Being a Princess is exhausting. Royally exhausting. Everyday, it feels like Twilight wanted nothing more than to get away from the world.
Not like doing so was hard. In fact, she made visits to the human world whenever she could to visit her boyfriend of a few years, Flash Sentry; he was one of the few things that kept her sane.
Yet, deep down, she knows it can't go on forever. Can she really break both of their hearts for the sake of her status as a princess?
Contains Flashlight shipping, meaning sappy romantic dorks. You've been warned.
Chapters (4)
Bravo! Lovely story with a fluffy happy ending!
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Thank you so much! It was really hard for me to post this one because I felt so self-conscious about it, so the fact that my first comment was a positive one makes me very happy!
7930730 Well put those silly fears away. I think I liked the fact that not only did it sum up how crappy a LDR is (growing apart, time and energy just to be together, busy busy) but you wrapped it up in 4 chapters that didn't just drag on and on with endless bull the most. Again, very well done.
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Ahhh, thank you! It's definitely a very different fic, though cutting out pointless things that just drag the story on has been important to me since the beginning.
I actually posted this a few hours ago with the knowledge that I was going to have to leave the house for a while, and was certain that I'd come home to some sort of feedback. While the other two stories I'd posted did stunningly well, this one... yeah.
It's not a BAD like-to-dislike ratio, but it was so close that I think I might've hyperventilated for a bit; I was so scared that everyone would hate it because it's Flashlight, and I was just waiting for the first comment to be negative.
I'm really glad that wasn't the case. Now I'm just hoping it gets added to some sort of Flashlight group soon and people like it more so that dislike ratio goes down. It's really nerve-wracking if I'm honest, and a lack of comments means that I don't know if the dislikes are from people who legitimately hated the story or just didn't like Flashlight, didn't read, and disliked anyway.
I haven't read the story yet but I feel like a lot of the dislikes are from the Flash x Twilight pairing. I think its immature people are down-voting this story purely because of a pairing; its immature. This story looks promising and I can't wait to read it.
7931136 I agree... there's nothing really wrong with this fic, just discriminating people marking it down because the ship in question is among the most unpopular in MLP history. I bet most detractors aren't even reading it.
Author... never start writing what you want to, and I'm sure posterity will look back on this fic with kindness. In the meantime, here's an upvote from me to redress the balance somewhat...
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Aww, thank you very much.
A-and yeah, I was hoping that, by posting three stories at once, less people would come here to hate since I did have two other perfectly readable fics as other options, but I guess that didn't happen. This story has actually been on the backburner for a VERY long time for that reason too. I was just... so scared.
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Aww, thanks.
What's with all the dislikes? This is a good story. It can't be because of Flashlight. Right?
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Firstly, thank you. I'm glad you like it.
Secondly, I'm really not sure, if I'm honest? Assuming that my writing is the same as all my other fanfictions, the like-to-dislike ratio is VASTLY different from even my worst (though I guess it'd be second-worst now) fanfiction, and that was written YEARS ago. It was maybe, 76% liked? Then there's this one which is even worse off.
So, truthfully, I have no idea. I know that the community as a whole tends to not like Flashlight, but I don't know if that's where the hate it coming from; my first comment was after 8 dislikes, after all, and it was a positive one.
Considering how many Anti-Flashlight groups there are (I can remember three currently), I just don't know.
It makes me really self-conscious, to tell the truth, because I can't figure out if these dislikes are for the story or for Flashlight.
Flashlight isn't my cup of tea, but given how bold you need to be to post a story about it and that you're looking for feedback, I'll give it a go anyway.
...Yeah, the dislikes definitely are because of the ship, not the story. Technically, it's near perfect- a few strange semicolons and a line in Cht.2 about how Twi and Flash fell for eachother that reads very strangely, but still better than 95% of the stuff here. The premise- issues revolving around a long-distance relationship across the mirror- is hardly unique, but satisfyingly resolved. The levels of emotion are pretty appropriate for the situation- Twilight's anguish is real, without being melodramatic. You never cross any lines, and there's plenty of potential for ensuing slice-of-lifey goodness if you ever wanted to continue this storyline without a serious goal in mind.
