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Peregrine Caged


I miss the days--to all my fans and supporters, you were great. I leave a ghost, honest but neglected promises, and just the tip of the worlds I wished to share...

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We've all heard barely the vaguest of details describing the earliest days of Luna and Celestia--that they defeated Discord before ruling Equestria in Harmony; that eventually Luna grew jealous of her sister and the day; that Celestia defeated Luna-turned-Nightmare Moon. But what happened really?

Where does a being like Discord come from? Why are Luna and Celestia so different from everypony else?

Celestia, Luna and Discord may be the only ones alive today who know. In light of the recent near-tragedies that have befallen Equestria, Celestia has endeavored to make a record of this history, her memories, to be delivered to Twilight Sparkle when the time is right. This is result of her efforts.

This is the truth.

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This story will present a (hopefully) canonically safe origin for Discord, Luna and Celestia--where they came from, how they got their powers, why Luna and Celestia are immortal/larger than other ponies/etc. The plan also includes an explanation/detail of Nightmare Moon--the hows and whys.

Furthermore, it will tell the stories of the interactions between these characters, including a bit of CelestiaCord. That portion inspired directly by the excellent song "Monster" by Aviators and Omnipony.

It will also examine the early history of Equestria (though still several hundred years after the founding).

Or at least, that's the plan. (Edit: Tags will be added as I get there--that's probably a more proper way to be. But fully expect this to hit Tragedy and a bit of Romance, eventually.)

Request: Hey, did you read this story and enjoy it? Are you a generous artist with some time on your hands? Or perhaps you'd accept a trade of art for fiction? I'd really like to commission a cover page for this story. Hit me up if you're willing or interested in talking trades.

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Comments ( 10 )

This was the most funniest thing I've ever read! I'm tired Peace out!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy:

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It was funny? *tilts head* Really?

Quite well written and a joy to read. Bit long for a prologue, maybe a chapter or two or even a long oneshot. Though you have a vision and I respect that, the only thing I can say is tighten it up(though admittedly I'm a bit of a minimalist so take it or leave it, it's your style.) So with my (blatantly biased) "critiquing" out of the way, my overall feeling, please keep this up, it's great.

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I expected a comment like this--so why didn't I figure out a proper response? Bwah.
Heh, but yeah, I know it's long. Honestly, I did NOT expect that when I started it. I figured the entire story would be about this length, when I outlined it out. Caught me completely (and pleasantly) off guard when it just kept going. For a while, I contemplated not calling it a prologue, due to its length. But honestly, compared to prologues I've read (granted, that's on a professional level, so it may be moot) it's not that long.

The only reason I kept it a prologue, ultimately, was because this part of the story literally is a prologue and nothing else. Chance and Lucent will appear in later chapters, and some bits may be told from their view, but the main perspective will shift between Discord and Celestia. So this isn't the story proper, technically speaking. ...well, all that and the fact that there wasn't really any natural place to split it as a chapter, to my tastes.

I've a good friend who is a minimalist in her style and had her read it, with no real complaints. But she's familiar with my style, where people here won't be. I've always had a style that's an incredibly delicate balance between properly embellished and purple prose-y as hell. And as you can clearly see here, I am naturally long winded. Heh, soooo I dunno. Still though, it's something I might try and keep in mind when working on chapter one.

I might well be too serious a person to do something that's supposed to be relatively light-hearted like fan fiction. But oh well, we'll see.

Anyways, thanks for the comment. Y'know, I'm throwing these things out there for just that. Though I probably expected too much, since I'm just not getting it, heh. But, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'll keep your suggestion in mind. I hope you enjoy what's to come, as well.

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Well I respect that you listened to the story. That is more important than anything I could possibly say. Perhaps I have read too many prologues from teen fiction which from my recollection weren't very long, in which comes the bias. So while I appreciate you saying you would consider my suggestion, I think it's best if you throw it out if you haven't already.
You have no idea how much it saddens me to hear I will have to wait for later chapters to see Chance and Lucent again. They really are interesting OC's, but you have a vision. It just means I will relish their return more when they come back.
You can never be too serious for fanfiction. It's all about how you look at it. We're just practicing and honing the craft with a more supportive audience than the publishing world.
Next time, I'll try to have a better comment you can actually use.Good luck.

Interesting and very ambitious (like what you said about my story XD) WANT MORE

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Hahaha, thanks! Maybe it is. It doesn't feel like it because inspiration decided to drop the whole thing part and parcel in my lap one day. I honestly have no idea where this story came from, but there it is.
The only thing I'm not looking forward to explaining is Luna's Equestrian Voice. *frowns* I have a general idea, but I'm not sure. Otherwise, I'm pretty confident about my plans on explaining other things in a canonically safe manner.

Alicorns and Draconeques are both a source of fascination for me, And from what you've written so far we have a similar interpretation on their origins which is brilliant.
very well written, if a bit overlong. May have been better to break it up in to two chapters, but that may be just me.

Apart from that, awesome work. Thumbs up!:raritystarry:

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Haha, well you weren't the first to say as much. I simply didn't because this is a true prologue, the rest of the story will be told from Celestia and Discord (mostly). I really didn't expect it to be this long. I figured the whole story would be about that many words.

Grazie for the comment and good words...I love it when people do that, I wish more would, hehe.

This story has been put on hiatus until Season 3 (whether during it or after it, I've yet to decide that)--since I desire it to remain 100% canonically safe, I figure I better just wait. No worries though, I HAVE been working on it and will continue to do so, just don't expect any releases until I can be certain it's safe. Don't wanna put it up and then have to do some big major edit 'cause I contradicted something. Thanks for your understanding.

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