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I like this. I like this a lot. The characters who've changed less are captured beautifully, I love what you've done with Applebloom (didn't get to see too much of Sweetie Belle yet, but I look forwards to that and any appearances by Scootaloo), and the whole idea is great. I really like how you had Twilight catch the thought in measures, rather than all at once, too.
Write on!
I LOVE fluttershy's rant, scolding Rainbow about how Pinkie cries herself to sleep at night because she can't play in the clouds with her foals and how her own foals have to wonder why their daddy can't join them the way mommy can. 
The D'aw has been doubled!
What are you, a dictionary? 
I know what implicit means, I chose that word because while I agree that Fluttershy was explicitly threatening Applejack, the undertone in her gentle, sweet voice threatened oh so much more. You do NOT mess around where Fluttershy's kids are concerned. 
Sorry if it was unclear, tho. Thanks for reading! 
I love your stories, but "Windfall" and "Earth and Sky" are by far my favorites. With the "Screwball" trilogy coming in close at second. By the way, you are amazing.
And since i forgot to comment on the previous chapters, *ahem*
That is all.
(One Pinkie Pie for each chapter by the way).
Image: http://i.imgur.com/HKFEV.gif
I love how Blueblood appears to get kidnapped out of his box, and no one even bothers to see what happens to him, they just go back to watching the opera .
Nice mini-intervention Luna, Apple Bloom sure needed a little nudge to get her evenings priorities right.
Henpecked Blueblood is the first Blueblood I have ever liked, really. He completely seems like a victim of his own weak will and outer circumstances, so you have to pity him.
Waggoner is OK, but every time I listent to that music I get an urge to invade Foaland.
Of course I adore your story, even if I find it a little hard to believe that Twilight and the Princesses were all unable to see through or even detect Blueblood's invisibility spell. You would think the royal guards would also have some sort of counter-spell in place for that sort of thing, otherwise they are pretty much useless as guards! Selfishly, I also want more Twilight and Rarity.
I've had folks raise this issue before, and I think the assumption that powerful magic users are constantly passively scanning like some kind of super tuned in psychic ninjas is a result of too much animé seeping into the collective consciousness. Maybe invisibility spells just work unless you're actively looking for one. This is magic performed by pastel colored horses. It doesn't have to be logical. 
Equestria isn't a Tom Clancy novel, I don't think a lot of assassination attempts happen in Canterlot outside of the Grimdark end of the pool.
If it helps at all, perhaps an invisibility spell cast by royalty doesn't set off whatever magical burglar alarms may be in place. Blueblood was the one who cast it after all, and rank hath its privileges.
It's nothing "illogical" about mages not being automatically able to detect invisible beings - magic has the rules the author gives to it, since it doesn't exist in the real world. In addition, given that all unicorns have magical ability, an invisibility spell that doesn't work on one third of the population is pretty useless, though I suppose if the main reason to use it is to get away from your Earth Pony wife... It makes perfect sense to me.
Heck, in stereotypical D&D games, "Detect Invisibility" is something you have to actively cast, which you only do if you have special reason to think something is invisible - sort of like a Geiger counter in real life.
On the other hand, somepony who knows a lot about magic would probably be catch on to the telltale signs left by somepony being invisible and clumsy/careless, whereas normal ponies just would be confused and probably scared. And becoming invisible is pretty shady, if you ask me.
Oh come on, I didn't have much time to think up the ubiquotous (sp?) lame equine pun!
Ha! Fair points! We may be working in a universe of talking ponies, but I submit that the season finale with its spears, spells, and changelings was fairly intense, and proved that Celestia has all those guards for a reason (not that they were in any way effectual). It's your story, of course! Like I said before, I really just want to see more Rarity and Twilight. Your dialogue for Rarity is exceptionally clever, and I dearly love their relationship and shared aspirations as you've written them.
True enough. I hope I didn't come off too snarky in the last reply. 
It all really comes down to what the plot needs, and in this case there's more mileage to be had with DT finding out what Harmony Aeronautics is up to unobserved than from her getting caught and receiving a blast from the royal spank ray (satisfying though that may be).
You'll be seeing more of ALL the girls as this unfolds, don't worry. There's a lot more ground to cover yet.