Unfortunately, there's absolutely nothing you can do to cut down on the story's dislikes, short of changing who it's about (the same basic plot would work for Sunset, who's way more popular), badly misrepresenting it in the description (you won't get knee-jerk reactions, but many more legitimate unhappy readers) or limiting its exposure (posting on an alt, using no cover art, etc). Adding it to FlashLight groups could get you a few more fans, but be aware that haters follow those groups as well, so it'll rake in more downvotes as well. None of those are very good options, so the best you can do is shrug, move on, and care about the people who did like it instead.
As for improving the story itself without changing what it is or adding large amounts of "it would be cool to see" type scenes... I haven't much to say. It fulfills its purpose well, and the style works. Saying nothing here is saying quite a bit, though, because bad stories I can pick apart for days- basically, keep on doing what you're doing. Including being bold. Props for posting a story that's doomed to be negatively received, and taking the time to make it good anyway.
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First off, I really appreciate you reading even if Flashlight isn't your thing; that means a lot!
Aww, you really think it's just the ship? People have been talking about it for a bit, but it's nice to hear it again just for the sake of it. And yeah, this is very slightly old, which might explain some weird semicolon uses. That's my bad; I'll fix whenever I go back and read this.
Thanks for the advice! I'm sort of just letting things happen for now as it does since I don't really follow groups. The dislikes hurt even though I expected them, but the positive comments did wonders to lift my spirit.
And double thanks for the props! It really did take all of my guts to post this, so I'm glad it's praised for that if nothing else.
I'm surprised that this story (the ending of the third chapter) brought tears to my eyes. I don't normally get all teary-eyed from reading, so congrats on that. Have a like.
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Yay! Thanks~
I'm glad I could invoke the needed emotions~
Whoever downvoted this has their computer upside-down, or were victim to an unnecessary lobotomy.
Great stuff, TTP, and I love it.
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Thanks!
I'm sorry that the
herdhive mind hates the flash/twi pairing so much. This story deserves a much better rating than the 29/14 it received.7934646
Aww, thank you. It means a lot to hear people actually say that.
That was very nice.
Why are there so many downvotes?! I mean, this is really really good! I wish I could write romance like this...
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Thank you! ^^
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Aww, thanks so much. The current theory that people in the comments seem to have is that the downvotes are because people hate Flashlight shipping.
7937660 That's stupid! This story is a great small romance. It actually has some, unlike those 1000 word one shots that say they're romance, this was believable and well-written! Stupid downvoters!!!
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Thank you.
7937678 No problem. Don't let the downvotes get to you, this was great! Which I forgot to favorite...hang on here.
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Haha, thank you again.
7937660 Yeah that would be it, my guess is people judging before they read it. Personally I really like the idea of Twilight going to Flash when she just needs a break from everything.
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Thank you~
Absolutely beautiful and amazing, I am not exaggerating when I say I have tears of joy and a huge grin from that heartfelt and sweet ending.
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Oh gosh, thank you so much! I'm so glad that most people are enjoying my story objectively instead of judging it based on the pairing.
It's okay, but it feels kinda rushed. I think it would've been stronger if you'd spent some time from Flash's point of view. You know, like talking to his parents about this, and everything. I have nothing against Flashlight, and if it's written properly, it can be really nice.
I really like this story, but it feels incomplete. It reads like the beginning of a much larger story. Also agree with Boltstrike58's assessment that we should have seen Flash's POV.
Tired of the Flashlight haters too. Consider me one of your fans (at least in regards to this story). In fact I even wrote a similar story years ago, so that alone should tell you how much on your side I am.
Think you'll do a sequel sometime?