Am I Pretty?
Scootaloo sighed as she walked home from her school dance. The moon provided just enough light for her to see without needing much assistance. She knew she probably shouldn’t be walking home alone like this, but it would be better than what she would’ve had to do otherwise.
Ironically, she probably would’ve felt lonelier if she had walked home with her friends… considering they had dates.
The usually energetic Scootaloo wandered somberly throughout nighttime Ponyville, just wanting this stupid night to be over. She didn’t even have her scooter, since her friends warned her about her dress getting caught in the wheel. As if Scootaloo didn’t feel bad enough already, she felt naked without her scooter and helmet.
“Yo, Scoots!”
Scootaloo looked up to see Rainbow Dash descending in front of her.
“Oh… hi, Rainbow,” Scootaloo said, hanging her head down. “Y-You’re up late.”
“Well, I figured you’d want to tell me all about your little dance, so I decided to stay up later than usual,” Rainbow said. “Say… where are the other two? I thought you all went together.”
“They’re still dancing,” Scootaloo said, picturing Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom having fun with their colts.
“What are you doing out here, then?” Rainbow asked. “Did you leave early? You shouldn’t be wandering around by yourself at night like this.”
“I know. I’m sorry. I just got… tired. That’s all,” Scootaloo said, continuing to look down at the ground.
“Hey, squirt. You alright?” Rainbow asked. “You look upset.”
Scootaloo sighed. “It’s nothing, Rainbow. I-I just want to go home.”
“Scoots, you know that’s not how I roll,” Rainbow said. “What’s wrong?”
“You’d think it’s stupid,” Scootaloo replied.
“Something’s wrong, Scootaloo. I can tell,” Rainbow said.
“It’s nothing, Rainbow,” Scootaloo said. “I don’t want to talk about it. It’s dumb.”
“You’re not getting rid of me until you talk, Scoots,” Rainbow said. “I’m not about to let my little sister go home all upset.”
“Thanks, but no thanks, Rainbow,” Scootaloo said, trying to walk past Rainbow, only to her path blocked by her big sister.
“Look, Scoots, all I want to do is help,” Rainbow said. “Nothing you say will be too stupid for me. I’m not leaving you alone until you tell me what’s wrong.”
Scootaloo looked into Rainbow’s eyes. They were serious… yet compassionate. Admittedly, Rainbow’s presence alone was making Scootaloo feel a little better. Still, it didn’t heal what was happening in her heart. But Rainbow didn’t look like she was about to yield anytime soon. Accepting defeat, Scootaloo sighed and sat down on the ground. Rainbow sat right across from her.
“Sorry, Rainbow,” Scootaloo murmured.
“No worries,” Rainbow said. “So what happened, Squirt? Was that dress too uncomfortable for you? Did the music suck? Is there a colt you need straightened out?”
“No, nothing like that,” Scootaloo said. “None of the colts want me anyways…”
Rainbow raised an eyebrow. “Huh? You care about colts liking you?”
Scootaloo grunted. “No. I-I mean… it’s just… we’ve known about this dance for three weeks, and Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and me were kind of talking about who we would want to go with.”
Rainbow giggled. “That’s nothing to be embarrassed about.”
“But then… Sweetie Belle actually got asked out,” Scootaloo said.
“Did she now?” Rainbow asked.
Scootaloo nodded. “Button Mash. And then a few days later, Tender Taps came along and wanted Apple Bloom to go with him.”
“Well, good for them,” Rainbow said. “What about you, Scoots? I’m sure only the most awesome colt asked out the most awesome of fillies, right?”
Scootaloo whimpered as she felt her heart rip. A tear escaped her eye and ran down her cheek as she struggled to speak.
“Well… n-not exactly…” Scootaloo said.
“Scoots… are you crying?” Rainbow asked.
Scootaloo gasped. “What? N-No, I-I’m not crying. I-I’m just really tired, that’s all. I think it might be raining a little bit… or something…”
Rainbow looked up, noting the completely clear sky.
