After the monsters have been freed from the Underground, they've been excited to explore the surface. However, no one expects what happens.
After Starlight has been reformed, she's been hanging out with the Mane 6. But Pinkie has been shaking, her Pinkie Sense telling her that something big is going to happen. But nopony expected monsters.
Undertale/MLP crossover. Pacifist Chara. No goat child (sorry). Mettaton is in this because we need fabulous robot. Papyrus can't handle anymore puns.
Chapters (2)
2 of my favorite things combined.
YASSSSSS JUST WHAT I NEEDED
we need more crossovers like this nowadays
I can't remember the last time I laughed so hard.
This is fun . Can't wait for more!
Hmmm... Decent. I will keep my eye on this one. You are doing fine, but try to be a little more descriptive and try to slow down the pacing a bit. For example, Maybe when they got to the castle, have Sans/Toriel make a pun about the castle being made of crystal, instead of simply saying they looked in amazement. Ohhhhh, and one other idea for later. Have them mistake Poison Joke for Echo Flower's. Again, all just suggestions, otherwise, you're doing a fine job!
Edit: Also, five shelves. Not bad for a first-time story
You better return that chair. Funny story, my mom just moved a chair out of the room and I didn't notice it was missing until after I read the chapter. Lol
7536166 Alright, thank you for the feedback! I will keep what you said in mind! Have a nice day!
7536203 No problem! Happy to help! Good luck on your story!
7536191 No! The chair is mine now!
7536296 come on man,please? My parents will go berserk if they find out it's gone. I'll give you a cupcake.
Fallout 4 is still better
Not bad, story seems good so far, hope to see an update soon. Would like to see Sans making more puns in future chapters with Toriel if you plan to add some comedy in this story (Judging from the tag). But I like the story and looking forward to seeing how it turns out
GIVE ME MY CHAIR BACK I! I NEED THEM TO PLAY GAMES!
7559315 NO!
7573191 hey have you seen um 2 skeletons 1 fish thing a yellow dinosaur 2 giant goats one female and one male also 2 children one genderless 7 year old and a 12 year old around lately have I lost them 3 days ago and of I don't find them hate of two dimension will be gone¡!
Please continue the story. Please.
(I'm reading this fimfiction then I noticed something strange.)
Me: Oh. My chair. Someone took my chair while I was sitting on it... wait a minute...
(I keep reading, and realization dawned on my face.)
Me: Pinkie Pie! Sans! Can I ask you something?!
Pinkie: You aren't mad, are you?
Sans: Sorry about that.
Me: No, No I'm not mad. Actually, what I wanted to know was: Have you seen the YouTube video "Pinkielovania" by DoubleWBrothers?
Sans and Pinkie: No.
Me: I want you to watch it. Keep the chair. Meanwhile, shouldn't you be getting back to annoying Undertale MLP, the author of this, with your 4th wall breaking while inside the story?
Pinkie: Oh right! C'mon Sans. Oh and I'll watch the video later, okay!
Sans: Oh alright.
(Then I promptly fall to the ground because I had somehow didn't fall when my chair was removed.)