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The mane six are sent to Earth in a place called Chenarus by the Princess's order. The mission was to restore harmony in a current apocalypse that takes place in that area, and rebuild a civilization on sheer hope. With rogues and bandits constantly lurking around cities and mountains, the six ponies are unsure who to trust, and what to even look for in this loss cause. Even if they restored harmony on Earth, what is it worth for, and what will happen when they leave?

A DayZ crossover from Arma II combined operations.
Rated Teen for minor gore and crude language. (It's an apocalypse. You didn't think it'll be all rainbows and butterflies did you?)

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 79 )

Oh fuck! Not Day-Z! I played it at RTX and got fucked by a zombie horde of 25 :C.

Will read later.

Well it seems interesting...
I'll give a track and see where this leads.

A DayZ/MLP crossover? Just the fucking concept deserves awards by default.

Have fun shooting guns with hooves non unicorns.

Unrelated: Love this mod, Lets me play my namesake rather well.

Related: Now this is something to be watched!

Seems legit so far, a tad bit...boring dare say, but none the less interesting. I'm gonna watch and see what happens.

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"No thanks. While you're gone, I'll eat all the ice cream out of the tub." -- Spike + Home Alone 1 = WIN!

"Discord was freed?" Twilight assumed. -- I love the fact that she just deadpans that statement!

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"No... Twilight, are you ready for a mission - should you choose to accept it?" -- I'm sensing a Mission Impossible reference? I wouldn't know considering that I've never seen anything Mission Impossible.

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After all, you and your friends are their only hope." -- Star Wars, duh.

911146 Looks like you caught them all! :pinkiehappy:

910548 I'm trying to stray away from rushing this story (as if it already isn't) and have it slowly get in to the plot instead of stepping straight to the action. Glad you're sticking around though! :pinkiecrazy:

910451 I agree, it's a great mod! (Thanks for following too :twilightsmile:)

910387 Let's hope so!

Thanks to everyone who liked and followed this story, unfortunately I'll be stuck without Internet until Sunday. If I'm lucky, I'll be able to get the next chapter done by Monday. Sorry for the bad news. :pinkiesad2:

That's creepy. I was actually thinking if making a DayZ crossover was possible a couple hours ago. I guess it is.

Btw what are the runes for? Do they act as teleporters or something?

Also, a major factor that I REALLY need to express despite the chances that you have taken this into consideration: The fact of how much they will change throughout the story (i.e. They'll become battle hardened more like sisters in arms than friends) and how different everypony will view them once they find out where they were and what they had to do to survive (i.e. Scavenge, kill, quite possible make fake alliances with a group of bandits then betray them (Problem for RD and AJ but solved through the fact that RD is showing Loyalty to her friends's survival and AJ is showing Honesty through agreeing with the plan))

I'm viewing this as something sort of like Upheaval: Breaking Point, because it doesn't matter who are you or your background, because if you are involved in a war effort to any degree, Medic, cook, soldier, etc. It'll change ya from what you were to a battle hardened warrior.

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Anywho, that's enough outta me!

916097 I suppose you could say the runes act as teleporters. Runes are basically ancient magic bonded into rocks/stones that could last a significantly longer time than normal magic. They are usually used like tablets, and are smashed on the ground or crushed to be activated.

As for any trust issues and characteristic changes, yes. They will become more like sisters as they learn to trust each other more, but they will always be against violence. (aside from Zeds) Though they encounter many obstacles and there will be some crazy stuff going :pinkiecrazy:

*Sigh* Pinkie Pinkie Pinkie... :facehoof:

Not even a day in the game and they already find my favorite pistol, jerks.

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Ha!
989914
Yea, I know right, it took long enough for me to make one. :pinkiecrazy:
Been playing this game so much, I've kinda lost track of time, and now I have two days before school starts. Fortunately, reading Fallout: Equestria has inspired me to write. :pinkiehappy:
Glad you're happy, and actively following.

991143 My sophomore year of high school starts Aug. 9th.

One more chapter before I head out to school in five minutes.
Snipers:
You love them, but you hate em.

good lord pinkie .... you doomed them all ..... YES :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Turns out my school is sorta stupid, and decided to host the Hello New Kids, Welcome to Freshman Year today, and everyone else doesn't need to come. THANKS FOR TELLING ME AFTER I GOT THERE. [Will be raging for a bit. Till then, playing DayZ and helping people out. Cause that's how I roll] :pinkiehappy:
Before I forget, six notifications in an hour? Thanks so much guys! Comment though (Harsh criticism is welcomed among these parts, along with comments like; HO DAMN, and such). It makes authors feel loved :pinkiehappy:

991180 You, yes you! Americans!
You
Are
Strange!
Here, in Europe, school starts on 1st Octoberl

Okay, harsh cirticism incoming: This was fuckin' great. Loved it! Your writing may need some work, as you are not very descriptive beyond outright stating the obvious ("This happend, causing that, leading them to do this"). Maybe try implying more and telling less. Vasilli's thoughtprocess was very clearly written out here, maybe you should not do that, but rather let his actions speak. Instead of, for example, telling us he wanted the colt and he planned to sneak over AND THEN HAVING IT HAPPEN, have him rather shoot stealthy glances towards the staircase and BAM! surprisingly let Twilight throw the shield up. We would all be like "WTF!" and Vasilli would be like *draw gun* and Twi then would ease the tension by going "Sorry, Sniper and shit".

