As it is typical for Pinkie, things get rapidly out of hoof when trying to keep the Cake foals under her control. After a sudden and unnecessary flight lesson, Pinkie gets just a bit more serious, but something else happens that halts her mission.
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Well. I am amused.
"but it’s something I will most certainly hold dear and close to the centre of my heart, and will remember every day..." I believe 'centre' should be spelt 'center'.
Great read in my opinion and I really enjoy your style of writing. 
VERY nice choice of words, and it seems to fit Pinkie so perfectly!
Oh...An actual cake....Not one of the cake twins...
LOOKS LIKE IT'S MY TIME TO SHINE!!!!
*Gets writing on a gore fic involving foal murder*
810363 That is the European spelling for it.
810494 Well, I'm not from Europe, so excuse me please.
Still loved the story! 
810510 Neither am I
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THAT MATTER ASIDE... I still liked its concept. The title mislead me...
Then I see the age rating and think "I gotta pay more attention to these things."
Personally, this was a rather great story and the author has gained a watch. 
Not bad and you know if you think about Pinkie Pie seems to have a nasty habit of destroying a lot of cakes, about the only one that was spared from our favorite pink party pony was MMM and that one still met with a terrible fate.
810548 But I am not the author
Unless you are also watching me
Which will likely be pointless unless I actually write that Abhorsen crossover in my head
I know you're not the author.
and that don't sound like too bad of an idea.
1. CAKEY NOOOOOO!!
2.
Dear Pinkie Pie,
What the buck are you talking about?
HRH Princess Celestia
Aw, shucks...
Thanks, guys. (And gals, maybe.)
I am truly humbled by your comments, and -again- I thank each and every one of you (6, if I can still count) for taking your time to read this story. I'm truly glad this silly little tale got some comments.
I was truly expecting something more caustic when I saw my notifications, but I'm really surprised to find out that not a single negative (or just realistic) comment existed.
I hadn't noticed how misleading the title is up until now... Well, I guess that was the main reason of why this story has the views count it has.
[This particular sentence was pretty awkward. Sorry, I possess such afwul grammar sometimes.]
And yes, now that I think about it, the other possibility (you know, Pinkie killing one of the twins) has the potential to become quite an interesting tale. I don't know, maybe somebody has already done that...? That'd be quite the read.
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Oh, thank you.
About the cake-destroying sprees our party pony seems to have from time to time, I like to think that those cakes have some sort of resignation and overwhelming sense of pride, and so does Pinkie (I guess), and that's why she hadn't really thought about the hypotetic feelings of a pastry. I like to think that cupcakes and cakes are in the "die doing what you cherish the most" mindset. I don't know, must be the weird part of my brain taking over again.
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Those are mighty flattering words. I don't know if you're being too nice, or I am being too demanding on myself, but I don't really think this tale deserved such nice statements. I can only appreciate a compliment about my writing style, though, so I really shouldn't be putting all this reasoning after me.
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1.
Poor Cakey, she really was a good cake. Now that I think about it, I never really gave a description of her. The only thing we have is her last name: Applesson. (This was Persikova for a while when writing the story. That word doesn't actually mean anything as far as I know, but it's the word 'peach' with a classical russian female ending. I changed it when I realized peaches hadn't been seen (as far as I'm concerned) in the show, and that it didn't really feel too Pinkie Pie-esque.)
2.
Dearest Princess Celestia,
As I could see in your perplexed response to my, I accept, quite weird letter, I want to summarize its contents to be more easily appreciated:
You see, there's this kid right here and he can't really stand still and he doesn't want to sleep. Then there's me. I was pretty tired and grumpy and mean, but I guess all these events with the foals are something I need to learn from.
As you can appreciate, this letter didn't arrive via Spike's fire. I don't really know how I went to Canterlot to send this letter, but I did.
P. Pie.
So, I think we're done.
Once again, I want to thank you for taking your time to read this silly story.
I really mean it, my poor heart is having quite a difficult time trying to calm down. I mean, I was just casually checking some websites and I was like "Huh, I wonder if the story got approved."
Then I came here, and I saw the number of notifications. I'm not pretty sure of why, but I was on the verge of Jizzing. In. My. Saddle. (Punctuation is key to enunciated this phrase correctly.)
Oh, and for the one who gave me his (her?) watch, I'll try not to break anything, and to make my stories as enjoyable as I can.
That was... quite a long comment.
826629 Well, to be completely honest, your style of writing STRONGLY (in my opinion, of course...) relates to mine, therefore the read was extreamly enjoyable, considering it's almost exactly how I would have written it (Different words and descriptions...) if I put effort into it (So it's the same without being the same really... Isn't my logic great?
), and I'm not being too nice... just saying...
Also, I'm the one who watched you!
Looking forward to another story by you soon!
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Oh, I get it.
Indeed, I had noticed our writing styles are quite similar (key difference being the way phrases are created and how much detail goes into things) so the fact that you enjoyed it is quite plausible. (I really hate my limited knowledge of English sometimes. What I meant is that "it makes sense that you liked it".)
