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  • 72w, 13h
    Update coming

    Not even kidding. I'm working on it right now. And you all thought I was down and out, didn't you? Look for it soon.

    1 comments · 102 views
  • 99w, 5d
    Belated Merry Christmas

    Hey everyone, hope y'all had a fantastic Christmas, and for all those who celebrate it, Happy Boxing Day! Would've posted yesterday, but I was discovering how many shots of Jack it took to get Christmas carols out of my head. The answer was a lot.

    0 comments · 78 views
  • 102w, 7h
    Random grumblings

    Anyone care to explain a few things to me? This has been bugging me for the longest time. Why in the fuck is Pete Rose still banned for life from Cooperstown? He's the all-time leading hitter, all-time leading run scorer, won 3 World Series, 3 batting titles, 1 MVP, 2 Golden Gloves, Rookie of the Year in 1963 and a 17 time All Star at five different positions. Did he bet on baseball while in a position to influence the outcome of the game? Yes. Yes, he did. BUT...

    He bet on his own team.

    To win.

    His own team.

    WHY THE FUCK ISN'T PETE ROSE IN THE HALL OF FAME?! Just put a note in his exhibit: 'Bet on baseball. (Big fucking deal).' Charles Barkley had much more severe problems as an individual, and we all fucking love Barkley. (Side note: I'm a huge Chuck fan, it's just... the man bled gravy and had a gambling problem bigger than the MGM Grand.) If Pete Rose had done a bunch of shady things while managing the Reds and betting on them, then I could get behind him not being in there. It would be insane to even think about it.

    But, once again...

    He bet on his own team.

    I dunno guys. Also, yes, Kobe breached 30,000 points. No, he is not among the best 5 players of all time. It's not even a discussion. (The Top Five, in descending order: T5: Bird/Magic (in some order), 3: Kareem Abdul-Jabbar, 2: Bill Russell, 1: Michael Jordan. That's it, until we see someone like those players emerge again. Protip: We won't.)

    For the college students amongst my limited readership, I hope your finals are going well. For everyone else, it's holiday season. Hope everyone is having fun and managing not to kill themselves because of goddamn Christmas carols in all the stores.

    Go Clippers.

    1 comments · 79 views
  • 102w, 4d

    I actually wrote some stuff for 'The League' and for 'Giants' today. If finals aren't as ball-crushingly difficult as I think they will be, I should have new chapters up for both of those by next Saturday.

    3 comments · 66 views
  • 103w, 4d
    Moar Delays

    Three things: Finals, Dystopian Wars, and perhaps most importantly, muthafucking Backyard Baseball.

    0 comments · 70 views
  • ...

Ponies playing basketball? In a professional league? On Draft Day Slam Dunk sees his dreams being crushed right in front of him, and he ends up saddled on the laughingstock of the league–The Los Andaluses Kickers. Gritting his teeth against a perceived injustice, he will try to do everything he can to show Equestria he doesn't belong on a team that dwells in the basement year after year. Cover art courtesy of Lamia

First Published
29th Jun 2012
Last Modified
18th Oct 2012
#1 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Draft Day ·

You've GOT to be kidding me, Za.

#2 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Draft Day ·

* scratches chin * Hm... Cool. :raritywink:

#3 · 125w, 3d ago · · · Draft Day ·

I will say, it is certainly a new outlook. I've never really been a basketball fan (or any sports fan, really) but I think I'm gonna keep an eye on this one.

#4 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Draft Day ·

Ha! You took some of my advice. We'll see where that gets you. :applejackunsure:

Watching! Wish the best for this one.

#5 · 124w, 2d ago · · · Aftermath ·

Starting to feel like Dunk is an actual character.

#6 · 122w, 3d ago · · · Aftermath ·

Personally I really like the dialogue between the charachters in this one. Its has quite a bit of voice attached to it.

A few other things I liked included a lot of indirect characterizing, always better to show than to tell I always say.

First chapter Felt quite rushed, and the second chapter doesnt really feel like a chapter much but the first part of something bigger. Adding more details to the first chapter would be epic.

Overall its off to a good start.

#7 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Aftermath ·

This fic needs more attention, as it's very nice and unique. But you already know that because we chatted on IRC.

After reading the first and second chapters, the third chapter draft you sent me makes a lot more sense! The characterization is very nice, and I have some idea of where the plot will be going now. Thumbed up and Favorited. :yay:

Oh, in chapter 2 it has an awkward break in this chunk:

"Maybe start hitting the gym even more? I don’t know what to do, apart from that or maybe practice more with ponies. Guess [linebreak?]

I just need to stop having a life if I want to be the best. It’s what Dad did, Dunk thought to himself."

