Twilight Sparkle's dear friend, a human nicknamed Brick, is horribly sick! What kind of sickness could it possibly be and what does he need to get better?! Well, that answer's a bit of a shock to Twilight, but she would do anything for a friend in need!
Then again, where in the world is she going to find chicken noodle soup? After all, most ponies are vegetarians.
Editted by Zephyr
Pre-read by Jay the Stormtrooper
This would've been up a lot sooner, but circumstances happened beyond my control.
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Hmmm, what is this trend on the internet, which the simple minded is always racing to participate in?
Oh, I remember now.
*clears throat*
I announce myself as the undoubtedly, unquestionably, precisely... first.
But of course, as the main editor and idea creating partner, this is only natural.
Ta-ta!
-Zeph The Editor
Ah, look! My favorite mistaken assumption about ponies rears its ugly head once again!
...or so I thought. Then I actually read it. I love how you write Fluttershy here.
7636835 Shh. I know horses are by nature opportunistic omnivores, but there wouldn't be a story if Twilight just had a can of chicken noodle soup in her cabinet.
Also, many thanks. I like to write Flutters as being a human's bestie. After all, she squee'd over Spike immediately after realizing he was a dragon and not a pony. It just makes sense to me and it really mashes my potatoes when she's super shy around a hyper-evolved primate.
Haha great story
This was a nice little read to make me smile a bit on a otherwhise shitty day.^^
Semi-related:
Damn brick. Why can't you stay put!
7636977 Sure okay. "Semi" related.
So, people still think it's funny to shit all over spike?
Good piece. It's well written and funny.
As funny as this was, I feel like Discord and Twi were out of character a bit.
While this was humorous, you lost several points from me for how disrespectful everyone was to Spike. Other than that not bad.
It's sad that Spike is destined to be Twilight's slave. Other than that, good job.
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More related (cos ponies)
Fluttershy was funny, and there were a few chuckles to be had in other parts, but it just seemed so... random. I felt like I'd missed some of the jokes' punchlines, honestly, or that you were trying for running gags but forgot to actually run with them.
The general mean-ness to Spike seemed a bit out of place, too.
Overall, not great, but it made me chuckle a few times and it was short enough not to get boring. Have a like.
7637646 I know it's not funny if you have to explain it, but I feel I must do so anyway because of the misunderstanding here: while a running gag can be great comedy, I was shooting more for a Brick Joke feel with most of the jokes, especially the payoff at the end. If you've no idea what a Brick Joke is, Google it.
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Pfft. HA!
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Glad to know my brand of idiocy is well appreciated.
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When the show stops doing it, people will stop doing it. He's comedy relief at best and a non-character any other time.
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Twilight being out of character I can understand even if I thought I was staying true to her. But how can Discord, a being of chaos and therefore unpredictability, someone whose very presence is a lack of consistency, ever be out of character? The only way he could be out of character would be putting everything in order.
I honestly don't like how Spike is being picked on, comedy or not. I couldn't laugh at the other jokes, because of that.
7637973 For Twi, I thought she was just generally being a dick to Spike, where as in the show, he's basically her brother/son. As for Discord, yes he is chaotic, but he has only ever mispronounced a name once. And I would think he knows Pinkie Pie enough to not call her those weird names.
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You mean, he's a character meant to be respected and not just comedy relief? Where did I get that impression at all? My apologies.
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I completely agree. He's totally a son to her and not a slave at all. I just don't know how that could've slipped past me. Also, yeah, I agree with you on Discord, but hey, he's a wild card. Who knows what he's ever going to do?
7638256 I watched the video, and from what I can tell, Whenever Twi was the one "Abusing" Spike, it was never on purpose, but more of a neglectful sort of thing. She never once out-right treated him that way, it was more of in a moment of panic, or in a moment of absentmindedness, she forgot about him. Spike has never been blatently abused by any of the cast, he just seems to get the short end of the stick more often then not.
7636977 I knew someone was going to do it....
7638256 I just think you overdid it here and it was way too mean spirited. It's also not my kind of humor I guess, especially when it's done so often.
At least he didn't ask for the "Special"...
This is a very good one-shot.
On the whole, I must admit I liked this story, but the Spike bashing was just mean, unfunny and annoying.
The story would have been far stronger without it, although I'll admit it would be a major edit to get rid of it now.
7641531 Well, it made me laugh. And at the end of the day, that's the most important thing to take home with you. After all, I make jokes for me because I know I'm funny.
Too good
I don't know what is more funny. The story, or the kids in the comments who can't handle their favourite
slavecharacter being hurt.you all need to read more Anonpencil
no one likes spike
That reminds me of a movie I once saw.