll see a half-dozen tells at least. Regarding you missing the romance tag, I really don't know what to say to that since, well, that would've explained/removed the unpleasant surprise for you. I can't really be expected to write [CAUTION: SHIPPING!] for those who miss the only tag that the story has.

Again, I truly do respect your opinion, and I accept that - I just don't feel I'm to blame when the story is correctly tagged. Sorry. :\

>>853679 Oh dear. Um. I'm.. sorry?

>>854276 Thanks! I'm pretty much immune to corn at this point. I never let corniness stop me, I mean, hah. The whole idea, using the word "hero", it's not exactly new, either - Donny made a rather adorable FlutterDash friendship story with the same thematic, and I have a half-finished FlutterDashFire story that I hope to dust off.

That said? Hells to the yes, and thank you for reading!

>>854344 >>854717 I think it's unfair to expect people to know me and my inclinations, and that they'll change their expectances accordingly - if I'd mistagged it, I'd be far more receptive to that critique though!

>>854749 You win a cookie! Did you notice the colors on the cover art's text? I love what Kits did there.

>>854771 Yeah, again, that's definitively what's in the words now, but I figure people who read this a little, hm, lighter? People like me, who think "this would be funny" matters more than "this is correct and supported here and here" every time, may use the same theory as I. Either you read Twi's part as the defining one and go "oh Pinkie, you card", or you roll with Pinkie's comment and then find another way to explain Twi's mutterings.

Sorry. My tendency to be imprecise, it's terrible.

#49 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·

You're rapidly making PinkieDash my favorite ship, Cloudy. Between this and "Where Your Heart Is", the cuteness is bound to kill me soon. :twilightsmile:

Anyway, great story, as usual. Short, funny, and very enjoyable. Another one of your stories added to my Favorites. Nice work! :pinkiehappy:

#50 · 124w, 4d ago · · ·


N-No. I-It's--

--..I'm okay! Just recovering from the lethal dosage of "cute" I just consumed from your story.


Great job.

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