A bizarre and almost tragic premise. Very well-written, you have a reader.

Yes... this pleases derpy

Seriously, I love the AU kinda stories and this one looks particulary interesting.

This is a brilliant concept for a story, and I really can't wait to see where you go with it!  I'm definitely tracking this one!

Wow.Good, thought I hope Trixie will become nicer. She has potential. Lold at Rarity, queen of Dogs.

>>4587245872

gapaot: I'm hoping to make Trixie more of an antagonist, though I might have her learn a lesson or two. Rarity is almost entirely the reason  I wanted to write this. Well, that and Derpy's gift.

Also thank you very much.

Yay for updates!

I'm starting to see now how you're pairing up the characters and moving the plot, can't wait for the next chapter!

interesting

Wow, even in an alternate reality Trixie is still a pain in the rear.

I have to say I was suprised by Fluttershy's fate in this tale of yours.

As well as the other ponies, even who lost her country style.

This story is making me feel like crying and the only person who could bring them together is

That means that Equestia maybe doom.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great idea for a storyline.

>>4622746227

Yes, Trixie might be even more of a pain in the rear, seeing as she has status with the Princess.

I surprised myself with Fluttershy. I couldn't think of how she could have been affected, so I just changed what happened with the fall a little.

AJ is painful to write.

I can't wait to bring Derpy back into the story.

Very interesting twist to several fates of the Mane 6. I mean living with and her sisters.

and on the Apple farm.

The only thing going normal is Spike living with Twilight, just as it should be.

Nice update overall.  I wish to encourage you upon such great work within such a great idea like this one.

Underachieving and unfulfilled Mane 6 makes me sad  

Seeing how Twilight's situation is already improving and that the other's will improve soon as well makes me happy!

You're awesome, man, keep writing! Plus, it'd be really cool if you could keep up your streak of like 2 chapters a day!!!  Or is that asking too much?   

Please?

Ahahahaha, anyways yeah!  

I got to admit this NEW VERSION of Pinkie Pie, almost scares me given her new attitude on life. At least the old Pinkie Sense is still here in this storyline.

Yet, I wonder if this Pinkie can break the 4th wall like the old one can ?

Also it was a cute moment for Fluttershy and a sad moment for Rianbow Dash.

It seems that Trixie is still making  trouble in this universe.

Plesae do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one.

Awww, & friendship moment. Now that was a nice job upon this chapter and also with AJ's character.

Also great job having Twilight Sparkle meet Rarity and Pinkie for the first time.

I do wonder how Spike will take this version of Rarity ?

Now I cannot wait to see Fluttershy joining the group.

Please do keep putting up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

>>4721947219

I actually haven't decided what to do about Spike's crush on Rarity in this version. Spike kind of only likes Rarity for her looks (shallow shallow Spike), though nothing against Spike, he's a sweetheart and one of my favorite characters not part of the Mane 6. But I haven't quite worked it out, which is part of the reason Pinkie and Rarity didn't immediately join Twi's party.

And thank you for the comment on the AJ and RD friendship moment, I really put a lot of thought into that one.

fantastic

Now thanks to this new chapter and the little note on the bottom,  I do wonder if you may see Sweetie Belle in this tale of yours ?

Nice update indeed as I do Hope Derpy can defuse the situation between Rarity and Twilight in the future. It  was interesting and encouraging to see Derpy comment on the postives of Pinkie and Rarity's strengths.

Also it seems that Trixie may hamper the gang's quest in more ways than one.

I found the twist on Fluttershy's tale to be very interesting as it would be a storyline plot that I would wish that they developed a bit more on the show. I mean Fluttershy as a supervisior to the fillies at school. This has the makings of a good idea all over it.  

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great tale like this one.

>>4840648406

Rarity, unfortunately, doesn't even know Sweetie exists

But I do want both Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo to eventually come in to the story.

So most of the actors are headed towards Ponyville or already there; given that Dashie's biggest obstacle to reverting to type is that she's convinced herself that her betrayal lead to Fluttershy's death, she's going to be 'pleasantly' surprised by the fact that she is alive after all. Also, it's a nice touch to remind us how poor Twilight is at reading social situations.

Just read this chapter and I'm wondering in this "Alternate" world where Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo are?

Maybe not even born.. or maybe even living somewhere else away from everyone.

