All right, I decided to hop onto this fanfic-writing wagon too. Please comment; any thoughts and critique are welcome!

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Again; please comment and tell me what you think. Thanks!

>>827240827240 *cough cough*

and a small tid-bit of advice: try to separate paragraphs with a single line, it gives it a better feel while reading and makes it easier on the eyes so there is no CELESTIAL WALL OF TEXT. Just saying, but I like it. Not too bad, could use a bit more detail though.

>>827366827366

Derp. Shouldn't be uploading at 3am.

Wall of Text Problem fixed. Thanks for the advice!

>>827582827582 No problem!

I added a gore tag because of the third chapter, though I'm not sure whether it's really necessary. Well, better safe than sorry!

I have to admit, I'm [b]really curious now.  

>>10654151065415

I actually just logged in to announce I may discontinue this fic due to A: not being very proud of it and B: having art to make and other stuff to do.

Knowing that at least someone is actually awaiting the next part... I think I'll get back to writing soon. You may have just saved this fanfic from death.

*Sigh*  If only more people commented. I simply don't get enough feedback.

>>10695301069530

*sigh* I'm afraid I know how you feel ...