This... eh, comment you did about how my writing seems to be 'strong', as you call it, is mainly because I have a strange way of talking in real life. In fact, I tend to talk just like I'm writing right now, sometimes with even more juxtaposed phrases and commas. It's just that I tend to talk directly and plainly in real life.
827496 I understand what you mean. Quite clearly you have a decent grasp upon the elements of literary knowledge and therefore, tend to use your arsenal of words to compile a fantastic story such as this. (I don't care what you say, I absolutely LOVED this...
) Your style is... well, more so to say unique than anything. I tend to talk within real life for the most part in my stories, being as my style come abundantly from the novel "Left Behind", and as a result really adored this fic. Like I stated before, the title mislead me, but I'm glad to have made that mistake. Again, I'm not trying to be nice, this is just what I honestly think. Keep writing the way you do Sir/Madam.
(Question: You say you're limited in your comprehension in the English Arts? Are you from America, or just simply limited as you stated? Also, I knew what you meant by the way.
)
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I'm not a native English but -this is truly, truly weird- I can speak English at a better level than my native tongue. And, of course, my knowledge of the English language it's kind of lacking. Maybe I'm being too demanding, again.
I guess I really need to stop worrying about what all of you will think. I'm truly flattered that you thought this was actually a pretty good story, considering it wasn't written in the best of circumstances. [Really late at night, had slept just two hours the day before... I was really, really tired and was making typographic mistakes every ten seconds, if not more.]
827614 That is rather strange, but it's a good thing, no doubt. Also, yes. You are being VERY demanding of yourself. Personally, I agree with your next to last statement. Stop worrying about what we WILL think and just write from the heart. I might be a hippocrit, considering that all my stories (Except for "Stranded...") were written for a friend in some shape, form, or fashion, but that never stopped me from trying my best! I didn't care what OTHERS would think about it, only what my friend would. (Sadly, they never gave them a try, so that's why I'm in a horrible rut at the moment... no motivation and all except for a very SELECT few readers... but that might just be me being selfish...) Anyways, back on topic. You write wonderfully, and don't worry too much what others will think. I can almost guarentee that if you could read your story and think you would like it your first time reading, most everyone who gives it a chance will too. (Depending if it's there preference, of course.) Another long reply... sorry.
I'm notorious to ramble what goes through my mind sometimes, so forgive me.
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Oh, don't worry about reply size, I'm pretty sure everyone can get quite extensive when they're talking.
I don't know, my mind is filled with this strange mindset of "write what the public wants and not what you (I) want(s)" which has been quite troubling for a long time since I started to care about polishing my writing.
I don't know what to say about your situation about having few readers, I guess it's better to have few readers that are going to be always there, than to have a lot who don't really care for what you write. I guess I'm right. I might not be...
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You forgot to click reply on my comment.
Yes, having few readers that will always be there is better than alot who don't care, but I wasn't trying to impress THEM. They are just all the better. The ones I WAS trying to impress never gave it a try, so... yea.
IT IS TRUE that if you don't write to popular demand, then you'll be left high and dry, BUT I've never went with the public and its decisions, so if you write it for you, I'm impressed. (This story was written for general public reasons... or did ya write it just to write it?)
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Yes, I did forget... I just derped
Yeah, I remember writing a quite long story for a friend of mine, only for it to be ignored. I guess it's fine, because I still have it, and I will most certainly adapt it, and, who knows, maybe it'll be up on here someday.
This story...? Uh, that's quite a difficult question.
This story was, as you said, intended to be for a general public. (Or not so general, as I gave it to another friend of mine [disguised as something not related to ponies, they aren't too welcome...] first.)
But, it (at least the first half) was also written just for the lulz, as a test of finally writing something not explicit. It went actually quite well, I thought, so I decided to expand it and put it up here on the site. All I can say is that I did quite a good decision, I guess.
827772 Your friends don't approve of ponies!?
Oh well, you can only hope huh? (I have the same problem... kind of...) Also, YES! You made an EXCELLENT decision, in my opinion of course.
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My friends are like that. I mean, it's not like they don't approve of them, but they don't want to get involved with them. I mean, they see some, I don't know, cutie mark get sketched on my notebooks (paper notebooks, of course), and they recognize it, and say "ah, that... show..." I guess that's just tolerance.
Yes, one can only hope... but, as far as I know, not a single brony exists on my town of residence that isn't me.
You're really making me smile. I really mean it. I'm actually smiling in this very instant. I don't know if it's important, but I guess people can feel good knowing that another person is happier than before because of themselves.
827832 I do love to make others smile.
I have 1... JUST ONE... real life brony friend. One's better than none, but some bronies are JUST not the type I'd like to hang with... if you know what I mean...
AND I have those who tolerate me, but they don't want to give the show a try all the same. (ALSO, YOU DRAW!?
SO DO I!) Trust me, get to know me, and I'll probably end up becoming your best friend.
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One is, indeed, better than none.
"JUST not the type I'd like to hang with..."
As Rainbow's say: "Are we talking about the
Grand Galloping Galacloppy people?""don't want to give the show a try all the same."
This happens just so often, I'm thinking there's no other possible response.
