without Chaos, nothing can change and all will turn to dust, forever lost to the monotony of order.

without Order, nothing can last and all will break, forever lost to the maelstrom of chaos.

....

Did I just write that, sober?!

Wow, hauntingly beautiful and unexpected, yet I suppose on some level I saw it as happening somehow. I have never before and never will in the future enjoy Discord-positive stories. I think just writing "When you're evil" show how rigidly that position is held. But his entrance at the end really makes the story something impressive. Good show. Thumbs up.

Mighty. Just... mighty

Small error though... an its/it's one, even. My pet peeve

> "it's absence had been pain"

tis a good start of a story. but there can be more to it.

Yet another wonderful story Midnight, very well done.

>>808543808543 Actually, this looks more like a one-shot to me. It tells its story, and doesn't try to overextend itself.

In my opinion, trying to continue this story would only hurt it.

>>808517808517

Ah, my eternal foe the apostrophe. I thought I'd eradicated them...

I don't have anything to say for once, but I'd thought that I'd show my support regardless. A great one-shot.

Exquisitely done. Entropy, after all, is what chaos does when it's bored. If you want to avoid that, you've got to have someone around who can entertain it.

(Dafaddah removes ugly straw hat.)

Woah - man what a great story! I am totally impressed with the idea, the characterizations and the writing.

Dude - two lessons from the past two weeks:

1) Fry your laptop and go on vacation more often (if this is what results), and

2) Get a bucking DropBox account and back your shit up! I can't stand the thought of any of your work being lost forever.

>>808543808543

Actually, I think what we're seeing here is, in fact, the end of a story

>>808587808587>>809863809863

possibly is. but it does leave things hanging.

like what is lesson 2? and will they try to rebuild what was or try something new? (like something on two legs prone to chaos)

>>811233811233 "Lesson 2"? Are you honestly expecting a "2" from Discord just because he gave a "1"?

>>811233811233>>813101813101

Image: http://mlkshk.com/r/DYQ4

Goddammit I want more.

>>808485808485

finally some one else sees it!!!!

>>813101813101

fine. it would be lesson B

wow that was actually really good. The idea that nothing can ever be created without chaos is actually something that I always thought of. Another great story, cant wait for the continuation of "the ambassadors son" though. Really looking forward to it

And I am inexplicably reminded of MYST. In particular, MYST III: Exile.

Three lessons are designed to show what the world in made of.

1) Power. Without power, nothing can exist. Nothing grows, nothing is built, there is simply nothing.

2) Nature. Nature brings stability and a system of mutual dependence.

3) Dynamic Force. Dynamic Force causes change and variation.

So it follows:

Power = Magic itself.

Nature = Celestia and Luna.

Dynamic Force = Discord

Magic is the life force behind everything.

Control creates stability, but too much prevents evolution, and everything becomes stagnant, eventually dying.

Chaos prevents this, but too much will destroy everything.

     -Delta-

I really liked it, and I think it stands perfectly on it's own. I especially liked the sort of drifting consciousness of the sisters; what is time to an immortal, neigh, eternal, being such as they who are the guardians of that fanciful world?

>>809863809863

An end. And a beginning.

I had it in mind to write something quite similar to this, but I thought I should check first to make sure it hadn't already been done. Not only is it here, but I suspect it's a lot more concise than I could have managed.

>>11743201174320

Well I did say the end of -a- story. Doesn't mean there won't be more following it

>>11743201174320

>>11743331174333

I'm being stalked!

Glad you liked it, though to be honest it needs a run through to remove the suck.

Concept was brilliant; execution was as good as can be expected from a single-concept one-shot fic. I think a longer, multichapter piece would have done the concept more justice. I think you, as a writer, are at the level where you would have been able to pull it off.

A job awesomely done anyway

This was quite the clever story, and recalled to me Asimov's The Last Question, which is no small thing.