“Scoots…”
“I’m not crying,” Scootaloo murmured, refusing to let another tear fall in the presence of her idol. As she looked down at the ground, she felt the warm embrace of a wing wrapping around her. She looked up to see Rainbow right next to her. “Rainbow… I… I’m walking home alone for a reason…”
“Yeah… I gathered,” Rainbow said, biting her lip.
Scootaloo fought hard to keep her tears contained. She couldn’t look weak in front of Rainbow Dash. Nevertheless, she returned Rainbow’s embrace.
“Rainbow… am I ugly?”
“What?” Rainbow asked.
“Why was I the one without somepony else to dance with?” Scootaloo pleaded. “A-Am I too ugly or something? Is there something wrong with me?”
“Scoots, there’s nothing wrong with you,” Rainbow said. “Why are you suddenly so concerned about this? I thought you hated all the mushy, romance stuff.”
Scootaloo sighed. “Well… I mean… I wouldn’t mind experiencing it for myself maybe once. I-I wouldn’t mind being called pretty. It’s just… when all your friends have dates… and when everyone else in your class is there with somepony…”
“Wait… everypony else had someone?” Rainbow asked.
“It felt like it,” Scootaloo said. “Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle were having fun with their colts, and just kind of… forgot about me. I left when the slow music started. I… I just felt so lonely, Rainbow.”
“I understand, Scoots,” Rainbow said.
“Y-You do?” Scootaloo asked.
“Sure,” Rainbow said. “I’m gonna tell you something, but if you tell anypony else, I’ll deny it tooth and hoof.” Rainbow looked around to make sure nopony was spying on them. When the coast was clear… “Y’know, I sometimes feel a little insecure too.”
“You?” Scootaloo beckoned. “You’re Rainbow Dash, what do you have to be insecure about?”
Rainbow chuckled. “I mean, yeah, I’m awesome. But Squirt, we all have insecurities. That’s just part of being a pony. Rarity receives such a large amount of attention from stallions, and sometimes it’s annoying, and sometimes I kind of wish a stallion would compliment me. Not on the tricks I do, but for appreciating me as a mare, y’know?”
Scootaloo’s eyes were wide. “I… I never knew that about you, Rainbow Dash. So how do you look so confident all the time?”
Rainbow laughed. “Well, I just remind myself how awesome I am. Looks don’t matter if you’re awesome on the inside, Scoots.”
“Easy for you to say,” Scootaloo said.
“Scootaloo, don’t worry,” Rainbow said. “You’re just a filly. You’ve got your whole life ahead of you. Just be patient, and one day a colt will recognize you for the awesome filly you are.”
Scootaloo looked into Rainbow’s eyes, and felt the first glimmer of hope she’s felt in her heart all night.
“You really think so?” Scootaloo asked.
“Are you kidding?” Rainbow asked. “You’re only the most awesome filly in Equestria. Any colt would be just plain stupid to not love you.”
Scootaloo felt her face heat up. And she couldn’t help herself from breaking into a smile.
“There’s the smile I’ve been looking for,” Rainbow said, smiling back. “You’re awesome, Scoots. And to be honest… you’re crazy to think you’re not pretty.”
Scootaloo blushed even more.
“But hey, if a colt does ever ask you out, let me know,” Rainbow said. “I’ll need to ask him a few questions before I let him get near you.”
Scootaloo laughed before running up to her big sister to give her a big hug.
“It’s a deal!” Scootaloo said. She felt Rainbow wrap her wing around her.
“Don’t ever forget how awesome you are, Scoots,” Rainbow said.
“I won’t,” Scootaloo said, nuzzling Rainbow. “Thank you so much, Rainbow! You’re the best sister ever!”
Rainbow used her hoof to bring Scootaloo closer. “I know.”
Scootaloo laughed as Rainbow squeezed her.
“Now… how about a sleepover with your big sister?” Rainbow asked.
Scootaloo gasped. “What? Really?!”