Well, I don't truly draw in a really good style, but yes, I tend to draw a lot of formless stuff on the pages on my notebooks. They are just filled with multi-coloured lines and formations. There's also many strings of text, (in English, not my native tongue) many of them referencing ponies.
My notebooks are just verbal chaos incarnate. I'm still perplexed as of how can I understand them.
"Trust me, get to know me, and I'll probably end up becoming your best friend."
I can take this phrase in two ways:
One, you're saying this to me, in which case it's truly appreciated and met with a rather large grin.
Two, it's like a sentence that describes you. In said case, I dont' know, it's good, how you're such a sociable guy (guy, right?) that can make friends with anyone.
I'm really falling behind on my responses.
827911 First off, "One, you're saying this to me, in which case it's truly appreciated and met with a rather large grin." It was the first one. (Because, believe it or not
, I tend to try and AVOID taking about myself in too positive a way. Tends to have most people think that you're just promoting yourself.) 
"As Rainbow's say: "Are we talking about the /-Grand Galloping Gala-\ cloppy people?" Eeyup. I don't judge, but it's just not my thing.
I used to draw anthropomorphic styled drawings, (animals with human characteristics) but gave it up a while ago. I draw MLP characters every now and then, but that's about it.
"how you're such a sociable guy..." I am a guy.
Falling behind? As in our conversations or just in general? Because if it's about our replies, take your time.
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" tend to try and AVOID taking about myself in too positive a way. Tends to have most people think that you're just promoting yourself."
Then I'm just bashing myself at every second of my life. I don't think it's too much of a problem, if you're just having a good time, I don't think you need to avoid expressing it.
" I am a guy.
"
You're not... doing what I'm thinking you are doing, right? I mean, that Dash face is pretty ambigue...
Yeah, the replies. I'm starting to get a little slow at responding. It must be because I'm really thinking what I'm saying.
In an unrelated note, I'm really surprised at how many views this story has gotten. And the like:dislike ratio is pretty good. 8:1 ain't bad at all.
827965 "You're not... doing what I'm thinking you are doing, right? I mean, that Dash face is pretty ambigue..."
NO! I would never...
Sorry if that emoticon gave you the wrong impression, though now I see how your mind works a little bit more now.
"Yeah, the replies. I'm starting to get a little slow at responding. It must be because I'm really thinking what I'm saying." Like I said, take your time. I've got all night... though I should have written anothe chapter for my story by now... but what are you gonna do?
"Then I'm just bashing myself at every second of my life. I don't think it's too much of a problem, if you're just having a good time, I don't think you need to avoid expressing it." You ain't bashing yourself, it's just how I was raised really. I wouldn't avoid expressing it, but many figure it out on their own good time...
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"Sorry if that emoticon gave you the wrong impression, though now I see how your mind works a little bit more now."
Okay, you got me there. It's just I'm used to my friends being all innuendo-esque.
"I should have written anothe chapter for my story by now"
I don't know am I saying this but, if you force it, chances are it isn't going to be as good as it can be.
"You ain't bashing yourself, it's just how I was raised really. I wouldn't avoid expressing it, but many figure it out on their own good time..."
It's just that almost everyone always asks me why the hay am I so negative. But that's who I am, and I guess that it's who I'll always be.
828014 "It's just that almost everyone always asks me why the hay am I so negative. But that's who I am, and I guess that it's who I'll always be." Honestly, I don't see you to be the negative type personally. You come off more of a... mellow type, so to say, but be yourself. If you're more of the pessimistic type (not sure if spelled correctly or not) then that's you. I know PLENTY around here with that style of thinking, so it's not all that hard to actually relate to you.
"innuendo-esque."
I'll look that up in a few.
"I don't know am I saying this but, if you force it, chances are it isn't going to be as good as it can be." True, but then again, forcing it is the only way to actually motivate yourself sometimes, though all I really need to do is just talk myself into doing it in the first place, which would be A LOT easier, but, ya know...
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Yeah, I guess it's my decision to be whoever I want to be. Obviously, I'm not behaving as normal, considering I'm truly enjoying this conversation and can say whatever I want. That doesn't happen really often in real life.
"innuendo-esque."
Mighty sorry about that fake word. I meant "constantly suggesting lust-like things". That my friends are constantly doing that.
Yes, I know it's true, forcing things is often the only way out. Talking to yourself, huh? I always do that. I'm always talking to myself, talking to objects. People ask me why, and I just say I don't know, and proceed to commentate it with an imaginary person, (who, incidentally, gets referred as "Venka") as if to really set the tone of weirdness.
828080 "Yeah, I guess it's my decision to be whoever I want to be. Obviously, I'm not behaving as normal, considering I'm truly enjoying this conversation and can say whatever I want. That doesn't happen really often in real life." I'm glad you're enjoying this conversation, as am I, and feel... honored, in a way. Also, real life can... well, suck, for lack of a better word.
Giving me fake words!? How dare thee!
Everypony tells me that talking to yourself is fine, it's just when you start answering yourself is when it becomes wierd, therefore, I'm wierd.
Also, you wanna take the conversation to PM? We are commenting on your PUBLIC story.