>>4901049010

Yes, though I'm hoping to draw out Rainbow Dash and Applejack's journey somewhat, so Rainbow Dash can continue with her biggest obstacle and Applejack can continue with hers.

Twilight is completely socially inept in this world. hehe

>>4912649126

They exist, and I want to bring them into the story, but I'm not sure in what capacity. Sweetie Belle, being Rarity's sister, is likely to appear, and I'm thinking Scoots might be a good ego boost for Dashie.

>>4927549275

I wonder if AJ will ask the obvious question "How do you she died, sugarcube?"

Nice idea to re-introduction the infamous Fluttershy "Stare" moment in your storyline. As just like before she used it to defend Applebloom from danger.

I honestly would have thought that either or would make an appearance or two in this chapter since they, sort of, go to the same school as Applebloom and are also blank-fanks.

I must say you are doing a great job in showcasing the relationship between and Fluttershy, but I wonder how will take Fluttershy's appearance when she returns to the barn with Rainbow Dash in tow ?

Nice update upon the little journey  between  Twilight, Pinkie, Rarity, Derpy and Spike. And interesting explaination  the Pinkie sense.

Nice update overall, I must encourage you to keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

interesting

>>4981149811

What aspects did you find interesting?

Sorry to ask, and um, no pressure, just ummm. . .  Answer if you want to. . . if it's OK for me to ask that is. . . But ummm, when can we see another chapter, because it's been a while. . . .

Wow, guess I'll never try to write Fluttershy with that train wreck up there ^

But, yeah. I was wondering when we can expect another chapter. It's been a few days and you haven't said anything so can you tell us what's up? (not like I'm angry or anything, just curious)

>>5668756687

Sorry, it's exam week and so I haven't really had a chance to work on it. Plus, I've started working on it a couple times and gotten stuck, :P So it might be a little while Sorry.

>>5705757057 Totally get it, man! No prob!

I'll just have to be patient I guess.

>>5785957859

Thanks for understanding! I know I got everypony wound up with that two chapters day streak I was on. But I promise I'll have another chapter out when my exams are over, and that's the honest to Celestia truth

Really?REALLY?

PLEASE CONTINUE

This is sad, but at the same time heartwarming. It's really depressing to see someone cry over someone else's apparent death, when you know they're still alive.

I shall be waiting for more.

Just a correction when you wrote, " full out panicj mode." panic does not have a j on it.

Anyway when I saw this updated I gasped out of joy.

>>157256157256

Oops! Dumb fingers. I'll fix that right away. Thanks!

>>157278157278 ANOTHER CHAPTER!!!!!

Sooooo~ glad I didn't un-track this story now, I was worried you had discontinued it (though I never found you say so anywhere).

I'm happy that you've started writing it again!!

Here's a minor thing you could consider: At the end when we got some southern AJ dialogue I think that "y'all" got a little overused. Putting in "ya" would probably sound better. All those "y'all"s were a mouthful . While I'm rambling, I think that "y'all" sort of implies "you all" anyway. "Ya" is just "you". Of course, I think it sounds nice for her to say "y'all" even with a single person in mind every once in a while. Some times it just feels right, you know?

"Rainbow Dash stared at the friend she'd made only days ago who had somehow been a friend she couldn't live without." Hmmm, would I be wrong if I thought that that "been" should be "become"? Just checking, for all I know that's on purpose and I missed the context.

Great fic though. I can't wait to see it get continued. Thanks for putting in all the time and effort you have into this story!

>>157354157354

I used y'all in there because AJ uses "y'all" as a singular more frequently in the show than she uses "ya". I also wanted it to be purposefully repeated (there's a style of writing that uses that, but I forget what it's called. The Declaration of Independence uses it).

And derp. I totally meant to use become there, not been, I think my fingers work faster than my brain sometimes.

Thanks! I'm glad you didn't un-track too.

>>129115129115

Really what? If you have questions about the story, or the premise, or constructive feedback feel free to tell me. But Really and a bunch of confused emoticons doesn't really tell me what I need to work on.

Wow. I was worried you'd forgotten about this. It's a really good story. Very good chapter.

I was wondering when you was going to make another chapter.

>>157761157761

Not forgotten, just gotten unfortunately caught up in a bunch of other stuff. I've just been...not in the right mood to write I guess. Thanks and thanks.