Rainbow nodded, giving her a smirk as she fanned her wings out.
“Hop on,” Rainbow said, giving her a wink.
Scootaloo squealed in excitement as she got on Rainbow’s back.
“Can we go the long way?” Scootaloo asked, barely able to sit still.
“If by long way, you mean the long and fast way, then I’m way ahead of you,” Rainbow said.
“Alright!” Scootaloo cheered.
Rainbow took a deep breath and launched herself into the starry night sky, the moon providing the right amount of light for her to fly at top speed.
“Woohoo!!!” Scootaloo cheered, holding on tight as Rainbow shot through the stars. She barely even remembered why she was so sad earlier. What was there to be sad about when she had the greatest big sister in Equestria to cheer her up?
Just a short SoL sister fic I came up with. I personally think Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash are adorable as sisters, and Rainbow is a great figure for Scootaloo.
Besides, I actually haven't written any pure SoL fluff. How'd I do?
This actually happened to me one time. My friends convinced me to join them and their girlfriends to go to senior homecoming. I didn't get a date. I tried, but she said no. I spent the whole night a fifth wheel. Talk about embarrassing pictures. Flanked by your friends and their girlfriends with you in the middle all alone. I put on a happy face, but in reality it ate my self-esteem alive. Fortunately, Scootaloo has someone she can go to. I didn't.
Hope you liked it! Like most of my oneshots, this was written on a whim, and uploaded completely unedited, so sorry if it sucks. 
Thanks for reading!
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love this
Great job, even thought this one was hard to read for me. I've been in a very similar situation several times and it is not a nice feeling.
Rainbow: Alright, before you go out with Scootaloo, I've got to ask you something.
Some colt: Yes?
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Wonderful Scootalove giving me those warm fuzzies ~
Nice work my man!
Indeed, Rainbow Dash is a great role model for Scoots.
Very enjoyable fluff.
Good fic, and let me say Scootaloo you are pretty, don't let anypony ever tell you otherwise.
In the immortal words of Silver Quill "oh I'm going down" dies
We all know who'll make the perfect colt for Scootaloo.
Awww, of course you're pretty Scoots, you're adorable!
Nice story man... tells me I need to write some SoL stories, but honestly... I'm not good at it
I'm that writer who writes grimdark stuff, death stuff... sad stuff...
Wow why do people follow me? I'm depressing!
Nice story, love it!
An excellent read
I really enjoyed this
Either Rumble (too much used TBH), Pip or Spike come ask her for a date
The technical writing here is fine. One thing that a lot of writers don't realize is that you don't capitalize stuttering when it's at the beginning of a sentence, like so:
instead of
The exception is when it's a word that would normally be capitalized, in which case you do capitalize the stutter, like so:
The narration strikes me as too telly, and Rainbow's voice didn't really sound like her. She reminded me of a dad trying to bond with his daughter instead of the older-sister figure you say you were going for. The story also feels like it's trying too hard to make people feel bad for Scootaloo, which is probably a result of the instances of telling instead of showing.
Keep in mind that sometimes less is more, and that principle certainly applies to stories like these.
I can sympathize with this.
Poor Scoots. I know this feeling all too well from growing up, and am dreading my own kids' teen years for this reason.
Pure adorable Scootalove. I approve.
Hey it's featured! *Squee*
An awesomely cute story my friend.
Big sister Rainbow to the rescue
Nice job
Cute. Simple premise that I'm sure a lot of readers can relate to (myself included).
Personally I think Scootaloo and Pipsqueak are a good pair. I think I did a story on that once actually. Meh.
Cute story. Simple, sweet. I've been there too, though I didn't have a Rainbow Dash.
Aww... You can't help but love stories with big sister Rainbow in them.
Don't you go listening to those thoughts Scootaloo, you are as cute as a puppy
Also, Big Sis Rainbow gives me life
Pff. How this isn't on the featured list yet I don't know.
7580749 I'm guessing it probably won't
7580758 Well, you're terribly unlucky. I've been on this site two years, and have never seen a story so highly rated and not make it. What have you done to upset the mods?