I detected minimal snark, don't worry, and I hope you didn't get the idea that I was voicing any serious criticism. I really enjoy this story, and your knack for both storytelling and dialogue is pretty darn legit. Of course, if DT was really thinking she would realize that there is plenty of room for both personal harnesses and luxury airships in the same market - why, they aren't even really competitors. You can't carry cargo or luggage via personal harness, nor enjoy travel in style and luxury as you could on an airship. If she were smart, she would be looking for synergies between the two enterprises, and both would likely make money. Certainly, she could offer expertise in marketing and mass production. Alas, she's Diamond Tiara, and would gladly cut off her nose to spite her face. That's why she makes such a great villain - she has no redeeming qualities.
I'm thrilled to hear that there is a lot more ground (and doubtless sky) to cover, and I look forward to seeing where the adventure takes my pony gals next. Whereever it may be, I expect plenty of fabulosity and magic . Speaking of which, I just read on EQD that Rarity was originally meant to be represent the spirit of the Element of Inspiration, not Generosity, which works so well in the context of this story.
Rarity as the "Element of Inspiration" is really interesting. Does jibe well with her character, both in Earth & Sky and in Canon.
All told, tho, I think Generosity was a good choice on Faust/Studio B's part, as I think it was the right way to add depth and warmth to her character. She's elegant, high toned, and a bit flighty, but she'll give you the shirt off her back (and it'll be a nice shirt too). A shorter way of saying it is she's got exclusive tastes but by her nature she's inclusive.
Rarity is possibly my favorite pony, although Fluttershy and Pinkie are strong contenders for that. Part of it is Tabitha St. Germain's masterful performance, and Art of the Dress was originally what pulled me in to being a Brony.
Oh, another one of us pulled in by "Art of the Dress!" Welcome to the club. I agree with all of your statements about Rarity above, and I would also add that she may enjoy being a drama queen, but she is also extremely resilient, and has absolute faith in both her friends and herself. That's probably why the Hub commissioned this as their official motivational poster for Rarity:
Image: http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/3521/rarityposter.pngIf you ever read others' work, I would love to have you as a reader of Alicorn, and to find out what you think of my take on Rarity.
Interesting that Diamond Tiara didn't recognize Sweetie Belle on stage. The actors/opera beneath her notice, the costume covered up that much, or it was just her target focus was narrowed to the royal box?
Not sure about how much a threat to airships the flight harness is. After all it is a single pony, likely short ranged. Hardly something that will put the shipping business in the red it seems to me.
Rarity is, if not necessarily the best pony, at least one of the most complex and nuanced ones. She's obviously greedy, yet also incredibly generous; she's vain and selfish, but never hesitates to help others even if it means self-sacrifice; she loves beauty and wants to nurture and express it in others in their own, unique ways without forcing everyone in the same mold, and at the same time she's deliberately bootstrapping herself away from her middle-class, embarrassingly tasteless and laid-back parents to the extent that even her trademark mid-Atlantic accent is a consciously cultivated affection!
Rarity - the pony you can't easily summarize!
Hey Warren Hutch, small note: The "source" of the front cover pic is supposed to be a link, to the dA version or something. It's meant to give the readers a place to specifically comment on the image 
Right now, it's kinda broken. Same for the Windfall cover.
Heehee, Windfall's got a bit of bite in her. Nice to see she's less shy than her mother.
And d'aww, new filly!
More unasked corrections, courtesy of Nyerguds :3
> "as her younger children landed on her back.The tiny pegasi nestled"
There's a space missing, in between these sentences.
> and been raised with the old pegasus foals' discipline
Seems like a missing word; should be "and [had] been raised".
> Rainbow Dash was bouncingTootsie Pie on her back
Missing space between "bouncing" and "Tootsie Pie".
> I done spoke my peace.
That should be "piece" actually. Keep your peace, speak your piece.
Peregrin Squeek? Somepony's been borrowing from Lord of the Rings
"the brotherhood of the mop and bucket"
Ooh, I like this guy already.
"Landed on a table and broke all four legs."
Obvious joke is obvious. Still, hilarious
No errors to correct here! You done well! (or I missed them!)
"she'd gone from dyeing her mane grey to hide the pink to dyeing it a pale pink to brighten up the grey"
Heehee. Sneaky canon gag reference
And oooh, Soarin' and AJ are SO perfect for each other. Apple pie, with a side order of good old Earth pony discipline! 
"...she is most definitely not fat!"
I was so waiting for that one
"Well, ma'am, danger would be my middle name if me uncle Algy hadn't taken precedence."
This young stallion is magnificent!
More corrections! Absolutely free!
> There below she saw the usual que of ponies waiting their turn
> the ponies in the que making a pronounced show
That should be "queue", both times.
>"Of course…"
Again, conversion error from html. Needs to be "...".
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