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Celestia, in an attempt to get her young nephew off his high horse, has Blueblood go outside and meet new ponies. While outside he bumps into a poster of nopony else but The Great and Powerful Trixie. Will anything come of this? Stay tuned and find out!
This fanfic was proofed by the amazing AlicornPriest: http://www.fimfiction.net/user/AlicornPriest
Seems pretty good to me.
The descriptions are well done, and the choice of words isn't too simplistic nor too complex.
Needless to say, this looks like it can get interesting. Well, it's quite an interesting shipping, and I must say I haven't seen it more than once or twice.
Bottom line: Nice start. Now, the real deal starts when Blueblood meets Trixie.
...I'm starting to think too much about it.
A first fanfiction eh? Well let’s take a look at this. Kind of busy so I have to be quick about this:
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The wind silently swept through the fields of the grass surrounding Canterlot castle. Each blade seemed to carry their own story with them. Some stories of despair and others of hope. Our story today is an odd one. One of love and redemption.
This is a good start for setting an atmosphere but I can’t help but feel you went about it the wrong way. Blades of grass are one in a million and there’s little to no distinction between them, making it difficult to say that there was a story with them. The key word here is distinction.
>>Severe repetitious use of wind and weather.
>>Blatant amounts of telling instead of showing.
>>Contradiction of emotions. He took a deep breath to calm himself and then yelled at a servant.
>>Could use minor proofreading
Honestly, this chapter should have, at minimum, hit around three thousand words considering descriptive details, showing vs. telling, etc. It’s not a bad first fanfiction (oh, not by far. I’ve read things that could make flowers wilt) but it’s missing a few elements. I wish I could have gone into further detail with this, but I need to go.
Recap: Good, but it has a lot more untapped potential.
I like this version of Trixie. You actually get the point of the character's career; she is an entertainer which means she'd be less inclined to insult her audience. Blublood isn't as annoying in this story either, so kudos for that.
Peace Out and Tracked.
There is a general rule of mine that if it has a picture, it's not crack. The fact that there is an image means that this is a possibility that could be explored.
Not only is Trixie X Blueblood legit, It's also something the community as a whole can explore.
I do not know how I feel about this.
Regardless, good start sir, you get a like.
Awww, it's good to see Blueblood not being so snobbish and actually concerned for somepony. On the other had I'm actually worried about Trixie's condition, she isn't fairing well as a travelling performer, how will she be able to take care of her malnourishment? Soooo ready for the next chapter!!!
Her shows are not earning her any more bits. Trixie is weak and sick. Now she finds out Celestia want to meet her during dinner that night. I don't think she will be able to be as forthcoming about her condition to Blueblood like she wanted. I just hope a certain lavender unicorn doesn't happen to show up.
I can't think of anything to say in a comment.....Well....I have a picture for Blueblood...
Interesting chapter. At least Trixie is finally getting the medical attention she needs now. I know her and Blueblood are going to have an interesting conversation when she wakes up. I wonder if Celestia is going to contact Twilight and tell her that Trixie is in Canterlot and explain the situation to her.
I hope everything will be okay for Trixie and Blueblood. (I know it will)
Please update soon. I can’t wait for the next chapter.
You're right.He could have, but I found it more interresting to focus on Trixie than Blueblood. You know, since she was the one who decieved him and got sick and all 
I think Trixie may have just put two and two together . Besides, everypony knows that Twilight is always trying to squeeze Friendship Lessons out of any situation that may arise 
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This fiction is a border line masterpiece.
I think you should expand on EVERYTHING. There were definitely some parts where the timeline didnt add up and grammar wasnt much of a problem
Though If you expanded, like having them dating for more than three days when Celestia herself invites her to live in the castle, they start dating, and BlueBlood, a stuck of asshole before this by the way, decides to help fund her and throw is old life away. Even with his 'supposed learnings' from the gala and Celestias interjects no pony changes that quickly even when love is involved.
Either way, the plot was great, the idea was absolutely awesome. All it needs is a little work and some expansion in this humble readers opinion. 
This ship makes a lot of sense. And it's always nice to see stories where Blueblood is a treated fairly rather than just bashed for the sake of bashing him.
Story is pleasing. Characters are convincing. And it's a nice take on Trixie. The end feels a abrupt though. The transition between Trixie's reveal by being hospitalized and the happy ending seems rushed. I expected more baring of souls than just "you should eat more" ---> party!
I normally avoid shipping like the plague when it's the main focus of the story, and so few can pull off a romance interesting enough to grab my attention.