7580773 Nothing
The featured list is actually automated, so I'm not sure how it's algorithms work. I'm guessing frequency if likes and views, but that's just a guess.
7580778 Oh well... you've created a lovely, poignant story... guess that's enough... (Looks like it's gonna have to be...)
Aww!
Goodness, this really hit right at home. I've been struggling with the same insecurity for a while.
A lot of us have been there. The night of my senior prom I didn't even go because I didn't have a date (had, but she injured her leg and couldn't go) and i just sat home feeling awful about it. Didn't help that the girl was a friend from another school because I couldn't even get a date from my own. Talk about bad flashbacks. At least Scoots had RD there to pick her up. I didn't.
...anyways. I liked the fic. It could have been a bit more fleshed out and there's always room to improve on the descriptions and setting, but doesn't everybody? You can always expand your narrative with different senses, right? Is Scoots cold, is RD's hug warm, what does RD smell like, what does the ground feel like under them? Stuff like that. Tiny little details that bring the moment alive. For a short story it definitely delivered a nice moment between the two best sisters, so I'm happy I got to read it.
7581198 not a writer by trade, mind you
But I do know what you're saying. I'll keep that in mind next time I write. Thanks for reading!
It's hard to say when you're sort of a palette swap of other ponies but with different hair and tail.
Sad thing is, this would be a perfect subject for the writers to tackle. Dash and Scoots, unashamed tomboys, eager to embrace femininity for once. But I doubt it.
7580778
Word count also plays into it.
7581530 Oh okay.
Man, I was really happy with this one too. Oh well...
At least some people seem to like it
I liked it. Hope we see more ScootaDash in future episodes
Aw... we've all been there. Hey, we're bronies.
"Am I pretty?"
No.
The end.
Sorry, but the dawwww of this story broke FIMFiction.
I was only able to upvote it ONCE!
This was a great little story. We rarely see the fillies being insecure about their appearance and attractiveness. Have a like.
That... was... beautiful
totally fits the characters their more about sportiness and being awesome then dating.
Not a bad piece, but I felt like it lacked the emotional impact it really needed. You should work on cleaning up your showing and telling. Let the emotions roll off the page on their own instead of spoon feeding them to the reader. Then you might break a few hearts.
Witholding upthumb until I see some more effort put into this.
7588496 Hmm, well sorry it didn't satisfy.
Can you give me some specifics? I want to get better. Mind you, I'm not an author by trade. I'd like to get better though
In IRL parlance, Scoots would be what's known as "the ugly friend". You know, the belligerent female linebacker that you have to get through before you can buy your actual target a drink?
7588529
Tell you what. I'm on my phone right now, but later I'll have my laptop and I can give you a full review then. Proofreading as well as concept advice. Sound Good? I can give it to you here or Via PM if that's easier.
7588610 PM maybe. I appreciate it. Thanks for the help.
I came up with this on the spot one day, so it's quite flawwed. I just seek to please my readers
7588625
Not a bad goal. I'm just a fiction aficionado who's seen a few good and bad stories run the mills. I love helping new authors when I can. It's really a treat to watch someone you've helped succeed.
This is so sweet. I know how Scoots feels. It can be tough, but it's important to remember how awesome you are no matter what.
Aww, that was so sweet. I really liked the way you portrayed their almost sister like relationship, and it was an insecurity I can sympathize with.
I myself hated school dances because no girls had ever been interested in me, hell, the teachers almost had to physically drag my from the class room to the dance back in 5th and I think 6th grade because I wanted nothing to do with it, hell can't even remember WHY we had dances in those grades.. And I dropped out of high school before those could even be a concern, but if I had and some girl had shown interest, by that point I would be suspicious and ask her who the fuck was putting her up to it or what what kind of sick joke she'd be trying to play on me before telling her to fuck off... probably still would if any women showed an interest in me all of a sudden because that is just how jaded I am.