Simplyfied it a lot, but you get the idea. More description, less "description". 'Kay?

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Still, fav'd for tracking purposes and liked ;)

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Thank you, I have actually noticed my writing is, in fact, horrible when it comes to descriptions. I have been reading many famous fics, and novels to hopefully improve my writing. Thanks for the advice, and I will practice more description and less description.

Comments like those help writers improve, and for that I thank you. :pinkiehappy:

P.S: Glad you liked it

999165

Alright! Glad my amateur critique could help. Anyway, please don't go the Tolkien route here, saw to many good writers do this. There is a limit to descriptive writing, and in my opinion, Tolkien crossed this line at 88 mph LotR. "Oh, hey, a tree. Let's write 4 pages detailing the mossy structure of it's bark!". For an action-heavy setting like this, small, "flashy", high detail descriptions are alright (maybe elaborate how the blood splatters against a window like tiny, bright-red raindrops, while the smoking shell-casing tumbels to the ground) and can help add to the intensity of the scene, but if you go overboard, you will just end up boring your readers.

Can't wait for an update here, I am myself playing DayZ and getting out of a surrounded house under-equipped and with a Rookie in tow (which is exactly the situation Vasilli is stuck in) can be damn hard, and more often than not ended with me staring at the damn respawn-screen.

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Ha! I know that feeling. Though I usually don't mind getting shot at (unless I get hit in the head, or get shot by the person I am helping), cause usually, the people shooting are horrible shots.

No need to worry. I'd probably be too lazy to describe a leaf using four pages. Too. Lazy.

And procrastinating.

Hee hee hee! "They are basically senseless killers who kill for the fun of it."

I Play DayZ, and... Im one of those people. The Joy out of killing people is just sooo... FUN.
I just laugh when they fall dead... I wish Twilight were here to hear me say this!:rainbowlaugh:

999339

I used to be one of them, until it got boring. :pinkiegasp:
Then I started helping people. Occasionally, I search for bandits JUST to kill them.

Be wary... I'm coming for you. :pinkiecrazy:

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I wish I could, but my mom has limited me to an hour a day for any Elektronic that I use in my room. (See what I did there? :rainbowwild:) So unfortunately, over weekdays, I won't be able to put too much time towards writing. As much as I'd like to spend my full hour on it, there won't be much time for me to do anything else; like YouTube and DayZ.

Which brings me to this topic, (I'm rambling aren't I? Will I promise this is the last thing) the "Before Reading" chapter will be updated (with the updates on the bottom of the chapter segregated by a line, and a following date) so instead of blog posts about that kind of stuff, I think that'll be easier. (Also more convenient than posting a separate chapter called, 'READ THIS. UPDATE!' then forget to delete it when whatever problem that was is solved. Not very nice to any new readers :pinkiehappy:)

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^ That's what I should do now. See you till the next update!

are they like gonna find some guy getting eaten by zeds

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I'm not up-to-date on any memes (at least not lately), so I have no idea what any of those things mean. :derpytongue2:

Just started playing the free version of Arma the other day. I know it's not DayZ but at least I get some of it now...

1059614
That's cool!
If you want, I can recommend you to a few cool DayZ commentators. :pinkiehappy:

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I'm so confused to what that means.
Is that a commentator?

If I know anything about DayZ it's that the zombies tend not to really be a problem.

1063947 paulsoaresjr (At least I think that how you spell his name)

His channel

1066748

Oh, I did look that guy up, but i wasn't sure if that was his username. (His username was something else) :pinkiegasp:

1065614

Yea, players are the biggest problem of the game.

So I just read all these in a half hour or so because I happened upon some DayZ commentary a few days ago.

But now there's no more of it left to read. :raritycry:

I'm interested to see where this goes, so I'm tracking you.
And I will find you if you don't update.

I was mostly joking about that.

No, anyways, I like this. So make more. :D

Aw fuck. Just managed to catch up on my faved stories and the first thing I stumble into is you getting writer's block. Damnit. :(

Hope you can get back on your feet soon. I will keep an eye on your account and this story.

1105300

I actually got out of writers block at school while writing an essay. (Boredom seems to put creativity at its finest) As of now, I have thought of four chapters ahead of this one, and currently working on chapter eight now. Glad to see you actually like this story though! :pinkiehappy:

Mh, very good. I liked this one a lot, lot's of action, random derpyness and a good sense of danger.
You had quite a few typos though, for example you wrote "savage" instead of scavenge. You did that often, switching out words for similar-sounding but weirdly unfitting ones.

Other than that, good job. Thoug I am a little worried about Derpy - will you ever explain what the tits happened? Though I do have a feeling the lightning might have been her doing. She has a habit of causing untimely lightning bolts...:pinkiehappy:

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OH GOD, sorry dude! I'll get to it as soon as I can.

No worries, I'll explain the Derpy disappearance.

A DG-2 from the sky? Oh wait, wrong zombies game.

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