Oh, it's sad...I avoid sad fics...but since it's you, I'll read it!

Oh the juxtaposition and the metaphors in this are great!

It does however say "baron wasteland".  I'd hate to meet him.  Sounds like a big meanie.

Whoa you've gotten really good at this and I am super impressed

That was sad, but the ending made sense and it definitely brought some closure. Great work!

The Official Seal of Awesomeness has been given.

Now. Most are crying over the ending.

I, however, am running full-on logistics mode.

The lunar eclipse that occurred when Murray died....

Some might say it was Luna mourning.

I believe it is some magic coming into play.

Betcha Luna has a new friend on the moon.....

Its a good story and I was wondering if you would like to check my story its also sad, I call it When Darkness Falls I hope you all enjoy and I will be watching you for more amazing stories

>>870213870213>>870289870289>>870359870359>>870369870369>>870766870766 Wow, thanks. I didn't think it was that good

>>870213870213 Tis an oxymoron good sir...glad you liked it

Loved the story and it's getting shared to everyone I know!

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>>870949870949 Thankyou....thank you...thank you....Thank you....Thank you...okay enough Twilight bouncing, just smile and wave boys smile and wave

This is very sad,a very good story too

"If mankind loves mysteries so much then why are we constantly trying to solve them? The more we try to solve a mystery, the less mysteries that our planet will keep."

If I really loved ice cream I'd stop eating it, the more ice cream I eat the less ice cream the world has.  Sorry I couldn't resist

>>871356871356 It's okay...I like comments in any form

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Your story had less to do with ponies and more to do with the human condition. Brilliantly done, just brilliantly done. A great example of the sad-fic genre.

Alright then.  I'll start off by saying it wasn't bad.  Not really suited to my tastes though.  Honestly, if you ask me, it verges on being a little bit Dark with just how unbelievably jaded you made this guy.  As a result, I didn't find it sad.  More pitiful, really.

It's serious and seriously written, so well done there, heh.  Needs another comprehensive full read through edit, though.  Enough mild grammar mistakes and typos to be noticeable--and of course, easily fixable.

Some of your phrasing here or there seems a bit off to me, but that very well could just be me.  I'd suggest reading it aloud to yourself, maybe you'll hear it.  But *shrug*, not that big of a deal.

I think it could just be the balance of it (there's so much build up and then when he meets Luna the story shifts its gears), but your ending feels a little rushed.  Considering how jaded and scarred you've made the fellow, he folds a bit quickly and easily.  I know the story is complete but...With your philosophy-ing style for most of it, maybe a bit of discussion at the end there wouldn't be amiss?  That's completely your choice though.

Like I said, not to my tastes, but I wouldn't particularly call any part of it outright bad.  Just perhaps a little unpolished--which is a typical problem with pieces this deep reaching and serious, when you're inexperienced at it.  So, yeah, nifty piece certainly.

*Single Manly Tear*  Great story...

*sigh* I need something sadder, something with an extreme amount of emotion inducing...stuff, any emotion really, I find myself to be fairly stonehearted

Lol John named her daughter after Luna, how sweet