This pairing, however, may prove very amusing, as they're both self-centered, egotistical, arrogant, and narcissistic to the EXTREME!!! I can imagine the initial interactions will be potentially explosive. It's like ramming two 50-kilogram pieces of plutonium together at thousands of kilometers per second.
Well, I'm finished chapter 4 now... Blueblood's crush on Trixie feels very sudden, and his thoughts on it throughout are lacking his typical snobbish character. And their backstage meeting was not the firestorm of jibes at each other one would anticipate with two such overbearing personalities clashing like a match and gasoline, until they realized how similar they were and began to feel a strange (unholy) flame of romance burning. I'd have expected Blueblood and Trixie to be far more vain and uppity in their own minds as they considered their upcoming dinner date; him thinking as though he'd given her a gift of the gods by allowing her to share his presense and she... well, actually it'd be pretty similar, only buffered a bit by the realities of her poverty. If anything, she'd be planning on gold-digging him for as much as she could get out of him.
Basically, these are the two most arrogant, self-absorbed, ill-tempered adult characters in the entire show. I shall keep reading on, hoping the dinner will be the explosive clash I expect when an unstoppable force meets an immovable object.
This dinner feels very weak and incomplete. There are quite a few things that stick out as simply implausible.
>>>They talked about their favorite places and who they were betting on in the next Wonderbolts race. >>>
Trixie's dirt poor and a magical showmare who has only just come to Canterlot. I find it unlikely she'd be able to bluff her way through any manner of discussion on the Wonderbolts. It'd be more of a subject she'd have to blunder through with generalizations and try to change quickly.
>>>It finally hit him that Trixie was, in fact, not royalty. Maybe she was not even rich.>>>
That she has little money should have been instantly obvious simply due to the fact that she's a simple travelling showmare. And the fact that he, as a Prince who frequents all the highest social circles, would already know all the royalty.
This scene should be the BIG SCENE, this should be where they have a clash, where either the massive differences in their upbringing should be slamming into each other like a high-speed trainwreck, or they're walking on eggshells around each other, she trying desperately to keep her poverty and peasant background secret; he attempting to keep his pride under control (which would have benefitted greatly from a build-up in the previous chapters. A tongue-lashing from Celestia to ground his inflated ego after another of his obnoxious declarations of royal perfection and his plans to sweep his prize off her feet with his charm and wit. Something to set the stage for his flawed attempt at humility and manners).
Instead, what could have been a wonderfully dynamic, humorous, and complex part of the tale is rapidly skimmed over with generalized, thin, descriptive narrative and very little direct interaction between the characters. There's virtually no dialog! This is a DATE! Dialog should be the primary focus of this chapter! There is literally more dialog about ordering the soup than in the entire rest of the chapter. As a relationship and story building chapter it fizzles out completely.
Why does everyone forget that ponies can eat flowers and grass?
Trixie may not get 'good' food, but unless she's too arrogant to eat common plants there's no way she should be starving.
Also, I noted that the moment there was any tension between Blueblood and Trixie, primarily the part with Blueblood's 'infectious disease', it's instantly quashed. They make up at once and all the conflict vanishes. Come on now! That's not even remotely realistic! They barely even argue about it.
Ok, time for my final words on this fic.
Imagine a well-written fic is the Great Barrier Reef, filled with all manner of life and color and movement. It's dynamic and invigorating, and you can never be sure what to expect in the myraid nooks and sudden shifts in the currents. You're carried along in an exciting and variegated journey where you await eagerly each new sight.
This fic... is a little goldfish bowl with a plastic castle at the bottom. And the goldfish is floating upside down.
The concept was a solid ship. But the execution of the idea was very dull.
If this was written in any other fandom it woukd be held as an example of amazingly fun writing. Regrettably this fandom is a ridiculously picky bunch with surprisingly high standards, which makes your story, by comparision, feel empty and emotionally crippled in comparision to the apparent 'standard'.
It was a nice read and a fun concept to explore, but it feels like you could've done so much more character development. So basically you've done nothing wrong, but you could've made something better, but I suppose the same could be said about everything.
A sequel hmn? Well... maybe. Currently, I'm looking to write about something a bit different. If I were to write a sequel, it wouldn't be in the near future 
And a clopfic version. I'm not to good at sexying up ponies. Or humans for that matter. Proooobably no to that one.
:Why can't sexy Trixie get some nice, hot Prince action?
Oh hush you.
I will make that later, i'm busy with me own story, at the moment
(End of the Rainbow (Factory))
I will tell you when I start it
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