"one.The pink "

"though.Then, one day,"

"the library.At the next"

SPACE. AFTER. PERIOD

i think it's pretty much good

>>828122828122

Thanks! :D

I love how you joined all the episodes with rocks in them to fit Tom's story. It was really cool... Who knew rocks could be so interesting?

HA this made my day. A fun and short story.

Good job.

>>830049830049

Rocks are a part of life.

>>830050830050

Thanks!

Rocks have an unbelievably awesome plot.

I needed to go beyond just writing the second season's starter episode.

No, I needed a story.

The only thing that kind of bothered me was that you said Twilight thought Tom was boring...

Meanwhile, he was telling her about Equestrian history that nopony but the princesses really know.

I think Twilight would generally be ecstatic about such things.

That aside, this was pretty great...

I wouldn't be surprised if this hit Featured, actually...

>>830522830522

REALLY?!?!

THANKS!

And Twilight wasn't interested in Tom because he's supposed to get out, and she doesn't want to be down here forever.

>>830608830608 True enough, I suppose...

Yeah, that could go either way.

And yeah, this seemed fairly well-thought-out, there was no horrendous grammar or spelling, the idea isn't completely original, but original nonetheless, and it was overall an interesting read.

The only things you could really do are expand to more episodes (if there are any others with really big rocks) and add a cover picture of Tom (If you are good with art or know someone who is, you could make a picture of Tom actually on Twilight's tail).

>>830630830630

I haven't seen any other stories about rocks.

But...

I know someone who's really good with art.

Check the cover for Zombism Is Magic.

i like how you incorparated discords regime

>>830879830879

It wasn't too hard; but it was fun to think about what a psychotic chaos monster would do, and humor it in the process.

>>830843830843 I think I've seen ONE... maybe... It very well could have been on a different site, though...

*shrug*

And good shtuff, the art I mean. Adding a cover pic is always a good way to get more viewers. It's the equivalent of dangling shiny keys in front of an infant...

This was really good! Tom is one of the best characters on the show! Good use of linking episodes together

>>830084830084 True rocks are pretty hardcore (see what i did there) if you ever feel the need to read another story about Tom might i suggest my fic called "Rock-hard And Wet" .....The title is a little missleading

>>831324831324

TOM'S A ROCK.

I liked adding a rock's possible dialogue, and it was nothing short of a hard task.

I'm not sure whether to laugh at Twilight or feel bad for Tom. TOO MANY CONFLICTING EMOTIONS! AHDHHADHGHSDHAD!

So here's both: \

Great story by the way!

Why did Twilight use a come-to-life spell instead of a levitation?

How do I get my tail out?

BAHAHAHAHA!!!   Ah... That's great...  

>>832433832433

A levitation from her deep basement?

She can't even see the top.

>>832770832770

I'm glad you like my humor here.

That was very cute!

...Dang now I feel sorry for an inanimate object.

>>11679891167989

Eh.

It'll wash away; in time.

That was sad. His life was so fleeting, yet his experience so vast. Twilight didn't even write anything down, he just revealed the true history of Equestria. He was there, damn it!

>>13056551305655

Yep.

This. Is. AMAZING. And kind of sad. And funny. But still amazing. Minor literary errata aside, this definitely deserves a place in the "Featured" box.

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>>15673091567309

That's been said, but never done, sadly...

>>15673121567312

Ah well. FIMFiction's like that, I guess. Sometimes the gems by lesser-known authors (not meaning any insult, and that pun was kind of deliberate) don't ever get rightfully recognized.

>>15673191567319

Ah, yes. I was contemplating turning Tom into a literal diamond, but decided against it.

>>15673341567334

Haha

Mm. Your response below makes sense. Your other works are really great, glad you kept the quality up.

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>>15673501567350

Yeah; I decided against it because of mass issues...

it was good

but actually it was boring sorry

>>15859971585997

Thanks. :D

Who knew a rock could go through so much? I like how you made Discord his "master," too- it seems like the thing he'd do.

A thumb in the air for you, good sir.