Because of a magical instability in the 64th chromosome, one unlucky earth pony changes genders uncontrollably. Will Caramel(le) find a cure for this condition, or will (s)he be stuck unstuck?
Ooh! Tracked and liked!
Time for omlettes!
Does Caramel know what Hearts Desire is?
Probably not, but I don't see how the cutie pox would help him.
Diffrent. enjoyed. tracked
I'm glad somepony stands up for spike.
And that's where Pinkie got the inspiration for her Nightmare Night costume.
Poor Caramel though, must be confusing as heck.
Don't expect the chapters to be anywhere close to the same length; they're really just chunks I use to release the story in pieces and outline the plot for myself. When all the chapters (0 through 9) are written, expect to see the story released on Google Docs as a single file.
Caramel x Twilight
I thought I would pick the first tic I saw and although the plot is a little strange I would say I like this one. Very interesting g concept and well written my only complaint is we needto see more of caremelle or caremals personality. excited for the next installment
Chapter 7 is in progress, and I'll be starting on Chapter 6 soon. Chapter 9 will be a short prolog (in progress), and expect something special in Chapter 8.
Wow, poor Caramel(le)
I was kind of wondering if that would 'fix' his/her problem but it just made it worse.
Yes, the plot is quite strange, in both senses of the word. I tried to show more of his personality in Chapter 6.
Aaaand, it looks like it's time for my super special announcement!
As those of you who have read the preantepenultimate chapter know, Caramel has decided to tell Ponyville his big secret. Ponyvillians will surely have lots of questions after his big speech. What questions will they have, you might ask? It's all up to you!
Head on over to Ask Caramelle to pose a question to our favorite light amber earth pony! Just try to keep them to things that a Ponyvillian would feel comfortable asking in the midst of a crowd. The best questions (or perhaps all the questions, depending on quantity) will be featured in Chapter 8.
I believe this question could be obvious but, Gay Strait or Bisexual
Caramel(le) is straight.
Just found this today, thought I'd give my opinion. (I hope you don't mind)
Love the premise, especially since there seems to be both a male and female "Caramel" in the show (one in episode one and one in the winter wrap episode).
The story starts out well too, but around the time Caramel goes to see Zecora things stop being interesting. There's no conflict... Twilight readily accepts him and his story with a simple scan, Celestial is already aware and also accepts his condition... I honestly can't imagine any of the Ponyville residents giving him any trouble. So where's the challenge? What is it that the protagonist will need to overcome?
I will leave it at that unless I'm asked for a full critique
Anyways, good luck with the rest of the story
No, I can't imagine any of the Ponyville residents giving him any trouble, but Caramel can. The story is more about him coming to accept himself and building up the courage to "come out of the closet" if you will. Yes, he is accepted easily; this is to emphasize the disconnect between real life and Caramel's paranoid imagination. The conflict is internal.
At least that's what I've been going for. This is my first fanfiction, so I may not have succeeded in pulling it off.
"Pussyhoofing" that word it made me stop and made my mind an utter blank for a sec. I don't know what my emotions are about the word. it bothers me but it really doesn't. I cant make heads or tails of it. Anyway this story has come to its conclusion. I'm glad that I kept in my favorites because I almost forgot about it. I have to say I enjoyed its ride. I'm not really good with long posts so I leave here.
To the best of luck to you and future endeavors/story( which I'll be waiting to read)
So, would anypony be interested in a sequel? I've kinda been put off writing for a while after the EqD prereaders essentially said this story was beyond repair, but if you're interested…
>>15618511561851 I would love to read that :3
Interesting story, though it does have many spelling errors (most notably poison JOAK early on).
That's not an error; it's an alternate spelling. The plant is a pun on poison oak. Hence, poison joak.
This one seemed a bit rushed. Also, one does not simply walk into Canterlot.
Sequel where Caramel gets a mirror universe version of himself so he could have a relationship that won't be weird half the time? Sign me up!
Ooo, this looks intriguing. I shall investigate further into this right away!
So far I am pretty interested in this story. It's still a little too early for me to give anything other then 'good job.' So... good job.
SO far the one thing this fic seems to be lacking is the characters personality. This is especially important because we want to care about them, which is made hard when you tell us nothing. It's still good, though.
How did they walk to Canterlot? Isn't it on a mountain that requires a train/ carriage to get to?
This chapter was seriously rushed. There should have been a lot more behind such a big decision.
Damn, that's horrendous. I guess this answers the age old question for gender bending characters who can flip flop...
I'd have to agree with some previous comments, while the premise is nice the lack of real conflict makes it a tad boring.
You're not very consistent with the changes in this story. Just a few chapters ago in Canterlot you wrote Caramel as a girl, but now he's a boy again.
Again, decent chapter, but I feel we needed more descriptions, more questions being asked, and all around just more of everything.
Yes, a sequel would be most interesting to see.
I'm not going to repeat what I've already said about my likes and dislikes in this fic, so I'll say good job for a first fic and good luck in the next one.
I would want to see a sequal ^^
That's… kind of the whole premise of the story.
>>23201682320168 No, what I mean is that you don't describe that it's happening. I get that he's supposed to flip genders at random, but how about a line of description here and there? Don't just end with him being a guy and then start with him being a girl, give us one line to say that he's flipped, or something.
Hey, just got around to reading your story you mentioned on 4chan when I asked if there was a fic about Caramel's headcanon. Good fic, I hope you write more stories in the future!