Uncharted seas... Time to chart them!

I just finished replaying Fallout 1 pretty recently.

Nice story

Have only started seeing a LP on Fallout 1. The series was much older then I tought, and that it was 100 years before 3 and Vegas suprised me.

*Sees its about The Vault Dweller and not some pansy from Vault 101*

*NERDGASM*

FINALLY!!

I will save constructive criticism for later... now I will track!

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"Wanderer" and "Vault Dweller" seems perfectly good pony names to me.

>>846188846188 "Lone Wanderer", i pressume?

But still, thanks

never played fallout 1 or 2. but its and interesting concept to see the valt dweller in eqwestria. but will he eat some pony meat?

Interesting, we don't see Fallout stories not involving the Lone Wanderer or the Courier more often than once per blue moon.

But I will give you a tip: slow the hell down. You're rushing through content that could have been made into more than 15,000 words without filler.

This has potential, but it needs some heavy editing.

You've got spelling errors, grammar errors, and missing words all over the place.

The lone wonderer on yet another mission to save the....i dont see why he needs to save this world but im sure you'll think of somthing mabey he died and this is where all the lone wonderes go when they die who know that would be funny though

Yeah, seriously. This has so much potential( I'm going to track it), but you really have a problem with spelling and grammar errors.

THANK YOU for being the first person to actually use the Vault Dweller as the main character in a Fallout fic. That is the only thing I am praising you for, however.

>>847286847286>>848146848146>>848655848655 I know, so i try to find the errors. It's not easy, cause English is not my major language.

ah thanks i was curious about the fall out 1 story.  good story. u shpuld put a spoiler alert for those people who hate having old games sumed up

Looks like someone copy the Vault Dweller's memoirs ...but it's a good way to tell Fallout story to those who haven't played it . Nice interaction from Twilight and Applejack though.

>>846188846188

The Lone Wanderer would DESTROY the Vault Dweller!!!

>>846188846188

Pansy from vault 101?  Yeah, they kinda are a pansy.  I mean, being raised in a perfectly safe fallout bunker, and wanting to leave because your only family abandoned you?  Sheesh, what a sissy,

wow....

Well, at least we can all agree that the Lone Wanderer, Chosen One, and Vault Dweller are each individually tougher than the pansy ass "courier".

And that Ulysses is badass, and the 2 strongest, smartest, toughest, best, and most technologically advanced Fallout factions are the Enclave and Brotherhood of Steel, and the NCR, Legion, Great Khans, and White Legs suck.

>>852976852976

Every single playable character in all of the Fallout games are tough. Vault Dweller for taking on the Master and his army of Unity. The Chosen One vs. Frank Horrigan (the only character, other than Ulysses, to have all 10 in SPECIAL). The Lone Wanderer to take on the rest of the Enclave that weren't killed off by when the Chosen One nuked the oil rig. And the Courier who cheated death, multiple times, took on the Legion, or NCR, or even both. Every character is cool, and have their reason why they change the face of war.  

I personally find the Wanderer the best, as s/he is the only Fallout player character that can get perfect 10's in SPECIAL without cheating, as well as being canonically the youngest. Courier is customizable, but never given, Vault Dweller was 27 (I think, supposedly Albert Cole is the canon VD), Chosen One was 20 (According to word of god), and Lone Wanderer was 19. Youngest, greenest, and able to deactivate a nuclear bomb within a day of leaving the vault.

Oh, and his/her dad is Liam Neeson.

However, one of the things I disliked about FO3 with the lack of a satisfactory final boss. Vault Dweller squared off against the Master/Lieutenant, Chosen One had Frank Horrigan (My favorite), and Courier had Legate Lanius (I know it might be Oliver if you are playing as an evil weiner...)

Wait.... if he's on equestria how will the village areo start?

Yes, I'm just saying that the Courier, though VERY strong, is fairly weak compared to the others, they could handle more bullets to the head in a day than he could in a year, and the factions they fought were each WAAAY bigger than the NCR and Legion combined, but undobtedly he too is still a badass.

Way too rushed.

Oh hey, I'm inspiration? All righty then.

Okay, I'm enjoying this. I haven't played much of the original Fallout, only got the info from the internet. However, you made this pretty easy to understand for someone who has no idea about the game.

Now for the bad things.

Watch out for your capitalisations. I saw a few I's in there that were just i's instead.

You don't have to capitalise the V in vats constantly.

There is some really weird shit happening in the first chapter. Trust me, you'll know it when you see it.

Applejack's accent feels off. She sounds more like a pirate in my head than she does a farmer. I suggest "Yer" instead of "Yar" for "Your".

>>859609859609

The NCR controls almost all of California, and a good portion of land outside that area. The Legion controls Arizona and a good portion of Utah. They are by no means small.

If anything, the Lone Wanderer from Fallout 3 had the smallest enemy, and they made up for it by being better trained, better armed and willing to do almost anything to win.

i feel like he should put up more of a fight with her taking his weapon

I would never, EVER! give up MY weapons THAT easily!

Hell. I wouldnt even let them TOUCH my weapons! SASHA IS MINE!

hmm i would have a hiden knife or something or a pistol. feels 2 short need more.

why you take so long to wright short chapter!?

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>>11069231106923 Because i'm so busy i'll wrote what i could. Even now there's work work work

i see well keep writing its a very good book

CORRECTION! pinkie pie does not RUN sugercube corner she merely works there for the cake family

Okay, if you are willing to fix up your grammar, spelling, etc... I will approve your story to Mojave Express.

Copy and pasting Vault Dweller Memoirs is not acceptable. Why can't you just sum up FO1 story with your own words? You don't see the Courier and Lone Wanderer in other crossover stories introduce themselves by directly quoting Nukapedia.

Also, the first contact scene seems a bit rushed. So you may want to revise the story a bit.

>>853124853124

Wrong, Colonel Royez and Centurion Gaius Magnus both have 10 points in every SPECIAL stat.

(Also, there's the Lone Wanderer.)

>>15692581569258

Also, replace the VD Memorial part.

This actually has potential( though I never played FO1).

Too bad it doesn't look like it will update anytime soon.

Since you haven't updated in a while, I'm removing this from the sub folder.  Resubmit it if you update.

>>22515082251508 Started to update it

>>24061032406103

Alright then.  If the story picks up, I'll add it, we have shitty enough grammar in stories there already that mistakes in this won't make a difference.

if that was me i would have say this "anything can be use as a weapon in the right hands of anyone, hell if i wanted to kill you i won't was my guns at all i use my body or use your books and bet you to death with them."

Dead.

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Let me tell, too busy :c