I'd also suggest making internal monologue distinguished from normal prose in some way, especially when it's multiple sentences. Italics are probably the best choice.

#8 · 120w, 3d ago · · · Aftermath ·

I don't like this because it isn't pointless

It was still good :3

#9 · 119w, 6d ago · · · Draft Day ·

This is good , but I have to say you need to flavor your text a lot in some areas. Like this section.

“Ain’t that hard man, you just gotta slither your way in there. You a power forward though dude! Emphasize that ‘power’ and you’ll be fine!” Foul said.

“I do emphasize that ‘power’. When I throw down in a pony’s face after driving the lane that is,” Dunk said.

“That’s just it man! There’s more to basketball than three’s or jams! They’re fun, and it scores points, but you gotta pull in the boards dude! You gotta play hard defense! That’s what makes you a complete player,” Foul said.

“All that comes in time man. ‘Sides, as long as other ponies do their jobs, I can let it slide occasionally, you know?” Dunk said.

“Nah, bro. You don’t know. You gotta figure it out. Other ponies been pulling your weight for way too long,” Foul said.

“Yeah, and it was me pulling their weight on the other end of the court,” Dunk said.

“That can only get you so far man. Yo, commish is heading up. Let’s can it,” Foul said.

Not to be harsh, but it is painful to hear, he saiod she said over and over again.  You can swap charecter dialogue with charecter movements too, such as. (He frowned, he scratched his head) Anything that makes the charecter the focus of the paraghraph will work to tell you they're speaking. It is soooo much better than he\she said.

#10 · 118w, 4d ago · · · Draft Day ·

This story is nicely written. Good one Za! :pinkiehappy:

#11 · 118w, 4d ago · · · Tryouts ·

I can dig this, I really can.

#12 · 117w, 3d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Got up to here. PM me if we don't see each other on chat.

#13 · 117w, 3d ago · · · Draft Day ·

Hmmmm... feels lacking. Talk to me in chat later.

#14 · 116w, 6d ago · · · Tryouts ·


Not bad. Do go on...

#15 · 115w, 6d ago · · · Tryouts ·


#16 · 115w, 6d ago · · · Tryouts ·

I just love,love,love,love basketball:ajsmug:

#17 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

I'm not a sports fan, but you've got my interest. Tracking... (have a thumbs-up and a fave too):raritywink:

#18 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Ponies and Basketball?  I'm in.  Either way, he can't defend Derp Nowitzki's one-legged step-back Euro Fade.  No one can.

#19 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

LeMane James is best pony. No arguments.

Besides Michoof Jordan (these are terrible pony names for amazing players D:)

#20 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Someone's obviously has been playing a lot of NBA 2K12. Basketball has always been my thing, I like Magic, Bird, and Bernard King!

BTW best Point Guard is obviously John Stockhoof. (Now that was truly terrible.)

#21 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

I don't know why, but this reminds me of Semi-Pro

#22 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Congrats on the feature, Za!

#23 · 115w, 5d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Jump Man - Buckethead

#24 · 115w, 1d ago · · · Tryouts ·

I've never liked basketball, but I love this fic. Consider this favored.

#25 · 114w, 6d ago · · · Draft Day ·

Love it. Considering the story it´s great to see how you caption the feelings of an athlete in such a situation. Keep it up.

#26 · 114w, 6d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Got to go my game needs to be improved :rainbowdetermined2:

#27 · 110w, 2d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Watch, Favorite and Upvote. Cyanide gave this some love. Rightfully.

Anyone else notice how it took me four chapters to get to something that was explained in the summary? :facehoof:

Is ok if I play the song "Space Jam" in my head?:rainbowderp: because that is what is going in my head:eeyup:

#30 · 109w, 4d ago · · · Tryouts ·

Only one thing I noticed:

>Let’s get you inside you can get all the details on the tryout,...

Let’s get you inside so you can get all the details on the tryout

Nice update. I'm feeling a late wake-up coming.


Nope. You did it quite well, however.

Four decent and necessary chapters. :pinkiehappy:

All in all, the writing is good, and I've seen it improve. No specifics, but it could be a smidgemeter better.

Are the Kickers based on the Clippers real life roster? If it is, I sense a Slam Dunk and Pony!Blake Griffin rivalry. Which would be awesome. :rainbowkiss:

>>1479754 I think he's supposed to be Blake Griffin, and Soft Touch is an expy of Chris Paul. I'm not the author, but that's my guess.


A ponified Lob City?

I'm more than okay with that.

Hey guys. Chapter 5 should be done soon. School has been pretty busy lately, and a lot of other IRL stuff has caught up to me. Happy trails, and stay classy.

this must be finished!

This story needs an update, its to awesome to not be continued.

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