Sequels1

  • E Fragments of Memories

    After surviving a spell that merged Twilight and Dash into a single being, the two mares are still struggling to get back to as normal a life as they can have. Except, didn’t they used to have more friends? Why is it so hard to remember…  · Starwin
    68,484 words · 4,048 views  ·  609  ·  8  · 

Featured In20

More Stories3

  • E Fragments of Memories

    After surviving a spell that merged Twilight and Dash into a single being, the two mares are still struggling to get back to as normal a life as they can have. Except, didn’t they used to have more friends? Why is it so hard to remember…
    68,484 words · 4,048 views  ·  609  ·  8
  • E Shadow of the Sun

    The sun has stopped moving! Twilight and friends must set out on a dangerous adventure to discover why.
    118,134 words · 2,547 views  ·  318  ·  7
  • E The Goddess Three

    A short story of how three goddesses came to Equestria.
    3,591 words · 581 views  ·  54  ·  0

Blog Posts13

  • 39w, 5d
    Got my Beta Readers!

    Thank you everyone who sent in a request to beta read (I got a lot more responses than I expected). I have sent out messages to everyone I've selected to beta read (based on some voodoo magic, dice rolls and other contributing factors).

    If you weren't selected for this round, don't fret too much, the chapter is only a week (-ish) away and there is always the possibility of next time (depending on how well this goes).

    Thank you again to everyone who showed interest in helping make this story better!

    0 comments · 284 views
  • 39w, 6d
    So You Want to Read the Next Chapter Before Everyone Else?

    So, I've never really tried having beta readers before (mostly because I am working on chapters right up to the moment I publish (and I'm super paranoid about my stuff)). And while that is still the case here, I feel the next chapter is... to use the game dev term - out of alpha where anything crazy could happen and more in beta, where it is mostly how it will appear, with just some bugs to fix.

    So (to get the long way round to the point I am trying to make) I am looking for a few people to beta read the next chapter and provide some feedback / correction / insight / opinions / stuff / things / bananas...

    Anyhow, if you are interested feel free to comment here or PM me. I'm not sure what the interest level will be so, no more than 5 people for now (picked based on a criteria I haven't determined yet... possibly dice) . Chapter 3 (for Fragments of Memories) will be available for beta tomorrow (Sunday the 19th for me) morning (10amish PST).

    So, let me know if you want to know (and I'll let you know tomorrow after the chapter goes up for beta).

    (also, no rush here on the beta thing, not planning to post chapter 3 for real until next sat so feedback up until then)

    6 comments · 369 views
  • 43w, 4d
    Dec 26th - The Story Continues

    27 comments · 593 views
  • 59w, 6d
    Veil of Thoughts, now in mobile format!

    Hello everyone! I had a request from a reader for a mobile version of Veil of Thoughts (specifically for the Kindle). So, spent  most of my morning in conversion land and fixing html to xhtml. So at long last present to you:

    Veil of Thoughts for Kindle

    Veil of Thoughts for Epub

    Enjoy!

    5 comments · 278 views
  • 65w, 5d
    Unpublished Files - Part 5

    Hellos again everyone! Comic Con was crazy as always but got some neat stuff and saw some fun panels (sadly I didn't make it to the MLP panel nor could I get close to the Hasbro booth to get the toy. But I still had a fun, if somewhat crazy, time).

    My schedule for the last five days has consisted of stand in line, sit in panel, buy toys I don't need and sleep for a few minutes before repeating. I didn't have enough time to edit the next chapter of Shadow of the Sun, but I should be able to work on it this week and have it ready this coming Saturday.

    However, I figured I would still share something with everyone. So instead of regaling you with tales of Comic Con insanity, I decided to do another unpub.

    The story I have for you tonight is a recent one titled "Sunrise" (which is most likely already taken, I didn't check, but it is just a working name anyhow, so roll with it). I've written the whole story to completion, with the vast majority of it done over July 4th weekend, around 100ish pages (15~ chapters). And the last few chapters last, last week.

    WARNING SPOILERS: I should probably start every unpub with this tag but I haven't... There is always the extremely small chance this story might get posted someday. If that very unlikely day every happens and you want to be surprised, read no further. Obviously.

    The story follows Sunrise (that's all we get about her real name) and her father, who have had to flee from Canterlot. We start the story with them on the run and in hiding. Both of our starting characters are living under assumed names and have dyed their coat and manes a different color.

    Sunrise is a unicorn, while her father is a pegasus. The two of them have ended up in Colt Stone, in the snow peaked mountains on the edge of northern Equestria. It is a small village outside the slightly bigger town of Mare Stone, just beyond the edge of the large city of Filly Stone. Not very much happens in the village, it is secluded and small and quiet, just what our ponies on the run need.

