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A story of the Lunaverse. After months spent in the care of Corona, the Tyrant Sun, Spike has had enough. He strikes out on his own, leaving the insane alicorn and his friend Zecora behind. But it doesn't take long for Spike to encounter somepony new, a unicorn pony on the run from the law who seems to have a few screws loose...
Hmm. I really should learn how to hyperlink stuff on this site.
Anyway, this is my first ever story submission to Fimfiction, and it's part of the Lunaverse, RainbowDoubleDash's alternate universe where Celestia became evil instead of Luna, and the Elements of Harmony are a completely different group of ponies led by the Great and Powerful Trixie. It's gathered quite a few stories, and this is the latest.
If anyone here hasn't read any of the Lunaverse stories, GO AND START READING RIGHT NOW. It's awesome.
Hyperlink = [url] thing you want to link [/url]
That anchor looking button on the tool bar will make links, or if you want to do it the hard way the formating looks something like this...
(url=http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=760)The Lunaverse(/url)
...jsut with brackets instead of parentheses
Dun Dun DUNNNNN...
- Will be doing the contributor, adding, etc. thing in a moment.
Man, Spike's life sucks no matter the universe. Stupid phoenixes. Phoenixi? Phoenixen? I don't know what to call multiple phoenixes. I do know that the adjective is phoenecian, though.
Unlikely since it's part of the canon and me and Hendy have been PMing back and forth on this.
A bot! God it's been awhile since I've seen one of these. Hello, bot!
[gets out sonic screwdriver, starts sonic'ing it, examines screwdriver]
Um.
Don't take your eyes off of it.
But as the purple coated mare circled him, still looking at him with that appraising eye, he realized that he kind of doubted it. Spike kept catching sight of her cutie mark as she passed him, it looked like an exploding purple star, and Wpike wondered what that said about her. Was she about to explode at him?
You accidentally spelled Spike with a 'W' there.
Well, I am most definitely going to have to look into the Lunaverse! Seems like a pretty awesome alternate universe! 
On the topic of this particular flick, you definitely have my attention! Enjoying the way this was written! Can't wait to see where you go with this one! 
Definitely going to be looking out for new chapters! Keep up the great work! 
I would assume that it did not go well. Her elements of failmony might have become friends but since she won't admit that she needs a social life, she missed the point. We know that M!Applejack will react to the lonely, angry, miserable mare L!Applejack is with pity and horror because she knows herself well enough to see why her counterpart is that way. M!Twilight will look at the crazy pony L!Twilight is also with pity and horror but not quite know why.
I...REGRET...NOTHING!
I was worried that people wouldn't like this chapter, but it looks like that worry was unfounded. I'll do my best to keep up the good work.
I don't know, maybe. To be honest, Twilight kicked off the Lunaverse by getting the burn, and she's probably going to get a another one in Elements of Insanity. It would be cruel of me to do even more to her... 
Next chapter should be out by Tuesday... but I don't exactly have a good track record of keeping promises like that, so don't hold your breath.
Alright, with EoI:Ch3 finally finshed, and Ch4 still out for proofing, I can take some time to catch up on a little reading; lets see what I've been missing.
Ooh, Twilight the ever studious scholor going on and on about how facinating she finds Spikes dietary habits was simply pricelss.
Ohh, and have I mentionened that I really love Spike's rules for dealing with crazy ponies, because I really love Spike's rules for dealing with crazy ponies.
“I don’t what that means,” Spike said while crossing his arms. Twilight really liked using big words. It was annoying.think you're missing a "know" there, or maybe an "even know". Also, since the next two paragraphs after this are both Twilight speaking they could probably be combined into a singal paragraph.
Oh, and just a mtter of personal opinion, but Philomena at least always struck me as at least semi-sentient, though maybe that's just something unique to being Celestia's familiar or such.
you’re sorry of keeping me from my lunch…"for"
Twilight’s excited vanished instantly"excitement"
because she quickly turned back to himContext sugests to me that there should be a "her" in the middle there. Also, I think "abruptly" would be better tha "quickly", but that's just opinion.
Maybe so, though that's still got me very hesitant about the entire premis of this story.
Wait i'm confused..what is 'The Burn' and how did it 'kick off the Lunaverse'?
Due to the different circumstances brought out by the altered history of the Lunaverse as opposed to canon, the mane six never became friends with each other. As a result of this, their negative personality traits have been amplified beyond what they are in canon. The Lunaverse burn is what we call it when we showcase these traits in an antagonistic (though usually not outright villainous) light.
When I say it kicked off the Lunaverse, I'm talking about how the very first story, Boast Busted burned Twilight by showing her to be obsessive, condescending, and having a crippling lack of social skills. She does actually have those flaws in canon, but in the Lunaverse, they're much worse because she never had the more positive experiences of being taught by Celestia and becoming friends with the rest of the mane six.
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