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aaaand faved.

>>830069830069

Thanks! Expect more soon!

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Liking and favorite!

Everything's in Italics....

Yea fix that. It's not unreadable, just annoying.

Quite a good read, interesting to say the least. I'm intrigued to read more, but there are a few wording issues here and there you should work on. Just read through your text one last time before publishing (trust me), you'll find a multitude of errors and awkward wordings you never noticed the first time around.

>>830103830103

Fixed the italics problem! And yeah, I do believe it is in need of a good proofread/redo  Updates will come soon I assure you!

I haven't even started reading this, and yet I know that...

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ROW ROW FIGHT THE POWAH!

heavy punctuation and grammar editing needed.

Ooooooh I'm definitely watching this one.

I've always envisioned Bon-Bon as one who could blow up at any minute.

Angry Again - Megadeth

>>830225830225

Me gusta. Oh, and I can edit stuff for you. PM me if your interested.

Will follow out of curiosity. When the story is over, I'll give my two cents.

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This is only going to get funnier.

>>830579830579

Meh.

You get a thumb... and I'll favourite/track this; maybe it'll get better.

"beige pony"? lyra is sea green, not brown no idea what you're smoking...

>>830590830590

I REALLY enjoyed this one, mostly because I had to go to group therapy for drinking and how angry I get after I have a half bottle of rum! Guess it didn't help that I went tipsy and kinda high a few times didn't help. Oh, and I'm gonna say it now, this WILL be featured at some point!

This shows great promise!

That was awesome Favoriting and liking, good job!

Niiiice.

House also approves.

My approves, continue.

>>832795832795

Thank you good sir! The next chapter is already being written. I also have a proof reader now to help enhance the quality of the writing.

>>832803832803 That is progress that my thinking , what some fools refer to as a brain, approves of. As you were.

Lmao this had me dying laughing XD

>>832861832861

I'm glad!

Oh god this was SO funny! poor Lyra, she'll have to get a... a job!

Thanks WaffleMuffin for the recognition,  I Can't wait to see the next chapter!!!

I'm lovin it already but I got to ask, why is Lyra always the one to either suggest sex or be so open about talking about it with company?

I love this story

perfection hahaha

So excited for the next chapter!

So, BDSM will solve all our problemsl? Why did no one tell me sooner?

The prose here is rather purple, especially before Bon-bon goes to her group. I mean, "bags of sleep depravity?" (The word is "deprivation," by the way.) "Gauntlet of wet treachery?" The very first sentence? I also don't understand what that dream sequence is supposed to accomplish.

That said, you are a master at WTF-twists. I'm pretty sure I said "What." at least four times.

Oh, and I'm terribly sorry, but I just can't get over the phrase "gauntlet of wet treachery" for some reason.

DARING DO AND THE GAUNTLET OF WET TREACHERY!

>>844087844087

Yeah I definitely need to work on those sentences and descriptions still. But thanks for pointing that out! I'll work to improve.

Oh, such a mood killer there... At least there's some progress for her.

Threatening other members of the group is always a great way to get your anger management therapy underway

Awesome story.

I would've suggested deep sea diving but bdsm works to

Wow! Bon Bon having anger problems, interesting. The story is amazingly funny and well written, loved Bon Bon's language when she's pissed. Now she is forced to go to the hospital, man that sucks! Please don't keep us in suspense too long I must know what happens to Bon Bon next!

This is hilariously entertaining, but damn it, now I want to know what Big Mac's secret is!

Excellent story so far.  The comedy is evenly paced, the characterisation is great, it's funny and sweet at the same time.  And don't mind the descriptions, it adds to the hilarity.  

>>888209888209

Why thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it I hope to keep improving and making the chapters just as entertaining, if not more.  The next chapter may be out today hopefully!

this story is just plain hilarious  

lyra getting defensive kitty style was quite cute hahaha

Wow.  A few spelling and grammar errors (fire your proofreaders indeed...catapult and cannon), but some emotionally intense moments to diversify the comedy more than make up for it.  I do wonder how they're going to fix all of this, though.  I'd be really surprised if Lyra doesn't  shower her love in apologies sometime soon, and the money troubles do need to be handled as well.  

Eagerly anticipate more.  

...

Win. Just win.

If you want to describe the contents of Berry Punch's gift then I have an idea for an ingredient: Everfree Locoweed, a plant that contains borderline dangerous levels of various naturally occurring hallucinogenic chemicals; sometimes known as "Discord's Magic Carpet Ride" and "Free Weed".

This chapter was great!   I especially loved the mini Bon-Bons and the magic carrot prophecy thing.

It's like... Absinthe...

Everfree Wormwood mixed with the highest quality Equestrian Luna Shade berries.