    They are settling in to their new lives when one night they are visited by guards from the castle who are searching all the houses in town, looking... for them. However, disguised as they are, the guards don't recognize them.

    During the conversation with the guards, Sunrise overhears them say they are looking for the daughter of the Queen of Equestria, who has been kidnapped. The guards leave, and Sunrise start to question what really happened, why the had to leave and where her mother went.

    However before she had get answers from her father, the guards arrive in force to arrest them and cart them away to Canterlot, after a thrilling action sequence.

    (Once again, major spoilers in this next paragraph)

    It is at this point in the story we learn some important things: Sunrise's real name (up to this point in the story she has been going by the name Dawnlight) is Sunrise Sparkle and her mother is Twilight Sparkle. (dun, dun, dun). We also learn that she isn't just a unicorn, she's an alicorn, the first born since Cadence (dun, dun, dun!!!)(Although, I have considered just removing Cadence from the story completely and saying the first since Celestia and Luna). And the biggest reveal of all, although I expect you have guessed it at this point is the Queen of Equestria is none other than Nightmare Sparkle (DUN, DUN, DUN!!!!)

    After some cold back and forth with her mother -- now twisted by darkness -- Sunrise manages to escape, with the help of the now demoted (for letting her escape the first time) captain of the guard Shining Armor, who teleports her out of the castle.

    At this point (about halfway in the story), Sunrise is on her own with the only information that she must find the Elements of Harmony, reunite them and save Equestria. Along the way she meets two daughters of former bares (Applejack and Fluttershy's children) as well as three of the former bares (pinkie, rainbow, rarity).

    And you can guess the ending from here I would assume. The hero's unite and win. But with, you know, like 8 chapters worth of text and stuff.

    So (that got a little long), why is this an unpub? Well, there are a couple reasons. The first, being the same for why most of my stories don't make it out. I don't have time. While the first draft is done that's only a small part of the work. Editing is where I spend most of my time and that takes me months.

    The second reason is that, with the exception of the last few chapters, this story is almost all original characters. I don't know about you guys, but I come to read more about the characters I already like, not about some characters someone else made up. Don't get me wrong, OCs can work when written well (and I think these do work) but only OCs are a turn off for a lot of readers, me included most of the time.

    And the third reason is kind of related to the second, Sunrise Sparkle is an alicorn. I tried her both as just unicorn and as an alicorn and ultimately the story (imo) works better with the second. But again, that is a turn off for a lot of readers because its so synonymous with self insert. Even if that isn't my intent.

    So, anyhow. I hope you enjoyed this unpub. I wrote this story out of my system so that it won't burn a hole in my brain but it will never make it beyond my computer screen (it's placed below both the sequel to VoT and Twilight Sun in terms of when I would work on it again).

    I have a ton more stories that won't ever make it and I'll continue to share them as long as people are interested in hearing about them.

    TTFN

    ~Starwin

    5 comments · 336 views
  • ...
 1,786
 22,164

After an unknown accident Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash awake to find themselves sharing the same body! Now they must struggle to hold themselves together as their world is turned upside down. How long can two ponies exist in a single mind? It’s a race against time as they search for answers before it’s too late. When all is said and done, you’ll never look at Twilight Dash the same way again.

First Published
25th Jun 2012
Last Modified
25th Sep 2012
#1 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I am liking this story so far.

Keep it up. Here's an applejack for you. :ajsmug:

#2 · 121w, 4d ago · 3 · · Chapter 1 ·

Until I saw the "Sad" tag I thought someone shipped Twidash to hard. :pinkiehappy:

I'll give it a look later.

#3 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

You could take this in many, many directions...

I'll keep an eye on this.

#4 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'll read this later but what I have read I see a feature coming

#5 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

You know what interests me most about this story? In most "two brains, one body" stories, the "brains" are neatly kept apart. They essentially wrest control from each other to manipulate the body, or they split the body in two. Here, they're mish-mashed together into one consciousness. It feels just like something like that would: confusing, disconnected, and blurry. I can kinda see towards the end that the two personalities are floating back out, but... I almost don't want them to. Keep it in that cloudy goo. The vagueness and the disorientation are what make it so fascinating.

#6 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

the concept reminds me of shylight. i'll look into this.

#7 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Very well put together. Looking forward to more chapters in the future!

#8 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

potential. Writhe more about what really happen. I am looking forward to see more from you

#9 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Somepony tried doing the fusion dance and it went horribly horribly wrong.

#10 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Let me guess, you got the idea from Shylight ? Still, well done, and its nice that others have taken that idea.

#11 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Good job

#12 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oh lord...so many reminders of Dual Pie:

:pinkiegasp::pinkiecrazy: : "FINISH UP YOUR STUPID STORY, XAOS!  OR AT LEAST DO THAT LAST CHAPTER OF OMAKE 3!   ....:pinkiesad2: I just wanna see Dashie again..."

