How far will you go for love? What would you pay for it? David has a deep seated love for Rainbow Dash and when an opportunity arises for him to make a deal and receive 24 hours with Rainbow, he jumps at it. However, this deal he made is not free, and it may cost a life. Self Insert/HiE
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"David has a deep seated love for Rainbow Dash"
"Self Insert/HiE"
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809779
In other words... People have a tenancy to not like this genre.
Okay, while I'm not saying that I'm all that fond of this infatuation with a pony, this is undeniably heartfelt. Very....sweet, for lack of a better word. The present tense narrative made it seem all the more personal. Good choice with that. The writing was iffy at bits, but the parts concerning emotions and Rainbow Dash were very well done. It's pretty good writing and a decently engaging plot, which is more than can be said for most fanfics of this genre.
I don't care what anyone says, that was a great story. Not many people like HiE, but I thought this was well executed. :) Makes me happy, yet sad at the end.
I like it
This was...entertaining. Fairly well-written, though the beginning was a little long. I think the ending should have been written better though. same ending would really be fine. Just... make it 20% cooler.
809829 Unless, it is a non-brony in Equestria.
Sometimes, I hate Brony in Equestria stories unless its really, really good.
Getting some late replies out to you guys:
809779 Don't give a shit. The Tommy Lee Jones implied facepalm happens to be my favorite meme tho, nice pick.
809829 And?
809952 Had to look that up. Thanks? I guess.
811909 Appreciated
827817 So does that mean you liked it?
869807 Yep.
Who disliked? This was a nice story, but maybe you could do a remastered version of this, I kind feel it was rushed. Maybe cut into three parts and extended a bit.
997787 I was actually thinking of doing this last night, but I;m still mulling the idea over. And epilogue scene of Rainbow's thoughts as she walks back to Ponyville.
This was pretty cool
This story is strange and just plain wrong. So why do I love it so bucking much?!
COME ON!!! I WANTED TO CRY!!! BUT I DIDN'T EVEN SNIFFLE!!! NOT EVEN ONCE!!!
I loved this story. Sad but good.
I really felt sad that there was no way for them to be happy together. it was so sad that he had to leave, but he did what he had to do to save the love of his life.
very nice story, I'm waiting for more similar, good job👍👌