>>158131158131

As I said to Xela, I got caught up in life. This was always at the back of my mind, though.

Stare at Diamond Tiara LIKE A BOSS

This maybe one weird alternate universe, but I am glad to see you doing the Rarity and Spike coupling in this tale.  I mean that moment alone was just a manly moment.

Nice overall update as I cannot wait to see how you do when AJ meets her bother and lil sister again on the farm as well as Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash reunion.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

>>159039159039

Thanks. I wasn't originally going to include Spike's crush, but I started writing and it just kind of came out.  I'll try to keep my updates more frequently.

Man, I can not wait to see Rainbow Dash's reaction when she finds out that Fluttershy is alive & well. After all the emotional turmoil her seeming death caused her, I know that reaction's gonna be a big one. Of course, that's just scraping the surface of what's going to go down once both travelling parties reach Ponyville. I'm looking forward to more from you.

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

"So Fluttershy stayed hidden, wishing to Celestia she had normal wings and a normal cutie mark so she could be normal."

Totally calling the Elements of Harmony cure this like they restored Rarity's tail.

Do want more.

Okay.,...now that the players are all headed in the right direction, it's time for Trixie to appear and screw things up for everyone. Well, her and Twilght "Arbitrary Skeptic" Sparkle.

This is good, but you made a coding error:

For somepony who claimed to be a poor flier, Rainbow Dash could certainly fly fast when she wanted.

***[/center

Fluttershy nervously followed Big Macintosh to the front of the house.

See that? You didn't finish the code to stop the centering. You might want to fix that.

I knew it. I knew the reunion between Fluttershy & Rainbow Dash would be big. I liked Dash's reaction to hearing about the mad doctor who worked on Fluttershy. Element of Loyalty, baby. The reunion between Applejack & family was good too, though I felt the Fluttershy/Rainbow Dash one was more the focus of the chapter.

>>200328200328

Oh thanks! I'd written out the scene before had, so I'd copied and pasted it then added the formatting. I must have accidentally erased the last bracket.

>>200774200774

Yay! You got what I was going for with the element thing. I kind of wanted the RD/Fluttershy reunion to be more the focus. I mean, RD thought Flutterhsy was dead.

>>199930199930

The Trixie plot line is still sort of uncomfortably developing. I was originally going to just have her bullying Twilight, but then I got some feedback on my deviantart account that Trixie was sort of one-dimensional and it didn't really make sense for her to be a bully in this life, so I had to add some background.

>>201015201015

And done a good job of it. The part of her that wants to be Celestia's special student is at war with the part of her that wants to dazzle the crowds.

It seems that the happy ending is near... Unless something new pops out... I would love to see Vinyl Scratch theme more explored.

Dear Celestia the suspense!!

Glad to see Rainbow Dash reunited with Fluttershy. Now maybe the healing can begin.

Touching moment between and within this chapter.

It is nice to see teh two friends reunited after so long.

Nice quick update on Ditzy's quest with the other ponies, although I still don't think Derpy is an insulting name...

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

>>207738207738

I don't think Derpy's an insulting name either, I actually wrote this chapter before the whole Derpy-becomes-canon-people-start-freaking-out thing.

Excellent

Hmm...

I love the idea behind this story

The characters seem a little.. different though? All the characters have basically abandoned everything they have ever known for terrible reasons.

AJ: I wanna go home!

Dash: then go home

AJ: ok, but only if you, the pony I have known for less than two days, come with me.

Dash: but that's where I am trying to avoid!

AJ: please?

Dash: ok!

Derpy needs to be more derpy

You have my thumb up, sir

>>325404325404 ma'am, lmao. :)

Just finished reading it... I am very intrigued...

It must continue!

Oh I love alternate time line stories. I can't wait to read more.

YAY! Time to read

This is great and also somehow hard to read; Not hard as in indecipherable, you understand, but emotionally troubling.

Somehow, it seems to close to real life; as if this would be the fate of the ponies if they lived in our world, had our luck, you know.

Still, I'm looking forward to finishing the rest, probably tomorrow.

"But a strange pony has a special gift of sight, despite her haywire eyes, or perhaps because of, that allows her to see into other realities. "

You were inspired by MiB3, weren't you?

No introduction on Will Smith? I am disappoint... extremely high exceptions (Joking).

