great story. i hope to see more like this in the future.

Is it wrong that my eyes jizzed literal rainbows all over my desk?

*hoofshake!*

Darn you! DARN YOU!

I've been toying with an idea based on this premise for weeks now!

But seriously, it's a lovely story, and I'm glad that someone else saw the humor potential in Rainbow Dash learning the truth of that relationship. I'm glad I read it.

In any case, my story idea would have gone off in a completely different direction... if I could write a suitable Daring Doo-style adventure. I've got no idea what the old map should lead Ditzy, Dash, and Twilight to.

>>820786820786

I would like to encourage you to write the story regardless of whether or not I have already written a similar story.  I actually just came up with the idea after thinking of scenarios for my main story. When I happened across Ditzy do and Daring do I was like "WTF They have the same last name?!" So i jotted down some notes to make a story and finished this one in roughly an hour.

>>820845820845

*nods* Like I said, my story would be very different from yours, so I wouldn't worry about stepping on your toes. I just don't know if I can FINISH the story, despite having some great ideas for stuff to do in the start, and I don't want to put up a story I'm not sure I can finish. I don't want to waste my reader's time.

*reads character tags*

This... was inevitable.

*reads story*

MY FEELLINGS!!!!!!

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so... awsome.... I LOVE IT

Wonderful. Something new to work into my head canon, though it's not exactly like this.

Applause.

I love how you wrote you story. The emotion and feeling.

It's sad.

It's like loosing someone you wanna stay around with forever, but you don't actually miss then until there gone.. forever.

This made me cry and 2 tears fell down.

>>821318821318

I'm not much for sad stories but I do enjoy a good sad story from time to time. Writing them however takes quite a bit of effort on my part as I try to be there in that character who has seen the other pass on. I have lived through enough tragedy to get these feelings down pact. But In the end I know that they have moved on to a better place and no longer grieve for them.

Minor typo.

"Daring had managed to talk to the dragon when it had her in its may ready to crush her." Should be maw.

Good job.

>>822493822493 fixed. thanks for the correction

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Image: http://sadpanda.us/images/1046236-RQQMH4R.png

eeeeeewwww

>>823045823045What you said....ewwwww.....

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>>823087823087

I think he meant a rainbow of tears.

Image: http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120114224646/mlp/images/archive/3/39/20120118153940!Pinkie_Pie_crying_S2E13.png

First thing first: I liked this.

Second thing second: Ahh... I didn't realize my Pinkie Pie image was so huge up there...

Third thing third: There are several things that you really need to watch out while writing in this, and maybe you should sweep through for some editing. In particular, you have a lot of missing commas.

Look at= After finishing the story Rainbow gave Daring a smile and hug before taking off to the publisher to have the final pages of the book edited and printed. That should be= After finishing the story, Rainbow gave Daring a smile and hug before taking off to the publisher to have the final pages of the book edited and printed.

This doesn't make your story unreadable or anything, but it's something that-- to be honest-- annoyed me. Same thing with the name. It's either 'Ditzy Do' or 'Ditzy Doo'. Pick one. You also have a lot of huge, wall-of-text paragraphs. I'd recommend breaking those up.

There's a bunch of other technical issues. Maybe you'd want to have friends edit things for you? {I'm trying to be helpful here, don't take this wrong-- I really and truly do like your concept and everything.}

>>823112823112

understandable, Im not good with placing commas If you want, you could edit that for me and send me an edited copy via private message

>>823109823109

No, he meant a rainbow made out of semen-- from somepony's eyes.

I now to think about whether I should get that image out of my head or maybe use it as future fanfic material myself... or... darn, what's happening here?

>>823138823138 lol I was hoping for what I said to be the truth instead of yours. Oh well.

>>823119823119

Ah... no offense and nothing against you, but I've got stuff going on

Meh, I saw a similar story with ditzy's last name. But they used derpy hooves, and said she was related ro doctor whooves. Anyway two words. and

>>823202823202

I honestly did not see that coming. That howeer would make for an awesome three way story of Doctor whooves fathering Derpy/Ditzy from Daring Do. And the reason she has those crazy eyes is because of the Dr being a time traveler and Ditzy/Derpy's eyes can see through time and space. That would be fucking awesome.  DOH now I gotta write it.

>>823214823214 I dont think that was the story but ok.

>>825718825718

Oh, I didn't mean to imply that was the story line. I meant to imply that THAT would be the storyline I would follow in my head while writing it.

>>825727825727 ok

Wonderful.

You gave me a major feel there however.

>>832686832686 I am sorry. Time is precious, and it is best spent with loved ones while they are still with us. I encourage others to do so. So please. Give your loved ones a hug and tell them thank you for all they have done for you.

>>832746832746

This may seem a little sudden, but clearly you seem to be a wonderful person, given your comments and the story.

It's a same there arn't more people like you.

And yes, I might just do that.

On a slight tangent though, I do think that yoh could of elaborated more, It's a good premise and I don't want it to go to waste. However that is always subject to you.

>>832788832788

Thank you for the kind words. I just had the urge to write this story and kinda rushed it. As time permits I will go back and do a slight rewrite as well as add a little more to the story. It might be a week though as I am currently engrossed in writing on my main story. It's not as happy go lucky as this story on some parts and others will have you rofl. It is almost at 200k words so check it out.

Great job with this Furstreak. I really enjoyed it. It was well written and almost got a few (obviously manly) tears to escape there at the end. :

>>851111851111 I aim to please, and obviously to make some bornies cry.

Truely a great story. Keep up the great work

loved it many manly tears were  shed

What a great story!I almost cry at the end.But that idea of Daring beeing Derpy's mother..never heard of that,i always thought her as her sister.

it would be more fun to read if the daring-do tag was gone XD

Wow, you got tears from me on this one.

>>21001472100147i aim to please.  I love touching stories. Even sad ones

Dem feels, god damn...now I'm in a sad mood...