OH TEH NOES?

Well... mood whiplash, anyone?

Mr. Destiny is my new hero, even if he is just a retardedly-dressed sofa

my reaction

>>895643895643

I sure do hope that's a good thing!

Thanks for using my idea, and I love that little addition to it.  Changeling piss!

>>10593571059357

Wouldn't of thought it up without your comment, so thanks!!

>>10593911059391 Anything for a fellow brony or pegasister.

Lol this chapter had me laughing all the way,

And Berry...

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>>10599421059942

Your comment just made the wait for the next chapter shorter

>>10604591060459

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This is so random it's almost linear...

Also, I share Bonbon's loathing of reality/scare shows.

good fucking god. I couldn't follow three quarters of this chapter. good lord it was difficult.

I'm not sure what I just read... but I was laughing the whole time, so I think I'm ok with this.

>>10893251089325

Uhhh.... sorry?

>>10893861089386

I'm glad!

A raping of the front door of their home stirred Bon-bon awake.

Doesn't sound like the most pleasant of things to wake up to...

This can only end well.

>>10909551090955

Thanks for pointing that out!

>>10911051091105

np. It just caught my eye, and I had trouble ignoring it once I saw it...

I hope Lyra gets better...the chaotic nature of this whole thing makes it less funny for me.  Plot: it's not just something Raindrops is after. *shot* But seriously: the whole Berry poisoning them...that's going to take some "esplainin'".  

I was confused towards the middle but still was laughing my ass off all the same.

And YET again Berry managed to fuck up the day!

Bon-Bon's got a big ass ride built for combat, a level of aggression that would make Khorne himself green with envy, and Faust knows how many miles of Everfree's aggressive flora and fauna between her and the cure for Lyra's condition.

But what about therapy, you say?  I say THIS IS THERAPY!!!

Edit: This is actually the chapter's first post?  Sweet!

Honestly, even after what I suggested,...this I did not see coming.  It's going right back to why people like this story: to see what happens when Bon-Bon goes crazy and how that affects her romance with Lyra.  It's back to the good kind of crazy, I feel, where it's been a bit of tragic crazy, if that makes any sense.  

So much yes, this just got epic.  

>>10972341097234

YES!!!!

>>10972391097239

Actually: let me add to that.  What I really like about this is that now we actually have some way that the story is going.  Before, it was: "Bon-Bon's mad, she's going to have to find happiness."

Now it's:"Lyra's been poisoned!  Lyra's human obsession drove her to build a car! Crazy Bon-Bon to the rescue!"

Now it feels like we have something to look forward to aside from more variations on the same theme (therapy).  It also now justifies Lyra's getting poisoned; now it actually serves the story beautifully.  

Oh, and: adventuring in a forest full of dangerous animals with a sex-addicted pegasus? Why do I get the feeling that wingboner's going to end up sharp enough to cut dragon scales and hot enough to put dragon breath to shame? There's an airbag joke in there somewhere, but I'm not sure what it is.  

>>10972471097247

It's comments like these that keep my drive inspired! It keeps me going and helps to open my mind and think of different possibilities, plans, events and twists. Your comments are helping me so much since I'm a noob! Thank you!

>>10972601097260 I am impressed, very few grammatical errors and a new direction for the story.

Approval! Take all that i have!

>>11027771102777

Hooray!!!

*takes it all and stuffs it in a bag*

I am truly disappointed

That i did not find this fic sooner. It. Is. AMAZING!

>>11036041103604

my face on the first line,

My face on the last line!

and then.... orgy

bon bon vs sweet tooth?

>>11071921107192

PANCAKES.

THAT IS MAH FINAL VERDICT FER DIS STARRY BLAW

ES GUD STURY

This is why I love this series over everything I've read so far.

>>11538871153887

Aww thanks!

It's Lyra, Raindrops! We have to save Lyra!

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Whelp!

Dead?

HAAAAAZAAAAAAAUH!

>>23949992394999

Im actually rewriting this as I comment this :P

>>24043002404300 ... Redundant, don't you think?

And why have you suddenly just returned now of all times?

Unless... You are conforming to canon, aren't you?

>>24054372405437

Well I always saw this really early work of mine quite messy, and just wanted to clear it up and structure it better with the same events and maybe some new ones occuring.

Reforming to canon? Nah, I just like my own view on things.

As for my return... Hm, well I've been meaning to come back. It's just I had issues with the community a while back and it took me some time to move forward. Besides that, just other commitments and new things making things take longer than I expected.

>>24096712409671 Good to know, because if you did, well....

Let me put it this way. You would find yourself in a few unfortunate situations of an undesired annoyance.