I feel empty... Am I alive? Am I dead? Does it matter if I hurt myself, or is all this just a dream?
Uh... Kind of a abrupt ending there... But it's still epic!
Couple of things; Try not to use "She" so much. Not a big problem, but just a little something to perhaps look out for. Also, I think the whole "white figure" could've been a little more dramatic and profound. The ending could've made up much more than it did. Also the ending was a tad abrupt.
That being said, I do like the concept a lot, and you have a clear voice in your writing.
Abrupt ending, but sad as all hell.
Is right, "sad as hell".
Trixie needs more love!
Seems like most fics she's either someones bitch, or being a stupid bitch herself.
She isn't here, but damn, why is Trixie everyones whipping pony?
>>833421833421 >>828877828877 Abrupt? Yes, I agree. It was an attempt at leaving an open ending, but I might have left it too open. Sorry about that. ^.^
>>845035845035 Trixie is actually one of my favourite characters as well, so I try to paint her as a character that just is. That's the way I try to paint any character really. They just are, they're not the center of the universe, and neither the universe's whipping pony.
I didnt mean this story, sorry if you thought I did. I just mean in general.
Somewhere theres a fic "Unlikely Scenario" I believe, where Trixie is created by Twilight from a book with Celestias name on it, and set up to fail, just so she (Twilight) can showoff a little bit.
I never understood how. given her special talent is magic, she gets beat up on so damn easy.
Keep in mind, given she's one of my favorites too, so I may have a little bias showing.
A like and a fave!
One thing, she talks in third or second...person so instead of "I" use "trixie"
"I think I'm here!"
"Trixie thinks she's here!"
Okey dokey lokey?
But I loved it!