Uh... Kind of a abrupt ending there... But it's still epic!

Very nice

Couple of things; Try not to use "She" so much. Not a big problem, but just a little something to perhaps look out for. Also, I think the whole "white figure" could've been a little more dramatic and profound. The ending could've made up much more than it did. Also the ending was a tad abrupt.

That being said, I do like the concept a lot, and you have a clear voice in your writing.

Abrupt ending, but sad as all hell.

>>833421833421

Is right, "sad as hell".

Trixie needs more love!

Seems like most fics she's either someones bitch, or being a stupid bitch herself.

She isn't here, but damn, why is Trixie everyones whipping pony?

Poor Trixie.

>>833421833421 >>828877828877 Abrupt? Yes, I agree. It was an attempt at leaving an open ending, but I might have left it too open. Sorry about that. ^.^

>>845035845035 Trixie is actually one of my favourite characters as well, so I try to paint her as a character that just is. That's the way I try to paint any character really. They just are, they're not the center of the universe, and neither the universe's whipping pony.

Bristewings,

I didnt mean this story, sorry if you thought I did. I just mean in general.

Somewhere theres a fic "Unlikely Scenario" I believe, where Trixie is created by Twilight from a book with Celestias name on it, and set up to fail, just so she (Twilight) can showoff a little bit.

I never understood how. given her special talent is magic, she gets beat up on so damn easy.

Keep in mind, given she's one of my favorites too, so I may have a little bias showing.

....

wow...

A like and a fave!

One thing, she talks in third or second...person so instead of "I" use "trixie"

Example:

"I think I'm here!"

change to:

"Trixie thinks she's here!"

Okey dokey lokey?

But I loved it!

Epilouge?