#14 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm lovin this so far, cannot wait to see where it goes

:twilightsmile:

#15 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Wow I was imaging about something like this, but I'm just a simple reader who is too lazy to try to write any fanfictions.

#16 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm not sure where this is going, and I'm not sure what the "sad" tag has to do with it; but it's very interesting, and very well put. Nicely done.

#17 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>807920

Hellos Clappie!

Actually, up until I received comments on this work I had never heard of "Shylight" (although, once I am all done with this story I will head over and take a look at it). The idea for this story stems from a post about MLP fanfiction which talked about specific terms used in this universe. One of those was the tendency for writers to mash up two character names in a shipping story. I liked the idea of Twilight Dash, it just sort of sounded neat, but I'm not so big into shipping. In the end, this was the result.

#18 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Wow :pinkiegasp:I was imaging about something like this, but I'm just a simple reader who is too lazy to try to write any fanfictions.:pinkiehappy:

#19 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>808088

Hellos iEspeon!

The Sad tag is more of a just-in-case. While the overall story (so far) isn't sad, the underlying theme (two minds trapped in a single body, struggling to survive) is a little sad. Certainly not happy-fun-time. Can't say much more than that without spoilers on future chapters.

#21 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

So, you went with the "Twi screws up a spell" cliche? Where did that even come from, exactly?

#22 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>808259

Hellos meme-asaurus!

Maybe. But then again, maybe not. The story hasn't yet touched on the nature of what exactly happened. Without being too spoiler-ish, all I can say is I think you might be surprised when we get there.

#23 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

New title for story: How Alicorns are Made.

nah, not really.

This is very interesting... I await more eagerly.

#24 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Well now.

Looks like Ah'm gonna have to track y'all's story.

How do ya like them apples? :ajsmug:

#25 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oooh. This is pertinent to my interests. Faved so hard.

#26 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Well, looks like something just got relevant to me! Tracking.:pinkiehappy:

#27 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Very nice, needs more chapters.  things can only get weirder from here on

Four Spikes, sir.  :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#28 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

YESSSS NEED MORE!

Mush for a brain is good. Two thoughts intermingling causing bad motor control is awesome. Keep at it.

#29 · 121w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Veeeeering interestingly.  And I almost meant to type that that way.

I am going to keep an eye on this.  :twilightsmile:

#30 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This is the only Twi-Dash I can get behind! Bravo.

#31 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>808259

I would say the most notorious example would be It's Dangerous Business - Twilight accidentally uses too much magical lube(don't laugh) and ends up frying her horn. It's Dangerous Business is a pretty damn straightforward adventure fic in terms of tropes - a goal, time constraint, romance subplot, but it's still good.

Anyway, it's only a cliche if it happens arbitrarily(by chance for an example), but lets say if someone sabotaged her textbook or some other shenanigans(with a reasonable cause-effect) are involved, it's okay.

#32 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>815550 So, you're saying that Twilight screwing up a spell is some sort of our personal unoffical trope?

#33 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>815679

Unofficial?

#34 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>815691 Oopsie, typo!:derpytongue2:

#35 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Very interesting.

Will be fun to see where you are going with this.

#36 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I only loved every moment of this.

#37 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Added to "Read Later".

#38 · 121w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

And now that I've read it I just have one thing to say:

My, my.

#39 · 121w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Please please be. A fast writer I must read moar

#40 · 121w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>819140

I am currently planing to post a new chapter every Sunday (next one will be July 1st) until we reach the conclusion of the story.

#41 · 121w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm sur Dashie and Twi can fit together in some point and make some balance. I mean meanwhile Rainbow Dash is subborn, brave and confident and ofcort a good flyer Twilight Sparkel is calm, wise and strong magican.

#43 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

that's crazy bitch, i love it

#44 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Interesting concept and fairly well executed. Keep it up!

#45 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Uh...

:derpyderp2::derpyderp1:

What just happened?

#46 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Too epic for words.

#47 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I've seen a case where 2 minds in one body works quite well, but can also fail: Kamen Rider W. The intro song even says "2 bodies and souls in one". I also think that that's half of why the story appeals to me, the other half being PONIES!

#48 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I love how rational thought is completely useless and obliterated in this story.

#49 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>807709

My thoughts exactly, I'll have to look into this later.  I am very confused/intrigued by the presence of a sad tag instead of a comedy tag.

#50 · 120w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This is very bizarre, in a good way. The way that "they" think leaves you almost as jumbled up as the character(s?):applejackconfused: are without being off putting.

Officially one of my favourite stories now.:moustache::pinkiehappy:.

0 34351 166888
Login or register to comment