Woohoo!

It's great to see this update, PPP (PinkiamenaPiePrincess). You take your time, and I always forget that I'm even following this story, and then POOF! It updates! That really makes my day.

Glad to see you're still around. Good luck with the next chapter, I'll be waiting patiently!

I am liking these counterparts! And this story! And where it's going! And it's plot!

Me Muy Gusta!

But, I am confused as to why Nightmare Moon would postpone her release...

Either the sonic rainboom made it easier in the other world, or it's really some elaborate plan to train the elements of harmony devised by Luna and Celestia.

Guess I'm gonna find out next chapters!

Only thing I must go against is why Big Mac went to the cottage. It's abit unusual if you ask me. I mean, who goes "Hmm, maybe I should go to that abandoned cottage on the edge of town, just to see it." Maybe I missed a detail or somthing.

But now then, Rarity living with Pinkie. I never thought I'd see the day...

Next chapter!

Gooood, all according to plan.

Well, looks like Twilights plans to get herself maimed by a manticore/break her legs from a landslide/terrify herself from weird trees/get stuck behind a river/get stuck behind a chasm...

Way to go Twi!

I always thought the four stars were nukes that blasted NMM out. I perosnally like that idea more, it sounds more epic.

Hmmm.....now that they're getting together, it's pretty much time for Nightmare Moon to come in and make her presence felt.

>>687923687923

My backstory for that, that I thought I'd put in the story, but must've forgotten, is that Big Macintosh wanders the edges of Ponyville in order to find solitude, and happened to stumble upon it.

>>687309687309

No, actually, I haven't seen it. That was my original idea.

>>687852687852

My thoughts on that is because it's a different timeline, it's different timing. Mostly it's just to make the story work.

Man, I love this chapter as it shows established relationships that Rainbow Dash has with Pinkie Pie and Scootaloo in this alternate timeline of the show.

Nice update overall, as i did enjoy the moment of seeing Pinkie and Dashie together.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

Good show ol chap!

But I think you should slow down abit, some of those scenes, like Scootaloo just so happening to see Twilights group and guess Rarity was Sweetie Belles older sister felt abit too sudden and out of nowhere.

And then Scoots running into Rainbow Dash on the way back and admiring her to a level for very limited reasons.... it almost feels forced.

Mind you, this was still fun to read, and the ever so gentle climb back into how it was supposed to be is nice to notice. Just, make it more gentler?

>>690404690404 I was having a bit of a writers block, which is why I brought in Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo, because I couldn't think of where the heck I was going to go.

I wonder if this version of Pinkie pie can break the fourth wall like the original version did ?

>>689564689564

Timing. I still have my doubts on you though.

Loooooooooool

"Princess Celestia's private quest does not depend on me making friends, Spike!"

Sensing some Fluttermac here?

Hmm.... You said Scoots might be an ego boost for Rainbow Dash, but Scoot's admiration was built over the many years that Dashie was there. What if she idolizes the Wonderbolts or something instead?

Still, I shall read on and find out~

>>701932701932 Yes, there's a little bit, well maybe quite a bit, of Fluttermac. And I do bring Scoots in later, and tried to make it clear why she may find Dash interesting :)

everypony has begun to come together

This is really interesting. I can't wait to see more about Twilight.

Also, Pinkamena's sister is Octavia? Okay.

seems a little OOC. Just a bit too fancy and cultured.

The siblings in this one are...interesting.

and Soarin

and Vinyl Scratch

and Octavia

>>4941149411

For and remember, in the show, you don't see them in school until they all become the Cutie Mark Crusaders.

"Spike touched the place where Rarity had kissed his cheek. He usually fell for more conventional beauties, ponies with style and grace. But Rarity was, well, a rarity in that she was both tough and beautiful. He was really glad Twilight had let her join their little adventuring party. Yup...really glad. "

That's hilarious! Cause, you know, Spike normally falls for ponies like Normal Rarity.

I want another chapter and I want it NAOW

>>11426631142663 I will when I can and when I'm not feeling stumped. I've started the next chapter, I just need to figure out where I'm going with it.

I still can't picture Pinkie Pie smiling and laughing with state hair but this is one interesting story

It seems that thanks to Scootaloo Rainbow Dash finally got some morale boost. And cute Sweetie Belle is being cute.